Har Kisi Ki Tarha!!!! ~~~~~~~

shayri12345 · **Har Kisi Ki Tarha!!!! ~~~~~~~ -** 13th January 2003, 11:05 AM

DOSTO PESH HAI KUCH JASBAAT E DIL.....AAPKE NAZRAANE....

DIl diya jisey humney,
Vo bhi nikley har kisi ki tarha !

Pyar dhikhta tha jin aankhon mein,
Unhone bhi dekha hame nafrat ki tarha !

'Mere dil ki awaaz vo sun na sake'
'Tuut gaye hum bas ik khiloney ki tarha' !

''Mehsus karne ko kuch baaki na raha''
''Reh gaye hum ik Laash ki tarha'' !!

'''Kabhi ban gaye apne aur kabhi begaane'''
''''Meri zindagi ko liya unhone ik Khel ki tarha''''

'''''Socha tha kuch der vo saath chalainge''''''
'''''par unhone bhi chod diya HAR KISI KI TARHA ''''' !!!!!!

Priya.........

Ishiqka · **priya ji -** 13th January 2003, 11:28 AM

hi, how r u? hey this is great work. u write really well and u teach a lot of new stuff as u write day by day. i hope u continue to write. something in return:

Dil ke vaad'he nibhate nehi kuch log'h
Pyaar karne waloN ke saath jate nehi yeh log'h
Nafraat jo baan jati hai dost unki
wafa ko dil se lagate nehi kuch log'h

take care of urself and others
love
Ishiqka

shayri12345 · 13th January 2003, 11:36 AM

dearest Ishika, am fine and hope same for u ? ishikka what u wrote is amazing ki log saath nahi nibhate....saath nahi jaate real nice....and true..i write jus anything over ming and heart and since u friends like it...reply here...read it....it makes me write more often ...and mujhe bhi aap sabke reply ka intzaar rehta hai

thanks kahu to bhi kam hai

tumne sahi kaha ye log saath nahi jaate
kasme vaadey ye nahi nibhate
is karke hi sabka dil tutta sa lagta hai
raaton me bhi yaha koyi aansu bahakar jagta hai

Luv Priya..

Bijili · 13th January 2003, 11:44 AM

Priya,

Saath aapki milegi kisi naseeb walaa ko ,
Kyon chahthe ho woh ho "har kisi ki tarha"
Sabse woh juda hoga, sirf aape woh fida hoga,
kahenge fir aap, woh nahin "har kisi ki tarha".

Hope to hear that oneday, rememebr me on that day

Good luck,
Bijili

shayri12345 · **hehe -** 13th January 2003, 11:54 AM

hehehhe bijali ji aapne to hame hasa diya kasam se....i hope the same and even more for u ...luv ya Millions

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aap sab se kuch ajab sa rishta banta jaa raha hai..kabhi kabhi darr sa lagta hai...par dil me aap sab ki duayain mujhe behad khushi deti hai kasam se....

aapne soch badal di kehkar phir hum kahainge vo nahi hai ""har kisi ki tarha ""
luv ya

Priya

))))

romana · **hi -** 13th January 2003, 06:31 PM

vow

u r doing great these days keep it up

kaash main bi likhna seekh loon well aata to hain magar main sirf apne liye likhte hoon u know khud garaz ho jaati hoon but i learn alot form u and everyone else around here. aap logoon ki mehfil main jab se shaamil hove hain shayri zindagi ka hisa ban gai hain

keep on writing+ smiling

take care bye,

luv
romana

Sharaabi · 13th January 2003, 07:50 PM

Chalo ab koii formalities nahiiN.
Iska Radif hai 'ki tarha' lekin is meiN kaafiyaa (rhyming-pattern) nazar nahiiN aa raha..
Achaaii to sab kar rahe haiN, aur haaN sach meiN aapne acha likha hai!
Well, last thing is that it's missing a "MATLA.."

Likhte rahiye,
Aman

romana · **hi -** 13th January 2003, 09:36 PM

i want to ask u sumthing
wots a matla

bye

Sharaabi · 13th January 2003, 10:26 PM

The first "Sher" of the Ghazal is the Matla, better explained - I will show you a quick example by: Sudarshan Faakir

"Gam ba.De aate hai.n qaatil kii nigaaho.n kii tarah
tum chhipaa lo mujhe, ae dost, gunaaho.n kii tarah

apanii nazaro.n me.n gunaahagaar na hote, kyo.n kar
dil hii dushman hai.n muKhaalif ke gvaaho.n kii tarah"

Ok, you see the "ki tarah" is repeated.. and the matla are first two lines of the ghazal, and it's a MUST that both have a word which rhymes. In the example, the words which rhyme in MATLA, would be "NigaahoN, and GunaahoN"

Priya ji, gar aap buura maan rahe ho to maaf ki jiye - maiN aapki thread meiN baar baar post kar raha huuN

Aman

shayri12345 · **thanks -** 14th January 2003, 09:47 AM

dear sanjoo ji welcome to my mehfil hehe....thanks for the nice words i am for real honored

what u said touched my herat ab kisi mehfil me dil nahi lagta =) how ssweet...be by my side like this always...aapki bahut jarurat hai is nachezz ko

luv Priya.
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dear romana sis
how u doing? areey aap itni tarrif na kariye...aapka reply hi aisa hota hai ki aage aur kya kahu shabd nahhi miltey

aap sab itna pasand karte hai ...yahi reason hai hum aaj tak is mehfil me zinda hai..app sabki badolat so thats why all the credit to all this goes to u

luv Priya
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Hi aman shahab! wuts up? thanks that u liked this small koshish...and more thanks for teaching the matla and everything

also thanks to romana jii for asking and making me learn too!

Luv Priya
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Ursfoeva · **hii -** 24th February 2003, 05:52 AM

sach mein bahut achaa likha hai...

as i told i have no more words to describe ur shayri.
U ALWAYZ WRITE GOOD

luv riddhi

shayri12345 · **hi -** 27th February 2003, 02:04 AM

hey there riddhi ji hey yaar aap to jyada hi tarif kar rahe ho...thse aare jus feelings and since u likethe feelings of mine..i am for real honored from my hrt
thanks
Luv Priya