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--> .." Bahut kuch badal jata hai Tere jaane ke baad.." <-- - 10th April 2009, 12:33 AM

Mahfil main Sabhi doston ko OMi ka Salam....Ek chhoti si koshish ke saath me ye lines aap logo ko suna raha hu..Ummeed hai aap sab ko pasand aayegi.....


Maine aapni taraf se achaa likhane ki kafi kosis ki hai.. agar fir bhi koi galti reh gai hoo, toh aap loog maaf kariga aur guzarish hai ki galtiyo ka Sudhar bhi batiyega... Jis se main aane wale samay me un galtiyo ko sudhar saku..


Dhanywad..

** OMi **

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" Bahut kuch badal jata hai Tere jaane ke baad "

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Bahut kuch badal jata hai Tere aane ke baad..
Bahut kuch bichad jata hai Tere jaane ke baad..!!

Woh samandar ki lehre, Woh rait ke bane mahal ..
Bahut kuch beh jata hai Saahil se takra jaane ke baad..!!

Woh baarish ke moti, Woh taaro ki khawahish..
Bahut kuch bikhar jata hai Khawaab toot jaane ke baad..!!

Woh tere saath ki hashi.. Woh sath chehare ki khusi..
Bahut kuch badal jata hai tujh Bichhad jaane ke baad..!!

Woh Kasme wade khana..woh mannate mangana..
Har Faisla badal jata hai, niyat badal jaane ke baad.!!

Who bhare din ko soona..Woh gehri raato ko jagna..
Bahut kuch badal jata hai ek rista toot jaane ke baad..!!

Woh ghani andheri raat.. Woh taaro ka chamchmana..
Bahut kuch badal jata hai Chand nikal jaane ke baad..!!


Woh teri parchaiyo se takrana, Woh saayo ka lehrana..
Bahut kuch mit jata hai, Andhera chhaa jaane ke baad ..!!


Woh dhalata suraj aur woh chandani ka aana..
Sab kuch khatam ho jata hai Maut aa jaane ke baad..!!


** OMi**



Ek InteZaar si ban gayi hai Zindagi,
Har pal tere aane ki Aash mein.......

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10th April 2009, 05:55 AM

bahot hi achha laga hume aapka ehesaas Omi jee
youn hi bazam ko roshan karte rahiye
apna khayal rakhiyega

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Mohabbat ke baad mohabbat mumkin hai faraz.
Magar toot ke chahna sirf ek baar hota hai


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... thxx a TON.. my dear... m really glad to hav ur comments here... tumhe achaa laga.. Bahut khusi hui mujhe yeh jaan kar..

..Bas tum sath deete rahena.. hum aur bhi likhate jaynege..



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Aaj Rahane dE unhE yUhi Kal AAna Jab jAwAn hoNge " phOOL "...


Kahe " OMi " Abhi to aaye HAi, " mehfiL-e-GAzaL " me tumHari..
thODa waQt do nAcheeZ ko, fiR huM bhi tumHe Lagenge " cOOL "
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Hi Omi, tumne bht khoobsurat likha hai........ehsaas bht khoobsurat haiN.......technically correct ghazal likhne keliye check the link given below.......it'll help u a lot

http://www.shayri.com/forums/showthread.php?t=2125
   
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10th April 2009, 01:37 PM

.. ohh very thx 2 u n@@z..

Chalo tum loog siKhate tau hum Sikhate Jayenge.. lets see kab tak sab set hota hai aapna...lol

thx for ur " Hausala- Afjai ".... cyaa ..

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Hi Omi, tumne bht khoobsurat likha hai........ehsaas bht khoobsurat haiN.......technically correct ghazal likhne keliye check the link given below.......it'll help u a lot

http://www.shayri.com/forums/showthread.php?t=2125


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Har pal tere aane ki Aash mein.......
   
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Hi Omi, tumne bht khoobsurat likha hai........ehsaas bht khoobsurat haiN.......technically correct ghazal likhne keliye check the link given below.......it'll help u a lot

http://www.shayri.com/forums/showthread.php?t=2125

nazneen jee,

har poetry Ghazal nahii.n hotii...

to har poetry par Ghazal ke rules kaise laagu ho sakte hai.n?

waise yeh ek nazm ke jaise hai...

Bohot kuch badal jata hai
Tere aane ke baad,
Bohot kuch bichar jata hai
Tere jaane ke baad,
Wo samandar ki leherey,
Wo rait ke mehal,
Bohot kuch beh jata hai
Saahil se takra jaane ke baad,
Wo baarish ke moti,
Wo taaro ki khuwahish,
Bohot kuch bikhar jata hai
Khuwaab toot jaane ke baad,
Wo teri parchaiyon se takrana,
Wo saayon ka lehrana
Bohot kuch mit jata hai
andhera chhaa jaane ke baad ...


is poetry ko de-assemble kar ke , phir se assemble kiyaa gaya , aur de-assemble kar ke assemble karne se kuchh puraani cheeze.n kharaab hoti hi hai aur kuchh naii cheeze.n bhii lagti hai....


-Mayank



buraa jo dekhan mai.n Chalaa, buraa naa milyaa koye
jo mann Khojaa apnaa to mujh se buraa naa koye



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10th April 2009, 10:06 PM

I think.. ye song tumko answer dene ke liye kafi hai...

kuchh to log kahenge,
logo kaa kaam hain kahanaa..
chhodo in bekaar ki baato
mein " OMi " ,
kahi beet naa jaaye raina....

Kuch reet jagat kee ayesee hai,
Har ek subah kee shaam huyee..
Too kaun hai, teraa naam hain kyaa
" Seetaa " bhee yahaa badanaam huyee..

fir kyo sansaar kee baaton se,
bheeg gaye tere nainaa..!!

hum ko jo taane dete hai
hum khoye hain in rang raliyon me..!!

hum ne un ko bhee chhup chhup ke
aate dekhaa in galiyon me..!!


Ye sach hain zoothhee baat nahee
Aab tum bolo ye sach hain naa
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Ek InteZaar si ban gayi hai Zindagi,
Har pal tere aane ki Aash mein.......

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Milawaat Ram...Omi......... Yahan wahan se chora kar mixture banakar

phir gaana gaata hai ....Kuch tou log kahingey...

Baqz ka kaam hai Likhna......
   
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