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12th August 2005, 12:43 PM
Adaab dosto...
Malum nahin kya likh daala hai...bus tasavvur mein rang bharne ki adnaa si koshish kee hai...aur zara dard se nazar bachaakar likha hai...shhhhh...aap dost karam farmaayiyega... Kya lee thee ijazzat Nainon ke raste, yuun chupke se aake, lekar tuu mera yeh dil gaya Humko mita ke, tuu dhuunde hai dil ko, hua kya jo tera yeh dil gaya Duur ufaq mein duubte shams ka yeh manzar Surkh alam mein nahaayi yeh zameen aab-e-zar Jharanon see kiranon se raushan yeh rahguzar Aise mein chedha kyun, taaron ko dil ke, hua kya jo tera yeh dil gaya Yeh bojhal ghataaon ka tham tham barasna Yeh be-hosh ruuhon ka sang sang tadapna Aanch paakar meri, tera pal pal pighalna Gale se laga ke, hosh mere udha ke, hua kya jo tera yeh dil gaya Tera hothon pe ungali se mujhe chup karaana Gum sum sa mera palakein bhi na jhukaana Labon ki jumbish ko, daanton tale yoon dabaana Aanchal ko behkaya, thaa mujhko rulaaya, hua kya jo tera yeh dil gaya Iss bheege se alam mein, tum mere saamne raho Kuch main khoyi rahoon, kuch tum duube se raho Padh kar meri nazzron ko, tum bhi chup chup se raho Meri jaan-e-wafaa, tuu nashe mein hai chuur, hua kya jo tera yeh dil gaya Ho qareeb hee manzil, par gazab kee ho duuri Meri jaan tuu bata, hai yeh kaisee majbuuri Teri 'paras' kya rahegi hamesha hee adhuuri Rahoon gungunati, tere labon pe ghazal si, hua kya jo tera yeh dil gaya Ufaq = horizon Shams = sun Aab-e-zar = liquid gold Jumbish = movement *iss kalaam ko edit karke likha hai... http://www.shayri.com/forums/showthr...8&pagenumber=2 gayi ruton ka sulagataa sa intezaar bhii ho mere khuloos kaa andaaz ye bhii sachhaa hai rakhuun na rabt magar dostii shumaar bhii ho --Sayyidaa Fatimaa Hasan |
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12th August 2005, 01:01 PM
Kya lee thee ijazzat
Nainon ke raste, yuun chupke se aake, lekar tuu mera yeh dil gaya Humko mita ke, tuu dhuunde hai dil ko, hua kya jo tera yeh dil gaya Waaaaaaahhhh... kyaa baat haiii.... Gauahar saahiba writing on Ishq...  Duur ufaq mein duubte shams ka yeh manzar Surkh alam mein nahaayi yeh zameen aab-e-zar Jharanon see kiranon se raushan yeh rahguzar Aise mein chedha kyun, taaron ko dil ke, hua kya jo tera yeh dil gaya Beautifulllllllll....!! Yeh bojhal ghataaon ka tham tham barasna Yeh be-hosh ruuhon ka sang sang tadapna Aanch paakar meri, tera pal pal pighalna Gale se laga ke, hosh mere udha ke, hua kya jo tera yeh dil gaya Waaaaahhh... kyaa bayaani hai... ! Tera hothon pe ungali se mujhe chup karaana Gum sum sa mera palakein bhi na jhukaana Labon ki jumbish ko, daanton tale yoon dabaana Aanchal ko behkaya, thaa mujhko rulaaya, hua kya jo tera yeh dil gaya Classssssssyyy... loved these lines the most.. u know why Iss bheege se alam mein, tum mere saamne raho Kuch main khoyi si rahoon, kuch tum duube se raho Padh kar meri nigaahon ko, tum bhi chup chup se raho Meri jaan-e-wafaa, tuu nashe mein hai chuur, hua kya jo tera yeh dil gaya Waaaaaaaaaaahhhhh.... Just 2 goooddd! Ho qareeb hee manzil, par gazab kee ho duuri Meri jaan tuu bata, hai yeh kaisee majbuuri Teri 'paras' kya rahegi hamesha hee adhuuri Rahoon gungunati, tere labon pe ghazal si, hua kya jo tera yeh dil gaya hmmmmmmmmmmmmm.....! Dear Paras! This one is really very very beautifullly expressed.... Ishq ki dastaan bayaan ho rahi hai.. sahi hai...Mujhe to bahut acchi lagi...Its just tooo tooo beautifull.... Dil ke bahut kareeb lagi yeh nazm.. aisa laga jaise kisi apne ki hi kahani bayaan ki ho... Meri dil se daad kubool karna....! Aise hi pyaar bhare taraane likhti rehna... Keep writing and take care  Lagta hai is baar "Pulkit", kismat teri bhi rang laayii hai |
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13th August 2005, 12:42 AM
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Bahut acha likha hai... ishq par aapka yeh kalam dil ko chu gaya... bahut ache... yunhi likhte raha karo... Take Care Rohin |
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13th August 2005, 09:02 AM
Meri HB behna.....
Kya lee thee ijazzat Nainon ke raste, yuun chupke se aake, lekar tuu mera yeh dil gaya Humko mita ke, tuu dhuunde hai dil ko, hua kya jo tera yeh dil gaya Matla to wah...jaise sard jame hue zehan ko ek halki ki awaaz se taar-taar kar gaya..... Tera hothon pe ungali se mujhe chup karaana Gum sum sa mera palakein bhi na jhukaana Labon ki jumbish ko, daanton tale yoon dabaana Aanchal ko behkaya, thaa mujhko rulaaya, hua kya jo tera yeh dil gaya ek ghareeb misra nazm ka.....yun laga jaise mera hi gujara pal saamne aa baitha ho...... Ho qareeb hee manzil, par gazab kee ho duuri Meri jaan tuu bata, hai yeh kaisee majbuuri Teri 'paras' kya rahegi hamesha hee adhuuri Rahoon gungunati, tere labon pe ghazal si, hua kya jo tera yeh dil gaya Makta har dafa ki tarah...ajab....ya phir gajab.....iski pehli pankti ka to kya kehna..... Ek purasar nazm....ravaani yun chali jaise ki koi qataar ho.....waqya alag alag ho magar rang ek hi bikhra hua hai...... daad kabool karen apne bhai ki...............aur hamesh khush raho.... thuvada veer............. **(*·.¸(`·.¸ ¸.·´)¸.·*)** *·.¸Paigaam -e- Aman¸.·* **(¸.·´(¸.·* *·.¸)`·.¸)** ~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~* inhan ankhaaon vicho kadi, tere hanju vaghe si..... aaj ki hoye, jehda ^AMAN^ da lahoo vagda ae...... AMAN RAHI |
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13th August 2005, 09:14 AM
dear paras di,
this one wud be called as one of my favourite thread written by u. as usual its awesome but the best part i loved about it tht aapne dard ko kuch hadh tak nazar andaaz kiya hai. wah bahut khoob di. har alfaas khud mein mukamal hai aur motiyon saman shabdon mein piroya hua paya. class in itself. wonderful.di plz do keep posting ur creations oftenly. i love reading them. take care n may god bless u with his finnest glitters.  mera aashiyaan tha wahan jahan toofanon ka theekana tha, ek naadan dil tha aur ek bedard zamana tha! na jaane kyu ussi pal mil gaya ek dard naya, jab kisi roz mere labon ka muskurana tha! ***************************** Kutch bayani ho ehsaason ki….. Kutch kahani ho jasbaaton ki…. Ek paaq bazm jahan ho sirf pyar….. Dhoondte hain koi aisa manzar yaar…. Karein ek dooje se har koi lagaav…. Koi kare shikayat koi de sujaav Naazim kare hifaazat-e-pyar… Dhoondte hain koi aisa manzar yaar…. Buzurgoon ki kahawaat hai… Fal-e-intezaar meetha hai…. Kehte hain Jas- Nal- Aman…. Thoda sa, bus thoda sa intezaar…. 
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13th August 2005, 09:46 AM
Meri Pyaari Guru Ji,
Another very exquisite piece of work with emotions laced in it so supremely. Dard shayri mein toh aap maahir thi hi, aur ab itni khoobsurti se ishq per likha hai ke bas.... dil ke har kone se wah wah hi nikalti hai. Just one suggestion though Guru Ji agar chhota muh aur badi baat na ho toh. Can this line Tera hothon pe ungali se mujhe chup karaana b changed to "Tera hothon pe ungali RAKH mujhe chup karaana." Dunno abt technicalities but this just sounded much better. Bas aap uhi ek se barh kar ek behtereen kalaam likhte rahe Guruji aur yeh haseen mehfilo ka silsila jaari rakhe. Aapka nalayak shagird Salim If there are no tears in the eyes, there will be no rainbow in the soul Happiness is a butterfly, which, when pursued, is always just beyond your grasp, but which, if you sit down quietly, may alight upon you. We come to love not by finding a perfect person but by learning to see an imperfect person perfectly |
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14th August 2005, 05:05 AM
Kya lee thee ijazzat
Nainon ke raste, yuun chupke se aake, lekar tuu mera yeh dil gaya Humko mita ke, tuu dhuunde hai dil ko, hua kya jo tera yeh dil gaya wow didi Duur ufaq mein duubte shams ka yeh manzar Surkh alam mein nahaayi yeh zameen aab-e-zar Jharanon see kiranon se raushan yeh rahguzar Aise mein chedha kyun, taaron ko dil ke, hua kya jo tera yeh dil gaya too romantic... Yeh bojhal ghataaon ka tham tham barasna Yeh be-hosh ruuhon ka sang sang tadapna Aanch paakar meri, tera pal pal pighalna Gale se laga ke, hosh mere udha ke, hua kya jo tera yeh dil gaya beautifully expressed Tera hothon pe ungali se mujhe chup karaana Gum sum sa mera palakein bhi na jhukaana Labon ki jumbish ko, daanton tale yoon dabaana Aanchal ko behkaya, thaa mujhko rulaaya, hua kya jo tera yeh dil gaya i just love these lines...they are too good...bahautc ute hain... Iss bheege se alam mein, tum mere saamne raho Kuch main khoyi rahoon, kuch tum duube se raho Padh kar meri nazzron ko, tum bhi chup chup se raho Meri jaan-e-wafaa, tuu nashe mein hai chuur, hua kya jo tera yeh dil gaya too cute and too romantic... Ho qareeb hee manzil, par gazab kee ho duuri Meri jaan tuu bata, hai yeh kaisee majbuuri Teri 'paras' kya rahegi hamesha hee adhuuri Rahoon gungunati, tere labon pe ghazal si, hua kya jo tera yeh dil gaya Amazing Dearesttttttt didi, Too cute and too romantic...kya likha hai tumne...bahaut cute likha hai...dard mai likhne mai to aap maahir thee hi ishq pe bhi...wow...talented to hogi hi didi kiski ho... Kabhi kabhi ishq pe bhi likha karo didi...bahaut acacha likha hai...loved reading each and every part... Luv, palak =========================================== Naam ke tere kii ibaadat hai, Ishq teraa khudaayi hai Berang meri duniya sanam rangeen toone banaayi hai Dil ki har dhhadkan me naam teraa shaamil hai is kadar Ke dekhoon main aaina bhi to soorat teri nazar aayi hai ================================================== ================================================== ================ "Don't walk behind me; I may not lead. Don't walk in front of me; I may not follow. Just walk beside me and be my friend." ================================================== ================================================== ================= |
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14th August 2005, 11:32 AM
Kya lee thee ijazzat
Nainon ke raste, yuun chupke se aake, lekar tuu mera yeh dil gaya Humko mita ke, tuu dhuunde hai dil ko, hua kya jo tera yeh dil gaya Duur ufaq mein duubte shams ka yeh manzar Surkh alam mein nahaayi yeh zameen aab-e-zar Jharanon see kiranon se raushan yeh rahguzar Aise mein chedha kyun, taaron ko dil ke, hua kya jo tera yeh dil gaya Yeh bojhal ghataaon ka tham tham barasna Yeh be-hosh ruuhon ka sang sang tadapna Aanch paakar meri, tera pal pal pighalna Gale se laga ke, hosh mere udha ke, hua kya jo tera yeh dil gaya Tera hothon pe ungali se mujhe chup karaana Gum sum sa mera palakein bhi na jhukaana Labon ki jumbish ko, daanton tale yoon dabaana Aanchal ko behkaya, thaa mujhko rulaaya, hua kya jo tera yeh dil gaya Iss bheege se alam mein, tum mere saamne raho Kuch main khoyi rahoon, kuch tum duube se raho Padh kar meri nazzron ko, tum bhi chup chup se raho Meri jaan-e-wafaa, tuu nashe mein hai chuur, hua kya jo tera yeh dil gaya Ho qareeb hee manzil, par gazab kee ho duuri Meri jaan tuu bata, hai yeh kaisee majbuuri Teri 'paras' kya rahegi hamesha hee adhuuri Rahoon gungunati, tere labon pe ghazal si, hua kya jo tera yeh dil gaya ************************************************* Dear Paras ji.... wah.. huya kya jo tera yeh dil gaya... bahot acche lage aap ke khyaal aur andaaz e bayaan... what a meaning ful... humhari daad kubul karna... yun hi likhte rehna aur khush rehna.......take care! |
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14th August 2005, 08:04 PM
Hi Paras di,
Wah wah wah wah aur wah aur hazar wah,.,.. wah kya likha hai... beautiful... naak unchi kardi aapne meri,,.... Take Care Rohin |
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14th August 2005, 08:58 PM
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shukriya !!! ye rachna zindagi aur dard ke karib rhegie !!! keep writing !!! tc ashok |
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15th August 2005, 10:43 AM
Main muaafi chahoongi ki der se sabke jawaab de rahi hoon...lekin kisi ke bhi reply se pehle main yeh kalaam phir se edit karke likh rahi hoon...ek misraa is mein kuch atpataa sa lag raha thaa...aur phir mere azeez Salim ne kuch suggest kiya tau use bhi edited version mein shamil kar rahi hoon...
Dekhiey agar aise behtar lage aap sabko... Kya lee thee ijazzat Nainon ke raste, yuun chupke se aake, lekar tuu mera yeh dil gaya Humko mita ke, tuu dhuunde hai dil ko, hua kya jo tera yeh dil gaya Duur *ufaq mein duubte *shams ka yeh manzar Surkh alam mein nahaayi yeh zameen *aab-e-zar Jharanon see kiranon se raushan yeh rahguzar Aise mein chedha kyun, taaron ko dil ke, hua kya jo tera yeh dil gaya Yeh bojhal ghataaon ka tham tham barasna Yeh be-hosh ruuhon ka sang sang tadapna Aanch paakar meri, tera pal pal pighalna Gale se laga ke, hosh mere udha ke, hua kya jo tera yeh dil gaya Sawan ka gaalon se ruk ruk ke tapakna Teri chashm-e-*neemkhwaabi se, mera thithakna Teri *noor-e-nigaahi mein, mera ang ang damakna Meri jaan-e-wafaa, tuu nashe mein hai chuur, hua kya jo tera yeh dil gaya Tera hothon pe ungali rakh mujhe chup karaana Gum sum sa mera palakein bhi na jhukaana Labon ki jumbish ko, daanton tale yoon dabaana Aanchal ko behkaya, thaa mujhko rulaaya, hua kya jo tera yeh dil gaya Ho qareeb hee manzil, par gazab kee ho duuri Meri jaan tuu bata, hai yeh kaisee majbuuri Teri 'paras' kya rahegi hamesha hee adhuuri Rahoon gungunati, tere labon pe ghazal si, hua kya jo tera yeh dil gaya Ufaq = horizon Shams = sun Aab-e-zar = liquid gold neemkhwaabi = drowsiness noor-e-nigaahi = light of one's eyes Jumbish = movement gayi ruton ka sulagataa sa intezaar bhii ho mere khuloos kaa andaaz ye bhii sachhaa hai rakhuun na rabt magar dostii shumaar bhii ho --Sayyidaa Fatimaa Hasan |
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15th August 2005, 07:20 PM
Pulkit...
haan malum hai tumhein kyun achha laga mera ishq pe likhna...and why that particular sher ...i may surprise everyone and just write in the same vein...but don't wanna shock bhole log here... dard is comfortable...jeene ka ehsaas! gayi ruton ka sulagataa sa intezaar bhii ho mere khuloos kaa andaaz ye bhii sachhaa hai rakhuun na rabt magar dostii shumaar bhii ho --Sayyidaa Fatimaa Hasan |
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15th August 2005, 07:23 PM
hmmmn rohin...
mujhe bhi achha laga thaa likhkar tumhari di gayi ruton ka sulagataa sa intezaar bhii ho mere khuloos kaa andaaz ye bhii sachhaa hai rakhuun na rabt magar dostii shumaar bhii ho --Sayyidaa Fatimaa Hasan |
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15th August 2005, 07:26 PM
Aman veere...
tumhein pasand aaya na kalaam...tau edit jo kiya hai use bhi zaroor padhna...thoda change kiya hai...ek para ko... gayi ruton ka sulagataa sa intezaar bhii ho mere khuloos kaa andaaz ye bhii sachhaa hai rakhuun na rabt magar dostii shumaar bhii ho --Sayyidaa Fatimaa Hasan |
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15th August 2005, 10:10 PM
dear di kya lajawab likha hai apne, pyar par ye kallam mere dil ko chu gaya, aap hamesha yuhi lkikhtey rahiye pyar ka nasha hai
 Kya lee thee ijazzat Nainon ke raste, yuun chupke se aake, lekar tuu mera yeh dil gaya Humko mita ke, tuu dhuunde hai dil ko, hua kya jo tera yeh dil gaya -> haiiiiiiii Duur ufaq mein duubte shams ka yeh manzar Surkh alam mein nahaayi yeh zameen aab-e-zar Jharanon see kiranon se raushan yeh rahguzar Aise mein chedha kyun, taaron ko dil ke, hua kya jo tera yeh dil gaya oye hoye Yeh bojhal ghataaon ka tham tham barasna Yeh be-hosh ruuhon ka sang sang tadapna Aanch paakar meri, tera pal pal pighalna Gale se laga ke, hosh mere udha ke, hua kya jo tera yeh dil gaya -> hai gale se lagna aur hosh udana wow! Tera hothon pe ungali se mujhe chup karaana Gum sum sa mera palakein bhi na jhukaana Labon ki jumbish ko, daanton tale yoon dabaana Aanchal ko behkaya, thaa mujhko rulaaya, hua kya jo tera yeh dil gaya -> wow too romantic Iss bheege se alam mein, tum mere saamne raho Kuch main khoyi rahoon, kuch tum duube se raho Padh kar meri nazzron ko, tum bhi chup chup se raho Meri jaan-e-wafaa, tuu nashe mein hai chuur, hua kya jo tera yeh dil gaya --> pyar ke nashe me chur Ho qareeb hee manzil, par gazab kee ho duuri Meri jaan tuu bata, hai yeh kaisee majbuuri Teri 'paras' kya rahegi hamesha hee adhuuri Rahoon gungunati, tere labon pe ghazal si, hua kya jo tera yeh dil gaya -> qareeb manzil par ye duri......hai kaise hai ye majburi..hua kya ye dil gaya much luv to you muah keep wriitng di i luved it i thikn its a mix os majburi, adhurapan, roamtnicness....kyamat hai bas ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Jisnu Lagey, ohi'yo jaane, Kaun Jaane peer parayi! ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ |
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15th August 2005, 10:30 PM
Diiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiii,
Tumne to isse aur bhi romantic bana diya...kya ho gaya hai di tumhe...hehehehehehehehe Bahaut cute likha hai tumne...too cute and too romantic...it was superb...hehehe Luv ya palak =========================================== Naam ke tere kii ibaadat hai, Ishq teraa khudaayi hai Berang meri duniya sanam rangeen toone banaayi hai Dil ki har dhhadkan me naam teraa shaamil hai is kadar Ke dekhoon main aaina bhi to soorat teri nazar aayi hai ================================================== ================================================== ================ "Don't walk behind me; I may not lead. Don't walk in front of me; I may not follow. Just walk beside me and be my friend." ================================================== ================================================== ================= |
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Glad you liked it...arre itni saari tareef...baap re...duaaon ke liye, daad ke liye shukriyaa di gayi ruton ka sulagataa sa intezaar bhii ho mere khuloos kaa andaaz ye bhii sachhaa hai rakhuun na rabt magar dostii shumaar bhii ho --Sayyidaa Fatimaa Hasan |
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16th August 2005, 11:36 AM
Another very exquisite piece of work with emotions laced in it so supremely. Dard shayri mein toh aap maahir thi hi, aur ab itni khoobsurti se ishq per likha hai ke bas.... dil ke har kone se wah wah hi nikalti hai.
My dear Salim... Main bahut khush hoon tumhara reply paa kar...kyunki tumne pehli baar mujhe kuch suggest kiya hai...sirf tareef hi nahin kee...agar janaab aap second page pe jaayein tau aapki suggestion ko humne nazar andaaz nahin kiya...iska suboot hamari edited reply mein mil jaayega...aur yaad rahe...yeh silsila ab zaari rehna chahiye... gayi ruton ka sulagataa sa intezaar bhii ho mere khuloos kaa andaaz ye bhii sachhaa hai rakhuun na rabt magar dostii shumaar bhii ho --Sayyidaa Fatimaa Hasan |
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16th August 2005, 11:43 AM
Too cute and too romantic...kya likha hai tumne...bahaut cute likha hai...dard mai likhne mai to aap maahir thee hi ishq pe bhi...wow...talented to hogi hi didi kiski ho...
Kabhi kabhi ishq pe bhi likha karo didi...bahaut acacha likha hai...loved reading each and every part... Arre waah! mehnat main karoon...aur number tum le jaao...kya baat hai tumhari...sure, kabhi kabhi...likhoongi...tumhara kaha na maan kar daant khaani hai tumse? tumhein achha laga na...bahut khushi huyi... gayi ruton ka sulagataa sa intezaar bhii ho mere khuloos kaa andaaz ye bhii sachhaa hai rakhuun na rabt magar dostii shumaar bhii ho --Sayyidaa Fatimaa Hasan |
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16th August 2005, 11:44 AM
Dear Paras ji.... wah.. huya kya jo tera yeh dil gaya...
bahot acche lage aap ke khyaal aur andaaz e bayaan... what a meaning ful... humhari daad kubul karna... yun hi likhte rehna aur khush rehna.......take care! haan parul... likhti rahoongi...gar tum padhti rahogi...aur khud bhi likhna zaari rakhogi... tum bhi khayaal rakho apna achhe se gayi ruton ka sulagataa sa intezaar bhii ho mere khuloos kaa andaaz ye bhii sachhaa hai rakhuun na rabt magar dostii shumaar bhii ho --Sayyidaa Fatimaa Hasan |
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16th August 2005, 11:47 AM
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tumhari di gayi ruton ka sulagataa sa intezaar bhii ho mere khuloos kaa andaaz ye bhii sachhaa hai rakhuun na rabt magar dostii shumaar bhii ho --Sayyidaa Fatimaa Hasan |
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16th August 2005, 11:59 AM
Ashok sahib namaskaar!
Aapko pehli baar dekha yahan...naye hain? tau hum hee aapka swagat karte hain iss pyaari see mehfil mein... rahi aapki daad kee baat tau janaab aapne jis tarah se mere kalaam ka dil hee kured kured ke baahar nikala hai...tau lagtaa hai ki badi shiddat se padha hai aapne ise... ye sab uss hi ki pahachan hai jo.... palko ke raste dhadkano se baatein karta hai aur iss tarah se tareef...humein tau lajawaab kar diya hai aapne...aapke jaise shayri ke shaukeen hon tau likhte bhi achha honge aap...hai na...aapke kalaam ka intezzaar rahega...post karne pe iktillaa zaroor kijieyegaa... shukriya, phir se, mujhe padhne ka, saraahne ka paras gayi ruton ka sulagataa sa intezaar bhii ho mere khuloos kaa andaaz ye bhii sachhaa hai rakhuun na rabt magar dostii shumaar bhii ho --Sayyidaa Fatimaa Hasan |
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16th August 2005, 11:59 AM
meri paras, hawa jab isqh ka rukh karti hai... to muje oos mai doobna jyada achha lagta hai.. ab doob rahi hu to tair k kinare to aane do... ek baar kinara to kar lu fir kuch kah paau... tumhari meena |
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16th August 2005, 12:13 PM
much luv to you muah
keep wriitng di i luved it i thikn its a mix os majburi, adhurapan, roamtnicness....kyamat hai bas LoL...priya... muah to you too...itta pasand aaya tumhein? tau isi lehje mein aage bhi likhne ki koshish karoongi... apna khayaal rakhna gayi ruton ka sulagataa sa intezaar bhii ho mere khuloos kaa andaaz ye bhii sachhaa hai rakhuun na rabt magar dostii shumaar bhii ho --Sayyidaa Fatimaa Hasan |
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16th August 2005, 12:55 PM
Arre hona kya hai Palak...
I was blessed! haan blessed with good imagination and writing skills...bus aur kuch nahin...lol gayi ruton ka sulagataa sa intezaar bhii ho mere khuloos kaa andaaz ye bhii sachhaa hai rakhuun na rabt magar dostii shumaar bhii ho --Sayyidaa Fatimaa Hasan |
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16th August 2005, 12:58 PM
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duubna achha lagta hai...ishq mein...hain...tau kaun kambakht rok raha hai aapko...kinaare pe aane ki zaroorat hee kya hai... lol...main tau waise bhi haath nahin dene waali...duubne doongi aapko...sach...promise...gayi ruton ka sulagataa sa intezaar bhii ho mere khuloos kaa andaaz ye bhii sachhaa hai rakhuun na rabt magar dostii shumaar bhii ho --Sayyidaa Fatimaa Hasan |
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