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n ayaaN* huweeN wo mohabbatteiN ke guzar gayeeN bhi haiN muddateiN
to hooN zikr ka tere muntazir tere naam par hooN nisaar kyooN

- zarraa

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Wahhh!! Zarra saheb....

aik behad munfarid khiyaal pesh kiya .... dherooN daad,

DuaooN k saath,,


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DuaooN k saath,,


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waaaaaahhhh....too good zarraji behad gehra khayal....awesome
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Wahhh!! Zarra saheb....

aik behad munfarid khiyaal pesh kiya .... dherooN daad,

DuaooN k saath,,
tah e dil se shukrguzaar Hassan bhai ...


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Waaahhh!!!! Khoobsurat sher !!! Alfaaz ka behtareen istemaal kiya hai !! Asardaar bayaan hai !! Daad Hassan bhai !!


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apni ek kaafee puraanee ghazal se sher ...

aamad ko apni muntazir ik daar hee hooN maiN
tishna ho apne khooN ki wo talwaar hee hooN maiN

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n ayaaN* huweeN wo mohabbatteiN ke guzar gayeeN bhi haiN muddateiN
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aamad ko apni muntazir ik daar hee hooN maiN
tishna ho apne khooN ki wo talwaar hee hooN maiN

-zarraa
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apni ek kaafee puraanee ghazal se sher ...

aamad ko apni muntazir ik daar hee hooN maiN
tishna ho apne khooN ki wo talwaar hee hooN maiN

-zarraa
wahhh! wahh!

Zarra saheb... kamal ka kamal hai... DherooN daad!

Apna khiyaal rakhiye ga,,

DuaooN ke saath,,


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Exclamation 5th August 2014, 10:42 PM

Zarraa saheb.. Muazarat chahta hooN, kuch dinoN ki ghair-haazri k liye,
aik koshish:-

hum muntazir rahe hijr meiN vasl ko dhondatay huay!
woh wapis aaye raQeebooN ke hum-raah biyaaH rachaye huay...


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wahhh! wahh!

Zarra saheb... kamal ka kamal hai... DherooN daad!

Apna khiyaal rakhiye ga,,

DuaooN ke saath,,
Aap ka bahaut bahaut shukriya Hassan bhai


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Zarraa saheb.. Muazarat chahta hooN, kuch dinoN ki ghair-haazri k liye,
aik koshish:-

hum muntazir rahe hijr meiN vasl ko dhondatay huay!
woh wapis aaye raQeebooN ke hum-raah biyaaH rachaye huay...

Waah !! Bahaut khoob Hassan bhai !! hijr mein vasl ke muntazir rehne ki khoob baat kahi !!


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lafz "muntazir" par members ke aashaar ... - 6th August 2014, 11:15 PM

lafz "muntazir" par members ke kahe huwe aashaar ...

muntazir rahe barsoN ke woh ayeN ge
dekhte rahe sapne ke woh manayeN ge
jaante haiN lekin dil ke hathoN majboor haiN
woh aa bhi gaye to 'hSn' ko rulayeN ge...
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mere dil k har haal main tum ho
mere har khayaal main tum ho
na hoon muntazir kisi aur jawab ka
k ab mere har sawaal main tum ho
Ananthpak

hoon muntazir ke hoga deedaar-e-yaar ek din
faqat ye ehsaas hi bohat hai sukoon-e-rooh ke liye
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n ayaaN huweeN wo mohabbatteiN ke guzar gayeeN bhi haiN muddateiN
to hooN zikr ka tere muntazir tere naam par hooN nisaar kyooN
Zarraa

dil-e-muztarib hai muntazir ke kab hum tum mileN
yehi izteraab shab-o-roz hai, yehi aarzu sar-e-zindagi
Hassan

aamad ko apni muntazir ik daar hee hooN maiN
tishna ho apne khooN ki wo talwaar hee hooN maiN
Zarraa

um muntazir rahe hijr meiN vasl ko dhondatay huay!
woh wapis aaye raQeebooN ke hum-raah biyaaH rachaye huay
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Awaiting next word............ Zarraa saheb!


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naya lafz ... - 7th August 2014, 01:11 AM


doston..is baar ka lafz hai ..... AZAAB

"azaab" has versatile but similar meanings like "a severe punishment", "torture", "torment", "a painful or traumatic event" etc.

ye lafz barha hi intense hai, aur shayari mein bahaut hi asardaar tareeke se istemaal ho sakta hai.

lafz "azaab" ki taqti, mere opinion mein, hai 121. any other opinion is welcome.

lafz "azaab" par ustaad shora ke kuchh aashaar dekhte hain ...

aaye kuchh abr* kuchh sharaab aaye
us ke baad aaye jo azaab aaye
(abr = cloud)
-Faiz

kahaaN sawaab* kahaaN kya azaab hota hai
mohabbatoN meiN kab itna hisaab hota hai
(sawaab = reward)
-Waseem Barelvi

ye kya azaab hai sab apne aap meiN gum haiN
zabaaN mili hai magar hum-zabaaN naheeN milta
-Nida Fazli

azaab dega to phir mujh ko khwaab bhi dega
maiN mutmaeeN* hooN mera dil teree panaah meiN hai
(mutmaeeN =content, satisfied)
-Parveen Shakir

hujoom-e-dard mila zindagi azaab huwee
dil-o-nigaah ki saazish thi kaamyaab huwee
-Shahryaar

har gharhi inqalaab meiN guzree
zindagi kis azaab meiN guzree
-Fani Badayuni

milti hai khoo-e-yaar* se naar* iltihaab* meiN
kaafir hooN gar n miltee ho raahat azaab meiN
(khoo-e-yaar = habit of beloved, naar = fire, iltihaab = hell)
-Ghalib

ishq hai aashiqoN ke jalne ko
ye jahannum meiN hai azaab kahaaN
-Mir Taqi Mir

lafz "azaab" par ghaur karne ka silsila hum agle 6 dinoN tak chalaayeNge ... Aug 12th raat 9:00 PM India time ya 3:30 PM GMT tak ...

to chaliye lafz-e-azaab par sher kehne ki koshishon ke azaab se guzar ke shayari ka sawaab haasil karte hain

duaoN ke saath
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Waah !! Bahaut khoob Ananthpak ji !! Bada asardaar aaghaaz kiya aap ne lafz "azaab" par ghaur karne ke silsile ka.


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muntazir rahe barsoN ke woh ayeN ge
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jaante haiN lekin dil ke hathoN majboor haiN
woh aa bhi gaye to 'hSn' ko rulayeN ge...
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mere har khayaal main tum ho
na hoon muntazir kisi aur jawab ka
k ab mere har sawaal main tum ho
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hoon muntazir ke hoga deedaar-e-yaar ek din
faqat ye ehsaas hi bohat hai sukoon-e-rooh ke liye
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n ayaaN huweeN wo mohabbatteiN ke guzar gayeeN bhi haiN muddateiN
to hooN zikr ka tere muntazir tere naam par hooN nisaar kyooN
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dil-e-muztarib hai muntazir ke kab hum tum mileN
yehi izteraab shab-o-roz hai, yehi aarzu sar-e-zindagi
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aamad ko apni muntazir ik daar hee hooN maiN
tishna ho apne khooN ki wo talwaar hee hooN maiN
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um muntazir rahe hijr meiN vasl ko dhondatay huay!
woh wapis aaye raQeebooN ke hum-raah biyaaH rachaye huay
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waaaaaaaaaaaaaaahhhhhhhhhhhhh!!!!
Ananthji,
kya khub sher se aapne aaghaaz kiya hai.............

daad hi daad iis aalaa tareen sher pe............



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Adaab mehfil-e-fusoon-e-alfaaz,
aik puraani Ghazal pesh-e-khidmat hai,
Lafz azaab MaQte meiN numayaaN hai:-


lavaa mohabbat ka phoot pada, jab pehli baar tu khwaab hua
phir raatooN ki neend haram hui, mera rukh khuli kitaab hua

khalqat-e-shehr meiN ik chehre per nigaah jaa thehri...
us raat chaand ne karwat li, phir ussi ka chehra mehtaab hua

mehak uthaa mera aangan aur ujray chaman ko ranaayi mili
mukhra-e-jaan shabnam se tar-ba-tar ho kar rangat-e-gulaab hua

vasl ka hur lamha mukhtasir hua, phir hijr ne jese jakar liya
mera badan jhulasta giya, mere gham ka nagar shadaab hua

jab dard-e-tanhai ne shiddat ikhtiyaar ki, main be-tahasha ro diya
jigar se khoon tapakta raha aur "hSn" mubtala-e-azaab hua...



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'azaab' lafz pe mere likhe hue qalaamoN se kuch ashaar pesh karna chahunga..

zeher bhii pee looN gar tu pilaae laboN se
ya azaab me tere zindaaN tak chalooN

kamar se baandh ke khinchenge wo tere kafas* ko
kise uthaanee hai azaab is sard murde baar* ki
(kafas = dead body, baar = burden)

chaltee rahee ghadee kee tarah zindagee meree
bakee bache yahaan pe kuchh dam azaab ke

rukhsaar pe bosa na diya, tumne sharam meN
gar sharmo hayaa hai to, azaab kyuN ye bekaar looN

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waaaaaaaaaaaaaaahhhhhhhhhhhhh!!!!
Ananthji,
kya khub sher se aapne aaghaaz kiya hai.............
daad hi daad iis aalaa tareen sher pe............

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Adaab mehfil-e-fusoon-e-alfaaz,
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Lafz azaab MaQte meiN numayaaN hai:-


lavaa mohabbat ka phoot pada, jab pehli baar tu khwaab hua
phir raatooN ki neend haram hui, mera rukh khuli kitaab hua

khalqat-e-shehr meiN ik chehre per nigaah jaa thehri...
us raat chaand ne karwat li, phir ussi ka chehra mehtaab hua

mehak uthaa mera aangan aur ujray chaman ko ranaayi mili
mukhra-e-jaan shabnam se tar-ba-tar ho kar rangat-e-gulaab hua

vasl ka hur lamha mukhtasir hua, phir hijr ne jese jakar liya
mera badan jhulasta giya, mere gham ka nagar shadaab hua

jab dard-e-tanhai ne shiddat ikhtiyaar ki, main be-tahasha ro diya
jigar se khoon tapakta raha aur "hSn" mubtala-e-azaab hua...

waaaaaaaaaaaaaaahhhhhhhh!!!!
behad khubsurat ghazal hai, Hassanbhai.....
dheroN dheroN daad-o-mubaarakbaad.....



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'azaab' lafz pe mere likhe hue qalaamoN se kuch ashaar pesh karna chahunga..

zeher bhii pee looN gar tu pilaae laboN se
ya azaab me tere zindaaN tak chalooN

kamar se baandh ke khinchenge wo tere kafas* ko
kise uthaanee hai azaab is sard murde baar* ki
(kafas = dead body, baar = burden)

chaltee rahee ghadee kee tarah zindagee meree
bakee bache yahaan pe kuchh dam azaab ke

rukhsaar pe bosa na diya, tumne sharam meN
gar sharmo hayaa hai to, azaab kyuN ye bekaar looN

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Wahh! Wahhhhh!! Aadil bhai....

Wese to sabhi ashaar khoobsorat aur umdaH haiN..

Lekin aakhir shair kuch khaas hi dil ko pasand aaya!

Aate rahiye, miltay rahiye,

DuaooN ke saath,


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'azaab' lafz pe mere likhe hue qalaamoN se kuch ashaar pesh karna chahunga..
zeher bhii pee looN gar tu pilaae laboN se
ya azaab me tere zindaaN tak chalooN
kamar se baandh ke khinchenge wo tere kafas* ko
kise uthaanee hai azaab is sard murde baar* ki
(kafas = dead body, baar = burden)
chaltee rahee ghadee kee tarah zindagee meree
bakee bache yahaan pe kuchh dam azaab ke
rukhsaar pe bosa na diya, tumne sharam meN
gar sharmo hayaa hai to, azaab kyuN ye bekaar looN

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Wahh! Wahhhhh!! Aadil bhai....

Wese to sabhi ashaar khoobsorat aur umdaH haiN..

Lekin aakhir shair kuch khaas hi dil ko pasand aaya!

Aate rahiye, miltay rahiye,

DuaooN ke saath,
Hassanbhai!!!! hmm!! hmm!!

aapka bahot bahot shukriya

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Waaaahhhhhhhhhhhhhh!!!!!!!!!!!
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lafz "azaab" ki taqti, mere opinion mein, hai 121. any other opinion is welcome.

lafz "azaab" par ustaad shora ke kuchh aashaar dekhte hain ...

aaye kuchh abr* kuchh sharaab aaye
us ke baad aaye jo azaab aaye

(abr = cloud)
-Faiz

kahaaN sawaab* kahaaN kya azaab hota hai
mohabbatoN meiN kab itna hisaab hota hai
(sawaab = reward)
-Waseem Barelvi

ye kya azaab hai sab apne aap meiN gum haiN
zabaaN mili hai magar hum-zabaaN naheeN milta
-Nida Fazli

azaab dega to phir mujh ko khwaab bhi dega
maiN mutmaeeN* hooN mera dil teree panaah meiN hai
(mutmaeeN =content, satisfied)
-Parveen Shakir

hujoom-e-dard mila zindagi azaab huwee
dil-o-nigaah ki saazish thi kaamyaab huwee
-Shahryaar

har gharhi inqalaab meiN guzree
zindagi kis azaab meiN guzree
-Fani Badayuni

milti hai khoo-e-yaar* se naar* iltihaab* meiN
kaafir hooN gar n miltee ho raahat azaab meiN
(khoo-e-yaar = habit of beloved, naar = fire, iltihaab = hell)
-Ghalib

ishq hai aashiqoN ke jalne ko
ye jahannum meiN hai azaab kahaaN
-Mir Taqi Mir

duaoN ke saath
Zarraa
Zarrasaab,
waah kya beshkimmatii sher pesh kiye haiN aapne soraoN ke

gustakhee muaaf.. par ek uljhan hai, Faiz saab ke sher ko leke..
aaye kuchh abr* kuchh sharaab aaye
us ke baad aaye jo azaab aaye


abr ke saath, saraab muttaliq lafz hai, toh aap zaraa bataayeNge ki wahaaN sharaab hi sahi lafz hai ya saraab hona laajmi hai?



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I missed so much on this thread.........mere dostoN kya khoobsurat aashaar se sajaya hai is thread ko alfaaz azaab ko lekar, zarraji, ananth jiju, hassan, aadeil.....you guys are awesome.....bahot kuch seekhne mila is thread par.....will be back shortly with new sher
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I missed so much on this thread.........mere dostoN kya khoobsurat aashaar se sajaya hai is thread ko alfaaz azaab ko lekar, zarraji, ananth jiju, hassan, aadeil.....you guys are awesome.....bahot kuch seekhne mila is thread par.....will be back shortly with new sher
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Adaab mehfil-e-fusoon-e-alfaaz,
aik puraani Ghazal pesh-e-khidmat hai,
Lafz azaab MaQte meiN numayaaN hai:-


lavaa mohabbat ka phoot pada, jab pehli baar tu khwaab hua
phir raatooN ki neend haram hui, mera rukh khuli kitaab hua

khalqat-e-shehr meiN ik chehre per nigaah jaa thehri...
us raat chaand ne karwat li, phir ussi ka chehra mehtaab hua

mehak uthaa mera aangan aur ujray chaman ko ranaayi mili
mukhra-e-jaan shabnam se tar-ba-tar ho kar rangat-e-gulaab hua

vasl ka hur lamha mukhtasir hua, phir hijr ne jese jakar liya
mera badan jhulasta giya, mere gham ka nagar shadaab hua

jab dard-e-tanhai ne shiddat ikhtiyaar ki, main be-tahasha ro diya
jigar se khoon tapakta raha aur "hSn" mubtala-e-azaab hua...



Waah !! Har sher mein ek naala ek fughaan aur ghazal pursoz !! Bahaut khoob !! Aur lafz "azaab" ka bhi khoob istemaal hua hai !! Dheron daad Hassan bhai !!


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'azaab' lafz pe mere likhe hue qalaamoN se kuch ashaar pesh karna chahunga..

zeher bhii pee looN gar tu pilaae laboN se
ya azaab me tere zindaaN tak chalooN

kamar se baandh ke khinchenge wo tere kafas* ko
kise uthaanee hai azaab is sard murde baar* ki
(kafas = dead body, baar = burden)

chaltee rahee ghadee kee tarah zindagee meree
bakee bache yahaan pe kuchh dam azaab ke

rukhsaar pe bosa na diya, tumne sharam meN
gar sharmo hayaa hai to, azaab kyuN ye bekaar looN

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wwwwaaahhhh!!! chaaron aashaar bahaut khoob aur sab mein lafz "azaab" ka asardaar istemaal dekhne ko milta hai. aur 2nd sher ke to bas kya kehne ... kya khoob narrative hai aur kya raw intensity !! wah wah wah Aadeil bhai !!!


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Zarrasaab,
waah kya beshkimmatii sher pesh kiye haiN aapne soraoN ke

gustakhee muaaf.. par ek uljhan hai, Faiz saab ke sher ko leke..
aaye kuchh abr kuchh sharaab aaye
us ke baad aaye jo azaab aaye


abr ke saath, saraab muttaliq lafz hai, toh aap zaraa bataayeNge ki wahaaN sharaab hi sahi lafz hai ya saraab hona laajmi hai?
Aadeil bhai, bahaut achchha sawaal kiya aap ne aur shayari par guftagoo ke liye ek bahaut interesting mudda bhi uthaaya hai. is thread ki spirit bhi ye hi hai ki hum guftagoo ke zariye mashq-e-sukhan karein.

main apni limited samajh ke daayre ke andar, 2-3 points arz karna chaahoonga.. would be eager to have your opinion on it as well.

1. sab se pehle to main ne ye socha ki pehle confirm kar liya jaaye ki Faiz sahab ne misre meiN kaun se lafz ka istemaal kiya hai - sharaab, saraab ya koyee teesra. waise main ne to har jagah "sharaab" hi parha tha, lekin doubly confirm karna chaahta tha. to kyunki ye ek bahaut hi mashhoor aur popular ghazal ka matla hai, jise kayee jaane maane gayakon ne apni aawaz di hai, to main ne un ki recordings search kari ke is lafz mutalliq kuchh confirmation mil sake. phir neeche waale links mile jo mehdi hassan, jagajit singh aur ghulam ali ki gaayee huwee ye ghazal ke hain. jaisa ki aap in mein sunenge, lafz "sharaab" ka istemaal sunaayee deta hai.

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2. to agar ye maan liya jaaye ki lafz "sharaab" hi hai, to sawaal uthta hai ki "aaye kuchh abr kuchh sharaab aaye" ka interpetation kya hai? faiz sahab is misre mein kya farma rahe hain? aur jaisa ki aap ne farmaaya "sharaab aur abr" ka kya connection hai ?

3. mere limited interpretation aur imagination mein, misra e oola ke 2 scenarios samajh mein aa rahe hain

(a) wish a few clouds were to appear and wish some liquor were to appear

(b) a few clouds have appeared, so how I wish some liquor also appears

abr aur sharaab ka ye rishta hai, mere hisaab se, ki baadal ki chhaon mein, khaas taur se din ke waqt, sharaab peene ka mahaul sa ban jaata hai, shayad is liye ki lagta hai ki din mein hi raat ho gayi - shayad kuchh is liye ki mausam suhana ho jaata hai aur mind relaxed jis se bhi sharaab peene ka dil karne lagta hai. waise isee thought se somewhat related topic par Ghalib ka ek shaandaar aur mashhoor sher hai

ghalib chhuti sharaab par ab bhi kabhi kabhi
peeta hooN roz-e-abr-o-shab-e-maahtaab meiN
-ghalib

(waise sharaab peene ke liye bas koyee mauka ya bahaana mil jaaye to kaafi hai, din aur raat ka jhamela kaisa )

aur misra e saani mein, "azaab" is liye, ki yoon to sharaab peena hi gunaah hai aur us par din mein peena to double gunaah ya phir ye ki jab itne achchhe maahaul mein sharaab peene ka lutf utha liya ho, then who cares what happens next - jo bhi bure se bura ho hamaare saath ho jaane do (waise ek practical interpretation ye bhi ho sakta hai ki agar din mein sharaab piyoge to hangover ka azaab to zaroor jhelna parhega )

waise ye saara mera apni limited knowledge, information aur imagination par based interpretation hai ho sakta hai koyee aur bhi interptation nikalta ho.

waise, main "saraab" ke saath koyee scenario ya interpretation ab tak naheen bana paaya hoon. sach poochhiye to main ne "sharaab" ke scenario par hi zyada focus kiya kyunki mujhe laga ki faiz sahab ne "sharaab" ke mutalliq baat kahi hai, to humein unhi ki soch par aage sochna chaahiye. saath hi, "saraab" aur "azaab" mein koyee connection naheen bana paaya jis se oola aur saani saath aa jaayein. but if you have any opinion on it, then most welcome to voice it, would be really glad to listen

and many thanks Aadeil bhai for raising this point - it's a very interesting discussion topic

And also .... Cheers

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I missed so much on this thread.........mere dostoN kya khoobsurat aashaar se sajaya hai is thread ko alfaaz azaab ko lekar, zarraji, ananth jiju, hassan, aadeil.....you guys are awesome.....bahot kuch seekhne mila is thread par.....will be back shortly with new sher

Thanks N@zneen ji and welcome back. Waise abhi lafz "azaab" par ghaur karne ke liye kaafi waqt baaki hai ... poore 5 din aur ... itne mein to aashaar-e-lafz-e-azaab ka ek deewaan likh sakteeN haiN aap


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