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2nd November 2004, 06:10 PM
Dear friends
Fir se aap sabhi ke liye apni ek nai rachna pesh kar raha hun yun to kai dino se likhne ke liye kuchh tha hee nahi ab kuchh likh paya to aap sabhi kee najar karta hun sujhaw pane ke haq ke saath jo aapne hee diya hai mujhe … Fana kee dhool se ijaad ho raha hai koi ! Kyun ye lagta hai ke aagaaz ho raha hai koi ! Tum is ada se ghar se bahar nikalte ho Khabar nahi hai tumhe barbaad ho raha hai koi ! Kyun nahi sochte ijjat kharidne waale… Ke unke ghar ka hee neelam ho raha hai koi ! Wo jo kahni thee tumse baat mukhtsar see hai .. Tumhare ishq mai nakaam ho raha hai koi ! Na bedakhl kar rishta chahe nafrat ka hee rakh Hamare dil pe to ahsaan ho raha hai koi ! Wo bekhabar hain jinse bepnaah mohabbat kee Yanha pe khamkha badnaam ho raha hai koi ! Mere marne pe “Anish” tum na ashk chhalkana .. Jindgi kaid thee ajaad ho raha hai koi ! tum mujhe bhool bhi jao to ye haq hai tumko ! meri baat or hai maine to mohobbat kee hai !! :) anish.paliwal@gmail.com:) |
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2nd November 2004, 08:34 PM
anish
ek shyaar kaise ho yaar? tumhare khiyalat koparha...dekha or samjhne ki koshish ki acha likha hay bhai.....har sher aik apni hikahani byan karta hay aik sher jis ne inspire kiya jis ki soch ne khaincha Kyun nahi sochte ijjat kharidne waale… Ke unke ghar ka hee neelam ho raha hai koi is sher ki soch shyad har kisi ko samjh nhai aye...magar aik dahkti hui wsoch liye hwe hay apne ander... bohat khub yar apna khiyal rkahna..likhte rehna.. khan |
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3rd November 2004, 08:28 AM
dear khan bhi
jo mai apne shero ke andar samet laya tha or jise jahir karna chahta tha aap samjh gaye to mera samjhana safal ho gaya gazal sher rubai ye sabhi tabhi safal hain jab unke andar jo kahne kee koshish kee gai hai wo dusra samajh jaye jin line ko aapne saraha pahle to iske liye shukriya ada karta hun or fir khana chahta hun kee agar unka matlab har dil samjh le to shayad ye duniya kuchh had tak or sundar ho jaya hai na aapne kaha wo apne andar dahkti hui soch liye hai to janab aisi suchai aksar dahkti hui hoti hain jinhe such mai hur dil mai dahkna hee chahiye ek baar fir se aapka shukr gujar hun kee aapne apna samay meri rachna ko diya or uske baare mai apni ray dee thanks 1s again apka dost kuchh jana pahchana kuchh ajnabi tum mujhe bhool bhi jao to ye haq hai tumko ! meri baat or hai maine to mohobbat kee hai !! :) anish.paliwal@gmail.com:) |
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3rd November 2004, 09:00 AM
Anish...
Apke yeh sher tau kamaal ke rahe! Kyun nahi sochte ijjat kharidne waale… Ke unke ghar ka hee neelam ho raha hai koi ! Na bedakhl kar rishta chahe nafrat ka hee rakh Hamare dil pe to ahsaan ho raha hai koi ! Mere marne pe “Anish” tum na ashk chhalkana .. Jindgi kaid thee ajaad ho raha hai koi ! na bedakhl kar rishta...yahan dewaangi bakhubi bayaan kee hai aapne...aur haan gham-e-hayaat se azaad hone mein kaisa gham aur aansoo kyun...? bahut khuub! hamari or se bhi daad kabuul kijiiey paras gayi ruton ka sulagataa sa intezaar bhii ho mere khuloos kaa andaaz ye bhii sachhaa hai rakhuun na rabt magar dostii shumaar bhii ho --Sayyidaa Fatimaa Hasan |
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3rd November 2004, 11:20 AM
ANISH JI....
Bahut hi lazawad likha hai apne...... har ek sher apne mein kutch bayan kar raha hai..... ye sher hume kheench sa gaya hai.... Kyun nahi sochte ijjat kharidne waale… Ke unke ghar ka hee neelam ho raha hai koi ! Mere marne pe “Anish” tum na ashk chhalkana .. Jindgi kaid thee ajaad ho raha hai koi ! Socha reply karoon kuch sher e saath... lekin new post ki hai " Barbaad ho raha hai koi" **(*·.¸(`·.¸ ¸.·´)¸.·*)** *·.¸Paigaam -e- Aman¸.·* **(¸.·´(¸.·* *·.¸)`·.¸)** ~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~* inhan ankhaaon vicho kadi, tere hanju vaghe si..... aaj ki hoye, jehda ^AMAN^ da lahoo vagda ae...... AMAN RAHI |
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3rd November 2004, 11:24 AM
Hi Anish Ji,
Wakayi mein ek bohot hi umda kalaam likha hai aapne. Yeh do sher to behud pasand aaye: Tum is ada se ghar se bahar nikalte ho Khabar nahi hai tumhe barbaad ho raha hai koi ! Kyun nahi sochte ijjat kharidne waale… Ke unke ghar ka hee neelam ho raha hai koi ! Humari dili daad qabool kare. Salim If there are no tears in the eyes, there will be no rainbow in the soul Happiness is a butterfly, which, when pursued, is always just beyond your grasp, but which, if you sit down quietly, may alight upon you. We come to love not by finding a perfect person but by learning to see an imperfect person perfectly |
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Re: neelam ho raha hai koi ! -
3rd November 2004, 11:56 AM
hi anish
kaise ho dost...? ek arse baad tumhe yahan dekh kar mat pucho kitni khushi hui...umeed karta hoon ab tum poori tarah se sehatmand hoge...apni khairiyat ki khabar jaroor dena. Tum is ada se ghar se bahar nikalte ho Khabar nahi hai tumhe barbaad ho raha hai koi ! bahooot khooob!!! Kyun nahi sochte ijjat kharidne waale… Ke unke ghar ka hee neelam ho raha hai koi ! yeh sher bahoot gehra kaha hai aapne....sach kahun to aapne in do misron mein hazaar pannon ki baat samet di...bahoot bahooot khoob...daad kubool kijiye. Wo jo kahni thee tumse baat mukhtsar see hai .. Tumhare ishq mai nakaam ho raha hai koi ! bahoot khoob..jaajawab!! Wo bekhabar hain jinse bepnaah mohabbat kee Yanha pe khamkha badnaam ho raha hai koi ! bahoot ache.. Mere marne pe “Anish” tum na ashk chhalkana .. Jindgi kaid thee ajaad ho raha hai koi ! bahoot khoob!! anish bhai...aapka koi jawab nahin....dil jeet liya aapki gazal ne...itne dinon baad aapko padh kar dil khush ho gaya...bahoot muqammal gazal pesh ki hai aapne...meri dil se nikli daad kubool kijiye....isi khubsurati se likhte rahiye....aapke laut aane se jaise is mehfil mein raunak laut aayi hai...take care -MANOJ karte hai jo "kureel" se gila karte rahein. |
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4th November 2004, 10:33 AM
dear Parastaar jee
aapki daad se to dil or khush ho gaya waise hum is kabil nahi par aap or manoj jee jaise umda shayaron kee daad milna yun hee to nahi hai na jaroor mere alfaajon mai kuchh to raha hoga ab mahsoos ho raha hai warna to maine ye gajal dil kee kuchh ansuni baaton ko baya karne ke liye likhi thee aapne in sheron kee gahrai ko bakhubi samjha or samjaya aap yanha aai to yahi mere liye kafi tha or aapka reply to mujhe dil se khush kar gaya jald hee apni nai kalam ke saath hazir hounga tab tak ke liye kuda hafiz -------- dear aman jee aap yanha aaye mujhe meri rachna ke liye saraha khushi hui aap jaise rahi yanha aate rahe to or kya chahiye mujh jaise naacheez ko aapki daad ke liye dil se shukriya kabool kijiye ------------ dear candyboy apne apne is adna se dost ko is kabil samjha ke aapki daad mile iske liye dil se shukrgujar hun apne meri rachna ko saraha iske liye aaki parkhi najar ka shukriya mujhe bhi to ada karna chahiye na to shukriya kabool kijiye ------------- dear manoj jee aapka to tareef karne kee ada bhi shayarana hai aap jaise bade shayaron ke samne such mai mai kuchh bhi nahi mujhe to dil kee baat alfajo mai baya karne ke liye bhi das baar sochna padta hai kya kare itna achha likh nahi pata agar aapki kalam se yahi likha hota to mai janta hun wo kuchh or jadu bhikherta mai to bas yun hee kabhi kabhi ...khair ab mai kafi had tak achha hun or ye sab aap doston kee duaon ka asar hai janta hun , yanha waise to roj ata tha par kya karta kuchh tha hee nahi jise post karta abhi pichle dino udas jee ne kaha kee mai yanha apni nai rachna bheju to kuchh likha tha bhej diya par kya janta tha kee wo itna asar liye hogi ke aap jaise dosto kee najar is par padegi ok ab apka dost apni nai gajal ke sath jald hee aayega ye wada raha khuda hafij tum mujhe bhool bhi jao to ye haq hai tumko ! meri baat or hai maine to mohobbat kee hai !! :) anish.paliwal@gmail.com:) |
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6th November 2004, 08:27 AM
hi friends
aap sabhi ke reply ke liye thanx. tum mujhe bhool bhi jao to ye haq hai tumko ! meri baat or hai maine to mohobbat kee hai !! :) anish.paliwal@gmail.com:) |
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29th November 2005, 11:30 PM
Hello Bro...
Its Just Outstanding. "Wo jo kahni thee tumse baat mukhtsar see hai .. Tumhare ishq mai nakaam ho raha hai koi !" Warm Ragards इस भरे शहर में हम Dard-e-Sush, जो न पाया उसे भी खोते हैं! lab pe muskaan ko liye ae dost, kandhon pe laash apni dhote hein is bhare sheher me ham dard-e-sush, jo na paaya use bhi khote hein |
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29th November 2005, 11:37 PM
dear Dard-e-sush sahab
shukriya ke aapne hamari is rachana ko tareef ke kaabil jana thnx for reply tum mujhe bhool bhi jao to ye haq hai tumko ! meri baat or hai maine to mohobbat kee hai !! :) anish.paliwal@gmail.com:) |
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Aadab Dear Anish Jee, Hope You Are Well
 Aapko Parhkar Dil Ko Achchha Laga...Khoub Likhte Hain Aap~*~Deewana To Deewangi Se Hi Pehchan Jaa Sakti Hain..Baas Wo Aankhein Hona Zarouri Hain..,Shayaad..**Dil Ki Gehraaion Ki Gehraaion Se Dher-o-Dher Saare Phoul_Shukriya_Daad **Khush Rahiye ye Duwaaon ke saath ijaazat...**God bless You. Jiss Jagah Koyi Na Pahuncha Wahaan Tak Pahunche Main Samajhta Huun Harr Dil Mein Khuda Rehta Hain Mera Paigam Mohabbat Hain Jaahan Tak Pahunche** *~~~Ahsan Sherazi Jee~~~** *Pure Love** |
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5th January 2006, 10:39 AM
Anish Ji ...........kya kahun sab ne itna keh diya hai ........ki mere liye sabad hi nahi bache..............sirf itna kehna chahungi .....ki aapki ye gazal dil ko chuu gai .........aur pata hai nahi chala ki isse kitni baar padhti chai gai main.......likhte rahiyega......
Tere Har Sabad Ne Dil Pe Kuch Aisa Asar Kiya hai Humne Thama Khudko Badi Muskhil Se Sabar Kiya Hai |
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behad umda likha hai aapne anish ji aur aakhiri ashaar to bass kya kahe hum.. bahut khoob.. achha laga aapko padh ke.. likhte rahiyega****** Your attitude towards life decides Life's attitude towards you... |
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9th January 2006, 12:15 AM
hi palavi
shukriya ke tumhe mera likha pasand aaya jankar khushi hui nis rachna ko aapne saraha to ye rachna sarthak ho gai thnx again tum mujhe bhool bhi jao to ye haq hai tumko ! meri baat or hai maine to mohobbat kee hai !! :) anish.paliwal@gmail.com:) |
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9th January 2006, 12:28 AM
anish ji
Yun to ye kavis kayi arse pehle hi padh li thi maine.. par waqt ne pal bhar ki fursat na di reply karne ki... khair ab mauka bhi hai waqt bhi.. to aapko batata chalun aapka har ek sher mujhe behad pasand aaya .. aap yahaN aate raha kariye... hum bhi kuch taro taza padhte rahnege aapk mubarak ho ye kalaam aapka apna Kunal Hai 'sifar' bhi reyazi ka hissa.. Shayrii bhi hisaab ki hogi.. |
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9th January 2006, 01:52 PM
Wo bekhabar hain jinse bepnaah mohabbat kee
Yanha pe khamkha badnaam ho raha hai koi ! Poori ghazal behtreen...per ye sher,....laa jawaab. YooNhi likhte rahiye Chaand Anjaam sochkar, aksar khaamosh hi reh jaate haiN. - Chaand |
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