hum ga na sake

[vaishali]

waqt ga raha tha raag,
hum hi geet ga na sake,

bun raha tha kai sare khawab
hum unhe aankhon par saja na sake,

roye hain is qadar apne halaat par,
rona bhi chaha to ek aansoo baha na sake

dil ne to ki khwahish hazaron bar ,
hum chah ke bhi kuch na chah sake ,

manzil thi bas ek hath ke fasle par,
hum hath tak badha na sake ,

ghum ki adat hui hai kuch is qAdar ,
muskarana bhi chaha to muskra na sake.
................................vaishali

[redtears_ocean]

nice keep writing yu.nhi likhte rahiyeh,,,,,,

[Praneeta]

Originally Posted by vaishali

waqt ga raha tha raag,
hum hi geet ga na sake,

bun raha tha kai sare khawab
hum unhe aankhon par saja na sake,

roye hain is qadar apne halaat par,
rona bhi chaha to ek aansoo baha na sake

dil ne to ki khwahish hazaron bar ,
hum chah ke bhi kuch na chah sake ,

manzil thi bas ek hath ke fasle par,
hum hath tak badha na sake ,

ghum ki adat hui hai kuch is qAdar ,
muskarana bhi chaha to muskra na sake.
................................vaishali

bahot khub Vaishali ji
keep up.......................keep writing n smiling
Regards
Praneeta

[san04]

vaishali ji
apke jazbaat kabil-e-tareef hain..! aj apko parha to apne shuruati din yad aa gaye..! apke matla agar yun hota to ye gazal.. bahut acchi aur technical point se sahi hoti..main hi koshish kerti hoon...aap plz..bura mut maniyega..,

waqt ke raag hum ga na sake
gumo ke geet hum suna na sake
...take care and dont mind plz....keep it up..!urs feelings r great and heart touching...

[eliyas]

Vaishali ji,
bahot ache ehsas hai, keep writing, take care, bye