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Uski Har "Uff" pe hum apni jaan lutate rahe -
24th July 2009, 05:48 PM
Hi Doston,
Bahut dino baad aaj kuch likhne ka maan kiya, toh yeh ek poem likhi hai, par jane kyun aaj dil ko likhne ke baad bhi tassalli nahi mili, aisa lagta hai jaise kuch adhura sa hai................ toh agar koi khami nazar aaye toh zarur bataiyega.........toh lijiye pesh-e-khidmat hai...
Uski Har "Uff" pe hum apni jaan lutate rahe
Uski Har "Uff" pe hum apni jaan lutate rahe,
Uski Shaqsiyat ko karke buland hum khudko mitate rahe,
Raahe-e-mohobbat me hamne kuch yun paya sila wafa ka,
woh dete rahe zakhm pe zakhm aur ham muskurate rahe
apni muskurahaton ko uski hansi me milate rahe,
uske har gam ko apni aankhon se bahate rahe,
dete rahe usko khushiyaan do jahan ki,
bas apne hissay har gam likhwate rahe
udake neend apni aankhon se uske khwaab sajate rahe,
khoke chain din ka usay qarar pahuchate rahe,
nibhate nibhate mohhobbat jab maan liya usay apna,
bas usi pal se woh har lamha hame thukraate rahe
Uski mohobbat me ham apni abroo lutate rahe
jhukte rahe ham aur woh hame aur jhukate rahe,
Sar-e-baazar banake tamasha meri mohobbat ka,
Woh duniya bhar ke saath chok pe muskuraate rahe.....
Apka
Nalin
Nalin
Uski Har "Uff" pe hum apni jaan lutate rahe,
Uski Shaqsiyat ko karke buland hum khudko mitate rahe,
Raahe-e-mohobbat me hamne kuch yun paya sila wafa ka,
woh dete rahe zakhm pe zakhm aur ham muskurate rahe
Please Honor me and my creative writing by visitng my website @ www.nalin-mehra.blogspot.com
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24th July 2009, 06:02 PM
Nanil Bhai........Mohabbat mai yeh sab toh chalta hi rehta hai......roothe ko manane ka silsila purana hai......khair aapki poem ke ehsaas bahut pasand aaye mujhe.....dard ka bhi pata chalta hai.......aur takraar ka bhi.........aise hi likhte rahiye......aur bazm ki ronak badhate rahiye..........
YuuN Besabab Aansoo Aate NahiN
Lag Zaroor Koii Baat Dil Ko Rahii Hai ...
Fareb Kaa ChaDhtaa Bazaar Dekh
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24th July 2009, 06:05 PM
Naresh Bhai,
aapne poem ko pada, mujhe bahut accha alaga, par iss bar meri poem woh jazbaat bayan nahi kar paayi, jo pichli "uff" ne kiya tha.......... kya karun mhobbat ka "Unns" ka hota hi aisa hai ki aacha khasa aadmi shayar ho jaata hai aur aacha khasa shayar ek mamooli insaan hoke reh jaata hai..........
bahraal, apne poem ko pada, usi ke liye apka bahutbahut dhanyawaad....
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Originally Posted by naresh_mehra110
Nanil Bhai........Mohabbat mai yeh sab toh chalta hi rehta hai......roothe ko manane ka silsila purana hai......khair aapki poem ke ehsaas bahut pasand aaye mujhe.....dard ka bhi pata chalta hai.......aur takraar ka bhi.........aise hi likhte rahiye......aur bazm ki ronak badhate rahiye..........
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Nalin
Uski Har "Uff" pe hum apni jaan lutate rahe,
Uski Shaqsiyat ko karke buland hum khudko mitate rahe,
Raahe-e-mohobbat me hamne kuch yun paya sila wafa ka,
woh dete rahe zakhm pe zakhm aur ham muskurate rahe
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24th July 2009, 06:11 PM
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Hi Doston,
Bahut dino baad aaj kuch likhne ka maan kiya, toh yeh ek poem likhi hai, par jane kyun aaj dil ko likhne ke baad bhi tassalli nahi mili, aisa lagta hai jaise kuch adhura sa hai................ toh agar koi khami nazar aaye toh zarur bataiyega.........toh lijiye pesh-e-khidmat hai...
Uski Har "Uff" pe hum apni jaan lutate rahe
Uski Har "Uff" pe hum apni jaan lutate rahe,
Uski Shaqsiyat ko karke buland hum khudko mitate rahe,
Raahe-e-mohobbat me hamne kuch yun paya sila wafa ka,
woh dete rahe zakhm pe zakhm aur ham muskurate rahe
apni muskurahaton ko uski hansi me milate rahe,
uske har gam ko apni aankhon se bahate rahe,
dete rahe usko khushiyaan do jahan ki,
bas apne hissay har gam likhwate rahe
udake neend apni aankhon se uske khwaab sajate rahe,
khoke chain din ka usay qarar pahuchate rahe,
nibhate nibhate mohhobbat jab maan liya usay apna,
bas usi pal se woh har lamha hame thukraate rahe
Uski mohobbat me ham apni abroo lutate rahe
jhukte rahe ham aur woh hame aur jhukate rahe,
Sar-e-baazar banake tamasha meri mohobbat ka,
Woh duniya bhar ke saath chok pe muskuraate rahe.....
Apka
Nalin
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Wah nalin ji, bahut khoob likha h aap ne,
mujhe pehli char lines bahut pasand aai
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24th July 2009, 06:14 PM
Thank You Shipra ji, yakeen maniye me apse puri tarah sehmat hun........... is baar poem ko mukammal nahi kar paaya main....... phir bhi is poem ko padne aur sehen karne ka shukriya.......
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Originally Posted by shipra
Wah nalin ji, bahut khoob likha h aap ne,
mujhe pehli char lines bahut pasand aai
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Nalin
Uski Har "Uff" pe hum apni jaan lutate rahe,
Uski Shaqsiyat ko karke buland hum khudko mitate rahe,
Raahe-e-mohobbat me hamne kuch yun paya sila wafa ka,
woh dete rahe zakhm pe zakhm aur ham muskurate rahe
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25th July 2009, 07:55 AM
Ab Kisi ki "Uff" ko ham na dil se lagayenge,
Ab kisi ke lafzon pe na ham gazhal banayenge,
har muskurahat ke badle diya hai gam aisa,
ab chahe ke bhi ham na muskura paayenge..
Nalin
Uski Har "Uff" pe hum apni jaan lutate rahe,
Uski Shaqsiyat ko karke buland hum khudko mitate rahe,
Raahe-e-mohobbat me hamne kuch yun paya sila wafa ka,
woh dete rahe zakhm pe zakhm aur ham muskurate rahe
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25th July 2009, 08:03 AM
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Raahe-e-mohobbat me hamne kuch yun paya sila wafa ka,
woh dete rahe zakhm pe zakhm aur ham muskurate rahe
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sach kaha hai....
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Sar-e-baazar banake tamasha meri mohobbat ka,
Woh duniya bhar ke saath chok pe muskuraate rahe.....
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Is sher ko pad ..kuch poorani yaadein taaza hui....hota hai....yahi hota hai.... jaalim khuda ki banayi mohabbat ka tamasha bana kush hote hain...
accha likha hai aapne...
Rabb Raakha.........
**(*·.¸(`·.¸ ¸.·´)¸.·*)**
*·.¸Paigaam -e- Aman¸.·*
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inhan ankhaaon vicho kadi, tere hanju vaghe si.....
aaj ki hoye, jehda ^AMAN^ da lahoo vagda ae......
AMAN RAHI
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25th July 2009, 08:11 AM
Aman bhai jaan,
aaj mere liye behad khushi ka din hai, ki aap jaise itne senior SDC member ne, mere thread pe shirkat ki, aur meri tareef me itna sab kaha, apka kaise shukriya ada karun, mere pass alfaaz nahi..............
bahut bahut meherbaani apki........
Raab Raakha.......
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Originally Posted by Aman_rahi
sach kaha hai....
Is sher ko pad ..kuch poorani yaadein taaza hui....hota hai....yahi hota hai.... jaalim khuda ki banayi mohabbat ka tamasha bana kush hote hain...
accha likha hai aapne...
Rabb Raakha.........
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Nalin
Uski Har "Uff" pe hum apni jaan lutate rahe,
Uski Shaqsiyat ko karke buland hum khudko mitate rahe,
Raahe-e-mohobbat me hamne kuch yun paya sila wafa ka,
woh dete rahe zakhm pe zakhm aur ham muskurate rahe
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25th July 2009, 04:18 PM
Nalin Jii......
Bhai aapki Uff wali poem ne jitna dil khushiyon ki rahat dilayi thi, Aaj bhi yaad hai...
Magar Yeh Uff wali uske ulat .......... Dard bayan kar rahi hai... jitni muskaan uss Uff ne bekheri thi hotoN per utne aansu bhi is Uff ne laye hai palkoN per...
Wakai dard bhari poem rahi yeh aapki..
yeh stanza.. Bahut sachcha laga.....
udake neend apni aankhon se uske khwaab sajate rahe,
khoke chain din ka usay qarar pahuchate rahe,
nibhate nibhate mohhobbat jab maan liya usay apna,
bas usi pal se woh har lamha hame thukraate rahe
Yeh Ahsaas hai bayani ke to thik hai......
Aapki real life mein aisa na ho yehi dua karunga..
Khush rahiye likhate rahiye..
Khuda Hafez...
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25th July 2009, 04:34 PM
Gulshan ki faqat phoolon se nahi. kaanton se bhi zeenatein hoti hain,
jeene ke liye is duniya me, gam ki bhi zaruratein hoti hain........
sameer bhai, bator shayar, apki daad kubool karta hun, apne samay nikla kar meri "uff" ko pada, apka bahut bahut shukriya.......aur ehsaason ko bayan karne ke liye, un ehsaason ko jeena padta hai, ya yun kahun ki ehsaason ke saath marna padta hai....................
woh kehte hai na, ki har gazhal khare sone ke saman hoti hai,
jab kisi shayar ka dil jalta hai, aur uske ehsaas tapte hain tab ek gazhal paida hoti hai.............
sach hi kaha hai, jisne bhi kaha hai.......
apka bahut bahut shukriya sameer bhai jaan.......
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Nalin Jii......
Bhai aapki Uff wali poem ne jitna dil khushiyon ki rahat dilayi thi, Aaj bhi yaad hai...
Magar Yeh Uff wali uske ulat .......... Dard bayan kar rahi hai... jitni muskaan uss Uff ne bekheri thi hotoN per utne aansu bhi is Uff ne laye hai palkoN per...
Wakai dard bhari poem rahi yeh aapki..
yeh stanza.. Bahut sachcha laga.....
udake neend apni aankhon se uske khwaab sajate rahe,
khoke chain din ka usay qarar pahuchate rahe,
nibhate nibhate mohhobbat jab maan liya usay apna,
bas usi pal se woh har lamha hame thukraate rahe
Yeh Ahsaas hai bayani ke to thik hai......
Aapki real life mein aisa na ho yehi dua karunga..
Khush rahiye likhate rahiye..
Khuda Hafez...
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Nalin
Uski Har "Uff" pe hum apni jaan lutate rahe,
Uski Shaqsiyat ko karke buland hum khudko mitate rahe,
Raahe-e-mohobbat me hamne kuch yun paya sila wafa ka,
woh dete rahe zakhm pe zakhm aur ham muskurate rahe
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27th July 2009, 12:18 AM
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Aman bhai jaan,
aaj mere liye behad khushi ka din hai, ki aap jaise itne senior SDC member ne, mere thread pe shirkat ki, aur meri tareef me itna sab kaha, apka kaise shukriya ada karun, mere pass alfaaz nahi..............
bahut bahut meherbaani apki........
Raab Raakha.......
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Nalin Mehra Ji,
ye to aapne hadd se jayada taarif kar di... aapki thereer pasand aayi...usme ehsaas chalke...koi banavatipan nahi hai...aur zindagi ki haqiqat ki banayi... yahi kahoonga ki likhte rahiye...kaafi gehre ehsaas hain....
Rabb Raakha........
**(*·.¸(`·.¸ ¸.·´)¸.·*)**
*·.¸Paigaam -e- Aman¸.·*
**(¸.·´(¸.·* *·.¸)`·.¸)**
~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*
inhan ankhaaon vicho kadi, tere hanju vaghe si.....
aaj ki hoye, jehda ^AMAN^ da lahoo vagda ae......
AMAN RAHI
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27th July 2009, 12:59 AM
Nalin jee
bahut khoob likha hai aapne
mohabaat ke rang hai aneek ....
likhte rahye
take care
mandeep
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Originally Posted by nalinmehra
Hi Doston,
Bahut dino baad aaj kuch likhne ka maan kiya, toh yeh ek poem likhi hai, par jane kyun aaj dil ko likhne ke baad bhi tassalli nahi mili, aisa lagta hai jaise kuch adhura sa hai................ toh agar koi khami nazar aaye toh zarur bataiyega.........toh lijiye pesh-e-khidmat hai...
Uski Har "Uff" pe hum apni jaan lutate rahe
Uski Har "Uff" pe hum apni jaan lutate rahe,
Uski Shaqsiyat ko karke buland hum khudko mitate rahe,
Raahe-e-mohobbat me hamne kuch yun paya sila wafa ka,
woh dete rahe zakhm pe zakhm aur ham muskurate rahe
apni muskurahaton ko uski hansi me milate rahe,
uske har gam ko apni aankhon se bahate rahe,
dete rahe usko khushiyaan do jahan ki,
bas apne hissay har gam likhwate rahe
udake neend apni aankhon se uske khwaab sajate rahe,
khoke chain din ka usay qarar pahuchate rahe,
nibhate nibhate mohhobbat jab maan liya usay apna,
bas usi pal se woh har lamha hame thukraate rahe
Uski mohobbat me ham apni abroo lutate rahe
jhukte rahe ham aur woh hame aur jhukate rahe,
Sar-e-baazar banake tamasha meri mohobbat ka,
Woh duniya bhar ke saath chok pe muskuraate rahe.....
Apka
Nalin
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27th July 2009, 10:51 AM
Aman Bhai Jaan,
bas apki dua rahi toh yunhi likhta rahunga, aur zindagi ke halaton ko hi aksar aadmi apni kavitaon me likhta hai........... toh me bhi juda nahi, bas koi ehsaas dil me aaya, toh usay yunhi bayan kar diya..........
apka bahut bahut shukriya
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Originally Posted by Aman_rahi
Nalin Mehra Ji,
ye to aapne hadd se jayada taarif kar di... aapki thereer pasand aayi...usme ehsaas chalke...koi banavatipan nahi hai...aur zindagi ki haqiqat ki banayi... yahi kahoonga ki likhte rahiye...kaafi gehre ehsaas hain....
Rabb Raakha........
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Nalin
Uski Har "Uff" pe hum apni jaan lutate rahe,
Uski Shaqsiyat ko karke buland hum khudko mitate rahe,
Raahe-e-mohobbat me hamne kuch yun paya sila wafa ka,
woh dete rahe zakhm pe zakhm aur ham muskurate rahe
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27th July 2009, 10:52 AM
mandeep ji,
tareef ke liye bahut shukriya, apki dua rahi toh yunhi likhta rahunga.....
kavita padhne ka behad shukriya.........
apka dost
Nalin
Nalin
Uski Har "Uff" pe hum apni jaan lutate rahe,
Uski Shaqsiyat ko karke buland hum khudko mitate rahe,
Raahe-e-mohobbat me hamne kuch yun paya sila wafa ka,
woh dete rahe zakhm pe zakhm aur ham muskurate rahe
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27th July 2009, 04:54 PM
bahut sundar peshkash hai ye aapki nalin jii..
mujhe bahut pasand aayi..
aise hi likh ke mehfil roshan karte rahiye..
khush rahiye...
god bless u
vicky
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27th July 2009, 05:08 PM
Vicky bhai,
tareef ke liye shukriya, apne is poem ko padhne ke liye waqt nikala, apka bahut bahut shukriya...............
reps++ ke liye apka dhanyawaad....
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bahut sundar peshkash hai ye aapki nalin jii..
mujhe bahut pasand aayi..
aise hi likh ke mehfil roshan karte rahiye..
khush rahiye...
god bless u
vicky
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Nalin
Uski Har "Uff" pe hum apni jaan lutate rahe,
Uski Shaqsiyat ko karke buland hum khudko mitate rahe,
Raahe-e-mohobbat me hamne kuch yun paya sila wafa ka,
woh dete rahe zakhm pe zakhm aur ham muskurate rahe
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27th July 2009, 05:23 PM
maine kaha tha do bund pani de do mujko
usne aansoo ka samandar baha diya
ehesaas e dard
meri ehi khwahish hai ki aap ko is gali mein fir na dekhun
aapki dost
Diya
Mohabbat ke baad mohabbat mumkin hai faraz.
Magar toot ke chahna sirf ek baar hota hai
Goodbye SDC
Diya
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27th July 2009, 09:35 PM
diya ji, duaon ke liye behad shukriya...................
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maine kaha tha do bund pani de do mujko
usne aansoo ka samandar baha diya
ehesaas e dard
meri ehi khwahish hai ki aap ko is gali mein fir na dekhun
aapki dost
Diya
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Nalin
Uski Har "Uff" pe hum apni jaan lutate rahe,
Uski Shaqsiyat ko karke buland hum khudko mitate rahe,
Raahe-e-mohobbat me hamne kuch yun paya sila wafa ka,
woh dete rahe zakhm pe zakhm aur ham muskurate rahe
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