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veer aur preet ki kabhi na khatam hune vali love story -
3rd May 2007, 10:03 PM
hello sat shir akal ji namaste and salam
mera name preet hai me jotty di siter ha
aj me ek new game shuru karan laggi ha umid kardi ha ki tusi sare jane sath davo ghe
is game vich ek ladhka hai jisda name VEER hove gha te ik ladhki jisda name PREET hove gha
ena dona te ek love story likha ghe sare jane ral ke eh done jane kidda milde ne kidda dost bande ne kidda ena di apas ch ladhi hundi hai kidda mazak karde ne ena di femilly vare ene di soch vere appa ena de dialogo kise film de bhi likh sakde ha kise siriel de hbi te ama jo appa sunde ha us vare bhi
ex: itefak naal veer preet nu ek park ch milda hai te oh apas ch ladh pende ne
kyon ladhe ne eh koi das sakda hai es tara ek love story likhi ja sakdi par je tusi sath davo ghe ta
sorry je app nu theek na lagge ta teh dil se maffi chondi ha
khush rehna
preet
dosti aur pyar sirf kismat valo ke nasseb hote hai
har kisi ke nahi
preet ne aj tak jise bhi dosti ki usne hi dhoka de diya
aur jise mohabat ki usne to jeene ka arman hi shen liya
kamalrajpreet
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3rd May 2007, 10:17 PM
preet jee SSA:
mujHe ziyaadaaH panjaabi to nahiiN aaTtii par thoRii seeKhii hai priyaa didi se ab jitni seeKH paaYaa usse yeH pataa chaltaa hai kii aap love story banaanaa chaahte haiN maiN sahi keh rahaa hooN naa? ab eeS kaa jawaaB to priyaa didi aur sunita ji deN sakti hai unko acHii panjaabi aaTtii haii ..khuShii ees baat ki huYii ki aapne apne vichaar sab ke saamne raKHeN..
khuSh raheN
duaoN ke saath ijaazaT
aapkaa dost
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3rd May 2007, 10:21 PM
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preet jee SSA:
mujHe ziyaadaaH panjaabi to nahiiN aaTtii par thoRii seeKhii hai priyaa didi se ab jitni seeKH paaYaa usse yeH pataa chaltaa hai kii aap love story banaanaa chaahte haiN maiN sahi keh rahaa hooN naa? ab eeS kaa jawaaB to priyaa didi aur sunita ji deN sakti hai unko acHii panjaabi aaTtii haii ..khuShii ees baat ki huYii ki aapne apne vichaar sab ke saamne raKHeN..
khuSh raheN
duaoN ke saath ijaazaT
aapkaa dost
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thanks dhaval ji kya me appko bhaya khe kar bula sakti hoon
aur jo appne kaha bilkul theek kaha me ek love story likhan chahati hoon jisme hum sabke ehsah hoon
kyon ki hum sabne kisi na kisi se pyar jarror kya hai kisi ko pyar nasseb hua hai aur koi meri tara bad- nasseb hai jiska pyar kho ghea is liya me app sabh ka sath chahati hoon
duaon ke sath izazat
apki bahen preet
dosti aur pyar sirf kismat valo ke nasseb hote hai
har kisi ke nahi
preet ne aj tak jise bhi dosti ki usne hi dhoka de diya
aur jise mohabat ki usne to jeene ka arman hi shen liya
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thanks dhaval ji kya me appko bhaya khe kar bula sakti hoon
aur jo appne kaha bilkul theek kaha me ek love story likhan chahati hoon jisme hum sabke ehsah hoon
kyon ki hum sabne kisi na kisi se pyar jarror kya hai kisi ko pyar nasseb hua hai aur koi meri tara bad- nasseb hai jiska pyar kho ghea is liya me app sabh ka sath chahati hoon
duaon ke sath izazat
apki bahen preet
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dear preet:
jee aap hame bhaiyaa keh sakti hai..aur baRaa hi nek khayaal hai aapkaa ab deKhte hai kii baaki log kyaa kehte haiN ees par aap story liKhne kii shuruaaT to kar dijiYe
aur apne aapko badnaseeb mat samjHo .
khuSh raheN apnaa khayaal raKheN
duaoN ke saath ijaazaT
aapkaa bhaiyaa
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3rd May 2007, 10:35 PM
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dear preet:
jee aap hame bhaiyaa keh sakti hai..aur baRaa hi nek khayaal hai aapkaa ab deKhte hai kii baaki log kyaa kehte haiN ees par aap story liKhne kii shuruaaT to kar dijiYe
aur apne aapko badnaseeb mat samjHo .
khuSh raheN apnaa khayaal raKheN
duaoN ke saath ijaazaT
aapkaa bhaiyaa
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dhaval bhaiya tuhada bhot shukrya
dosti aur pyar sirf kismat valo ke nasseb hote hai
har kisi ke nahi
preet ne aj tak jise bhi dosti ki usne hi dhoka de diya
aur jise mohabat ki usne to jeene ka arman hi shen liya
kamalrajpreet
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3rd May 2007, 10:39 PM
hello eveyone
aj me story di shurbat kar rehi ha umid hai tuhada sath mile gha
veer ek ladhka hai jo italy ch rehnda hai usnu ek ladhki mildi hai usde ek dost de ghar usda name preet hunda hai
aghe tusi kuch socho ja me kalu aghe likha ghy
dosti aur pyar sirf kismat valo ke nasseb hote hai
har kisi ke nahi
preet ne aj tak jise bhi dosti ki usne hi dhoka de diya
aur jise mohabat ki usne to jeene ka arman hi shen liya
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4th May 2007, 12:27 AM
us preet te col ek doggy vi honda si......oda naav TAFFY HeGA SI.........
il taffy è il mio cane ........adeso lui è morto
grazie
aapki dost
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4th May 2007, 01:03 AM
pojja mi dispiace tanto per il tuo cane
allora aggiungiamo il tuo cane in questa storia per fare più bella dacordo
grazie tanto per venire qui
pojja de dog da neme taffy si jo marghea hai hun preet kol ek dog hai jisda name bhi taffy hove gha
thanks pooja
story
preet jabh veer se pehli var milti hai uske ek dost de ghar jis di enghegment ho rehi hai jis naal ho rehi ho hundi hai oh veer da casan hunda hai te jis khudhi naal oh rehi si oh preet si best friends si es karke dona ne us din apas ch gal bhi kitty
preet party ch ikali nahi ghy si us naal usda dog bhi si jisda name taffy hunda hai preet apne tappy naal bhot pyar kardi hundi si oh usto bina kite ni jandi hundi si.
veer ko dog se dar laghda hunda hai................................
app koshsish ki jiena aghe likhne ki mujhe khushi hoe ghy je app sath dae ghe to
varna me khudh itna vadhia nahi likh pama hgy
thanks everyone
dosti aur pyar sirf kismat valo ke nasseb hote hai
har kisi ke nahi
preet ne aj tak jise bhi dosti ki usne hi dhoka de diya
aur jise mohabat ki usne to jeene ka arman hi shen liya
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4th May 2007, 10:01 AM
preet yuuNhii aage liKhti raho ees kahaani ko aur ho sake to hindi ya english meiN liKho taa.K sab paRH sakeN use
aur tum yahaaN ees kahaani kaa roz ek part submit kar sakti ho aur ees kahaani ko aage baRhaa sakti ho ..keep it up !!
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4th May 2007, 10:25 AM
hi preet ji
aapko merul ka sadar pranaam
jese ki dhaval bhai ne kaha aur mene aapko aage bhi kaha tha ki mujhe punjabi jyada nahi aati, Dhaval bhai ne to sunita ji aur priya di se thodi bahot sikhi hai par mene to kisise nahi sikhi, kuch punjabi songs sunta hu to thodi aati hai aur aapki post ko kuch kuch samaj paya hu.
ji preet ji aapka ye game mujhe bhi bahut achcha laga, is tarah se aap apne dil ke ehsaas hamare samne rakh sakte hai.
bas aap yuhi sada muskurate raho
aapka dost
Merul
!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!
Dhoka diya tha jab tumne mujhe,
Tab dil se me naraz tha,
Phir socha ki dil se tumhe nikal du,
Magar woh kambakth dil bhi tumhare paas tha.
Merul~~~~~~~~~~>
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veer te preet di dosti -
4th May 2007, 10:06 PM
hello
Veer apne casan ki sagai apr aye hua tha waha par Preet bhi aye thi.
Veer ne preet ko pehle hbi khei bar dekha hua tha ek park me jaha par preet apne tappy ko leke aati thi preet apne taffy se bhot pyar kati thi ykon who use uski pyari si choti bahen POOJA ne diya tha magar veer us tappy ke wajjah se aj tak preet se baat nahi kar paya tha kyon ki veer ko dogs se bhot dar laghta tha aur preet janti thi ki je wohi ladhka hai jo park me harek ladhki ko shedhta hai sirf ek me hi bachi ha jisnu eh nahi bula sakia usde tappy to wajjah to preet us din bh us naal koi bhi nahi karna chondhi si par veer apne casan te usdi fidance nu leke preet kol a jyanda hai te kenda hai ki app aj bilkul diferent lagh rehi ho indian drees me app hamesha indian drees kyon nahi paleti achi lagge ghy. Preet koi bhi jawab nahi dindi bas sundi rehndi a akhar vich jado usda casan te usdi hune vali wife utho jande ne ta veer preet nu kehnda hai ki oh us naal kehs gal to naraz hai khenda hai ki mere naal ladhkya gal karn nu tarsdia ne te oh us naal kyon nahi kardi?PREET khendi hai us naal ki gal karni jisnu dosti pyar vishvas te rishtea vare pata hi na hove eh gal sunke veer haran ho jyanda hai te khenda hai ho sakda hai ki menu koi aj tak dost hi na milea hove jis naal dosti kar saka kya app mujhe dosti karoghy? Preet koi jawab ni dindi oh kehnda hai ek var dosti karke dekh lavo sabh acha dost dhunya da ban ke dekhama gha preet khe dindi hai theek a aj to appa dost hoe hun dosti niboni ja na niboni app te hai veer shukryada karda hai preet da te us vele otho chal janda hai.
Veer te Preet donia janea ne ek collage ch padhna shuru kar ditta dona nu adat ho ghy si ek dosre naal roj gal karan di roj calas to pehla a jana firh ki kitta ona ne ghar jake us vare galla kari jania.
Ek din preet veer nu kise khudhia naal jande hoe dekhdi hai te oh us din bhot rondi hai apni clas ch hbi nahi jandi veer usda intzar kar reha hunda hai jithe roj milde si par oh othe bhi nahi jandi preet jyada rohn karke bimar ho jandi hai te yadh veer nu pata chal da hai te ho us de ghar chal jyanda hai te poshda hai akhar tenu ho ki ghea hai khenda hai teri mum dasdi hai ki tu sara din rohndi rehndi hai koi preoblem hai tenu? Preet kuch bhi ni kehndi firh veer dasda hai preet nu ki usne agle mahine englend chal jana kyon ki usde gharde chonde ne ki oh apni padhai othe puri kare eh sun ke preet bhot jyada rohn laghdi hai usdin pehli var veer usde chehere te hath londa hai te hanju pojhda hai te kehnda hai tu mere karke kyon rohndi hai ina me khehdha ek changha dost ha prete kehndhi hai app to koi changha ni ho sakda rabh bhi nahi te khendhi hai me app nu kuc pochna hai app burra na manneo veer kehnda teri koi gal ni burri laghdi jo marji pochle te pochdi hai us din oh khudhi kaun si appde naal? Veer has penda hai te khenda hai kitte eh wajjah de karke ta ni bimar hoy preet khendhi hai plz anser me khenda hai oh meri sister hai eh sun ke preeet de chehre te 10 dina badda hassa onda hai ine ch preet di mothe a jyandi hai te kehndhi hai aj pure 10 dina badh eh hassi sirf veer tere karke ehi dosti hundi a. veer otho ta aghe par us vele odhe dil ch ni sawal aya ki preet ne kyon burra manne mere naal koi khudhi dekh kar par ghar anke oh es vare hi sochi ghea usnu kuch ni samjh ondhi si dosre din preet collage vapas a ghy te firh 1 mahina kime beet ghea pata ih nahi chale dona nu 2 din jado rehnde si veer de englend jaan nu firh ……………………….
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4th May 2007, 10:40 PM
Preet..
Saabto pellan taan tainu aina vadiya kamm karan layi vaddaai dena chaahaangi..
Te fer ae vi kahangi ki je aapa ais kahani nu punjabi di jagah je hindi, ya english vich likhaange taan saareyaan de palle vi pae jaavegi..
Te ik hor gal kehna chaavangi tussi bura na manaayo.. ki ek vaar ch je ka har insan ik hi scene banaaye taan jaada vadiya rahgea.. odan karke jaada log apni raai de paun ge..
I hope u don't mind.
Dhaval aur Merul : Main Preet se keh rahi hun is story ko hindi/ English me continue karne ke liye, aur saath yeh bhi keh rahi hun ki agar at a time ek insaan ek hi scene at a time banaaye to jyada acha rahega, so that more n more ppl can participate.
Chalo ab tumhare liye saari story ki summary kar deti hun..
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Veer & Preet are the best frnz of a "Would be marrying couple". Veer & Preet meet each other for the first time, on that couple's engagement. Slowly they became frnds, and started going to same college. Soon became extremely good frnds. One day Preet Sees Veer with some gal, and gets upset, she ran back to her house and started crying for days which made her sick. After few days Veer comes to see her.. and tells her that he's going to England after 1 month for further studies.
Then She inquires about that gal which turns out to be Veer's sis. Veer dosen't understand that why was Preet that upset just because of that.
They started going to college again, and one month is almost gone, there are just 2 more days left for Veer to go.
Then....
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Next :
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Since Preet has been striking off days from her calendar, and she notices that just 2 more days to go for Veer. She was miserable because neither she can stop Veer from going to England nor she can disclose her feelings for him. But she had this thing clear in her mind, that if she won't disclose her feelings, she will loose him forever. She is determined to do something, but how and what... she's totally confused.
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Someone can start from here
~Priya
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Kaise chalka doo yeh aansoon, In mein bhi To rehTe ho Tum.."
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5th May 2007, 04:47 PM
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Preet..
Saabto pellan taan tainu aina vadiya kamm karan layi vaddaai dena chaahaangi..
Te fer ae vi kahangi ki je aapa ais kahani nu punjabi di jagah je hindi, ya english vich likhaange taan saareyaan de palle vi pae jaavegi..
Te ik hor gal kehna chaavangi tussi bura na manaayo.. ki ek vaar ch je ka har insan ik hi scene banaaye taan jaada vadiya rahgea.. odan karke jaada log apni raai de paun ge..
I hope u don't mind.
Dhaval aur Merul : Main Preet se keh rahi hun is story ko hindi/ English me continue karne ke liye, aur saath yeh bhi keh rahi hun ki agar at a time ek insaan ek hi scene at a time banaaye to jyada acha rahega, so that more n more ppl can participate.
Chalo ab tumhare liye saari story ki summary kar deti hun..
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Veer & Preet are the best frnz of a "Would be marrying couple". Veer & Preet meet each other for the first time, on that couple's engagement. Slowly they became frnds, and started going to same college. Soon became extremely good frnds. One day Preet Sees Veer with some gal, and gets upset, she ran back to her house and started crying for days which made her sick. After few days Veer comes to see her.. and tells her that he's going to England after 1 month for further studies.
Then She inquires about that gal which turns out to be Veer's sis. Veer dosen't understand that why was Preet that upset just because of that.
They started going to college again, and one month is almost gone, there are just 2 more days left for Veer to go.
Then....
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Next :
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Since Preet has been striking off days from her calendar, and she notices that just 2 more days to go for Veer. She was miserable because neither she can stop Veer from going to England nor she can disclose her feelings for him. But she had this thing clear in her mind, that if she won't disclose her feelings, she will loose him forever. She is determined to do something, but how and what... she's totally confused.
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Someone can start from here
~Priya
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finaly she says :- veer, aapko to Eng. jaane ke baad aur bhi achhe dost mil jayenge to aap mujhe bhuul jaoge.
VEER :- chal pagal, koi bhi mile khuda bhi mil jaye to mein apni preet ko aur Taffy ko nahi bhuul sakta. preet tum taffy ko nahi laai.
Preet :- aapke jaane ki khabar sunke vo bimaar ho gaya, so raha hai.
veer :- preet, tumse pahali baar duur jaa raha hu. achha nahi lag raha. ye ek box hai tumhare liye. ise ghar jaake jaruur padhna.
Preet :- veer, ye khat apke liye. jaane ke baad hi padhna......ok veer aap apna khayal rakhna. khat mat likhna. internet ka jamaana hai mail karna. phone mat karna. cell ka jamaana hai mob. pe call karna ........
Veer :- pritto assi tennu chhad ke jaa riya si. tu saaddi sabsu changi dost heggi si.........sannu pool na jaiyo ve soniyo.
Preet :- nahi veer, kade vi nahi. achha veer aapka jaane ka time ho gaya.
Veer :- ok preet. ALVIDA
dono bahot rote hain. veer chala jaata hai.
preet ghar aake box kholti hai. box mein bahot sare khat hote hain. ek khat padha likha thha........
meri pyari preet o pritto,
bahot dino se kuch kahana chah raha thha. lekin kahe nahi paya. bahot khat bhi likhe, lekin de nahi paya. darta thha dil ki baat kahane se tum naraz na ho jao aur ek achhi dost ko na kho du. lekin ab ye nahi saha jaata. aaj kahana hi hai. preet..........I LOVE YOU........jaanta hu shayad tumhe bura lage. mujhe bhi bura lagta hai jab tum us Gurvani ke saath baat karti ho to. itna gussa aata hai man karta hai ki uske pichhe taffy ko chhod du..lekin majbuur hu.
preet mein kal jaa raha hu. soch man ki baat kahe du. na jaana kal aaye ya na aaye. jo hai aaj hi hai. mein tumse prem karta hu. pata nahi tum kya soch rahi hogi.
tumhara javaab chahta hu. Eng. pahonchne ke baad phone karunga. agar tumne call ri'siv nahi kiya to samjhunga ki tum mujhse pyaar nahi karti. fir tumhari zindagi se mein chala jaunga. kyuki agar fir bhi tumhare saath raha to sach.....mar jaunga ek din.....preet apna khayal rakhna. khana time pe khana........
bye
Veer
grazie
aapki dost
pooja
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5th May 2007, 04:56 PM
[quote=pooja4588;231292] finaly she says :- veer, aapko to Eng. jaane ke baad aur bhi achhe dost mil jayenge to aap mujhe bhuul jaoge.
VEER :- chal pagal, koi bhi mile khuda bhi mil jaye to mein apni preet ko aur Taffy ko nahi bhuul sakta. preet tum taffy ko nahi laai.
Preet :- aapke jaane ki khabar sunke vo bimaar ho gaya, so raha hai.
veer :- preet, tumse pahali baar duur jaa raha hu. achha nahi lag raha. ye ek box hai tumhare liye. ise ghar jaake jaruur padhna.
Preet :- veer, ye khat apke liye. jaane ke baad hi padhna......ok veer aap apna khayal rakhna. khat mat likhna. internet ka jamaana hai mail karna. phone mat karna. cell ka jamaana hai mob. pe call karna ........
Veer :- pritto assi tennu chhad ke jaa riya si. tu saaddi sabsu changi dost heggi si.........sannu pool na jaiyo ve soniyo.
Preet :- nahi veer, kade vi nahi. achha veer aapka jaane ka time ho gaya.
Veer :- ok preet. ALVIDA
dono bahot rote hain. veer chala jaata hai.
preet ghar aake box kholti hai. box mein bahot sare khat hote hain. ek khat padha likha thha........
meri pyari preet o pritto,
bahot dino se kuch kahana chah raha thha. lekin kahe nahi paya. bahot khat bhi likhe, lekin de nahi paya. darta thha dil ki baat kahane se tum naraz na ho jao aur ek achhi dost ko na kho du. lekin ab ye nahi saha jaata. aaj kahana hi hai. preet..........I LOVE YOU........jaanta hu shayad tumhe bura lage. mujhe bhi bura lagta hai jab tum us Gurvani ke saath baat karti ho to. itna gussa aata hai man karta hai ki uske pichhe taffy ko chhod du..lekin majbuur hu. pooja ji eh gurvani kaun hai? vaise veer age tak taffy se darta hi hai aur jo taffy hai preet ki marji ke bina kuch nahi karta
preet mein kal jaa raha hu. soch man ki baat kahe du. na jaana kal aaye ya na aaye. jo hai aaj hi hai. mein tumse prem karta hu. pata nahi tum kya soch rahi hogi.
tumhara javaab chahta hu. Eng. pahonchne ke baad phone karunga. agar tumne call ri'siv nahi kiya to samjhunga ki tum mujhse pyaar nahi karti. fir tumhari zindagi se mein chala jaunga. kyuki agar fir bhi tumhare saath raha to sach.....mar jaunga ek din.....preet apna khayal rakhna. khana time pe khana........ab bichar veer kya kare gha agar preet ne us din call risive nahi ki to zara sochn es vare meri pyar si choti si behen POOJA
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grazie
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hello pooja ji
kaisi ho app?
appne sach me bhot hi funny galla likhia ne bhot changhia laghia
pooja ji me hun koshish kara ghi ki kahani vich jo tusi likhea hai kuch us tara likha thanks hbot bhot bhot bhot hi jyada tuhada pooja itna to bata deti ki preet veer ki call rasive karti hai ja nahi
pooja tuhada ek var firh to thanks kardi ha es tara hi sath dindi rehna
ab ijazat chahati hoon
kamal preet
dosti aur pyar sirf kismat valo ke nasseb hote hai
har kisi ke nahi
preet ne aj tak jise bhi dosti ki usne hi dhoka de diya
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Preet..
Saabto pellan taan tainu aina vadiya kamm karan layi vaddaai dena chaahaangi..
Te fer ae vi kahangi ki je aapa ais kahani nu punjabi di jagah je hindi, ya english vich likhaange taan saareyaan de palle vi pae jaavegi..
Te ik hor gal kehna chaavangi tussi bura na manaayo.. ki ek vaar ch je ka har insan ik hi scene banaaye taan jaada vadiya rahgea.. odan karke jaada log apni raai de paun ge..
I hope u don't mind.
Dhaval aur Merul : Main Preet se keh rahi hun is story ko hindi/ English me continue karne ke liye, aur saath yeh bhi keh rahi hun ki agar at a time ek insaan ek hi scene at a time banaaye to jyada acha rahega, so that more n more ppl can participate.
Chalo ab tumhare liye saari story ki summary kar deti hun..
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Veer & Preet are the best frnz of a "Would be marrying couple". Veer & Preet meet each other for the first time, on that couple's engagement. Slowly they became frnds, and started going to same college. Soon became extremely good frnds. One day Preet Sees Veer with some gal, and gets upset, she ran back to her house and started crying for days which made her sick. After few days Veer comes to see her.. and tells her that he's going to England after 1 month for further studies.
Then She inquires about that gal which turns out to be Veer's sis. Veer dosen't understand that why was Preet that upset just because of that.
They started going to college again, and one month is almost gone, there are just 2 more days left for Veer to go.
Then....
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Next :
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Since Preet has been striking off days from her calendar, and she notices that just 2 more days to go for Veer. She was miserable because neither she can stop Veer from going to England nor she can disclose her feelings for him. But she had this thing clear in her mind, that if she won't disclose her feelings, she will loose him forever. She is determined to do something, but how and what... she's totally confused.
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Someone can start from here
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hello priya ji
tuhada bhot bhot thanks ki app ithe aye te menu salah den le shukrya
priya ji hun hindi ch likhan di koshish kara hgy ki jo sabh samjh sakan
story ki summary karne ke liye thanks
es tara hi sath dindi rehna
ab izajat chahati hoon
kamal preet
dosti aur pyar sirf kismat valo ke nasseb hote hai
har kisi ke nahi
preet ne aj tak jise bhi dosti ki usne hi dhoka de diya
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5th May 2007, 05:05 PM
o saddi penn pyaari..........o e i to ek raaz di gal hai ke o veer da call uthandi hogi si ke nai.o isi se hi to kahani aage vaddegi ve soniyo......o sannu to e shayri.com te member gudiya kende si te gudiya da kaam hega ke ron na de kisinu.....assi to hanseda ha te sab nu vi hasande ha.......
mi chiamo una ragazza felice........
ji aage mein likhu yaa koi aur hai jo aage badhana chahe........
grazie
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5th May 2007, 05:09 PM
pooja app hi likho ta agge
pooja ek gal dassa tuhanu itho jitho hun englend di story shuru honi hai ithe meri love story vagh thoda yeha hoya hai
pooja me ta sochdi ha us din preet kol phone resive nahi hunda par kise problem karke idha kuch likha aghe ...................ja likha ki oh resive kar lendi hai .........
bhot sochi peghy ha thodhi yehi help karde
aiutami perfavore
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dosti aur pyar sirf kismat valo ke nasseb hote hai
har kisi ke nahi
preet ne aj tak jise bhi dosti ki usne hi dhoka de diya
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pooja app hi likho ta agge
pooja ek gal dassa tuhanu itho jitho hun englend di story shuru honi hai ithe meri love story vagh thoda yeha hoya hai
pooja me ta sochdi ha us din preet kol phone resive nahi hunda par kise problem karke idha kuch likha aghe ...................ja likha ki oh resive kar lendi hai .........
bhot sochi peghy ha thodhi yehi help karde
aiutami perfavore
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oh si si sono qui, per aiutare........
hmmm to aage kuch yun hua ki.
preet bahot roi lekin khush bhi hui. kyu ki...............hmmmmmm.......o ji preet vi to veer nu pasand kardi hegi na.......samjhde nahi ho yaar......ok ji.......4 din baad jab veer ka call aaya.......to.......oh goshhhhhhh.........incidenti......aiutoooooooooooo oooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo.. ........preet aur uski family.........taffy ko leke dr. ke gaye thhe....vo bahot bimaar thha......to isi wajha se vo veer ka call nahi aten kar pai. use to pata bhi nahi laga ki veer ne use call kiya. ab kahani me twist aayega........preet intazaar karti rahi, lekin veer to call karke udaas hoke jaa chuka thha......veer ko laga ki preet use pyaar nahi karti, aur usne fesla kiya ki ab vo preet ke raste me nahi aayega. veer ko laga ki vo Gurvani se pyaar karti hai. vo bahot roya. baccho ki tarha....preet intazaar karti rahe gai......lekin..........uff khudda.......taffy bhi na..... ........1 saal ho gaya.......veer bas apni padhai me laga hai........din me padhai aur raat ko.......VO BHIGI BHIGHI YAADEN, TERE BIN MEIN YUN KAISE JIYAA.......ye gaane gaata aur bahot rota........
aur preet....... KABHI BANDHAN JUUDA LIYA KABHI DAAMAN CHHUDA LIYA, O SAATHI RE E REE EEE KAISA SIILA DIYA YE WAFFA KA SABKUCH BHUULA DIYA.........ye kahake khudd ko jiii jiii ke maarti thhi........uff haye allah.ye hai meri kahani,......
aage kuch aap bhi liye na..........
grazie
aapki dost
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so pooja kahani me thiwst bhot aghe hai aghe me likhti hoon ab padhna
aghe yu hota hai ki jabh 1 sal guzar jyata hai preet ke intzar ko aur veer ka letter ya call kuch bhi nahi aata to preet sochne laghti hai ki use hor koi mil ghea hove gha jo usne ki bar bhi mera hall ni poccha.............ab hota yu hai ki preet apni study ke liye frence jatti waha apr uski uncle rehte hai preet ne unke ghar 1 saal rehna hota hai.......................udhar se veer bhi france aya hota hai wo art study kar raha hota hai aur paris me uske vare padhne aya hota hai.
preet bhot udas rehti hai hamesha aur veer hamesha je sochta rehta hai ki preet ne use dhokha diya hai aur use to who gurvani hi pasand tha is liye usne aj tak mujhe koi email bhi nahi ki preet bhot burri hai je hi kehta rehta hai aur kheta hai ki who aj ke badh use kabhi yaad bhi nahi kare gha ....................lekin Veer ab bhi Preet se pyar bhot karata hai ........................... veer aur preet ki ek var firh se mulakat hoti hai paris me .............
age kuch soch ab tu pensa un po qual cosa
dosti aur pyar sirf kismat valo ke nasseb hote hai
har kisi ke nahi
preet ne aj tak jise bhi dosti ki usne hi dhoka de diya
aur jise mohabat ki usne to jeene ka arman hi shen liya
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so pooja kahani me thiwst bhot aghe hai aghe me likhti hoon ab padhna
aghe yu hota hai ki jabh 1 sal guzar jyata hai preet ke intzar ko aur veer ka letter ya call kuch bhi nahi aata to preet sochne laghti hai ki use hor koi mil ghea hove gha jo usne ki bar bhi mera hall ni poccha.............ab hota yu hai ki preet apni study ke liye frence jatti waha apr uski uncle rehte hai preet ne unke ghar 1 saal rehna hota hai.......................udhar se veer bhi france aya hota hai wo art study kar raha hota hai aur paris me uske vare padhne aya hota hai.
preet bhot udas rehti hai hamesha aur veer hamesha je sochta rehta hai ki preet ne use dhokha diya hai aur use to who gurvani hi pasand tha is liye usne aj tak mujhe koi email bhi nahi ki preet bhot burri hai je hi kehta rehta hai aur kheta hai ki who aj ke badh use kabhi yaad bhi nahi kare gha ....................lekin Veer ab bhi Preet se pyar bhot karata hai ........................... veer aur preet ki ek var firh se mulakat hoti hai paris me .............
age kuch soch ab tu pensa un po qual cosa
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are yaar di, saara hum hi likh denge to baaki ke jo hai chahat di, dhaval mani di, ye sab kya likhenge. mein sochti hu. aap bhi socho. baaki inko bhi kuch likhne dena chahiye warna kahenge ki hum thhe nahi to sari story likh daali. saraa naam apna kar liya. aap in sab ko jaante nahi hain denger hai bahot,..hmmmmm
mein sochti hu
grazie
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theek hai pooja ab hum intzar akrte hai ki kuch chahat di, dhaval bhaiya, mani ji, merul ji ja hor koi member is parvar da jo es story nu aghe vadave dekh de ha ki kaun hove gha jo es story nu aghe le ke jave gha
pooja mujhe to in sabme abhi tak koi danger nahi lagga siva dhaval bhaiya ke unse bhot bachke rehna padhta hai
grazie tante a te che mi hai aiutato
preet
dosti aur pyar sirf kismat valo ke nasseb hote hai
har kisi ke nahi
preet ne aj tak jise bhi dosti ki usne hi dhoka de diya
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theek hai pooja ab hum intzar akrte hai ki kuch chahat di, dhaval bhaiya, mani ji, merul ji ja hor koi member is parvar da jo es story nu aghe vadave dekh de ha ki kaun hove gha jo es story nu aghe le ke jave gha
pooja mujhe to in sabme abhi tak koi danger nahi lagga siva dhaval bhaiya ke unse bhot bachke rehna padhta hai
grazie tante a te che mi hai aiutato
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hahahhahaa
dekha dhaval, preet di ko aap danger lagte ho. nananana na di dhaval to masuum sa baccha hai. isse kya darna....ise to aap ek daant lagao chup ho jayenge dhaval........ek dam bhola hai, ek dam sidha...........jalebi ki tarha.......hahahhhahaha
prego,
grazie
aapki dost
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hahahhahaa
dekha dhaval, preet di ko aap danger lagte ho. nananana na di dhaval to masuum sa baccha hai. isse kya darna....ise to aap ek daant lagao chup ho jayenge dhaval........ek dam bhola hai, ek dam sidha...........jalebi ki tarha.......hahahhhahaha
prego,
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pooja agar jelebi ki tara hai firh to tum khudh hi socho kitna bhula............................... hai vaise meine jalebi jabh bhi dekhi hai usme kahi ball hote hai who kabhi bhi sidhi to nahi hotii .........................vaise dhaval bhaiya hai to bhot hi ache is good friend and good brother ............................
ciao pooja
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preet ne aj tak jise bhi dosti ki usne hi dhoka de diya
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6th May 2007, 10:34 AM
dear preet and pooja baRii achHie se aap dono ne kahaani ko aage baRhaaya hai ab mujHe aata to nahiiN liKhnaa kahaani par aap ki kahaani paRHtaa huN to achHaa lagta hai aur mujHse darr? haha kis baat kaa maiN to haMeShaa haNsaataa huN kabhii daraaYa to nahiiN hahahah
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wah wah maza aa gaya story parrh ker aur sweety ka to style of writing mind blowing keep writing agay likhtey raho .....aur haan mujhse to bilkul expect nahi kerna ke main likhoongi mujhay sirf parrhna aata hai likhna nahi na is liye tum log likho hum parrhainge aur raye milti rahegi tum logon ko befikar raho.........wesay aik cheez sahi nahi lagi woh ye ke veer ne use bura kion kaha jab hum kisi se pyar kerte hain to us ki burayaan bhi nahi dikhti woh her haaal main acha hi lagta hai chahay kitni ziadtian kerta jaye kia khayal hai ho sakta hai main ghalat hoon per aesa feeel kia to likh dia chalo ab we r looking forward
Waqt ke jisam ki kharash hoon main
apne ander se pash pash hoon main
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namaste mani ji
app yaha aye dekh kar behad khushi hoy
je kya app khe rehi hoon ki app nahi likhe ghy are ek line to likho
aur appne theek kaha jo pyar karta hai who kabhi bhi uske vare negetive nahi sochta thanks for ur khyal mani di appda bhot shukrya salah den le
pooja sach me bhot acha likhti mujhe bhi uska andaz bhot pasand hai
yuhi sath dete rehna
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preet ne aj tak jise bhi dosti ki usne hi dhoka de diya
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pyaari preet ji and priya ji
aap dono ne jis tarah se preet aur veer ki prem kahani ko bayan kiya uske liye daad hazir hai janab, ab jese dhaval bhai ne kaha, mujhe bhi kahani likhna to aata nahi bas aapki ye kahani ko padhke dil bahel sa gaya... sach mein bahut hi anokhi kahani aapne yaha likhi hai,
padhte padhte hamare dil tak kahani pahoch gayi hai dosto,
aage ko kuch aap likho hum aage sochenge kya hota hai kyuki abhi to kuch yaad nahi aa raha hai kya likhe kyuki kahani abhi kuch ese situation pe hai jiska jawab sayad preet ji hi de sakte hai
likhte rahe
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Dhoka diya tha jab tumne mujhe,
Tab dil se me naraz tha,
Phir socha ki dil se tumhe nikal du,
Magar woh kambakth dil bhi tumhare paas tha.
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so pooja kahani me thiwst bhot aghe hai aghe me likhti hoon ab padhna
aghe yu hota hai ki jabh 1 sal guzar jyata hai preet ke intzar ko aur veer ka letter ya call kuch bhi nahi aata to preet sochne laghti hai ki use hor koi mil ghea hove gha jo usne ki bar bhi mera hall ni poccha.............ab hota yu hai ki preet apni study ke liye frence jatti waha apr uski uncle rehte hai preet ne unke ghar 1 saal rehna hota hai.......................udhar se veer bhi france aya hota hai wo art study kar raha hota hai aur paris me uske vare padhne aya hota hai.
preet bhot udas rehti hai hamesha aur veer hamesha je sochta rehta hai ki preet ne use dhokha diya hai aur use to who gurvani hi pasand tha is liye usne aj tak mujhe koi email bhi nahi ki preet bhot burri hai je hi kehta rehta hai aur kheta hai ki who aj ke badh use kabhi yaad bhi nahi kare gha ....................lekin Veer ab bhi Preet se pyar bhot karata hai ........................... veer aur preet ki ek var firh se mulakat hoti hai paris me .............
age kuch soch ab tu pensa un po qual cosa
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ab jabh dosir var mulakat hoy hai to bhot kuch badal chuka hai everythink chages
ab preet pehle jaisa veer vare sochti nahi aur veer bhi nahi dono ko laghta tha ki who kise aur se pyar karte hai.
jab dono ek dosre ke samne aye to preet heran si ho ghy thi usne kaha kaise ho veer tum?veer bola kya itefaq hai ki hum 1 saal bahd aj mile hai usi waqt ek ladhki veer ke paas aati hai aur whouske sath chala jyata hai aur tabh preet sochti hai ki je iski jarro girlfriend hai jo is e mere se baat bhi nahi ki uske sath chla ghe.
ek itefaq ki baat hai ki preet ke uncle ke sun a name bhi gurvani hi tha jabh preet calas me ghy thi waha apr veer bhi tha to preet ko ek phone aata hai who hota to hai uske uncle ke bete gurvani ka par veer samjhta hai ki who jarror uska premi gurvani hai je soch kar dono ek dosre se baat bhi theek dhagh se nahi karte.........................
aghe ki story koi aur likhe to acha lagge nahi to me khudh kuch dino ke badh likha ghy kyon ki ab me 5 ja 6 din nahi a sakti
sabh ke liye dua hia ki sabh theek rehna aur khush i miss u everyone
bye preet
dosti aur pyar sirf kismat valo ke nasseb hote hai
har kisi ke nahi
preet ne aj tak jise bhi dosti ki usne hi dhoka de diya
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Arre vaah!
Kahani to khoob interesting mod le rahi hai...
Dono ki misunderstandings badti hi jaati hain.. Dono ko yehi lagta hai ki ek doosre ki zindagi me koi aur hai, jiske kaaran woh apne apne pyar ka izhaar nahi kar paate.. mann hi mann dono hi ek doosre ko koss rahe hain.. Veer soch raha hai.. ki Preet ne use dhoka diya aur phone nahi uthayaa.. aur Preet soch rahi hai ki Veer ne use dhoka diya aur phone nahi kiya.. Sachaai se dono anjaan hain..
Ek din Preet ghar ja rahi thi.. paidal aur akeli.. aur saamne se do ladke aa gaye.. aur Preet ko tang karne lag gaye.. Preet ki indian dress dekh ke use chidaane lage.. Preet ne unhe bahut mana kiya lekin woh use tang karne se baaz nahi aaye.. aur itne me hi iteffakan peeche se Veer aa jaata hai... use to bas yehi nazar aata hai ki kisi ladki ko do ladke tang kar rahe hain.. Kyunki Preet ki Veer ki taraf peenth hoti hai.. Lekin phir bhi Veer us anjaan ladki ko bachaane ke liye kood padta hai.. (Filmy Scene Right Phir kya tha apne Veeru paaji un dono ladko ki khoob pitaai karte hain.. lekin yeh kya ek ladke ne apni jeb me se chaaku nikaal ke Veer ki kalaai pe de maaara.. uff..
Preet vahi khadi sab dekh rahi hoti.. pehle woh bahut khush hoti hai ki Veer ne use bachaaya.. par phir yehi soch ke ab woh usse pyar nahi karta.. phir udas ho jati hai.. phir sochti hai kaash tum mujhe us din phone karte.. aur itne me hi woh dekhti hai khoon.. khoon hi khoon Veer ki kalaai pe..
Woh dono ladke bhi itna khoon dekh ke vahan se bhaag jaate hain.. aur Veer Preet ko dekhta hai, aur hairaan ho jaata hai.. lekin blood loss ke kaaran woh behosh ho jaata hai.. Preet Veer ko Hospital le jaati hai... (That's what we call Very Filmy )
Aage break ke baad
Priya
"Dikha kar khawaab in aankhon ko, De gaye aansoon in mein Tum..
Kaise chalka doo yeh aansoon, In mein bhi To rehTe ho Tum.."
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8th May 2007, 10:17 AM
namaskaaR mere pyaare dostoN:
kahaani to baRii achHe se aage baRH rahii hai khUShii huYii paRH ke priyaa didi ne bhi kamaal kaa liKhaa ab maiN bhi kahaani ko aage baRhaataa huN pataa nahiN yeH sahi hai kii nahiiN kosiSh kar rahaa huN pehli martabaa
preet ne jab veer ki kalaaii pe khoon behtaa huaa deKhaa to woh duKhii si ho gaYii sochne lagii kii veer ko uskii w^ajH se yeH chot aaYii usneY veer ko kahaa "veer mujHe maaf kar do khaa-m-khaa meri w^ajH se tumhe itni chot aaYii..veer ne kahaa koii baat nahiN tum apne aapko doSh mat do yeH to meraa farz hai aur khoon ko behtaa huaa preet deKh naa paaYii aur usneY apne duppatte ko chir ke jaldi se uskii kalaai pe baaNdh diya aur khoon thoRaa saa behtaa huaa baNdh ho gaYaa ..us pal veer aur preet dono ek doosre kii aaNkhoN meiN kho gaYe dono ek doosre ko ek naz^ar deKh rahe the aur dono ki aankhoN meiN se pooraani yaadoN ki w^ajH se aankhoN meiN muskuraahat ke saath aaNsuu aa gaYe
preet veer ko aspataal le jaati hai wahaaN doctor veer kaa ilaaj karte haiN..preet doctor ko poochhti hai ki koii ghabraane kii baat to nahiN hainaa? doctor kehte haiN ki nahiiN aisi koii baat nahiiiN hai bas kuch gehre zaKHm hai kuch din meiN bhar jaayeNge fir veer aur preet dono aspataal se nikalte haiN dono fir se ek doosre ko deKhte rehte haiN bas deKhte rehte haiN par lafz nahiiN nikal paate muh se bas aankhoN ki zubaaN se jaise dono baateN kar rahe ho ..aur fir we dono aspataal se raste pe chalte huYe nikal jaate haiN
to be continue...
*~*Dhaval*~*....Ek Ehsaas...
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19th May 2007, 12:23 AM
sat air aklaji
and namaste
wah prya di aur dhaval bhaya appne to story ko khub aghe badae hai
ab aghe kaun likhea gha me likhu je to nahi ho asakta kyon ki me to bhot hi bura likhti hoon na
thank prya di and dhaval bhaiya bhot khushi hui app dono ko dekh kar
bye...kamal
dosti aur pyar sirf kismat valo ke nasseb hote hai
har kisi ke nahi
preet ne aj tak jise bhi dosti ki usne hi dhoka de diya
aur jise mohabat ki usne to jeene ka arman hi shen liya
kamalrajpreet
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19th May 2007, 01:43 PM
namaskaar dosto main es story mein phele baar shamil hue hoon....socha main bhi thoda sa yogdaan daal doon preet aur veer ki love story mei.n
veer aur preet dono ek saath hasptaal ke raastey ja rahe hai.n, veer preet ka haath holy se pakad leta hai aur preet bhi haath chudane ki koshish nahi karti...uska gore gaal laal ho jatey hai.n, aur woh dheerey dheerey yeh ganna gun-gunna-ne lag jati hai....
kabhi tera daaman na chorreygey hum,
chahey zamana karey lakho.n sitam....
haptaal ka raasta kab khatam ho gaya, dono ko pata hi nahi chala....!
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....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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19th May 2007, 02:13 PM
sunita di apne bhot acha likha hai
ab contine me karne ki koshish karti hoon
jabh rasta khatam ho jata hai dono apne ghar ke samne a jate hai to veer preet ke samne a kar use pochta hai ki who use bhot pyar akrta hai kya who use pyar karti hai janhai jabh preet je baat sunti hai uski ankhon se khushi ke ansu a jate hai aur use je yakken nahi ho raha ki veer ne use kaha hai ki who use bhot pyar karta hai preet juban se kuch nahi khe pati magar veer samjh jyata hai ki who bhi use bhot pyar karti hai aur veer use apne galle se laghata hai aur kheta hai i love so much preet aur mujhe laghta hai ki tum bhi bhot mujhse pyar karti ho mujhse vada karo ki tum mujhe kabhi nahi chodh ke jaughi tabh preet kheti hai meine tume hamesha pyar kya hai jabh se jana hai tabh se pyar kiya hai sirf aur sirf tumse pyar kiya hai veer me appke bina kabhi nahi jie paughi mera sath kabhi na chodhna dono tabh itne khush hote hai ki batana bhi mushkil hai firh apne apne ghar chale jate hai sari raat dono ki dosre ke vare sochte rehte hai na hi veer ko need aati hai aur na hi preet ko subah hote hi ........................
to be continue
dosti aur pyar sirf kismat valo ke nasseb hote hai
har kisi ke nahi
preet ne aj tak jise bhi dosti ki usne hi dhoka de diya
aur jise mohabat ki usne to jeene ka arman hi shen liya
kamalrajpreet
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21st May 2007, 09:32 PM
subah hote hi preet aur veer jab dono firh ek dosre se milte hai to dono ek dosre se firh se kehte hai ki vo bhot pyar karte hai ek dosre se preet kheti hai ki usne jabh veer englend ghe tha to usne phone kyon nhai kya? kheti hai meine intzar bhot kya magar tumara kabhi koi phone koi latter kuch bhi nahi aye tabh veer bolta hai ki usne phone kya to tha magar tumne resive hi nhai kya tabh preet batati hai ki shet utmne us idn kya hoe gha jabh taffy bimar tha to veer kehta shet hamari kismat me je judai thi tabh aise hua chalo ab to hum dono jante hai ki hum ek dosre se pyar karte hai ab hum dono akbhi judha nahi ho sakte.
veer preet se kheta hai i love swetty jabh aise kheta hai to preet ko bhot gussa aata hai aur poshti hai kabhi mujhse khete ho ki pyar karte ho aur kabhi es chadhel sweety se me jan sakti hoon ki je chadeel kaun hai jise tum pyar karte tabh veer has padhta hai aur kheta hai je hoti hai india ladhkya preet gusse se dekhti hai firh veer kheta hai tume hi khe raha hoon swetty i love you preet samjhi.
unka mazak chalta rehta hai who dono hbot khush the.
magar preet ke uncl eke ghar preet ke parens ka phone aata hai who tabh gahr par nahi hoti jabh ghar jati hai to uska uncle use batata hai ki uski parens ka phone aye ta preet khushi ke mare jabh apne gahr phone karti hai unki baat sunke ek dum rohne lagh padhti hai aur apne camere me chali jati hai
uskie gharvale uski shadhi khehi hor teh kar dete hai who je baat jabh veer ko batati hai veer kheta hai who sabh theek karde gha who preet ki baat uske bhai ko batae gha firh uska bhai uske parens ke sath baat karke use shadhi karlea gha preet ko bhot hosla deta.
jabh veer apne brother se milne aur use preet ki baat karan ne ke badh waha se vapas aata hai to use pata chalta hai ki uske bhai ka incident ho ghea hai aur vo akhri sanse le raha hai vo usi waqt louta hai aur hospital jata hai uska bhai use akhri waqt kheta hai ki aj ke badh jo uske bache hai unki jimedari uski hoy je keh kar uski mout ho jati hai.
ab veer bhot hi confuse ho ghea hai use pata nahi chal raha who kare to kya kare................
kamal
to be contine
dosti aur pyar sirf kismat valo ke nasseb hote hai
har kisi ke nahi
preet ne aj tak jise bhi dosti ki usne hi dhoka de diya
aur jise mohabat ki usne to jeene ka arman hi shen liya
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22nd May 2007, 12:54 AM
Interesting turns!!! Very Filmy!!! Vaise koi bhi director yahan se ache se inspire ho sakta hai.. lekin haan please writers mein hum sab ke naam hone chaahiye jinhone yeh story likhi hai..
Chaliye ab aage..
Veer bahut jyada confused hai ki woh kare to kya kare.. ek taraf bhai ki aakhiri icchha.. uski bhabhi aur bache.. aur doosri taraf uska pyar.. Veer aaj ek aise mukaam pe khada hai jahan koi bhi faisla lena aasan nahi.. jo bhi faisla woh lega.. kisi na kisi ka dil zaroor todega.. ya to Preet ka aur apna bhi.. ya phir apne marte hue bhai ka vachan... Use kuch samjh nahi aa raha ki woh kya kare..
Is vakt woh apne parents se bhi baat nahi kar sakta.. kyunki abhi ghar me immideate death hui hai.. aur udhar Preet ke parents ko Preet ki shaadi Rajeev se karvaane ke liye bahut jaldi lagi hui hai.. unhone date bhi kar di.. jo ki sirf do mahine baad ki hai.. lekin sagaai to agle hafte hi hai... Veer ek dum paagal ho jaata hai soch soch ke... ek taraf usne Preet se vaada kiya hai ki sab theek karega,, aur ek taraf bhai ne usse vaada liya hai.. uske biwi bachon ka khayal rakhne ka.Veer sochta hai ki woh suicide kar le.. lekin phir use ehsaas hota hai ki yeh to vishwaas ghaaat hoga sabhi ke saath... Woh Rajeev (Preet ka wud be) se milne ka faisla karta hai...
To be Continued...
~Priya
"Dikha kar khawaab in aankhon ko, De gaye aansoon in mein Tum..
Kaise chalka doo yeh aansoon, In mein bhi To rehTe ho Tum.."
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23rd May 2007, 10:11 PM
oho khatarnak morr aa gaya kahani main humesha ki tarah keep writing
Waqt ke jisam ki kharash hoon main
apne ander se pash pash hoon main
zaaat hai aetbaar e zaaat nahin
ab to main khud bhi apne saath nahin
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oho khatarnak morr aa gaya kahani main humesha ki tarah keep writing
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ARE PIARI MANI DI
app bhi kuch likhie apne to je hi keh diya keep writing hum to chahate the ki ap bhi kuch likho
khush rehiye
nadan preet
dosti aur pyar sirf kismat valo ke nasseb hote hai
har kisi ke nahi
preet ne aj tak jise bhi dosti ki usne hi dhoka de diya
aur jise mohabat ki usne to jeene ka arman hi shen liya
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24th May 2007, 03:01 PM
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ARE PIARI MANI DI
app bhi kuch likhie apne to je hi keh diya keep writing hum to chahate the ki ap bhi kuch likho
khush rehiye
nadan preet
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arey tumhay bataya to ke mujhay sirf parrhna ata hai likhna nahi ab tum mujhay italian sikhaogi na to tab likhoongi italian main hahaha ok na
Waqt ke jisam ki kharash hoon main
apne ander se pash pash hoon main
zaaat hai aetbaar e zaaat nahin
ab to main khud bhi apne saath nahin
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arey tumhay bataya to ke mujhay sirf parrhna ata hai likhna nahi ab tum mujhay italian sikhaogi na to tab likhoongi italian main hahaha ok na
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je kya baat hoy sirf padhna aata hai app kuch likh de jiye varna me story ko kuch dino ke badh aise likho ghy ki appne kabhi socha bhi nahi ho gha is tara ki kahani ab aghe likho ghy ki sabh apdhkar heran ho jae ki preet je kiya likh rehi hai itni achi story ko itna burra kyon bana diya just joking
theek hai mani ji je nahi likhna to na likhie par sath jarror dete rahiye
ha kuch dino ke badh agar kisi ne na kuch likha to aghe story me likhughy abhi kuch soch nahi hai aghe vare par likhu ghy kuch acha hi kahani ko burra nahi bana mujhe
aur mani di je hum italian me likhne lagh apdhe to sirf hum hi samjhe ghe aur koi nahi
ek sawal karna tha app sabh se agar kahani me new carecter enter hoe to kiya unke vare kuch batana padhe gha ja sirf name hi likh sakti hoon kyon ki ab kahani me thodhe dino ke badh KIRAN enter hove ghy is ka kiya rishta hai is kahani se je batana padhe gah ki nahi?????????????????
jawab dena mani di
khush rehiye
sath dete rehna hamesha ki atra
appki preet
dosti aur pyar sirf kismat valo ke nasseb hote hai
har kisi ke nahi
preet ne aj tak jise bhi dosti ki usne hi dhoka de diya
aur jise mohabat ki usne to jeene ka arman hi shen liya
kamalrajpreet
jaan raj
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mani di
je kya baat hoy sirf padhna aata hai app kuch likh de jiye varna me story ko kuch dino ke badh aise likho ghy ki appne kabhi socha bhi nahi ho gha is tara ki kahani ab aghe likho ghy ki sabh apdhkar heran ho jae ki preet je kiya likh rehi hai itni achi story ko itna burra kyon bana diya just joking
theek hai mani ji je nahi likhna to na likhie par sath jarror dete rahiye
ha kuch dino ke badh agar kisi ne na kuch likha to aghe story me likhughy abhi kuch soch nahi hai aghe vare par likhu ghy kuch acha hi kahani ko burra nahi bana mujhe
aur mani di je hum italian me likhne lagh apdhe to sirf hum hi samjhe ghe aur koi nahi
ek sawal karna tha app sabh se agar kahani me new carecter enter hoe to kiya unke vare kuch batana padhe gha ja sirf name hi likh sakti hoon kyon ki ab kahani me thodhe dino ke badh KIRAN enter hove ghy is ka kiya rishta hai is kahani se je batana padhe gah ki nahi?????????????????
jawab dena mani di
khush rehiye
sath dete rehna hamesha ki atra
appki preet
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offcourse batani chahiye new character ki detail werna pata kesay chalega ke ye naye mehmaan kahan se aa gaye beech main
Waqt ke jisam ki kharash hoon main
apne ander se pash pash hoon main
zaaat hai aetbaar e zaaat nahin
ab to main khud bhi apne saath nahin
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