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ek taazaa ghazal..................gulab ka rang -
8th May 2005, 01:28 AM
Salaam
ahl-e-mehfil ko Safiya ka aadaab, ek aur taazaa ghazal aap ki khidmat me pesh kar rahi hoon, umeed karti hooN ke aap humesha ki tarah is pe bhi apni nazr-e-inayat karke ise izzat baqshenge. Ye ghazal meyne apne ek bhai ki mushkil hal karne ke liye likhi thi ab ye un sabhi bhaiiyoN ke liye kaam aa sakti haiy, jinhe kisi se mohabbat ho gayi haiy magar iz`haar nahi kar paa rahe`N hain. ishq ka iz`haar karna zara mushkil hota haiy, is baat me koee shak nahi. to mey aapko bhi vohi mashvaraa doongi jo meyne apne bhaii ko diya, ke dil ki baat ghazal ki shaql me bhej do, phir dekho ke alfaazoN ki nakkashi kya kamaal dikhaati hai. teri furqat me tere khwaab ka rang ek chehraa bana gulaab ka rang koee jachta nahi haiy aankhoN me jab se dekha tere shabaab ka rang taaj bhi tujh ko dekh sharmaaye sang-e-marmar sa aabtaab ka rang aayii shehraa me phoolOn ki khoosbu zarre zarre pe tha saraab ka rang zulf khoolne se shaam hone lagii dhal gayaa jeyse aaftaab ka rang haay ye parda-nasheeno ki hansee khilkhilaata huva naqaab ka rang meyne baDkar jo haath thaam liya surkh sa ho gaya janaab ka rang bas yehi dar mere sawaaloN ko keysa hoga tere jawaab ka rang in andheroN ko alvida keh dooN mujhko mil jaaye maahtaab ka rang bin peeye mey nashe me rehtaa hooN teri ulfat haiy ya sharaab ka rang teri khaamoshi se nahi shikvaa dikh raha haiy tere hijaab ka rang aaj bhar dooN mey maang taaro se ishq mera nahi hubaab ka rang mauj-e-darya ne le liya aakhir ek thehre huve taalaab ka rang kyun "shamaa" roz roz jaltii ho shaam kyun bangayi aazaab ka rang aapki aasaani ke liye kuch maayine: FURQAT= JUDAAII, TAAJ= TAAJMAHAL,AAB-TAAB= beauty elegance SARAAB=MIRAGE, AAFTAAB= SUN, MAAHTAAB= MOON, HUBAAB= BUBBLE. aap sab ki aaraa ka be-sabri se intezaar rahegaa aapki apni SAFIYA.. |
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8th May 2005, 10:50 AM
Adaab Safiya Ji,
Maan gaye Safiya Ji, aaj toh bohot hi sunahri mehfil sajaayi hai aapne. Ha shayad aksar pyar ki kahaniya adhuri reh jaati hai kyu ke aashiq izhaar ki himmat nahi juta paate. Yeh lines shayad un ki sab se badi kamzori ka izhaar karti hai: bas yehi dar mere sawaaloN ko keysa hoga tere jawaab ka rang Bohot khoob. Har baar ki tarha ek bilkul hi umda kalaam. Salim If there are no tears in the eyes, there will be no rainbow in the soul Happiness is a butterfly, which, when pursued, is always just beyond your grasp, but which, if you sit down quietly, may alight upon you. We come to love not by finding a perfect person but by learning to see an imperfect person perfectly |
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8th May 2005, 12:36 PM
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mehfil bhi aapki aur isme rang bhi aap hi se sajtaa haiy. ab agar ye ghazal yahaan paRi rahe aur ise koee na dekhe to phir aap hi bataayeN ki kya acchi aur kyaa buri. to jeyse shayer ghazal ko roop detaa haiy veyse hi sunne waale aur samajhne waale isme jaan phoonk kar ise be-jaan se jaandaar banaa deteN hain.  ji aapne bajaa farmaaya ki ghazal ka ye sheyr aashikoN ki kamzori ko dhyaan me rakh kar hi likha haiy, kyunki iz`haar na kar paane ki asal vajah yehi hoti haiy ke jawaab ka dar hota haiy. lekin ye ghazal jinke liye likhi gayee thi unhone to ise paRne ke baad "haaN" me jawaab diyaa haiy aur bhai hain ke bas phoole nahi samaa rahe. to ab yakeen ho chala haiy ki koee bhi laRki apni itni taareef aur kisi ka ye haal sun kar naa nahi kahegi, dar-asal hume HUSN ki kamzori ka bhi accha khaasa andaaza haiy, aakhir hum usi qaom se hain.  ghazal ki taareef ke liye bohot bohot shukriya Safiya... |
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8th May 2005, 12:56 PM
bas yehi dar mere sawaaloN ko
keysa hoga tere jawaab ka rang in andheroN ko alvida keh dooN mujhko mil jaaye maahtaab ka rang Kya Baat hai Safiya jee...! Bahot khuub! Lutf aa gaya aapki yeh nazm padhkar....lol hmmn...aap tau husn kee kamzori ko khuub samajhti hain...isi tarah dil fareyb kalaam hamare saamne laati rahein... daad kabuul farmaayein... paras gayi ruton ka sulagataa sa intezaar bhii ho mere khuloos kaa andaaz ye bhii sachhaa hai rakhuun na rabt magar dostii shumaar bhii ho --Sayyidaa Fatimaa Hasan |
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8th May 2005, 01:03 PM
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aapka jawaab dekh kar humesha hi baRi khushi hoti haiy, ghazal aapko pasand aayee samjheN mehnat vasool ho gayee, ab aap kahengi ke ghazal likhne me bhalaa kya mehnat lagti hogi, haan amooman to eysaa nahi hota magar peechle 4 maheene se tabiyat zaraa naa-saaz haiy, slip-disc ki shaiqayat haiy, isi vajah se ziyada der beythna bohot mushkil saabit hota haiy. aur hume aadat haiy ki hum pc per beth kar hi likhteN hain. lekin aap logon se ye pyaar bhari taareef ki umeed hi hume baar baar yahaan kheench laati hai, aur dard bhi dard nahi laghta. aapki behad mamnoon Safiya... |
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Re: ek taazaa ghazal..................gulab ka rang -
8th May 2005, 01:06 PM
teri furqat me tere khwaab ka rang ek chehraa bana gulaab ka rang koee jachta nahi haiy aankhoN me jab se dekha tere shabaab ka rang Bahut khoob.... taaj bhi tujh ko dekh sharmaaye sang-e-marmar sa aabtaab ka rang aayii shehraa me phoolOn ki khoosbu zarre zarre pe tha saraab ka rang wah kya baat hai zulf khoolne se shaam hone lagii dhal gayaa jeyse aaftaab ka rang haay ye parda-nasheeno ki hansee khilkhilaata huva naqaab ka rang kya baat hai....good one... meyne baDkar jo haath thaam liya surkh sa ho gaya janaab ka rang bas yehi dar mere sawaaloN ko keysa hoga tere jawaab ka rang oye....hoyye.....kya baat hai.... in andheroN ko alvida keh dooN mujhko mil jaaye maahtaab ka rang bin peeye mey nashe me rehtaa hooN teri ulfat haiy ya sharaab ka rang wah wah.....ab to rang chadhne laga hai aapki likhavat ka... teri khaamoshi se nahi shikvaa dikh raha haiy tere hijaab ka rang aaj bhar dooN mey maang taaro se ishq mera nahi hubaab ka rang Wah wah.... mauj-e-darya ne le liya aakhir ek thehre huve taalaab ka rang kyun "shamaa" roz roz jaltii ho shaam kyun bangayi aazaab ka rang Uff.....wah....kya baat hai... Safiya ji, Bahut khoob likha hai aapne... Yahan to kai ladke isko padhne ke baad.....soch rahe honge....hai meine kyon nahi likha aisa....apni mehbooba ke liye.... (Vaise un mien mein bhi shamil hoon.....  )Really very beautiful.... Keep writing.... Take Care Rohin |
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Re: Re: ek taazaa ghazal..................gulab ka rang -
9th May 2005, 09:57 AM
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bohot bohot shukriya, itna waqt nikaal kar ek ek sheyr par daad di haiy aapne, mey aapki behad manoon hoon. ab to aap bhi mere bhaai hain, yuN samajh leN ki aapke liye hi likhi haiy, aap bhi ise apni mehbooba ke liye istemaal kar sakteN hain,, aur beshak hume credit bhi na deN , Aapka kaam ban jaaye yehi credit kaafi hoga.once again thankz a lot Safiya |
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