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AankhoN meiN zindagi ke sapney hazar rakh
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Thumbs up AankhoN meiN zindagi ke sapney hazar rakh - 14th June 2002, 09:08 PM

Sabhi ahbab ko nacheez ka salaam

Is ghazal ke saath maine Urdustaan.com ke tarahi mushaaire meiN shirkat ki thii. Aur aap sab ki dua se ye ghazal usmeiN chuni gayee ghazloN meiN se ek thii. Mera khayal tha sabhi dostoN ne isey bhi paRha hoga. Magar dostoN ka aur mohtarima Shumaila ji ka israar tha ke ye kavish maiN yahaN bhi post karooN.

To hazraat banda haazir hai apna ye adna sa kalaam lekar.
Aap sabki rai ka hamesha ki tarah intezaar rahega.
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AankhoN meiN zindagi ke sapney hazaar rakh
Dil meiN khuloos ka tu ek aabshaar rakh

Chehrey pe hoga terey tabassum sada sada
Apney laboN pe merey tu bas ashaar rakh

Dil ki tamam baatieN keh daal dostoN sey
Aisey na rok kar tu dil meiN ghubaar rakh

KhushiyaN to baantney ko aa jayenge hazaaroN
Gar ho sakey nazar meiN koii ghamgusaar rakh

Hasrat sey aasmaN ko kya dekhta hai tu
Paiwasta rah shajar sey umeed-e-bahar rakh

Har pal madad khuda sey kya mangna 'Praveen'
Apney bhi bazuoN par kuchh aetbaar rakh

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Smile Shukriya! - 15th June 2002, 03:50 AM

Praveen ji..sabse pehle to aapka shukria ke aapne hamare kehne pe ghazal post kar di Coming to ur ghazal...to jaise maine aapko pehle bhi bataya hai ki ghazal bahut acchi hai!!

AankhoN meiN zindagi ke sapney hazaar rakh
Dil meiN khuloos ka tu ek aabshaar rakh
--magar kya kareiN sapne jo dekhte haiN tooT jate haiN

Chehrey pe hoga terey tabassum sada sada
Apney laboN pe merey tu bas ashaar rakh
--Kya baat hai!!Wah....

Dil ki tamam baatieN keh daal dostoN sey
Aisey na rok kar tu dil meiN ghubaar rakh
---sahii...!!

KhushiyaN to baantney ko aa jayenge hazaaroN
Gar ho sakey nazar meiN koii ghamgusaar rakh
--Wah Wah...sahii baat hai

Hasrat sey aasmaN ko kya dekhta hai tu
Paiwasta rah shajar sey umeed-e-bahar rakh
--Bahut khoob!!

Har pal madad khuda sey kya mangna 'Praveen'
Apney bhi bazuoN par kuchh aetbaar rakh
--Bhai wah..maqta bada accha laga!

Ye ghazal share karne ke liye shukriya aur aayenda bhi aapke kalamoN ka intizar rahega...

Aadab,
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Smile tasleem parveen ji ... - 16th June 2002, 02:51 AM

AADAB ,

PARVEEN JI AAP KESE HEn ?

AAPKI YA NAI GHAZAL PARI ...PASAND I .... BARI ACHA GHAZAL AAPNE KAHI HE ....AAFREEn AAFREEn ....
AB ZARA GHAZAL PAR NAZAR DALTE HEn ....

AAPKE ANDAR KA SHAFFAF INSAN AAWAZ DETA HE ...

AankhoN meiN zindagi ke sapney hazaar rakh
Dil meiN khuloos ka tu ek aabshaar rakh

Chehrey pe hoga terey tabassum sada sada
Apney laboN pe merey tu bas ashaar rakh
KHOOB PARVEEN JI ....

Dil ki tamam baatieN keh daal dostoN sey
Aisey na rok kar tu dil meiN ghubaar rakh
WAH KHOOB BHAI KHOOB .... MAGAR AISI BAT KARNE KE LEYE HAMEn PUR KHULOOS DOST DHONDNA PARE GA ....
khaksaar ka ek bet mulahiza ho :

batata he kiyouN raz apne ae sagar-e nadaN ?!
kahaN is jahaN meN koi razdar rehta he .!!?....

kher ....aapki ghazal be had pasand i ....

ham muntazir hen aainda ghazal ke ....

ok allah hafiz

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aafreen hai, praveen ji...
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aafreen hai, praveen ji... - 17th June 2002, 05:55 AM

aadaab,

aapki taaza ghazal padhi... aapke nikhre hue jazbaat se pehle se hi kafi muta'assir tha... apki is nayi kavish ne aur izafa kar diya...

ham talib-e-ilmon ko to is se hi kafi khushi hoti hai ki aap hazrat ke kalam ko is forum mein padhne ka mauqa mil jata hai... aur phir aap hi se hasil ki hui roshni mein kuchh maghaz mari kar bhi lete hain...

sach, mein is ghazal aur usi tarhi musha'are ki muhtarama shumaila baji ki kavish ko padhkar koi qat'ie faisla hi nahin kar saka ki mujhe konsi zyada pasand hai... donon mein hi wahi sahar, wahi jazbaat karfarma nazar aate hain...

magar phir bhi, kuchh bunyadi khayalat ka farq mahsoos hue baghair nahin rah sakta... mein apni rai ko musallat to nahin karta, magar aapki shayri mein ek tughyani, ek toofan wazih nazar aata hai... masalan...

Dil ki tamam baatieN keh daal dostoN sey
Aisey na rok kar tu dil meiN ghubaar rakh

KhushiyaN to baantney ko aa jayenge hazaaroN
Gar ho sakey nazar meiN koii ghamgusaar rakh

Hasrat sey aasmaN ko kya dekhta hai tu
Paiwasta rah shajar sey umeed-e-bahar rakh

Har pal madad khuda sey kya mangna 'Praveen'
Apney bhi bazuoN par kuchh aetbaar rakh

chaliye, itna fikri kharosh to zaroori bhi hai...

waise, khushi zaroor hui aapke is naye kalam se...

ummeed hai ki isi tarah rooh ki basti ki sairabi ka samaan karte rahiyega...

phir milenge,

take care...

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Thumbs up Re: Shukriya! - 17th June 2002, 07:08 PM

Shumaila ji

Ghazal ko aapne pasand farmaya uske liye aapka tah-e-dil se shukriya. Aur jaisa ke hum pehle bhi keh chuke hain ke aapka andaz-e-daad hamesha ki tarah apne aap mein ek alaag khoobi hai. Doosrey alfaaz mein aapki wah-wahi bhi qabil-e-daad hai.
Shukria aapka. Umeed hai aainda kalamoN par bhi aapke tassuraat yuN hi milte rahenge.

Is ghazal ka urdustan mein post hona aur uske saath aap sabka ise sarahna hamare liye ek badi ahm aur hausla badhane waali baat hai.

Aapka naya kalaam dekha hai us pe apni rai usi ke saath pesh kar raha hooN.

duaon ke saath

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Thumbs up Aapki daad ka shukria - 17th June 2002, 07:46 PM

Janab Sagar Sahab

Aapki dua se maiN khairiyat se hoon.

Aapne bade hi dilkash andaaz meiN gghazal ki tareef ki hai aur dil se uske liye bhi wah wah nikalta hai. Jis tafseel se aapne har sher par apne tassurat diye haiN wo waqai bada hausla badhate haiN.

Is ghazal ke liye jo misra hameiN diya gaya tha uski zameen hi aisi khoob thi ke ashaar meiN jaan aa gayi.


Aapki baat ye sahi hai ke aaj ke zamane meiN ek achcha dost milna bad mushkil hai lekin jiske paas ho uska to kehna hi kya. Aur is silsiley meiN jo sher aapne likha hai wo bhi apni jagah ekdum sahi hai.

Bus aise hi hausla badhate raheiN aur hum apni koshishoN ko aur bhi nikharte raheiNge.

Saath hi aapke naye kalamoN ka intezaar rahega.

duaoN ke saath.
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Thumbs up Shukria Muztar Sahab - 17th June 2002, 08:07 PM

Janab Muztar Sahab

Is kavish par aapki nazar padi aur aapne apne tassurat se nawaza, iske liye maiN aapka bohot shukr guzaar hooN.

Dar asl is ghazal ki jo tarah hameiN mili thii, khud usmeiN hi kuch aisi baat thii ke ashaar khud-b-khud shakl lete gaye.

Aapne bade hi pur josh andaaz mein daad di hai jisne mere josh ko bhi aur badhaya hai. Khadim ummeed karta hai ke aagey bhi meri koshisheiN aapko pasand aayengi.

ummeed hai ke aapke saath jo taalluquat ka jo silsila shuru hua hai wo yuNhi jaari rahega.

duaoN ke saath
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aadab... - 18th June 2002, 01:13 AM

aadab parveen ji ..

aapki jawabi post ka shukriya ,

dosti ki bat he to yaar ji ye bhi aik khusnasibi he kisi ko acha dost mil ja-e ..... aajkal to dost ( gohar-e nayab ) ho chuke heN ...

wese agar insaniyyat ke samandar meN ghuta zan huN to achchuN ki bhi kami nahiN .................

acha ijazat dijeye ...

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