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ek koshish meri bhi... - 2nd August 2009, 04:35 PM

khwaab ke gaon mein pale hain hum,
paani channi mein le chale hain hum.

chaaj phoonkte hain ki apne bachpan mein,
doodh se kis taraah jale hain hum.

khud hai apne safar ki dushwaai,
apne hi pairon ke chaale hain hum.

tu to mat keh bura humien aye duniya,
tune dhaala hai aur dhale hain hum.

kyun hain?? kab tak hain?? kisski khatir hain??,
bade hi sanjeeda masle hain hum.

khwaab ke gaon mein pale haim hum ,
paani channi mein le chale hain hum .
   
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2nd August 2009, 04:52 PM

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khwaab ke gaon mein pale hain hum,
paani channi mein le chale hain hum.

chaaj phoonkte hain ki apne bachpan mein,
doodh se kis taraah jale hain hum.

khud hai apne safar ki dushwaai,
apne hi pairon ke chaale hain hum.

tu to mat keh bura humien aye duniya,
tune dhaala hai aur dhale hain hum.

kyun hain?? kab tak hain?? kisski khatir hain??,
bade hi sanjeeda masle hain hum.

khwaab ke gaon mein pale haim hum ,
paani channi mein le chale hain hum .
Wah Abeer Jii

aapki koshish to bahut khoob lagii.... behad gehre lage aapke Ahsaas, bahut khooB bahut umda........

yeh do sher to dil ko chu gaye behad sach lagii aapki yeh koshish..


khud hai apne safar ki dushwaai,
apne hi pairon ke chaale hain hum.

tu to mat keh bura humien aye duniya,
tune dhaala hai aur dhale hain hum.

likhati rahiye....
Khush rahiye...
Khuda Hafez...


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2nd August 2009, 06:36 PM


Bahut khub likha hai aapne..Abeer Bhai.....Gaon ke khwaabo ki mitti ki khushbu se upjee aapki rachna mujhe behudd pasand aai....

aapki in panktiyon se main bahut mutaasir hua....

kyun hain?? kab tak hain?? kisski khatir hain??,
bade hi sanjeeda masle hain hum.


aapka sdc mai welcome hai.....aise hi likhte rahiye....aur khush rahiye.....




YuuN Besabab Aansoo Aate NahiN
Lag Zaroor Koii Baat Dil Ko Rahii Hai ...

Fareb Kaa ChaDhtaa Bazaar Dekh
Insaaf Se Bastii Khaalii Ho Rahii Hai ...


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Bahut khub likha hai aapne..Abeer Bhai.....Gaon ke khwaabo ki mitti ki khushbu se upjee aapki rachna mujhe behudd pasand aai....
aapki in panktiyon se main bahut mutaasir hua....
kyun hain?? kab tak hain?? kisski khatir hain??,
bade hi sanjeeda masle hain hum.
aapka sdc mai welcome hai.....aise hi likhte rahiye....aur khush rahiye.....


haye Allah..i m not BHAI..please...mind it...ap SIS keh sakte ho...

thanks anyways for ur welcome..
   
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4th August 2009, 12:19 PM

tu to mat keh bura humien aye duniya,
tune dhaala hai aur dhale hain hum.


wahhhh..behad umda....daad haazir hai

kyun hain?? kab tak hain?? kisski khatir hain??,
bade hi sanjeeda masle hain hum.

gehre ehsaas..aisa maalum hota hai aapko zindagi ki samajh hai...yahan to aapne bahot uljhaneiN bataayi hai lekin aap suljhi hui hai

khwaab ke gaon mein pale haim hum ,
paani channi mein le chale hain hum

Abeer ji aapki yeh nazm mujhe bahot achi lagi..aur aap SDC pe aayi..hameiN bishaarat mil gayi..

apna khyaal rakhiyega...god bless u

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8th August 2009, 08:19 AM

thanks a lot for your wishes...i feel urdu is the best language..and this is really great that people over here use urdu...sach hai jo maza urdu mein hai wo aur zaban mein nahi...


shukriya janab...meri bhi urdu achi ho jaayegi aplogo ke beech..
   
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khwaab ke gaon mein pale hain hum,
paani channi mein le chale hain hum.

chaaj phoonkte hain ki apne bachpan mein,
doodh se kis taraah jale hain hum.

khud hai apne safar ki dushwaai,
apne hi pairon ke chaale hain hum.

tu to mat keh bura humien aye duniya,
tune dhaala hai aur dhale hain hum.


kyun hain?? kab tak hain?? kisski khatir hain??,
bade hi sanjeeda masle hain hum.

khwaab ke gaon mein pale haim hum ,
paani channi mein le chale hain hum .

bahot khub!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
dil ko chu gayein aap ke ehsaas
yuhi hi likhte rahiyen
shayad aap ko hum jante hai kisi aur site se
SDC par aap ka teh dil se swagat hai

Regards


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bahot khub!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
dil ko chu gayein aap ke ehsaas
yuhi hi likhte rahiyen
shayad aap ko hum jante hai kisi aur site se
SDC par aap ka teh dil se swagat hai

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Thanks..jee we know each other ...shukriya apke wishes ka...
   
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