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badlii hai unki nazar dheere dheere.........Ghazal -
13th March 2007, 11:31 AM
aadaab yaaran-e-mehfil
hosh meiN nahiiN huuN so zyada nahiiN kahuNga
Ghazal mula'izaa kijiye
badlii hai unki nazar dheere dheere
ubhre haiN zakhm-e-jigar dheere dheere
bichaR'te gaye humsafar dheere dheere
mushkil huii rehguzar dheere dheere
guzaari hai yuuN ziNdagi bin tumhaare
goyaa piyaa ho zahar dheere dheere
zaroorat ho jab hosh khone ki yaaro
karti hai mai kyoN asar dheere dheere ?
taara koi TooT'ta dekh ke hum
royaa kiye raat bhar dheere dheere
kahaa tha ummiidoN se bach ke guzarna
kahaa tha dil-e-muz'tar*, dheere dheere
dil-e-muz'tar = besabr dil , impatient heart
vo aaye haiN khaaboN meiN muddat ke baad
ae shab rafta rafta, guzar dheere dheere
"maikash" abhi to, uThaa hai janaazaa
pahuNchegi un taq khabar dheere dheere
maikash
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is tarhe teri yaad meiN har shaam dhaley hai
goyaa koyi nagin si kalejey pe chaley hai
maikash
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13th March 2007, 11:59 AM
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aadaab yaaran-e-mehfil
hosh meiN nahiiN huuN so zyada nahiiN kahuNga
Ghazal mula'izaa kijiye
guzaari hai yuuN ziNdagi bin tumhaare
goyaa piyaa ho zahar dheere dheere
wah wah!!!!
zaroorat ho jab hosh khone ki yaaro
karti hai mai kyoN asar dheere dheere ?
bahut hi khoob!!
vo aaye haiN khaaboN meiN muddat ke baad
ae shab rafta rafta, guzar dheere dheere
is sher ko haa.nsil-e-gazal kahnaa chahungaa!!!
maikash
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Aadaab Maikash Sahab!!!
Wah Sahab !! kam aate hai par jab aate hai, khoob laate hai!!! aapkaa kalaam hameshaa ki tarah kuchh chhaap mujh pe chhod hi jaataa hai!!!
meri aur se daad kabool farmaayiyegaa!!!
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13th March 2007, 06:40 PM
aadaab maikashji,
kaise hain aap?ek arse baad aapka likha padhne mila hai,bahut badhiya likha(no doubt).
guzaari hai yuuN ziNdagi bin tumhaare
goyaa piyaa ho zahar dheere dheere
zaroorat ho jab hosh khone ki yaaro
karti hai mai kyoN asar dheere dheere ?
vo aaye haiN khaaboN meiN muddat ke baad
ae shab rafta rafta, guzar dheere dheere
yeh ashaar behad pasand aaye,chuu gaye dilko.yunhin likhte rahen.dil se di daad kabool karen.
khush rahen.
tc,bye
yun bin bulaaye milne chala aata hai,
gham ko mujh se yeh unsiyat kaisi??
--akelijaan--
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13th March 2007, 07:53 PM
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Originally Posted by maikasH
aadaab yaaran-e-mehfil
hosh meiN nahiiN huuN so zyada nahiiN kahuNga
Ghazal mula'izaa kijiye
badlii hai unki nazar dheere dheere
ubhre haiN zakhm-e-jigar dheere dheere
bichaR'te gaye humsafar dheere dheere
mushkil huii rehguzar dheere dheere
guzaari hai yuuN ziNdagi bin tumhaare
goyaa piyaa ho zahar dheere dheere
zaroorat ho jab hosh khone ki yaaro
karti hai mai kyoN asar dheere dheere ?
taara koi TooT'ta dekh ke hum
royaa kiye raat bhar dheere dheere
kahaa tha ummiidoN se bach ke guzarna
kahaa tha dil-e-muz'tar*, dheere dheere
dil-e-muz'tar = besabr dil , impatient heart
vo aaye haiN khaaboN meiN muddat ke baad
ae shab rafta rafta, guzar dheere dheere
"maikash" abhi to, uThaa hai janaazaa
pahuNchegi un taq khabar dheere dheere
maikash
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kafii lambe intzar ke baad
ek bahut hi umda kalam pesh kiiya hai aapne maikash jii
or ise pesh karne ki ada bhii bahut khoon hai
dil se daad hazir hai daad kabool farmaiyega
" Dilip " -Ek Adhoora khwab
Dard bantne se ab darr lagta hai
mere gamo ka usnane falsafa bana diya
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13th March 2007, 10:59 PM
maikasH bhaiya namskaar aur SSA
"bahot dino baad bazm meiN aapki tehreer ko deKha bhaiya khusHii hui aapko paRH ke ..ek dilkasH ghazal ko lekar aap hazir hue is baar, ehsaasoN ko lafzoN ke sahaare bahot hii khoob bayaaN kiye haiN aapne
"maikash" abhi to, uThaa hai janaazaa
pahuNchegi un taq khabar dheere dheere
dil se nikli daad ko kubul kijiyenGa
apna khayaal rakheN aur khusH raheN
jai shree krishna
aapka dost
dhaval
*~*Dhaval*~*....Ek Ehsaas...
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14th March 2007, 10:29 AM
Jitni baar is kalaam ko padho lutf utnaa hee badhtaa jaata hai...itne khuubsurat ashaar kehkar aapne inaayat farmaayi hai...shukriaa aapka...iss gazal ko padhkar janab Qamar Jalalwi sahib ki gazal Mariiz e Mohabbat kee yaad aa gayi...usi mein se ek sher yoon hai...
u.nhe.n Khat me.n likhaa thaa dil muztarib hai
javaab un kaa aayaa muhabbat na karate
tumhe.n dil lagaane ko kisane kahaa thaa
bahal jaayegaa dil bahalate bahalate
aapke is kalaam kee rawaani bhi kuchh yoonhi saa asar karti hai...nashaa tau ho jaata hai par, khumaar utartaa hai dheere dheere...allah kare zor-e-kalam aur ziyaadaa...
nayi ruton mein wo kuchh aur qareeb aaye
gayi ruton ka sulagataa sa intezaar bhii ho
mere khuloos kaa andaaz ye bhii sachhaa hai
rakhuun na rabt magar dostii shumaar bhii ho
--Sayyidaa Fatimaa Hasan
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bhut khub -
14th March 2007, 10:44 AM
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Originally Posted by maikasH
aadaab yaaran-e-mehfil
hosh meiN nahiiN huuN so zyada nahiiN kahuNga
Ghazal mula'izaa kijiye
badlii hai unki nazar dheere dheere
ubhre haiN zakhm-e-jigar dheere dheere
bichaR'te gaye humsafar dheere dheere
mushkil huii rehguzar dheere dheere
guzaari hai yuuN ziNdagi bin tumhaare
goyaa piyaa ho zahar dheere dheere
zaroorat ho jab hosh khone ki yaaro
karti hai mai kyoN asar dheere dheere ?
taara koi TooT'ta dekh ke hum
royaa kiye raat bhar dheere dheere
kahaa tha ummiidoN se bach ke guzarna
kahaa tha dil-e-muz'tar*, dheere dheere
dil-e-muz'tar = besabr dil , impatient heart
vo aaye haiN khaaboN meiN muddat ke baad
ae shab rafta rafta, guzar dheere dheere
"maikash" abhi to, uThaa hai janaazaa
pahuNchegi un taq khabar dheere dheere
maikash
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janaab sandhu sahib sat sri akaal ji.....thuadii gazal parhi parhke jo dil da alam hai main lafzaan vich byaan nahi kar sakda...har ashaar dil nu iihii keh giyaa ki eh gazal hai ki jionda jaagda falsafa.....kise ik share dii tareef karna baaki de ashaaran de naal beinsaafi hovegi......meri dil dii gehraii ton daad pesh hai kabool karna.....thuada veer........raj........
un se kar liya kinara unki khushi ki khatir
ab mujhe bewafa kahiye ya bawafa kahiye...(Raj)
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14th March 2007, 12:19 PM
hi maikash ji
kese ho aap?
sasriyakal maikash ji
aapki rachna padh ke achchha laga, jis khubsurti se aapne apne ehsaaso ko sabdo mein dhaya hai aapne wo daad ke kabil hai , daad kubul ki jiyega maikash ji, aapki rachna mein jo aapne kaha hai ki badli hai nazar unki dheere dheere ye ehsaas hamien behad pasand aaya, aur jis khubsurati se aapne puri rachna mein dard jalkaaya hai wo hamein bahut achchha laga
maikash ji aapki rachna pe hamari ye chhoti se koshish ummid karta hu aapko pasand aayegi
gaur farmaiyega dost..
Dheere dheere jaam ka maza lenge hum,
Aapki panaho mein guzari is shaam ka maza lenge hum,
Ab agar katl kardogi to koi gila nahi,
Zindagi ke anjaam ka maza lenge hum.
ese hi likhte rahiyega
aapka dost
Merul
Quote:
Originally Posted by maikasH
aadaab yaaran-e-mehfil
hosh meiN nahiiN huuN so zyada nahiiN kahuNga
Ghazal mula'izaa kijiye
badlii hai unki nazar dheere dheere
ubhre haiN zakhm-e-jigar dheere dheere
bichaR'te gaye humsafar dheere dheere
mushkil huii rehguzar dheere dheere
guzaari hai yuuN ziNdagi bin tumhaare
goyaa piyaa ho zahar dheere dheere
zaroorat ho jab hosh khone ki yaaro
karti hai mai kyoN asar dheere dheere ?
taara koi TooT'ta dekh ke hum
royaa kiye raat bhar dheere dheere
kahaa tha ummiidoN se bach ke guzarna
kahaa tha dil-e-muz'tar*, dheere dheere
dil-e-muz'tar = besabr dil , impatient heart
vo aaye haiN khaaboN meiN muddat ke baad
ae shab rafta rafta, guzar dheere dheere
"maikash" abhi to, uThaa hai janaazaa
pahuNchegi un taq khabar dheere dheere
maikash
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!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!
Dhoka diya tha jab tumne mujhe,
Tab dil se me naraz tha,
Phir socha ki dil se tumhe nikal du,
Magar woh kambakth dil bhi tumhare paas tha.
Merul~~~~~~~~~~>
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17th March 2007, 08:13 AM
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Aadaab Maikash Sahab!!!
Wah Sahab !! kam aate hai par jab aate hai, khoob laate hai!!! aapkaa kalaam hameshaa ki tarah kuchh chhaap mujh pe chhod hi jaataa hai!!!
meri aur se daad kabool farmaayiyegaa!!!
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Dheer saheb
namaste
kya kaheiN bhai in dinoN to saaNs bhi yuuN aa rahi hai jaise maiN yahaaN aata huuN...ruk ruk ke
shayad ye meri aakhiri Ghazal hai...!
ba-har-haal aapne Ghazal ko pasaNd kiya, mehrbaani aapki
uupar waale ne chaha to phir mulaqaat hogi
shukriya
maikash
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is tarhe teri yaad meiN har shaam dhaley hai
goyaa koyi nagin si kalejey pe chaley hai
maikash
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hi -
17th March 2007, 09:45 AM
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Originally Posted by maikasH
aadaab yaaran-e-mehfil
hosh meiN nahiiN huuN so zyada nahiiN kahuNga
Ghazal mula'izaa kijiye
badlii hai unki nazar dheere dheere
ubhre haiN zakhm-e-jigar dheere dheere
bichaR'te gaye humsafar dheere dheere
mushkil huii rehguzar dheere dheere
guzaari hai yuuN ziNdagi bin tumhaare
goyaa piyaa ho zahar dheere dheere
zaroorat ho jab hosh khone ki yaaro
karti hai mai kyoN asar dheere dheere ?
taara koi TooT'ta dekh ke hum
royaa kiye raat bhar dheere dheere
kahaa tha ummiidoN se bach ke guzarna
kahaa tha dil-e-muz'tar*, dheere dheere
dil-e-muz'tar = besabr dil , impatient heart
vo aaye haiN khaaboN meiN muddat ke baad
ae shab rafta rafta, guzar dheere dheere
"maikash" abhi to, uThaa hai janaazaa
pahuNchegi un taq khabar dheere dheere
maikash
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maikash ji aap ko kaafi dino baad padha pae sach mai majaa aa gayaa, bahut dilchasp aur kaabil-e-tariff kalaam likha hai aap ne , badhaayi ke phool meri aur se sweekar kare
regards
manu
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23rd March 2007, 06:31 AM
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aadaab maikashji,
kaise hain aap?ek arse baad aapka likha padhne mila hai,bahut badhiya likha(no doubt).
guzaari hai yuuN ziNdagi bin tumhaare
goyaa piyaa ho zahar dheere dheere
zaroorat ho jab hosh khone ki yaaro
karti hai mai kyoN asar dheere dheere ?
vo aaye haiN khaaboN meiN muddat ke baad
ae shab rafta rafta, guzar dheere dheere
yeh ashaar behad pasand aaye,chuu gaye dilko.yunhin likhte rahen.dil se di daad kabool karen.
khush rahen.
tc,bye
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akelijaan sb/sba
aadaab tasleem
daad sar-aaNkhoN par.
aapne ash'aar pasaNd farmaaye haiN unke liye shukriya qabuul kijiye
rab raakha
maikash
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is tarhe teri yaad meiN har shaam dhaley hai
goyaa koyi nagin si kalejey pe chaley hai
maikash
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23rd March 2007, 06:38 AM
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kafii lambe intzar ke baad
ek bahut hi umda kalam pesh kiiya hai aapne maikash jii
or ise pesh karne ki ada bhii bahut khoon hai
dil se daad hazir hai daad kabool farmaiyega
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haaN miyaaN kaafi waqt ho gaya tha kuch mehfil ki nazar kiye hue, ab kya kareiN bhai umr ho chali hai
aapki daad dil se tasleem aur aap bhi tah-e-dil se shukriya qabuul farmaaiye
rab raakha
maikash
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is tarhe teri yaad meiN har shaam dhaley hai
goyaa koyi nagin si kalejey pe chaley hai
maikash
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23rd March 2007, 06:41 AM
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maikasH bhaiya namskaar aur SSA
"bahot dino baad bazm meiN aapki tehreer ko deKha bhaiya khusHii hui aapko paRH ke ..ek dilkasH ghazal ko lekar aap hazir hue is baar, ehsaasoN ko lafzoN ke sahaare bahot hii khoob bayaaN kiye haiN aapne
"maikash" abhi to, uThaa hai janaazaa
pahuNchegi un taq khabar dheere dheere
dil se nikli daad ko kubul kijiyenGa
apna khayaal rakheN aur khusH raheN
jai shree krishna
aapka dost
dhaval
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dhaval bhai
namaste
kaafi de'r baad haazir hua huuN, muaafi chahta huuN bhai, aapko Ghazal kisi qaabil lagi mere liye khushi ki baat hai
aapne aksar mujhe duaa'oN meiN yaad rakha hai, ek she'r khaaskar aapke liye likha hai, mula'izaa kijiye :
karam itna sa bas zaraa kiije
aakhiri saaNs ho, duaa kiije
rab raakha
maikash
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is tarhe teri yaad meiN har shaam dhaley hai
goyaa koyi nagin si kalejey pe chaley hai
maikash
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23rd March 2007, 10:58 AM
Maikash ji,
bahut pasanD aayi aapki yeh gazal.
regards
aarya
khwaabo.n ke par kabhii kaTne na denaa
inke sahaaron me raahai.n rahe.ngii
lage.nge ye lejaa rahe alag raste
un raston pe bhii kai seekhai.n to ho.ngii
ye seekhai.n hameshaa sameTe rakhnaa
inhii.n se to sabko manzil milai.ngii
regards aarya
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24th March 2007, 11:03 AM
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Jitni baar is kalaam ko padho lutf utnaa hee badhtaa jaata hai...itne khuubsurat ashaar kehkar aapne inaayat farmaayi hai...shukriaa aapka...iss gazal ko padhkar janab Qamar Jalalwi sahib ki gazal Mariiz e Mohabbat kee yaad aa gayi...usi mein se ek sher yoon hai...
u.nhe.n Khat me.n likhaa thaa dil muztarib hai
javaab un kaa aayaa muhabbat na karate
tumhe.n dil lagaane ko kisane kahaa thaa
bahal jaayegaa dil bahalate bahalate
aapke is kalaam kee rawaani bhi kuchh yoonhi saa asar karti hai...nashaa tau ho jaata hai par, khumaar utartaa hai dheere dheere...allah kare zor-e-kalam aur ziyaadaa...
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muaaf kijiyega aapke khat ka jawaab dene meiN 'bohat' de'r ho gayi, pichhle dinoN kuch haalaat zaraa be'kaa'buu se the , mazrat
shukriya to jee mujhe aapka adaa karna chahioye, Ghazal pasaNd farmaane ke liye shukriya tasleem kareiN
aapne jo Qamar saahab ka kalaam yaad dilaya hai voh mujhe behadd pasaNd hai, kuch saal pehle taq mere paas sabri brothers ki ek audio cassette hua karti thi jismeiN ye Ghazal bhi thi phir yuuN hua ke Ghar badalte waqt kahiiN kho gayi aur pichhle 4 saal se maiN ye Ghazal dhooNd raha huuN
ba-har-haal aapne hamesha ki tarah mujh naalaayiq ka hauNsla badhaaya, behadd shukurguzaar huuN aapka
rab raakha
maikash
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is tarhe teri yaad meiN har shaam dhaley hai
goyaa koyi nagin si kalejey pe chaley hai
maikash
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3rd April 2007, 09:50 PM
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janaab sandhu sahib sat sri akaal ji.....thuadii gazal parhi parhke jo dil da alam hai main lafzaan vich byaan nahi kar sakda...har ashaar dil nu iihii keh giyaa ki eh gazal hai ki jionda jaagda falsafa.....kise ik share dii tareef karna baaki de ashaaran de naal beinsaafi hovegi......meri dil dii gehraii ton daad pesh hai kabool karna.....thuada veer........raj........
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Sat Sri Akaal janaab
tusi vi hamesha waaNg hauNsla-afza'ii keeti hai, dhannvaad
tuhadi daad sir-matthe
rab raakha
maikash
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is tarhe teri yaad meiN har shaam dhaley hai
goyaa koyi nagin si kalejey pe chaley hai
maikash
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5th April 2007, 06:59 PM
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Originally Posted by maikasH
aadaab yaaran-e-mehfil
hosh meiN nahiiN huuN so zyada nahiiN kahuNga
Ghazal mula'izaa kijiye
badlii hai unki nazar dheere dheere
ubhre haiN zakhm-e-jigar dheere dheere
bichaR'te gaye humsafar dheere dheere
mushkil huii rehguzar dheere dheere
guzaari hai yuuN ziNdagi bin tumhaare
goyaa piyaa ho zahar dheere dheere
zaroorat ho jab hosh khone ki yaaro
karti hai mai kyoN asar dheere dheere ?
taara koi TooT'ta dekh ke hum
royaa kiye raat bhar dheere dheere
kahaa tha ummiidoN se bach ke guzarna
kahaa tha dil-e-muz'tar*, dheere dheere
dil-e-muz'tar = besabr dil , impatient heart
vo aaye haiN khaaboN meiN muddat ke baad
ae shab rafta rafta, guzar dheere dheere
"maikash" abhi to, uThaa hai janaazaa
pahuNchegi un taq khabar dheere dheere
maikash
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Maikash saahaab,
aadaab.....
kaise haiN aap? ummeed hai ba-Khairiyat hoNge... aap kii ess Ghazal par nazar to meri usii din paR gayee thee jabv aap ne bazm meiN pesh kiya tha... par waqt kii maara maari aise rahii kii itminaan se aap kii Ghazal ka lutf na le sakaa, aur ess ke liye meiN sharmShaar huuN.. Chaliye ek ittefaaq kii baat bataata huuN, aap kii yeh Ghazal post hone se kuchh din pahle meiN television ke kisii urdu channel dekh raha tha.. aur wahaaN par mushaira chal raha tha.. mushaiara meiN sab apni apni Ghazal suna rahe the.. aur meiN un ka lutf le raha tha.. aur ess mushaira meiN mujhe 2 Ghazal behad pasand aaye..
maiN ne sochaa kii kyoN na ess zameen ham bhi khast kaari kar leN, Shaayad achchhii paidawaar haath lage.. par jaise hii programme khatam huaa, Ghazal to yaad rahii nahiiN sirf raadiif aur qaafiya yaad rah gaye.,. ittefaaq kii baat hai kii ek ka raadiif thaa 'dhire dhire' aur qaafiya thaa "nazar, khabar etc.. aur duusra ka raadiif tha 'socha na thaa' qaafiye yaad nahiiN aa raha.. aur maiN ne socha kii in dono zameen par kuchh likhuuN. maiN ne ek zameen par Ghazal puuri kar lii thii,duusri ess liye nahiiN kar paaya kii zameen kuchh mushkil sii thee aur waqt kii maara maara bhii thaa... socha kii fursat meiN likhuNga, kii duusre zameen par aap kii likhi huiii Ghazal saamne aa gayee.. aur paRh kar dil baagh baagh ho gaya... aur mooh se nikal "jiyoo maikash miyaaN, kya khuub Ghazal kahii hai"
Huzuur, aap hosh meiN nahiiN reh kar itni achchhi Ghazal kah sakte haiN to hosh meiN hoNge to kya kahne...
sabhii Sher la-jawaab haiN, pasand aaye..Bohat khuub ghazal kahii hai, kyaa baat hai huzuur... yuuN hii likhate raheN..
ek 2 KauRi ka Sher meiN bhii arz kiye deta huuN,,
mita do naam ulfat ka jahaaN se yaaroN,
kiya hai ab talak aabaad ess ne kis ko ?
Mayank
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bahut khoob maiksh ji..........aapki shayri ki koi misaal nahi....har sher dil par asar karta jata hai dheerey dheerey....!
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.....Sunita Thakur.....
यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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hi maikash ji
kese ho aap?
sasriyakal maikash ji
aapki rachna padh ke achchha laga, jis khubsurti se aapne apne ehsaaso ko sabdo mein dhaya hai aapne wo daad ke kabil hai , daad kubul ki jiyega maikash ji, aapki rachna mein jo aapne kaha hai ki badli hai nazar unki dheere dheere ye ehsaas hamien behad pasand aaya, aur jis khubsurati se aapne puri rachna mein dard jalkaaya hai wo hamein bahut achchha laga
maikash ji aapki rachna pe hamari ye chhoti se koshish ummid karta hu aapko pasand aayegi
gaur farmaiyega dost..
Dheere dheere jaam ka maza lenge hum,
Aapki panaho mein guzari is shaam ka maza lenge hum,
Ab agar katl kardogi to koi gila nahi,
Zindagi ke anjaam ka maza lenge hum.
ese hi likhte rahiyega
aapka dost
Merul
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Merul saheb
namaste aur SSA
pehle to daad ke liye shukriya qabuul kijiye, mujhe khushi hai ke aapko ye haqeer se ash'aar pasaNd aaye haiN aur aapne jo ash'aar nazr kiye haiN unke liye alag se shukriya tasleem farmaayeN
bohat shukriya
maikash
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is tarhe teri yaad meiN har shaam dhaley hai
goyaa koyi nagin si kalejey pe chaley hai
maikash
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maikash ji aap ko kaafi dino baad padha pae sach mai majaa aa gayaa, bahut dilchasp aur kaabil-e-tariff kalaam likha hai aap ne , badhaayi ke phool meri aur se sweekar kare
regards
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Manu saheb
namaste
haaN bhai kaafi de'r ke baad aana hua lekin agle kuch din maiN bazm meiN roz shirkat karne ki koshish karuNga, kya pata phir mauqa mile na mile
aapko padh kar maza aaya to mujhe yeh sun kar bhi maza aaya, bohat shukriya
ab miyaaN phooloN ka maiN kya karuNga ? , yeh to ahl-e-husn ke kaam ki chiiz hai
maikash
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is tarhe teri yaad meiN har shaam dhaley hai
goyaa koyi nagin si kalejey pe chaley hai
maikash
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Maikash ji,
bahut pasanD aayi aapki yeh gazal.
regards
aarya
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aarya jee
Ghazal pasaNd farmaane ka bohat shukriya
maikash
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is tarhe teri yaad meiN har shaam dhaley hai
goyaa koyi nagin si kalejey pe chaley hai
maikash
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Maikash saahaab,
aadaab.....
kaise haiN aap? ummeed hai ba-Khairiyat hoNge... aap kii ess Ghazal par nazar to meri usii din paR gayee thee jabv aap ne bazm meiN pesh kiya tha... par waqt kii maara maari aise rahii kii itminaan se aap kii Ghazal ka lutf na le sakaa, aur ess ke liye meiN sharmShaar huuN.. Chaliye ek ittefaaq kii baat bataata huuN, aap kii yeh Ghazal post hone se kuchh din pahle meiN television ke kisii urdu channel dekh raha tha.. aur wahaaN par mushaira chal raha tha.. mushaiara meiN sab apni apni Ghazal suna rahe the.. aur meiN un ka lutf le raha tha.. aur ess mushaira meiN mujhe 2 Ghazal behad pasand aaye..
maiN ne sochaa kii kyoN na ess zameen ham bhi khast kaari kar leN, Shaayad achchhii paidawaar haath lage.. par jaise hii programme khatam huaa, Ghazal to yaad rahii nahiiN sirf raadiif aur qaafiya yaad rah gaye.,. ittefaaq kii baat hai kii ek ka raadiif thaa 'dhire dhire' aur qaafiya thaa "nazar, khabar etc.. aur duusra ka raadiif tha 'socha na thaa' qaafiye yaad nahiiN aa raha.. aur maiN ne socha kii in dono zameen par kuchh likhuuN. maiN ne ek zameen par Ghazal puuri kar lii thii,duusri ess liye nahiiN kar paaya kii zameen kuchh mushkil sii thee aur waqt kii maara maara bhii thaa... socha kii fursat meiN likhuNga, kii duusre zameen par aap kii likhi huiii Ghazal saamne aa gayee.. aur paRh kar dil baagh baagh ho gaya... aur mooh se nikal "jiyoo maikash miyaaN, kya khuub Ghazal kahii hai"
Huzuur, aap hosh meiN nahiiN reh kar itni achchhi Ghazal kah sakte haiN to hosh meiN hoNge to kya kahne...
sabhii Sher la-jawaab haiN, pasand aaye..Bohat khuub ghazal kahii hai, kyaa baat hai huzuur... yuuN hii likhate raheN..
ek 2 KauRi ka Sher meiN bhii arz kiye deta huuN,,
mita do naam ulfat ka jahaaN se yaaroN,
kiya hai ab talak aabaad ess ne kis ko ?
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aadaab chhoTe miyaaN
de'r se jawaab dene ke liye muaaf kar dijiyega
pehle to aapse shikayat yeh hai ke aap gaayab rehte haiN aur duusre aapse darkhuvaast yeh hai aane waale kuch roz agar aap mehfil meiN ba'qaayda shirkat kareiN to mujhe bohat khushi hogi aur aapka ehsaanmaNd bhi rahuNga
chaliye ab aapke jawaab-e-khat ki baari :
sabse pehli baat, aapne jo do misre ataa kiye haiN miyaaN kaleja noch ke le gaye, dil se keh raha huuN yeh baat, do misroN meiN mohabbat ka falsafaa bayaan kar diya, kya kehne, jeete raho bhai!
aapne jo wa'qyaa bayaan kiya hai use'y padhan behadd dilchasp raha, ab maiN bhi aapko ek dilchasp qissa bataata huuN, mere saath aksar yeh hota hai ke maiN beh'r aur zamiin kuch aur iNtekhaab karta huuN aur natijaa uske ae'n ulaT nikalta hai, ab isi zamiin ki baat leN to bohat din se mere zahan meiN radiif "haula haule" aur "chupke chupke" dastak de raha tha, bohat baar kohshish bhi ki lekin hosh meiN to miyaaN mujhse dhaNg se baat bhi nahiiN hoti Ghazal to bohat pare'y ki baat hai
ab aap baadaakashoN ki tabiyat se waaqif hoNge to itna zaroor jaante hoNge ke hum log sochte kuch haiN,kehte kuch haiN aur karte kuch aur haiN
to bhai dhalte-dhalte "haule haule" se "dheere dheere" kab hue pata hi nahiiN chala
duusri buri aadat meri yeh hai ke agar ek hi baithak meiN Ghazal ke teen se zyada she'r raqm na kar luuN to use'y raddii ki Tokarii ke hawaale kar deta huuN, bayaan aur alfaaz ko parakhne meiN jo waqt darkaar hoti hai vo majbuuran hosh meiN ki kharch karna padta hai
ba-har-haal, yeh bhi khoob rahi
aapne Ghazal pasaNd farmaayi, shukriya bhi qabuul farmaaiye
aate raha kijiye miyaaN
rab raakha
maikash
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is tarhe teri yaad meiN har shaam dhaley hai
goyaa koyi nagin si kalejey pe chaley hai
maikash
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7th May 2007, 07:52 AM
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bahut khoob maiksh ji..........aapki shayri ki koi misaal nahi....har sher dil par asar karta jata hai dheerey dheerey....!
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Sunita jee
namaste aur SSA
aap jaise dostoN ki inayat hai jo itni izzat baKhste'y haiN
shukriya qabuul kijiye
rab raakha
maikash
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is tarhe teri yaad meiN har shaam dhaley hai
goyaa koyi nagin si kalejey pe chaley hai
maikash
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7th May 2007, 01:17 PM
sukhriya maikash ji
esehi likhte rahe
aapka dost
Merul
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Merul saheb
namaste aur SSA
pehle to daad ke liye shukriya qabuul kijiye, mujhe khushi hai ke aapko ye haqeer se ash'aar pasaNd aaye haiN aur aapne jo ash'aar nazr kiye haiN unke liye alag se shukriya tasleem farmaayeN
bohat shukriya
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!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!
Dhoka diya tha jab tumne mujhe,
Tab dil se me naraz tha,
Phir socha ki dil se tumhe nikal du,
Magar woh kambakth dil bhi tumhare paas tha.
Merul~~~~~~~~~~>
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8th May 2007, 11:41 AM
badlii hai unki nazar dheere dheere
ubhre haiN zakhm-e-jigar dheere dheere
bichaR'te gaye humsafar dheere dheere
mushkil huii rehguzar dheere dheere
Waaah...kya baat khi hai huzoor...
guzaari hai yuuN ziNdagi bin tumhaare
goyaa piyaa ho zahar dheere dheere
zaroorat ho jab hosh khone ki yaaro
karti hai mai kyoN asar dheere dheere ?
Waaaahhhh...
taara koi TooT'ta dekh ke hum
royaa kiye raat bhar dheere dheere
kahaa tha ummiidoN se bach ke guzarna
kahaa tha dil-e-muz'tar*, dheere dheere
Waaaah bahut khooobbb...
vo aaye haiN khaaboN meiN muddat ke baad
ae shab rafta rafta, guzar dheere dheere
"maikash" abhi to, uThaa hai janaazaa
pahuNchegi un taq khabar dheere dheere
Uff... khoob aashaar hain....
Dearest Maikash bhai,
Ek bahut hi umda ghazal pesh ki hai aapne is baar bhi...Har sher ke saath munh se waah hi niklati hai... meri waah kubool kijiyega... apna khayal rakhiye
Kab sochaa thha milegaa humsafar "Shweta" jaisaa
Lagta hai is baar "Pulkit", kismat teri bhi rang laayii hai
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8th May 2007, 01:32 PM
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aadaab chhoTe miyaaN
de'r se jawaab dene ke liye muaaf kar dijiyega
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Namaste baRe bhaaii,
Ab tabiyat kaisi hai aap kii? ummeed hai kii sab Khairiyat hogii..
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pehle to aapse shikayat yeh hai ke aap gaayab rehte haiN aur duusre aapse darkhuvaast yeh hai aane waale kuch roz agar aap mehfil meiN ba'qaayda shirkat kareiN to mujhe bohat khushi hogi aur aapka ehsaanmaNd bhi rahuNga
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aray huzuur, der saver to hoti rehti hai.. lekin phir bhii aap ne waqt nikaal kar ess na-cheez ke Khat ka jawaab diya ess ke liye tah-e-dil se Shukriyah!
huzuur maiN kahaaN gaayab rehta huuN, maiN to aata hii rehta huuN.. haaN biich meiN zaruur kuchh din masruufiyat ke chalte nahiiN aa saka.. lekin aap to.. aate hii nahiiN hai... maasaaalaah eid ke chaand haiN bilkul aur jab aate haiN to lagta hai kii aaj eid ka chaand aaj haazir hai mehfil meiN waise aap ne farmaaya hai kii aane waale kuchh din mehfil meiN ba-qaayeda sirkat karta rahuuN, to huzuur yehi kahuuNga aap ka hukm sar aaNkhoN par.. lekiN gustaakhi muaaf kyaa aane waale din kuchh khaas hone waale haiN?
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chaliye ab aapke jawaab-e-khat ki baari :
sabse pehli baat, aapne jo do misre ataa kiye haiN miyaaN kaleja noch ke le gaye, dil se keh raha huuN yeh baat, do misroN meiN mohabbat ka falsafaa bayaan kar diya, kya kehne, jeete raho bhai!
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Sher ke pasandagii ke liye Shukriyah! waise behad saadi sii Sher hai, bas khayaal meiN aaya to likh diya.. ess ka 50% daad aap ke liye kyuN kii aap ke ess Ghazal ko paRhne ke baad yeh khayaal aaya tha..
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aapne jo wa'qyaa bayaan kiya hai use'y padhan behadd dilchasp raha, ab maiN bhi aapko ek dilchasp qissa bataata huuN, mere saath aksar yeh hota hai ke maiN beh'r aur zamiin kuch aur iNtekhaab karta huuN aur natijaa uske ae'n ulaT nikalta hai, ab isi zamiin ki baat leN to bohat din se mere zahan meiN radiif "haula haule" aur "chupke chupke" dastak de raha tha, bohat baar kohshish bhi ki lekin hosh meiN to miyaaN mujhse dhaNg se baat bhi nahiiN hoti Ghazal to bohat pare'y ki baat hai
ab aap baadaakashoN ki tabiyat se waaqif hoNge to itna zaroor jaante hoNge ke hum log sochte kuch haiN,kehte kuch haiN aur karte kuch aur haiN
to bhai dhalte-dhalte "haule haule" se "dheere dheere" kab hue pata hi nahiiN chala
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hahaha.. aisa aksar hota hai... lekin kuchh aur baiThate haiN aur likha kuchh aur jaata hai.. aur jis khayaal par fikr karte haiN wo khayaal to mukammal hota nahiiN, balki naye khayaal se Ghazal ban jaati hai... aap ka chupke-chupke se haule-haule aur haule-haule se dhire dhire ka safar bhii khuub hai.. par ek baat yehi kahuuNga bhaai, ki jab tak ham sharaab to pii rahe haiN tab tak to Theek hai, lekin jab Sharaab ham ko peene kii Shuruaat karta hai to sab duShwaar ho jaata hai..
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duusri buri aadat meri yeh hai ke agar ek hi baithak meiN Ghazal ke teen se zyada she'r raqm na kar luuN to use'y raddii ki Tokarii ke hawaale kar deta huuN, bayaan aur alfaaz ko parakhne meiN jo waqt darkaar hoti hai vo majbuuran hosh meiN ki kharch karna padta hai
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huzuur meiN to yehi kahuuNga kii aap ko yeh kudratii den hai jo ek baiThak meiN teen mukammal Sher raqm kar lete haiN.. lekiN Ghazal likhane ke maamle meiN bohat hi kanjuush huuN... bohat hi kam likhata huuN aur jo bhii likhata huuN yahaaN pesh kar deta huuN... par agar likhane meiN baiThuN to do-ek din meiN likh leta huuN par mukammal hote hote 15 roj bhi lag jaate haiN, phir bhii pata nahiiN kii mukammal hoti hai ya adhurii reh jaati hai Ghazal..
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ba-har-haal, yeh bhi khoob rahi
aapne Ghazal pasaNd farmaayi, shukriya bhi qabuul farmaaiye
aate raha kijiye miyaaN
rab raakha
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ba-har-haal maiN bhii aap se yehii kahuuNga kii aate rahiye.. aur apna bohat khayaal rakhiye..
aap ka Khat paRh kar behad khuShi huii...
Mayank
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9th May 2007, 01:16 AM
bahut asardar aur sundar aur ehsaas bhara likha hai apne
sakhi ki daad kubul kare
sakhi
कुछ ऐसे पल जिनको संजोना है ,
शब्दों में पिरोना है , जिससे वो हमारी यादों में महकते रहे
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19th September 2007, 06:47 PM
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sukhriya maikash ji
esehi likhte rahe
aapka dost
Merul
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ek baar phir se shukriya tasleem kijiye
rab raakha
maikash
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is tarhe teri yaad meiN har shaam dhaley hai
goyaa koyi nagin si kalejey pe chaley hai
maikash
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19th September 2007, 06:50 PM
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badlii hai unki nazar dheere dheere
ubhre haiN zakhm-e-jigar dheere dheere
bichaR'te gaye humsafar dheere dheere
mushkil huii rehguzar dheere dheere
Waaah...kya baat khi hai huzoor...
guzaari hai yuuN ziNdagi bin tumhaare
goyaa piyaa ho zahar dheere dheere
zaroorat ho jab hosh khone ki yaaro
karti hai mai kyoN asar dheere dheere ?
Waaaahhhh...
taara koi TooT'ta dekh ke hum
royaa kiye raat bhar dheere dheere
kahaa tha ummiidoN se bach ke guzarna
kahaa tha dil-e-muz'tar*, dheere dheere
Waaaah bahut khooobbb...
vo aaye haiN khaaboN meiN muddat ke baad
ae shab rafta rafta, guzar dheere dheere
"maikash" abhi to, uThaa hai janaazaa
pahuNchegi un taq khabar dheere dheere
Uff... khoob aashaar hain....
Dearest Maikash bhai,
Ek bahut hi umda ghazal pesh ki hai aapne is baar bhi...Har sher ke saath munh se waah hi niklati hai... meri waah kubool kijiyega... apna khayal rakhiye
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Pulkit miyaaN
namaste
sabse pehle to bhai maiN apni bad'tamiizii ke liye sharmiNdaa huuN aur muaafi ka talabgaar huuN ke itni de'r baad aapke khat ka jawaab de raha huuN
duusre badhaaii qabuul kijiye, moderators banaaye jaane par, bohat jald maiN aapko aapki pehli assignment bhejne waala huuN , tai'yaar rahiyega
Ghazal pasaNd farmaane ke liye shukriya alag se qabuul kareiN
rab raakha
maikash
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is tarhe teri yaad meiN har shaam dhaley hai
goyaa koyi nagin si kalejey pe chaley hai
maikash
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19th September 2007, 07:09 PM
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bahut asardar aur sundar aur ehsaas bhara likha hai apne
sakhi ki daad kubul kare
sakhi
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aapki daad sar-aaNkhoN par
bohat shukriya
maikash
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is tarhe teri yaad meiN har shaam dhaley hai
goyaa koyi nagin si kalejey pe chaley hai
maikash
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19th September 2007, 07:33 PM
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namaste choTe miyaaN, mujhe nahiiN lagta ke aap mera yeh khat padheNge lekin mera farz ban'ta hai ke aapki muhabbat ka ehteraam karuuN isliye jawaab de raha huuN
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Ab tabiyat kaisi hai aap kii? ummeed hai kii sab Khairiyat hogii..
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tabiyat durust hai, daryaaft karne ke liye shukriya
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aray huzuur, der saver to hoti rehti hai.. lekin phir bhii aap ne waqt nikaal kar ess na-cheez ke Khat ka jawaab diya ess ke liye tah-e-dil se Shukriyah!
huzuur maiN kahaaN gaayab rehta huuN, maiN to aata hii rehta huuN.. haaN biich meiN zaruur kuchh din masruufiyat ke chalte nahiiN aa saka.. lekin aap to.. aate hii nahiiN hai... maasaaalaah eid ke chaand haiN bilkul aur jab aate haiN to lagta hai kii aaj eid ka chaand aaj haazir hai mehfil meiN waise aap ne farmaaya hai kii aane waale kuchh din mehfil meiN ba-qaayeda sirkat karta rahuuN, to huzuur yehi kahuuNga aap ka hukm sar aaNkhoN par.. lekiN gustaakhi muaaf kyaa aane waale din kuchh khaas hone waale haiN?
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miyaaN ab to maiN aapko gaayab rehne duuNga bhi nahiiN, crazy work-load coming every moderator's way, get ready , aur maiN khud bhi rozaana haaziri duuNga, vaada kar raha huuN !
haaN kuch khaas hone to waala tha lekin uupar waale ki marzi nahiiN thi ke aisa ho paata isliye nahiiN hua
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Sher ke pasandagii ke liye Shukriyah! waise behad saadi sii Sher hai, bas khayaal meiN aaya to likh diya.. ess ka 50% daad aap ke liye kyuN kii aap ke ess Ghazal ko paRhne ke baad yeh khayaal aaya tha..
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shukriya tasleem aur aap apni Ghalat-fehmiiyoN ko zaraa khaatir se pare'y rakhiye kyoNke she'r waqa'ii meiN achca hai aur har lihaaz se daad ke qaabil hai
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hahaha.. aisa aksar hota hai... lekin kuchh aur baiThate haiN aur likha kuchh aur jaata hai.. aur jis khayaal par fikr karte haiN wo khayaal to mukammal hota nahiiN, balki naye khayaal se Ghazal ban jaati hai... aap ka chupke-chupke se haule-haule aur haule-haule se dhire dhire ka safar bhii khuub hai.. par ek baat yehi kahuuNga bhaai, ki jab tak ham sharaab to pii rahe haiN tab tak to Theek hai, lekin jab Sharaab ham ko peene kii Shuruaat karta hai to sab duShwaar ho jaata hai..
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kaun kiso pee raha hai yeh zaahir ho bhi jaaye to kya farq paDta hai bhai, maqsad to ek hi hai, jab taq voh puura ho raha hai sab khairiiyat hai
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huzuur meiN to yehi kahuuNga kii aap ko yeh kudratii den hai jo ek baiThak meiN teen mukammal Sher raqm kar lete haiN.. lekiN Ghazal likhane ke maamle meiN bohat hi kanjuush huuN... bohat hi kam likhata huuN aur jo bhii likhata huuN yahaaN pesh kar deta huuN... par agar likhane meiN baiThuN to do-ek din meiN likh leta huuN par mukammal hote hote 15 roj bhi lag jaate haiN, phir bhii pata nahiiN kii mukammal hoti hai ya adhurii reh jaati hai Ghazal..
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miyaaN aisa roz-roz bhi nahiiN hota, aur isii aadat ki wajah se mere kitne hi ash'aar jaane shahar ke kaun se kone'y meiN kaun si raddi ki Tokarii ke hawaale hue paDe haiN, ehbaab kehte haiN ke meri sabse buri aadat hai ke maiN apna kalaam saNbhaal ke nahiiN rakhta, kabhi kuch dhyaan meiN aaya aur kahiiN se kaGhaz na mila to note (currency) par hi likh deta huuN aur phir khareed-o-faroKhat ki naubat aaye to mere voh ash'aar jaane kaun se kaale/gorey ki je'b meiN pahuNch jaate haiN
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ba-har-haal maiN bhii aap se yehii kahuuNga kii aate rahiye.. aur apna bohat khayaal rakhiye..
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huqm sar-maaThe janaab
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aap ka Khat paRh kar behad khuShi huii...
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mujhe bhi
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rab raakha
maikash
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is tarhe teri yaad meiN har shaam dhaley hai
goyaa koyi nagin si kalejey pe chaley hai
maikash
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20th September 2007, 02:32 PM
Dear Maikash bhai,
Aapki assignment ka intezaar rahega... lekin agar mushkil assignment den to usse pehl tarining meterial bhi bhej dijiyega... yun hi mehfil sajaate rahiye... aap hi se yahaan raunak hai... khayal rakhiyega apna...
Kab sochaa thha milegaa humsafar "Shweta" jaisaa
Lagta hai is baar "Pulkit", kismat teri bhi rang laayii hai
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20th September 2007, 07:35 PM
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namaste choTe miyaaN, mujhe nahiiN lagta ke aap mera yeh khat padheNge lekin mera farz ban'ta hai ke aapki muhabbat ka ehteraam karuuN isliye jawaab de raha huuN
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baDe bhaaii, sab se pahle to raseed sa.nbhaal leejiye kee mai.n aaya huu.n aur mai.n ne paRh bhee liyaa hai! aap likhe.n aur ham ne paRhe.n, aise gustaakh to ham nahii.n.. aapne mujhe itni izzat bakhshi hai us ke liye aap ka sa-raa-paa mamuun huu.n
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miyaaN ab to maiN aapko gaayab rehne duuNga bhi nahiiN, crazy work-load coming every moderator's way, get ready , aur maiN khud bhi rozaana haaziri duuNga, vaada kar raha huuN !
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hmm.. yeh baat hai! waise abhee hamaara gaayab rahne ka koii iraada bhii nahii.n hai... bas, aap hii Mr. india bane huye rehte hai.n. aap har din aaye,nge site par is se zeyaadah khushii kii baat aur kyaa hogiii
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haaN kuch khaas hone to waala tha lekin uupar waale ki marzi nahiiN thi ke aisa ho paata isliye nahiiN hua
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hmm... ooparwaale ka aap par jo aashirwaad hai woh bana rahe hameshaa.. merii ooparwaale se yehii prathaana hai... apna khayaal rakhiyegaa...
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21st September 2007, 04:06 AM
namaskaar maikash ji
janab, maaf kijiye, bahut dher baar padha yeh kalaam aapka. isliye dheri se pahuncha yahan. janab, bahut hi umda likha hai. shuruwat to bahut hi jabardast ki hai aapne. aur ehsaas bi ache pesh kiye hain. daad hajir hai janab, kabul kijiye.
khush rahein aur yuhin likte rahein
aapka dost
manish
Life is filled with goodbyes, a million goodbyes, and it hurts every time....and every time my heart dies a little...
Darkness falls on me like rain... just one drop at a time....
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23rd September 2007, 08:12 AM
kahaa tha ummiidoN se bach ke guzarna
kahaa tha dil-e-muz'tar*, dheere dheere
vo aaye haiN khaaboN meiN muddat ke baad
ae shab rafta rafta, guzar dheere dheere
Maikash sahab adaab arz hei
Hazur phir zehmat de rahe hein apko apni tehreer se
Login kiya itifaq se apki ye dono ghazaliyaat nigah se guzreen
Nigaah se to guzar gayeen magar dil mein utar gayeen
Ye dono ashaar janae kitni baar parh chuke
Ji he nahi bharta
Hur baar jab jab in ashaar ko parha , eik naye zaaviye se inko ruh pe naqsh banate paya
Bauahat taqatvar hei sahab apka qalam
Rab iski hifazat kare
Daad haazir hei eik haqeer see qaree ki jaanib se
Gur qabul kijiye ga to izatafzayee hogee
MahamAzmi
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