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Smile Myyy Shattered DrEAM... - 19th March 2004, 04:10 PM

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My Shattered Dream

That beautiful day, when the day was at it's best,
I was lying near the lake and my thoughts were at rest.
The aroma of blossoming flora, worked like a magic,
The plopping of small stones, sounded like a music.
The humming of beautiful birds, amused my ears,
And Happiness rolled down my eyes in the form of tears.
In the midst of these,when I took a snooze,
Deep in my mind, my thoughts began to ooze.
As SHE knocked my heart, my thoughts got rambled,
And she entered in me, I found myself tangled.
Her lustrous eyes, That can frenzy a many,
Her flawless smile, that can excite a many.
Her tender hands, blooming like a rose,
Her gentle touch, making me to rouse.
Though my hands began to quiver, I took them to her face,
And was about to take it in palms,felt it was God'sgrace.
And suddenly the sky thundered, I woke up with a scream,
I was lying near the lake, found shattered my dream.
I stood up and walket to my home, with a heart filled with pain,
Trying to build that scene, though in vain.
From that day till today, I go to the lake everyday,
I lie on it's bed and close my eyes,
Imagining her beauty and her lustrous eyes.
But she never knocked my heart, nor she entered in me,
I found her nowhere, nor she entered in my dream
And again blew a thunderous storm, but that was not in the clear
sky,
but it was in my heart, that blew me too high.
Any U may say, why so fuss, though it was a dream,
But to me my dear friend,
It is more beautiful than the truth, that's my shattered dream.
That's my shattered dream .......

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19th March 2004, 06:22 PM

really really really damn good poetry........its just fantabulous....nice thoughts.......n very well arranged........i liked it a lottttttttttt........

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19th March 2004, 08:03 PM

hi raj ji.

buhat buhat buhat acha likha appne.
keep writting haan.
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20th March 2004, 01:16 PM

thts really appreciatable....
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amazing - 27th March 2004, 12:37 PM

Raj,
This is an amazing poem, so wonderfully arranged and presented
. I lov it. Keep on writing such poems


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thx priya - 1st April 2004, 08:37 PM

thank u priya for ur response
i wud try riting better
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sanskruti - 1st April 2004, 08:39 PM

thankx sanskruti
for ur wonderful words to praise me
I think i too belev in doing everything to extreeme, except hate
thx for ur motivation and i liked ur work tooo
do create and expect the unexpected
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thx bela - 1st April 2004, 08:42 PM

thnx bela
its becos of u that i hav been introduced to shayri.com and only u took the pain to post my poem my shattered dream
thank u friend and may GOD bless u
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19th April 2004, 11:55 PM

hi raj ji.

hmm thanks that u have mean of our friendship.
no raj its not b/c of me.
u have ability to write n admire by others.
n ya this poem so it is also great like ur others poem.
always write like this.
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hi - 21st April 2004, 12:44 PM

hi RAJ
\this is monica from Pune. I read ur poem(s). and belev me ur poem is too excellent and wonderful. I never thought our thoughts can be arranged in such a great manner. Keep it up and do rite
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24th April 2004, 08:24 PM

hi
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how r u?
its reallly a beautiful poem
i really liked it
plzzzzzz keep writing
take care
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hi khusii - 14th May 2004, 02:05 PM

hi khusii
thx for ur views on my poem. I logged on to net only today after so many days. So could not answer U. Well I have not penned anything in the past few days. mood he nahin aa raha. But i think if i have such good readers I should rite. I will try . Bye n take care
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soree friends - 22nd August 2004, 12:50 PM

soree friends
i cud not rite any poem for the past few days. I have received mails from a few of u. But really i am not in a position ro rite
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22nd August 2004, 02:21 PM

hi
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how r u?
kya hua ?????????y u r not in a condition 2 write anything?????????


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hi khushi - 8th September 2004, 11:27 PM

soree yaar,
I am not really in a condition to rite. pata nahin man he nahin karta. There r some reasons for tat

I will let u knw

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15th September 2004, 12:57 PM

well....undoubtedly its a good poem but i think u failed to present all the feelings in ur mind when u were writing down the words...one thing i wud like to say that somewhere in between the lines u used the word which are not suiitabel n that too just for the mere sake of rhyming to sound it more poetic....never change ur feelings for words n rhymes...got it???
   
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1st January 2005, 05:40 PM

hi piyush
i read ur reply only today as i did not log on to net for the past few months. but somthing so wonderful is going in my life like this poem. hopefully the end should not be as tragic as the poem


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15th January 2005, 11:15 PM

We also hope buddy it will not...

God Bless you and may all your dreams com true...

Thanks for such wonderful thoughts

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Thumbs up hi - 16th January 2005, 06:53 PM

hi raj....already so much has been said that i am out of words of appreciation....its truly an extremely wonderful composition...please keep writing and i hope ur shattered dream gets mended soon.........bye 4 now!! take care!!!!!!!!!!


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thx - 26th June 2006, 01:56 PM

dear friend
thx for ur compliment
i was lost in duniya ki bheed mein

do post reply

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Thumbs up 7th October 2006, 04:43 PM

Hi Raj,
Its been so long uve not wrote anything. So sad, Dont be a gumnam shayar. I really liked all ur poems. Eagerly awaitin for ur future poems

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