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Dard di sugaat - 19th January 2008, 03:54 PM

dosto meri ek nimaani jehi koshish aap sab di nazar........


De ke menu dard diya.n sugaata.n,
aaj oh has ke alvidha kah geya,

si majboor na rok saki maiN usnu,
hawa vich bas hath lahraunda rah geya,

kade khaunda si soha.n mere vishvaas diya.n,
aj ohi jaunda jaunda bewaffa kah geya,

usdi kushi laye main har dard seene la leya,
esi bahane usde pyar da karz seero.n leh geya,

vagan.ge hanju kar chetey usdi har gal,
ena aakha.n vich har khaab adhoora rah geya,

hun koi v shayri usdi mere naam aauni nahi,
"Sunita" naam bas purane safiya.n te hi rah geya


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19th January 2008, 05:44 PM

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dosto meri ek nimaani jehi koshish aap sab di nazar........


De ke menu dard diya.n sugaata.n,
aaj oh has ke alvidha kah geya,

si majboor na rok saki maiN usnu,
hawa vich bas hath lahraunda rah geya,

kade khaunda si soha.n mere vishvaas diya.n,
aj ohi jaunda jaunda bewaffa kah geya,

usdi kushi laye main har dard seene la leya,
esi bahane usde pyar da karz seero.n leh geya,

vagan.ge hanju kar chetey usdi har gal,
ena aakha.n vich har khaab adhoora rah geya,

hun koi v shayri usdi mere naam aauni nahi,
"Sunita" naam bas purane safiya.n te hi rah geya

R. Sunita Ji...

Bahot sundar rachna likhi hai... Ehsaas nu kinni khoobsurti naal Shabad Jaal vich bunia hai... Ik ik Shabad dard hi dard naal bharia piya hai... Khoobsurat... Bahot hi khoobsuart...

Regards,

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Aasha ka Deep Jalaye Baitha HooN
Mann mein tujhe Basae Baitha HooN
Aana hai to jaldi aa E DosT,
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19th January 2008, 07:39 PM

Sach keha hai Rishi ji tusi.sach much bahut hi sohna likheya hai dard nu.it's really good.

usdi kushi laye main har dard seene la leya,
esi bahane usde pyar da karz seero.n leh geya
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wah wah.gr8.fir milde aa....................................
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gud job - 21st January 2008, 10:10 AM

sunita ji ssa ji.......thuadee poetry parhi lagda punjabi vich v maidaan maaronge.....bhut sohne ehsaasan nu bhut sohne dhang naal byaan kitta hai parh ke bhut sakoon mileya....rab thuadee kalam nu hor taqat bakshe....likhde raho.....raj........


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Bahut Khoob - 21st January 2008, 01:47 PM

Bahut khoob likhiya hai Sunita ji. Your poetry is maturing up day by day. It's beautifull. Ik gustaakhi kar rihaaN tuhadi aakhri line naal....

hun koi v shayri usdi mere naam aauni nahi,
"Sunita" naam bas purane safiya.n te hi rah geya


Eh agar is tarah hovey.....

hun koi v sukhan usda mere naam hona nahi,
"Sunita" naam bas purane safiya.n te hi rah geya


Wasdey raho

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ohhhhh rabb vasda ji tuhade dard vich.......mainu ta aa gya nzara pad k eh klaam.......thanx 4 nice poem .......keep it up
   
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5th February 2008, 11:41 PM

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dosto meri ek nimaani jehi koshish aap sab di nazar........


De ke menu dard diya.n sugaata.n,
aaj oh has ke alvidha kah geya,

si majboor na rok saki maiN usnu,
hawa vich bas hath lahraunda rah geya,

kade khaunda si soha.n mere vishvaas diya.n,
aj ohi jaunda jaunda bewaffa kah geya,

usdi kushi laye main har dard seene la leya,
esi bahane usde pyar da karz seero.n leh geya,

vagan.ge hanju kar chetey usdi har gal,
ena aakha.n vich har khaab adhoora rah geya,

hun koi v shayri usdi mere naam aauni nahi,
"Sunita" naam bas purane safiya.n te hi rah geya

wowww di aap punjabi main bhi likhti hainnnnn aaj parrha pehli baar bohat khoob di bohat ache se paish kia hai aapne yunhi likhti rahiye di khush rahain


Waqt ke jisam ki kharash hoon main
apne ander se pash pash hoon main
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14th February 2008, 05:04 PM

De ke menu dard diya.n sugaata.n,
aaj oh has ke alvidha kah geya,

bhut hi khoobsurt hai sorry sunita ji mein late reply kr skea , mein ta anjaan hi c es paunche hoe shyer to , bhut hi khoobsurt sunita ji. likhde rho te wasde rho
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Beautiful - 15th February 2008, 04:50 AM

Hi

I just wanted to say that I absolutely loved this. It was so beautiful and reminded me of something I went through years ago and still have the pain running deep somewhere. Keep writting, its awsome.

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bhut hi khoobsurt hai tuhadi poem sunita g , bhutb drd hai
   
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[quote=sunita virender;266554]dosto meri ek nimaani jehi koshish aap sab di nazar........


De ke menu dard diya.n sugaata.n,
aaj oh has ke alvidha kah geya,

si majboor na rok saki maiN usnu,
hawa vich bas hath lahraunda rah geya,

kade khaunda si soha.n mere vishvaas diya.n,
aj ohi jaunda jaunda bewaffa kah geya,

usdi kushi laye main har dard seene la leya,
esi bahane usde pyar da karz seero.n leh geya,

vagan.ge hanju kar chetey usdi har gal,
ena aakha.n vich har khaab adhoora rah geya,

hun koi v shayri usdi mere naam aauni nahi,
"Sunita" naam bas purane safiya.n te hi rah geya

SUNITA JI sachmuch bahut hi khoobsurat likheya hai tusi.jo tusi likhde ho oh aapne aap ch sampuran hunda hai.thx eni pyari rachna lai.
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R. Sunita Ji...

Bahot sundar rachna likhi hai... Ehsaas nu kinni khoobsurti naal Shabad Jaal vich bunia hai... Ik ik Shabad dard hi dard naal bharia piya hai... Khoobsurat... Bahot hi khoobsuart...

Regards,

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shukriya rishi jee..........


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Sach keha hai Rishi ji tusi.sach much bahut hi sohna likheya hai dard nu.it's really good.

usdi kushi laye main har dard seene la leya,
esi bahane usde pyar da karz seero.n leh geya
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wah wah.gr8.fir milde aa....................................
R.Sharma(Gazal)
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यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
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sunita ji ssa ji.......thuadee poetry parhi lagda punjabi vich v maidaan maaronge.....bhut sohne ehsaasan nu bhut sohne dhang naal byaan kitta hai parh ke bhut sakoon mileya....rab thuadee kalam nu hor taqat bakshe....likhde raho.....raj........
rajveer ji namaskaar

kyuN majaak karde ho, main te bas apne dil de ahsaasa.n nu tuhade sab naal sanjiya.n kardi haan......

te tuhade vargia.n shayra.n nu padke kuj housla kardi haan likhn da....
duava.n laye shukriya

tuhadi dost


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Bahut khoob likhiya hai Sunita ji. Your poetry is maturing up day by day. It's beautifull. Ik gustaakhi kar rihaaN tuhadi aakhri line naal....

hun koi v shayri usdi mere naam aauni nahi,
"Sunita" naam bas purane safiya.n te hi rah geya


Eh agar is tarah hovey.....

hun koi v sukhan usda mere naam hona nahi,
"Sunita" naam bas purane safiya.n te hi rah geya


Wasdey raho

tilak...

tilak ji namaskaar...........tusi bahut dhayaan naal padiya hai meri shayri nu....dil to shukriya

te tuhadi gustaakhi menu bahut vadiya lagi.....

aida hi saath dende rahna


kush raho te kushiya maande raho


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ohhhhh rabb vasda ji tuhade dard vich.......mainu ta aa gya nzara pad k eh klaam.......thanx 4 nice poem .......keep it up
ohhhhhhhhhh...........deep ji bahut bahut shukriya.....jab tuhade varge padan wale dost hon taan kalam apne aap chal pendi hai....bahut vadiya lagiya tuhada review padke...

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aree mani jaan.....maine punjabi mein kuch jayada to nahi likha hai....haan shuruyaat ki hai abhi....yoon hi aap sabka saath milta raha to jaroor yaha bhi thoda bahut naam ho hi jayega.....

kush raho
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De ke menu dard diya.n sugaata.n,
aaj oh has ke alvidha kah geya,

bhut hi khoobsurt hai sorry sunita ji mein late reply kr skea , mein ta anjaan hi c es paunche hoe shyer to , bhut hi khoobsurt sunita ji. likhde rho te wasde rho
preet jee namaskaar...............sorry wali koi gal nahi hai.....tusi menu padiya mere laye eh hi bahut hai, te padke aina pyara jeha review ditta.....thanks a lot preet jee

kush raho te kushiya.n maande raho


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I just wanted to say that I absolutely loved this. It was so beautiful and reminded me of something I went through years ago and still have the pain running deep somewhere. Keep writting, its awsome.

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dost..............tuhada review padke mere kol kuj nahi reha ki maiN tuhade ahsaasa.n da kuj jawaab deva............mera likhya padke tusi ateet (past) vich chale gaye....maaf karna dost....jaandi haan ki puraniya.n yaadd.n bahut jaanleva hundiya.n ne.

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shukriya Raghav jee


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perfect dear
mindblowing.great job
Roop jee....sab to phela te menu eh daso ki tusi aine din laye kithe gayab ho gaye c, bahut dina baad tuhanu SDC te dekh rahi haan.....aaunde reha karo

shukriya, aida hi housla dende rahna, taaki main kuj na kuj likhn da housla kardi rahaN

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dosto meri ek nimaani jehi koshish aap sab di nazar........


De ke menu dard diya.n sugaata.n,
aaj oh has ke alvidha kah geya,

si majboor na rok saki maiN usnu,
hawa vich bas hath lahraunda rah geya,

kade khaunda si soha.n mere vishvaas diya.n,
aj ohi jaunda jaunda bewaffa kah geya,

usdi kushi laye main har dard seene la leya,
esi bahane usde pyar da karz seero.n leh geya,

vagan.ge hanju kar chetey usdi har gal,
ena aakha.n vich har khaab adhoora rah geya,

hun koi v shayri usdi mere naam aauni nahi,
"Sunita" naam bas purane safiya.n te hi rah geya

SUNITA JI sachmuch bahut hi khoobsurat likheya hai tusi.jo tusi likhde ho oh aapne aap ch sampuran hunda hai.thx eni pyari rachna lai.

Babbu ji tuhada v dil to shukriya, jo tusi menu aine pyar naal padiya, te es adna jehi kavish te aina sanmaan bakshiya.

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dosto meri ek nimaani jehi koshish aap sab di nazar........


De ke menu dard diya.n sugaata.n,
aaj oh has ke alvidha kah geya,

si majboor na rok saki maiN usnu,
hawa vich bas hath lahraunda rah geya,

kade khaunda si soha.n mere vishvaas diya.n,
aj ohi jaunda jaunda bewaffa kah geya,

usdi kushi laye main har dard seene la leya,
esi bahane usde pyar da karz seero.n leh geya,

vagan.ge hanju kar chetey usdi har gal,
ena aakha.n vich har khaab adhoora rah geya,

hun koi v shayri usdi mere naam aauni nahi,
"Sunita" naam bas purane safiya.n te hi rah geya
7 saalan baad nazar payi te main haale tak dil nu samjhauna chaunda ki eh gal sach nai ha, Didi tuhade dil diyaa cheekha goonj rahiya ne kan'ch hun tak...bahut sona likhya tusi ta mere athruu rukan da nau nahi le rahe...

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Sunita ji ,

Tuhadee ek puranee punjabee kavita paree , bahut hee kamal da likhiya theth punjabi vich tusee .. aine doonge ehasaas per ke tuhade vichore nu main baree kolon mehsoon keeta ..
bada changa lagiya per ke tuhadi 7 saal purani kavita.. do lina meri tarfon tuhadee nazar ..

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Wow that was so nicely said... Keep writing 😊
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Sunita ji ,

Tuhadee ek puranee punjabee kavita paree , bahut hee kamal da likhiya theth punjabi vich tusee .. aine doonge ehasaas per ke tuhade vichore nu main baree kolon mehsoon keeta ..
bada changa lagiya per ke tuhadi 7 saal purani kavita.. do lina meri tarfon tuhadee nazar ..

Hun reha vi nahi janda, te seha vi nahi Janda,
Vichora apne preetam da.


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