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Ghazal - Ek patThar ko yuuN Khuda karke - 4th June 2004, 11:57 PM

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Arsa-e-taveel ke baa'd haazir ho raha huuN. Kaam ki masruufiyaat aur chand haalaat ne kuch kehne aur is mehfil meN ziyadah waqt dene ka mauqa hi nahiiN diya. Baharhaal maa'zrat chaahte hue ye halki-phulki si ghazal pesh kar raha huuN.
Apni aaraa se zaruur nawaziyega.
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Ek patThar ko yuuN Khuda karke
Kya milaa aisa tajarba karke

Dard baRhta gaya davaa karke
Lmaha-lamha, zara-zara karke

Ban gayii baddua Khushi wo hi
Jis ko maanga kiye dua karke

ZaKhm khaaye baRe-baRe hamne
Uss sey choti sii ilteja karke

Zindagi aazmaye jii bharke
Hum bhi nikle haiN hosla karke

Raaste meN yaqiiN mila lekin
Wo bhi jaata raha dagha karke

Sirf yaadeN hi humne paayii haiN
Bhool jaane ka faisla karke

Usski raahoN ka ruKh agar karna
ZaKhm khaane ka hosla karke

Yaad rakhna bhalaii auroN ki
Bhuul jaana magar bahala karke

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Re: Ghazal - Ek patThar ko yuuN Khuda karke - 5th June 2004, 12:09 AM

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Aziizaan-e-mehfil

Arsa-e-taveel ke baa'd haazir ho raha huuN. Kaam ki masruufiyaat aur chand haalaat ne kuch kehne aur is mehfil meN ziyadah waqt dene ka mauqa hi nahiiN diya. Baharhaal maa'zrat chaahte hue ye halki-phulki si ghazal pesh kar raha huuN.
Apni aaraa se zaruur nawaziyega.
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GHAZAL

Ek patThar ko yuuN Khuda karke
Kya milaa aisa tajarba karke

Dard baRhta gaya davaa karke
Lmaha-lamha, zara-zara karke

Ban gayii baddua Khushi wo hi
Jis ko maanga kiye dua karke

ZaKhm khaaye baRe-baRe hamne
Uss sey choti sii ilteja karke

Zindagi aazmaye jii bharke
Hum bhi nikle haiN hosla karke

Raaste meN yaqiiN mila lekin
Wo bhi jaata raha dagha karke

Sirf yaadeN hi humne paayii haiN
Bhool jaane ka faisla karke

Usski raahoN ka ruKh agar karna
ZaKhm khaane ka hosla karke

Yaad rakhna bhalaii auroN ki
Bhuul jaana magar bahala karke

Khaaksaar
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tumhe jab bhi padhhti hu... pasand to karti hu par taarif karna nahi ban paata mujse...
ek ek shere jaise ek ek moti.... inse jo mala bani ooski kya taarif karu?
kabhi sochti hu... tumse hi kyun n likhwa lu taarif bhi..... lol
sabhi shere pasand aaye par dil ki gharaai maie jo sabse jyada ootra.......

Raaste meN yaqiiN mila lekin
Wo bhi jaata raha dagha karke

aksar yah dard aas -paas mandrata nazar aaya hai muje bhi.... dard ki maano inthiha ho gayi yaha aa kar... kya haal ho jab yakin, dagae maie badal jaaye...

Sirf yaadeN hi humne paayii haiN
Bhool jaane ka faisla karke

ufff... kya kahu....?
ek umre se bhulaya jise
wahi ghum aaj oobharta kyun hai..

is dost ki taarif kubul karna....... saari gajal bahetareen.

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5th June 2004, 11:25 AM

Yaad rakhna bhalaii auroN ki
Bhuul jaana magar bahala karke

Praveen ji,

Pata nahi kyu, ye sher behad pasand aaya! Zindagi jeene ka waise ye bohat hi baRiya tareeka hai.. dil ko sukuun milta hai aisa karne se.. doosroN ki ghalatiyaan mauf karke, unhe bhulaa kar, humaare jazbaat unke liye kabhi bure nahi hote.. aur jab hum khud doosroN ke liye bhala karein, to unki nazar me apna ek makaam ban jaata hai.... is tarah zindagi ki raahon me chalne se sirf aman baRta hai... Bohat khoob! Waise to aapke khayaal, aapki soch aur aapka bayaan humesha hi behtareen hota hai.. Chhoti si tareef kubool kijiyega..


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7th June 2004, 04:33 PM

Bohat khoob saxena saheb

aap kam kam yahan aate hain magar jab bhi aate hain apne khoobsurat likhayee ke unmit naqoosh naqsh ker dete hain.
her shayr lajawab aur pur asr hai.
meri bharpoor daad aap ke liye saxena saheb
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God bless you.

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hello - 7th June 2004, 05:27 PM

Praveen ji,

Bahut dino baad aapki koi rachana padh raha hoon. bahut achchhi lag rahi hai aapki ghzal.. her ek sher mein inspiration chhipa hua hai ..bahut khub..


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7th June 2004, 07:45 PM

prasaxena...SahaaB.....Namaste,

Hosla kar raha hu....ap ko daad dene ka....umid hai ap kabul karenge....sanju naachiz se daad
Purii ghazal....apni baat kehane mai.....safal huii haii....mujh jaise insaan ko aasanii se samjh aagayii aur jo bat aasanii se samjh aajaye woh sach mai asar rakhtii hai....shukriyaa iise hum sab kai bich baatne ka.....

Usski raahoN ka ruKh agar karna
ZaKhm khaane ka hosla karke

Ijazat Sanju ko!


Jindagi se to khair shikvaa tha,

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Re: Re: Ghazal - Ek patThar ko yuuN Khuda karke - 7th June 2004, 11:27 PM

meena Dost

reply meN deri ke liye muafi chahta huuN.
Is ghazal par tumne likh diya smeri koshish kamyaab rahi.
Waise bhi tareef karne ka tumhara andaaz bhi to apne aap meN ek alag hi baat hai. Phir bhi jis tafseel se tumne daad di hai uske liye bohat bohat shukria

Khush raho
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mere BIG BUSY DOST,

tumhe jab bhi padhhti hu... pasand to karti hu par taarif karna nahi ban paata mujse...
ek ek shere jaise ek ek moti.... inse jo mala bani ooski kya taarif karu?
kabhi sochti hu... tumse hi kyun n likhwa lu taarif bhi..... lol
sabhi shere pasand aaye par dil ki gharaai maie jo sabse jyada ootra.......

Raaste meN yaqiiN mila lekin
Wo bhi jaata raha dagha karke

aksar yah dard aas -paas mandrata nazar aaya hai muje bhi.... dard ki maano inthiha ho gayi yaha aa kar... kya haal ho jab yakin, dagae maie badal jaaye...

Sirf yaadeN hi humne paayii haiN
Bhool jaane ka faisla karke

ufff... kya kahu....?
ek umre se bhulaya jise
wahi ghum aaj oobharta kyun hai..

is dost ki taarif kubul karna....... saari gajal bahetareen.

tumhari meena


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shukria afshan - 7th June 2004, 11:42 PM

Afshan ji

Aapne bohat sahiiH bateN kahi haiN. kisi ko muaf kar dena bhala karke bhuul jaana insaan ke liye baRi mushkil si baateN haiN. Aapne sahi sher par ungli rakhi aur jis andaaz meN daad di wo Khud bhi daad dene ke qabil hai.
Shukria phir ek baar

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Yaad rakhna bhalaii auroN ki
Bhuul jaana magar bahala karke

Praveen ji,

Pata nahi kyu, ye sher behad pasand aaya! Zindagi jeene ka waise ye bohat hi baRiya tareeka hai.. dil ko sukuun milta hai aisa karne se.. doosroN ki ghalatiyaan mauf karke, unhe bhulaa kar, humaare jazbaat unke liye kabhi bure nahi hote.. aur jab hum khud doosroN ke liye bhala karein, to unki nazar me apna ek makaam ban jaata hai.... is tarah zindagi ki raahon me chalne se sirf aman baRta hai... Bohat khoob! Waise to aapke khayaal, aapki soch aur aapka bayaan humesha hi behtareen hota hai.. Chhoti si tareef kubool kijiyega..


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shukria mushy bhai - 7th June 2004, 11:46 PM

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Sach kahuuN to aapka daad ene ka andaaz bhi kisi nazm se kam nahiiN hota. Daad ka phir ek baar shukria.

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Bohat khoob saxena saheb

aap kam kam yahan aate hain magar jab bhi aate hain apne khoobsurat likhayee ke unmit naqoosh naqsh ker dete hain.
her shayr lajawab aur pur asr hai.
meri bharpoor daad aap ke liye saxena saheb
likhte rahiye gaa.
God bless you.

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Re: hello - 7th June 2004, 11:48 PM

Akant ji

Aapne rachna ko saay diya is baat ke aapka bahut-bahut dhanya vaad. Aapki daad aur tareef ke tah-e-di se shukria.

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Praveen ji,

Bahut dino baad aapki koi rachana padh raha hoon. bahut achchhi lag rahi hai aapki ghzal.. her ek sher mein inspiration chhipa hua hai ..bahut khub..


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shukria sanjj - 7th June 2004, 11:53 PM

sanju bhai

hamari ghazal par likhne ke liye hosla karne ki zaruurat nahiN.
ye aap dostaon ki daad aur hosla afzaii hi to hai ke jo likhne ki prerna deti hai. jahan tak aasani se samajh meN aane wali baat hai to aapne ghaur kiya hoga ke maiN aksar aasan alfaaz hi istemaal karta huuN. kair aise hi daad dete rahiye

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Hosla kar raha hu....ap ko daad dene ka....umid hai ap kabul karenge....sanju naachiz se daad
Purii ghazal....apni baat kehane mai.....safal huii haii....mujh jaise insaan ko aasanii se samjh aagayii aur jo bat aasanii se samjh aajaye woh sach mai asar rakhtii hai....shukriyaa iise hum sab kai bich baatne ka.....

Usski raahoN ka ruKh agar karna
ZaKhm khaane ka hosla karke

Ijazat Sanju ko!


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8th June 2004, 07:35 AM

Praveen Sahib, Namaskaar...

Apka likha ek ek sher kaabil e tareef hai...phir bhi kuch sher dil mein ghar kar gaye...

Ban gayii baddua Khushi wo hi
Jis ko maanga kiye dua karke

ZaKhm khaaye baRe-baRe hamne
Uss sey choti sii ilteja karke

Waah!

Raaste meN yaqiiN mila lekin
Wo bhi jaata raha dagha karke

Sirf yaadeN hi humne paayii haiN
Bhool jaane ka faisla karke

kya kahein...sach hai yeh

Yaad rakhna bhalaii auroN ki
Bhuul jaana magar bahala karke

Superb!

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iss ummiid ke saath ki aap aage bhi jaldi hee aaya kareinge...

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Thumbs up Behtreen - 8th June 2004, 11:44 AM

Ek patThar ko yuuN Khuda karke
Kya milaa aisa tajarba karke


Yaad rakhna bhalaii auroN ki
Bhuul jaana magar bahala karke

Janaab praveen saahab...ab kisko chhodeiN or kis ki taareef kareiN...aapki poori ki poori ghazal hi saraabor hai....khoobsoorti se...behtreen bas itna hi keh paauNga.

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8th June 2004, 10:43 PM

Dear Praveen Ji,

Ek patThar ko yuuN Khuda karke
Kya milaa aisa tajarba karke

Dard baRhta gaya davaa karke
Lmaha-lamha, zara-zara karke

Ban gayii baddua Khushi wo hi
Jis ko maanga kiye dua karke

ZaKhm khaaye baRe-baRe hamne
Uss sey choti sii ilteja karke

Zindagi aazmaye jii bharke
Hum bhi nikle haiN hosla karke

Raaste meN yaqiiN mila lekin
Wo bhi jaata raha dagha karke

Sirf yaadeN hi humne paayii haiN
Bhool jaane ka faisla karke

Usski raahoN ka ruKh agar karna
ZaKhm khaane ka hosla karke

Yaad rakhna bhalaii auroN ki
Bhuul jaana magar bahala karke

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Kya khoob likha hai aapne.

Yaad rakhna bhalaii auroN ki
Bhuul jaana magar bahala karke

Jindagi ka nichor yahi hai. jo liya woh yaad rakhna aur jo diya woh bhul jaana. Shayad isiliye log darde dil ko yaad rakhte hai. Hum to yahi kahenge ki.......

Pyar ki kimat chuka dena jaan dekar bhi
Pyar mei.n kya milega tumhe udhar karke.


Aaj raaj ki bat aapko bata hun ki mera naam bhi praveen hai. achha laga humnam ko itna hunermand dekh ke. Khuda aapko sub kuchh de.


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Ek patThar ko yuuN Khuda karke
Kya milaa aisa tajarba karke

Dard baRhta gaya davaa karke
Lmaha-lamha, zara-zara karke

Ban gayii baddua Khushi wo hi
Jis ko maanga kiye dua karke

ZaKhm khaaye baRe-baRe hamne
Uss sey choti sii ilteja karke

Zindagi aazmaye jii bharke
Hum bhi nikle haiN hosla karke

Raaste meN yaqiiN mila lekin
Wo bhi jaata raha dagha karke

Sirf yaadeN hi humne paayii haiN
Bhool jaane ka faisla karke

Usski raahoN ka ruKh agar karna
ZaKhm khaane ka hosla karke

Yaad rakhna bhalaii auroN ki
Bhuul jaana magar bahala karke


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kitnni saral aur sundar words mein likhi gai gazal ko meine nahi dekha kyun???
sorry sorry sorry
really bhut achi hai apki post ki gai gazal.

woh kahataa hai dost hamko
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hi - 30th July 2004, 03:07 PM

hello praveen ji
apko aaj pehli baar parha,,aur sach apke is kalaam ka ek ek lafz jaise dil ke paar utar gay,,koi aisa bhi ashrar mujhe samjh nai aa raha ki ksiki jyada tareef keroo,,,?sar ki sari rachna jaise dil ke jazbaton me piroker sabke samne rakhi gayi hai,,aur apka antim sher to jaise,,ek aachi naseehat bhi de gaya,,jo ki shayad hum sabke liye ek paigam bhi hai,,,,
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Muafi chahta huuN ke aapko itni deri se jawab diya. Dar asl maine to bohat dinoN se is post ki Khabar hi nahiiN li thi. Maine socha ke abhi shayad is pe jawab aur nahiiN aayeNge. Aur beech me kisi wajah se mujhe notifications bhi nahiiN mil rahe the.

KyuuN ke ye meri be adbi ho gayii ke maine apne daad dene waaloN ko intezaar karwaya. Aapki daad ka bohat bohat shukria.

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Chaand Bhai

Muafi chahta huuN ke aapki daad ka jawaab itni der se de raha huuN.Paras ji ke reply maiN maine likha hai. Aur maiN apni is beadbi ke liye aapse mufi ka talabgaar huuN.

Ghazal pasand karne ka shukria. Aage bhi saath diijiyega.

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Aapse sabse pehle muafi chahta huuN ke aapko jawab dene maiN maine deri ki. Bura na maaniyega ye kuch confusion ki wjah se ho gaya.

Aapne ghazal pasand ki di ko hausla mila aur khushi bhi huii. Ummeed karta huuN ke aage bhi aap mujhe paRhte raheN ge.

Aur apne humnaam se milkar hameN bhi bohat achcha laga.

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Aaj aapke jawab se mujhe pata cha ke is post par aur bhuch replies the jinka jawaab maiNe nahiiN diya tha.

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Tajarba ka yaha matlab hai"experiment"
Waise iska matlab "experience" bhi hota hai.

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Bhool jaane ka faisla karke

Usski raahoN ka ruKh agar karna
ZaKhm khaane ka hosla karke

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Jis andaaz meiN aapne ghazal ko daad di hai wo Khud ek qabil-e-daad baat hai. Aap ne isse saraha aur pasand kiya jaankar achcha laga. YahaN meri kuch aur ghazleiN bhi maujuud haiN. Waqt mile to paRhiyega.

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apko aaj pehli baar parha,,aur sach apke is kalaam ka ek ek lafz jaise dil ke paar utar gay,,koi aisa bhi ashrar mujhe samjh nai aa raha ki ksiki jyada tareef keroo,,,?sar ki sari rachna jaise dil ke jazbaton me piroker sabke samne rakhi gayi hai,,aur apka antim sher to jaise,,ek aachi naseehat bhi de gaya,,jo ki shayad hum sabke liye ek paigam bhi hai,,,,
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Nisha ji

Aapki daad aur tareef ka bohat bohat shukria. Aage bhi saath diijiyega.

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Ek patThar ko yuuN Khuda karke
Kya milaa aisa tajarba karke

Dard baRhta gaya davaa karke
Lmaha-lamha, zara-zara karke

Ban gayii baddua Khushi wo hi
Jis ko maanga kiye dua karke

ZaKhm khaaye baRe-baRe hamne
Uss sey choti sii ilteja karke

Zindagi aazmaye jii bharke
Hum bhi nikle haiN hosla karke

Raaste meN yaqiiN mila lekin
Wo bhi jaata raha dagha karke

Sirf yaadeN hi humne paayii haiN
Bhool jaane ka faisla karke

Usski raahoN ka ruKh agar karna
ZaKhm khaane ka hosla karke

Yaad rakhna bhalaii auroN ki
Bhuul jaana magar bahala karke


PraVeeN Ji,

BaHuT PyaRa KaLaM AaP Ne YaH LiKha Hai…. TaRiF KaBuL KiJiYe

Du`Aaoon Ke SaTh IZaazaT ChaHunGi……

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17th November 2007, 12:38 PM

Praveen jee :

namaskaaR..

kaise haiN aap??

aapki naGhz Ghazal naZar nawAz hu'ii.. Praveern jee aapko paRhna aik alag hi baat hay.. kyuuNkii aap har Sher ko itani geHraa'ii sey bayaaN karte haiN kii paRhne waala bas paRhtaa hi reh jaaYe.. baaki aur kyaa kahuN .. ees pur aSar Ghazal ke liYe daad hi daad !!

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Arsa-e-taveel ke baa'd haazir ho raha huuN. Kaam ki masruufiyaat aur chand haalaat ne kuch kehne aur is mehfil meN ziyadah waqt dene ka mauqa hi nahiiN diya. Baharhaal maa'zrat chaahte hue ye halki-phulki si ghazal pesh kar raha huuN.
Apni aaraa se zaruur nawaziyega.
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Ek patThar ko yuuN Khuda karke
Kya milaa aisa tajarba karke

Dard baRhta gaya davaa karke
Lmaha-lamha, zara-zara karke

Ban gayii baddua Khushi wo hi
Jis ko maanga kiye dua karke

ZaKhm khaaye baRe-baRe hamne
Uss sey choti sii ilteja karke

Zindagi aazmaye jii bharke
Hum bhi nikle haiN hosla karke

Raaste meN yaqiiN mila lekin
Wo bhi jaata raha dagha karke

Sirf yaadeN hi humne paayii haiN
Bhool jaane ka faisla karke

Usski raahoN ka ruKh agar karna
ZaKhm khaane ka hosla karke

Yaad rakhna bhalaii auroN ki
Bhuul jaana magar bahala karke

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Aadaab ar^z hai praveen jee maine aaj aap ko pehli dafa padHa aur sach maaniye mere paas Lab^z nahee hai taareef ke liye, kyunki poori gHazal bemisaal hai janaab aur sHer ka chunaav kar paana bhi bahut musHkiil hai.Bas iTnaa hee kahoo.Nga ki jab taLak aap is meHfeel kee shaan hai hame kuchh na kuchh shikhane ko milta rahega.Aur yahii du_aa hai ki khudaa aap ko aur hunar mand kare. taaki hamaare ilm men bhi Izaafaa hota rahe.

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Apni aaraa se zaruur nawaziyega.
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Ek patThar ko yuuN Khuda karke
Kya milaa aisa tajarba karke

Dard baRhta gaya davaa karke
Lmaha-lamha, zara-zara karke

Ban gayii baddua Khushi wo hi
Jis ko maanga kiye dua karke

ZaKhm khaaye baRe-baRe hamne
Uss sey choti sii ilteja karke

Zindagi aazmaye jii bharke
Hum bhi nikle haiN hosla karke

Raaste meN yaqiiN mila lekin
Wo bhi jaata raha dagha karke

Sirf yaadeN hi humne paayii haiN
Bhool jaane ka faisla karke

Usski raahoN ka ruKh agar karna
ZaKhm khaane ka hosla karke

Yaad rakhna bhalaii auroN ki
Bhuul jaana magar bahala karke

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Hazur,

Apki tehreer ke gulshan se pehle baar guzar hoa Maham ka , aur hur sher manind e gul khila mila gu ke us khilte phool mein kuch kaheen murjhaya sa paya ........shayed apka ehsas jisko apne khub lafzon ki mala mei npiro diya hei

Kitna puracar hei apka kalaam

kitni taceer hei is ghazal ki kiya bataye Maham

Daad kiya den is purdard tehreer ko ke is ghazal ke seene mein bara saakit sa dil paya jiski hur dharkan sakit hur sans bojhal buhat andhera buahat udasi ................

Najnae kaise likha hai is ghazal ko ap ne ke Maham ke zehan o dil pe buahat gehra acar chor gayee ye tehreer hazrat

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Arsa-e-taveel ke baa'd haazir ho raha huuN. Kaam ki masruufiyaat aur chand haalaat ne kuch kehne aur is mehfil meN ziyadah waqt dene ka mauqa hi nahiiN diya. Baharhaal maa'zrat chaahte hue ye halki-phulki si ghazal pesh kar raha huuN.
Apni aaraa se zaruur nawaziyega.
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Ek patThar ko yuuN Khuda karke
Kya milaa aisa tajarba karke

Dard baRhta gaya davaa karke
Lmaha-lamha, zara-zara karke

Ban gayii baddua Khushi wo hi
Jis ko maanga kiye dua karke

ZaKhm khaaye baRe-baRe hamne
Uss sey choti sii ilteja karke

Zindagi aazmaye jii bharke
Hum bhi nikle haiN hosla karke

Raaste meN yaqiiN mila lekin
Wo bhi jaata raha dagha karke

Sirf yaadeN hi humne paayii haiN
Bhool jaane ka faisla karke

Usski raahoN ka ruKh agar karna
ZaKhm khaane ka hosla karke

Yaad rakhna bhalaii auroN ki
Bhuul jaana magar bahala karke

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Namashkar Praveen Ji.

Kya kahun.... agar bayaan kar sakta to karta...

Bahut kismat wala hun ke aapke kalamo'n se do chaar hone ka mauka milta hei mujhe.

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Dhaval Bhai

Bada achcha lag rha hai aap logoN se apne kalaaM par baat karke. Aap dostoN ki zarra nawaazi hai ke maiN achche se achcha kehne ki koshosh karta huuN.

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Shukria - 23rd November 2007, 08:29 PM

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Huzuur mehfil ki shaan to aap dostoN aur qadrdaanoN se hai. Daad ka phir se bohat shukria

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Shukria - 23rd November 2007, 08:31 PM

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Aapne ghazal ko aapni daad se nawaaza iske liye aapka bohat shukrguzar huuN. Ummeed karta huuN aaindah bhi khitaab hota rahega.

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Apki tehreer ke gulshan se pehle baar guzar hoa Maham ka , aur hur sher manind e gul khila mila gu ke us khilte phool mein kuch kaheen murjhaya sa paya ........shayed apka ehsas jisko apne khub lafzon ki mala mei npiro diya hei

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Daad kiya den is purdard tehreer ko ke is ghazal ke seene mein bara saakit sa dil paya jiski hur dharkan sakit hur sans bojhal buhat andhera buahat udasi ................

Najnae kaise likha hai is ghazal ko ap ne ke Maham ke zehan o dil pe buahat gehra acar chor gayee ye tehreer hazrat

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Shukria - 23rd November 2007, 08:33 PM

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Parveen jii, bahut hi khoob likhtey haiN aap, sacchi mein muje sabhi sher bahut hi acche lage, ek se badkar ek sher kaha hai aapne....dil kekaree rahe sabhi sher.

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Parveen jii, bahut hi khoob likhtey haiN aap, sacchi mein muje sabhi sher bahut hi acche lage, ek se badkar ek sher kaha hai aapne....dil kekaree rahe sabhi sher.

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