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My First Ghazal -
4th November 2015, 03:23 AM
Jane mujhe kya hua h me khan kho gya hun.
yadon me teri ek yaad ban kar reh gya hun. aatin hain yaaden teri stati hain mujhko har pal. me kehta hun yaadon se teri usse mila do bas ek pal. didare snam ko aankhen tras gyin hain.. dil to hai tujhme bas dhakan chal rhin hain. is dard ka oooo mahi kuch to ilaj kar.... ya to paar kar de meri kishti ya fir mujhko aajad kar. kyonki tujhse bichad kar ek pal na me G paunga... dil to h tujhme dil k bina bhla me kese reh paunga.... ab to aag si lgi h sara badal jal utha h.... use pane ki chaht me ye dil machal utha h. aye khuda meri halat par kuch to rehm kar... ya to bna de usko mera ya fir mujhko fnah kar.... ye baat jaan le ahmed me uska hun bas.... agar nhi h vo jindgi me meri to is zindgi ko khtam kar. ab uske bina me G bhi nhi paunga.... tadpunga rounga mgar usko bhula na paunga.... ab bas kya likhun me usko yaad karke ahmed.... qlam ro padegi mera darde ahsas dekh kar... |
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(#2)
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4th November 2015, 10:14 AM
sdc pariwar me apka swagat hai salmaan ahmed ji.....
Bahut achchi lagi aapki pahli koshish.... Likhte rahiyega aage bhi..... Aate rahiye..... Madhu.. अर्ज मेरी एे खुदा क्या सुन सकेगा तू कभी आसमां को बस इसी इक आस में तकते रहे madhu.. |
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(#3)
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~$uper M0der@tor~
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4th November 2015, 10:48 AM
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welcome to sdc salman ahmad saahab...... ummeed karte hain aapka safar yaadgaar guzrega yahan.... bahut acchaa kalaam pesh kiya hai aapne daad quboool kijiyegaa.... shaad....... |
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RADHE RADHE
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4th November 2015, 05:33 PM
achhe ehsaason ke saath likha hai aapne
likhte rahen aate rahen Aapka Apna Ishk 'इश्क' के बदले इश्क चाहना तिजारत है इज़हार किससे करें महबूब तो दिल में है email: rkm179@gmail.com 
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4th November 2015, 11:49 PM
Thanx doston......
is anjani duniya me kuch dost to najar aaye ahmed... kon kehta h ehsason ko sirf apne he samjhte hain. |
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5th November 2015, 01:09 AM
Salman ji aapki pehli koshish ko padhkar bahaut achha laga...aise hi likhte rahiye.
Smiles, Jiyaa |
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5th November 2015, 01:23 AM
thax jiyaa.
wese aapne bhi bhut acha likha h.... aa pati. Fnah ho jate tujhme hum parvana ban kar agar tu mere liye shma ho jaati. احمد. |
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5th November 2015, 10:19 AM
Salmaan Ahmed saaHeb
Namaste Shayri pariwaar mein aapkaa swaagat haii...aapka likhaa huaa bahot khoob rahaa..yuunhi bazm ki shaan ko badhaate rahiye Duaaon ke saath ijaazat Aapka Dhaval |
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17th November 2015, 02:18 AM
thanx dhaval bhai bhut bhut shukriya.....
jo aapne meri pehli koshish ko samjha shukriyaaaa.... aa pati. Fnah ho jate tujhme hum parvana ban kar agar tu mere liye shma ho jaati. احمد. |
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17th November 2015, 09:47 AM
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 SDC pariwaar meiN aapka dil se suwagat hai, umeed hai sdc ke saath aapka safar bahut accha rehga aapki pehli koshish hame acchi lgi, ehsaas acche lge...aate rhiye aur likhtey rhiye. duaoN ke saath .....Sunita Thakur..... यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया ....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए... 
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17th November 2015, 12:16 PM
meri pehli koshish padhne k liye tahedil se aap sab logon ko dhanyavad......
aa pati. Fnah ho jate tujhme hum parvana ban kar agar tu mere liye shma ho jaati. احمد. |
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"Taish meN hai Taish"
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17th November 2015, 12:46 PM
Salman saahib aadaab,
Janab pehli baar aapke kalaam se rubaru huN... Isme koi shaq nahi ki khayal purzor haiN aur ehsashaat paak aur iske liye main aapko tahe dil se daad deta hun. Par ise ghazal nahi keh sakte, umeed karta hun aap pathshala forum me ghazalnki taknikiyaN dekhenge. Dua karta huN ki jor-e-kalam aur jyada ho... Koi baat nagawar guzre to muagi ka talabgaar rahunga... ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ http://alfaaz-e-taish.blogspot.in/ Ishq hota tha, ishq karte haiN, Vo zamana tha, ye zamana hai... ----Taish ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ |
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17th November 2015, 11:29 PM
taish G i am new n bas dhoka khane k baad apne dard bantne lga aage se is baat ka dhiyan rkhunga....
agar koi galti hui ho to maafi ka talbgar aa pati. Fnah ho jate tujhme hum parvana ban kar agar tu mere liye shma ho jaati. احمد. |
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