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"Dulhan" pls read it 1ce. . . -
1st December 2008, 08:33 PM
Raat ke andherey me.n chhatpata,ti huyi kiran dekhi,
maine us roz vida hoti dulhan dekhi. . . Badi shaan-o-shaukat se gharaundey me.n aayi vo, sapno.n ke hazaaro.n phool sath layi vo, Uske priyatam me.n uski dhadkan dekhi, maine us roz vida hoti dulhan dekhi. . . Bhakti me.n kahi.n leen thi vo, shakti me jara heen thi vo, Kuch hi dino.n me.n uski tadapan dekhi. . . maine us roz vida hoti dulhan dekhi. . . Har raat ki diwaali thi vo, naagin shayad matwali thi vo, Uske khoon ki bhi holi dekhi, maine us roz vida hoti dulhan dekhi. . . Babul ke ghar se nikali thi vo, piya ghar se nikaali gayi vo, 'ladki' thi,itni uski galti dekhi, maine us roz vida hoti dulhan dekhi. . . Shaam ke dhundhalko.n me sisakti huyi dulhan dekhi, har pal andhero.n se ladti vo kiran dekhi, jeeti thi jo sada apno.n ke liye 'ritu', apno.n ke haatho.n uski arthi dekhi. . . maine us roz vida hoti dulhan dekhi. . . Anginat andhero.n se ladti vo kiran dekhi. . . Life smiles at you when you are happy.. But, Life salutes you when you make others happy!!" # Feel The Difference # |
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1st December 2008, 09:57 PM
Bahut khoob !
maiN aapke juzbaat ki kadR karta huN ! nuzm ka mazmoon rooh ko hilaa dene wala hai ! Qaabil e tareef likha hai ! daad Qabool farmaaiye ! |
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1st December 2008, 10:18 PM
Bahut bahut shukriya kshitiz ji. . . . . . .
Bus aap sabhi ki duao.n se thoda bahut likh lete hain. Ek baar fir teh-e-dil se shukriya! Tc ritu Life smiles at you when you are happy.. But, Life salutes you when you make others happy!!" # Feel The Difference # |
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1st December 2008, 10:43 PM
Ritu jee:
namaste!! dil ko chhu lene waali naZm ... YuuNhi liKhate raheN aage bhee.. daad!! KhuSh raheN... apnaa Khayaal raKheN duaaoN ke saath ijaazat aapka ~ Dhaval |
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1st December 2008, 10:52 PM
Namastey dhaval ji,
khushi huyi ke aapko meri chhoti si koshish pasand aayi. . . Bahut bahut shukriya!! Khush rahiye tc ritu Life smiles at you when you are happy.. But, Life salutes you when you make others happy!!" # Feel The Difference # |
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2nd December 2008, 12:13 AM
jeevan ki dardnaak sachhayee byaan karti rachna...hame yasi hi rachnao ki jarurat hai..samaz ke aaine ke liye..
शब्दों में पिरोना है , जिससे वो हमारी यादों में महकते रहे |
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2nd December 2008, 12:29 AM
dil me utar gayi apki ye gazal padhke kuch wakt sochta raha ki me kya reply karu apko
isme itne dard bhare hai ki agar koi batna chahe na fir bhi nahi baat pata hai khush rahiye app yahi dua karege hum bahut achi tarah se apne pesh kiya hai is hakikat ko AankheN khuleeN to jaag uTheeN hasrateN tamaam Uss ko bhi kho diyaa jissay paya thaa khwaab mein
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2nd December 2008, 01:58 AM
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bohat khoob ritu ji ahsasaat aur haqeeqat ka imtizaaj pasand aya likhti rahiye.............. apne ander se pash pash hoon main zaaat hai aetbaar e zaaat nahin ab to main khud bhi apne saath nahin |
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2nd December 2008, 10:21 AM
Thanks a lot sakhi ji, dinesh ji aur koi to ho ji. . . . . . . . . .
Really thanks you very much. God bless u. Tc ritu Life smiles at you when you are happy.. But, Life salutes you when you make others happy!!" # Feel The Difference # |
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2nd December 2008, 10:40 AM
bahut accha likha hai Ritu......yuhi likhti raho...............
 Zainy PalkoN ki baand ko tod ke daaman pe aa gira Ek aaNsu mere zabt ki tauheen kar gaya... Nm |
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2nd December 2008, 10:47 AM
Thanks a lot zainy. . . . . . . . . . . .
Life smiles at you when you are happy.. But, Life salutes you when you make others happy!!" # Feel The Difference # |
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3rd December 2008, 09:25 PM
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ritu jii...........aapki yeh rachna meri aanko.n ke saamne ek film ki tarah goom gaye....aapne bahut acchi tarah se har baat ko explain kiya hai, bahut khoob ! god bless u .....Sunita Thakur..... यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया ....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए... 
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4th December 2008, 12:50 AM
Ritu ji
Tusi gr8 Nuzm bahot hi achha laga hume daad Diya  Mohabbat ke baad mohabbat mumkin hai faraz. Magar toot ke chahna sirf ek baar hota hai Goodbye SDC Diya |
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4th December 2008, 01:52 AM
BAHUT ACHHA HAI RITU keep writing
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4th December 2008, 02:14 AM
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Waise to maiN bhi kshitiz bhai ki tarah apke jazbaat se poora ittefaaq rakhta hun aur kadra bhi karta hun kyuNki ye humare desh ke kuch aise nasoor hai.. jinko bharne lago to phir koi usme aag laga jaata hai ... vehshi darinde har jagah baithe hai .. mujhe behad afsos ka ehsaas hota hai ,, jab main aisa kuch sunta hun .. is lihaz se aapki nazm ne bhi dil maiN kuch aisa hi mahol paida kiya.. par kuch man main khathak raha hai .. to keh dena shayad theek rahe .. ho sakta hai main galat hun to muafi ka adad talabgaar hounga ... jo antra maiNe quote kiya hai .. usme sab kuch sahi hai par NAAGIN shabd kuch atpata sa laga mujhe ,, kyuNki gar wo nagin thi to wo to ulta pariwaar kha jane wali hui ... kyuNki aisa bhi hota hai .. har jagah hi ladkiyaN bechari nahi hoti .. aisa bhi hota hai .. to sirf is world ne us antre ko kuch atpata sa bana diya .. shayad alfaaz ikkattha nahi kar payi aap ... iski jagah .. PARi, LADKI, LAADO.. kuch bhi hota jo aurat ki nishaan dehi kare chal sakta tha,, Khair ye meri jaati raaii hai Zaroori nahi ki aap bhi isse ittefaq rakhe .. aur main kahin se galat raha huN to muafi ka talabgaar huN .. par mujhe lagta hai ki ye kahin agar aapki kalam ki dhaar ko bhada sakta hai to mujhe ye karna chaie... nikharte hue likhte rahiye .. DuaGo Kunaal Hai 'sifar' bhi reyazi ka hissa.. Shayrii bhi hisaab ki hogi.. |
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4th December 2008, 10:37 AM
Jo lines aapne qoute ki hai vo hai,
". . . . . . naagin shayad matwali thi vo. . . ." kunaal ji, is line me.n ek shabd hai 'shayad',ye definite nahi keh rahi ke vo naagin hai,par nayi naveli dulhan ko maine yaha.n uski sharm, haya, najaakat ki wajah se 'matwali' kaha hai aur naagin jaisi najaakat us dulhan me.n hai,ye btane ka prayaas maine kiya hai. . . Ummeed hai aap samajh gaye honge is pankti ka kya aashay mere anusaar hai. . . Fir bhi agar aapko lagta hai ke kuch atpata hai toh main khule dil se aapki baat ka swagat karti hu.n. Bahut bahut shukriya apni keemti ra'i rakhne ka. . . Ritu Life smiles at you when you are happy.. But, Life salutes you when you make others happy!!" # Feel The Difference # |
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4th December 2008, 10:46 AM
Thanks dear Diya but i'm not great . . . .
Thanks you very much sapna ji,khushi huyi aapko meri rachna pasand aayi. . . . Aur sunita ji, aapko bhi anek anek dhanyawaad, par thodi bahut galtiyaa.n nikaala kariye, accha lagta hai . . . . Main yaha.n shayri ki ABC seekhne aayi hu.n toh aap sab meri kisi bhi rachna par koi bhi tippad.Ni kariye, mujhe accha lagega. . . Ritu Life smiles at you when you are happy.. But, Life salutes you when you make others happy!!" # Feel The Difference # |
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4th December 2008, 02:59 PM
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MaiN aapki nazm ke har antre ka matlab acche se samajhta hun .. aur amooman meri aadat maiN bhi shamil nahi ki.. bas do line padho aur wah wah kar ke nikalte chalo .. mujhe behad khushi hai ki aapne jis tareeke se meri salah ko liya .. usse aapke samajhdaari aur maturity ka ehsaas hota hai .. uske liye shukriya.. jaisa ki main saaf kar chukha huN maiN aapki nazm ke har pehlu ko samajhta huN to aisa nahi ki main samjha nahi ki aap kya likhna chahti hai .. but yahan baat seekhne aur tabaadla-e-khyaal hai.. Behas ko aage na badhaate hue phir bhi maiN yahi kehna chahuNga .. ki maine jo kaha uspe gaur kijiyega .. isse behtar alfaaz is khyaal ke liye aap chun sakti hai .. aur har jagah ye baat aap aazma sakti hai... aap apna bohat sa khyaal rakh kar likhte rahiye DuaGo Kunaal Hai 'sifar' bhi reyazi ka hissa.. Shayrii bhi hisaab ki hogi.. |
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21st December 2008, 04:06 PM
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maafi chahungi agar aapko laga ke main behas kar rahi hoon, main bus apna paksh rakh rahi thi, aap mujhse bahut jyada jaante hai.n shayri aur najmke baare me.n isme koi shak nahi.n hai, Bahut bahut shukriya apni keemati ra'i rakhne ka, ek baar fir agar maine kuch kaha ho jo aapko naagwaar gujra ho to tah-e-dil se maafi chahungi.. khush rahiye ritu Life smiles at you when you are happy.. But, Life salutes you when you make others happy!!" # Feel The Difference # |
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