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~Jalaa karte hain~ - 9th May 2006, 07:51 AM
Woh aJnabee ban ke mila karte hain
Phir bhi kyun humse gilaa karte hain

Zakhm dete hain kuch Jaan_bujh kar
Phir chupke se aake dawa karte hain

Pehle to Jeete Jee maar diya hum ko
Ab Qaatil woh aake Duaa karte hain

Kisse woh wafa ke sunaate rahe aur
Hum bewafaa ho ke wafa karte hain

Armaan koi bacha nahii iss Dil me ab
Khaak hone par bhii Jalaa karte hain

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hi - 9th May 2006, 11:24 AM
bahut khoob dewaangi ji bahoot khoob likha hai aap ne,aise hi likhte rahiye,

ye lines kaafi achhi lagi

Zakhm dete hain kuch Jaan_bujh kar
Phir chupke se aake dawa karte hain


Pehle to Jeete Jee maar diya hum ko
Ab Qaatil woh aake Duaa karte hain

Armaan koi bacha nahii iss Dil me ab
Khaak hone par bhii Jalaa karte hain


aise hi likhte rahiye
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9th May 2006, 05:14 PM
bahut khoob! bahut khoob!
...bahut pasand aaya apka kalaam...daad kabool kijiyega

apna khayal rakhyiega

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9th May 2006, 07:44 PM
Woh aJnabee ban ke mila karte hain
Phir bhi kyun humse gilaa karte hain

Zakhm dete hain kuch Jaan_bujh kar
Phir chupke se aake dawa karte hain

Namaskar Devangi Ji

Aaj kayi din baad aapka qalam padha........Bahut khoobsurat likha hay Aapney......hamare daad kabul kijeyega aur yuun hi likhtey rahiye...

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Re: hi - 9th May 2006, 07:48 PM
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bahut khoob dewaangi ji bahoot khoob likha hai aap ne,aise hi likhte rahiye,

ye lines kaafi achhi lagi

Zakhm dete hain kuch Jaan_bujh kar
Phir chupke se aake dawa karte hain


Pehle to Jeete Jee maar diya hum ko
Ab Qaatil woh aake Duaa karte hain

Armaan koi bacha nahii iss Dil me ab
Khaak hone par bhii Jalaa karte hain


aise hi likhte rahiye
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aapne isse parha aur pasand kiya iss ke liye bahut bahut shukriya.
   
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bahut achha hai - 9th May 2006, 09:17 PM
bahut achha hai dil tak pahunchane walee baat kahee hai likhte rahana
apana khayal rakahana
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11th May 2006, 08:12 PM
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bahut khoob! bahut khoob!
...bahut pasand aaya apka kalaam...daad kabool kijiyega

apna khayal rakhyiega
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Aap yaha aaye aur isse parha aur pasand kiya iss ke liye bahut shukriya. aap bhi likhte rahiyega aur apna khyaal rakhiyega.
   
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11th May 2006, 08:15 PM
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Woh aJnabee ban ke mila karte hain
Phir bhi kyun humse gilaa karte hain

Zakhm dete hain kuch Jaan_bujh kar
Phir chupke se aake dawa karte hain

Namaskar Devangi Ji

Aaj kayi din baad aapka qalam padha........Bahut khoobsurat likha hay Aapney......hamare daad kabul kijeyega aur yuun hi likhtey rahiye...

Sada kush rahiye
Sukanya ji,

Aap ko yaha dekh ke kitna achha laga yeh mein bata nahi sakti. aur aapne aaise hi saath diya to mein jaroor likhungi. Aap bhi khush rahiyega.
   
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Re: bahut achha hai - 11th May 2006, 08:16 PM
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bahut achha hai dil tak pahunchane walee baat kahee hai likhte rahana
apana khayal rakahana
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Aapne isse parha aur samjhaa yeh bhi bahut hain. aaise hi aage bhi saath rahiyega aur aap bhi apna khyaal rakhiyega.
   
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12th May 2006, 11:56 AM
hi devangi,
ek ek line me pyar ke sath dard ka jajba he,
kise chune kise chhode..............
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Woh aJnabee ban ke mila karte hain
Phir bhi kyun humse gilaa karte hain

Zakhm dete hain kuch Jaan_bujh kar
Phir chupke se aake dawa karte hain

Pehle to Jeete Jee maar diya hum ko
Ab Qaatil woh aake Duaa karte hain

Kisse woh wafa ke sunaate rahe aur
Hum bewafaa ho ke wafa karte hain

Armaan koi bacha nahii iss Dil me ab
Khaak hone par bhii Jalaa karte hain

with wishes
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22nd May 2006, 11:26 AM
hi devangi

itna achha likhne lagi hain aap to aate hee ke ham soch rahe hain ke ab hame reply kaun dega sare reply to aapki shayri ke liye honge it's joking but realy very nice n Heart touching ek naye dost ko dil se daad de raha hun kabool kijiyega or hamare liye aisi gajlon ko likhte rahiyega

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22nd May 2006, 08:25 PM
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Aapne isse parha aur pasand kiya iss ke liye bahut bahut shukriya.
   
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22nd May 2006, 08:29 PM
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hi devangi

itna achha likhne lagi hain aap to aate hee ke ham soch rahe hain ke ab hame reply kaun dega sare reply to aapki shayri ke liye honge it's joking but realy very nice n Heart touching ek naye dost ko dil se daad de raha hun kabool kijiyega or hamare liye aisi gajlon ko likhte rahiyega
Anish ji,

Mein aap jaisa kaha likhti hun, yeh to bas kuch yun hi aaise hi. khair, aap ko pasand aaya jaan ke achha laga. aap ka dil chhu liya to mera likhna safal huya. aaise hi saath rahiyega aur aap bhi likhte rahiyega.

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Re: ~Jalaa karte hain~ - 22nd May 2006, 08:56 PM
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Zakhm dete hain kuch Jaan_bujh kar
Phir chupke se aake dawa karte hain

Pehle to Jeete Jee maar diya hum ko
Ab Qaatil woh aake Duaa karte hain

Kisse woh wafa ke sunaate rahe aur
Hum bewafaa ho ke wafa karte hain

Armaan koi bacha nahii iss Dil me ab
Khaak hone par bhii Jalaa karte hain

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Devangi jee.. Matle ko chhor kar mujeh baaki sab sher bohat pasand aaye.... yooN hi likhte rahiye daad haazir hai....

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22nd May 2006, 08:59 PM
Mayank ji,

Aap ko yaha dekh ke bahut achha laga. chalo aap ko kuch to pasand aaya. aaise hi apni raaye dete rahiyega aur sikhaate rahiyega. thanks!
   
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