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tujhko pata hai bin tere meraa haal kya hoga - 7th May 2009, 08:12 PM
tujhko pata hai bin tere meraa haal kya hoga
mujhko pata hai tu milegi to kamaal kya hoga

kaun hai mera apnaa jab yeh pehchan na saka
mujhe gairoN ki berukhi se ab malaal kya hoga

zamanaa gujar diyaa maine intezaar meiN tere
mujhko pata hai miloge tum to sawaal kya hoga

saja sunane ke baad ab razaa puchhte ho tum
jo hosh meiN hi nahi apne vo halaal kya hoga

jitnaa sajaa lo khud ko tum dulhan kii tarah
mehboob ko na bha saka to vo jamaal kya hoga

lipat kar royegi jab woh teri laash se "vicky"
jaane sabke dilon meiN tab khayaal kya hoga
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8th May 2009, 12:12 AM
to apka nama vicky hai
aaj hi pata laga isme likha hai na...

but ye lash ki baat ku
itni achi gazal ki watt ku lagayee ye lash ajisa likhke haa
gazal achi hai
bas khush rahna

sakhi

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8th May 2009, 03:17 PM
VicKy Bhai.........

So super yaar bahut hi sahaj aur khubsoorat lafzon me tumne is Gazal ko bayan kiya hai...

Puri Gazal hi tarife Qabil hai....

Yeh lines bahot hi umda lage..... jitnaa sajaa lo khud ko tum dulhan kii tarah
mehboob ko na bha saka to vo jamaal kya hoga

lipat kar royegi jab woh teri laash se "vicky"
jaane sabke dilon meiN tab khayaal kya hoga

Is dilfareb andaze bayan per daad kabool kijiye sahab.. Aur likhate rahiye..
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8th May 2009, 05:02 PM
wah vicky har bar ki tarah is bar bhi ek umdaa ghazal pesh kiya hai tumne
ghazal ki saare aashar hume pasand aayi

saja sunane ke baad ab razaa puchhte ho tum
jo hosh meiN hi nahi apne vo halaal kya hoga

jitnaa sajaa lo khud ko tum dulhan kii tarah
mehboob ko na bha saka to vo jamaal kya hoga

yeh do sher sachai ko bayaan karte hai

daad ke saath

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9th May 2009, 12:23 AM
kaise haiN vikky saahib ?

bahut zabardast zor aazmaish karii aapne , mujhe behad pasand aayi !

aapki soch gehrii hai aur sawaal masoom !

sher dar sher maine aapki kawaaid ka maza liya !

ek mashwara hai , wuzn ka khyaal rakheiN ...kalaam aur khoobsoorat banega !

daad Qabool farmaaeiN

apna khyaal rakheiN !

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9th May 2009, 02:25 AM
wah..wah wah..wah.. diL khus kar diya reee..

Me to heading dekh ke fida ho gaya tha..

" tujhko pata hai bin tere meraa haal kya hoga "

...excellent work dude... very well wrriteen..

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bahut khuub janabd. bahut hi gehre ehsaas pesh likhe hai aapne. daad kabool kijiye....

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9th May 2009, 11:53 AM
Vicky Sahab,

Great yaar, kamaal karteiN hai aap, Itnaa achchha kaise likh leteiN hai aap.

Kuch tips humieN bhi dijiye.

Dil se daad

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tujhko pata hai bin tere meraa haal kya hoga
mujhko pata hai tu milegi to kamaal kya hoga

kaun hai mera apnaa jab yeh pehchan na saka
mujhe gairoN ki berukhi se ab malaal kya hoga

zamanaa gujar diyaa maine intezaar meiN tere
mujhko pata hai miloge tum to sawaal kya hoga

saja sunane ke baad ab razaa puchhte ho tum
jo hosh meiN hi nahi apne vo halaal kya hoga

jitnaa sajaa lo khud ko tum dulhan kii tarah
mehboob ko na bha saka to vo jamaal kya hoga

lipat kar royegi jab woh teri laash se "vicky"
jaane sabke dilon meiN tab khayaal kya hoga


Tu AndheroN -ujaaloN me mila kar mujhko
Zindagi ab to sawaloN me mila kar mujhko
   
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9th May 2009, 11:58 AM
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tujhko pata hai bin tere meraa haal kya hoga
mujhko pata hai tu milegi to kamaal kya hoga

kaun hai mera apnaa jab yeh pehchan na saka
mujhe gairoN ki berukhi se ab malaal kya hoga

zamanaa gujar diyaa maine intezaar meiN tere
mujhko pata hai miloge tum to sawaal kya hoga

saja sunane ke baad ab razaa puchhte ho tum
jo hosh meiN hi nahi apne vo halaal kya hoga

jitnaa sajaa lo khud ko tum dulhan kii tarah
mehboob ko na bha saka to vo jamaal kya hoga

lipat kar royegi jab woh teri laash se "vicky"
jaane sabke dilon meiN tab khayaal kya hoga
Vicky.....

ek umda ghazal ke liye dil se daad........

Yunhi likhte raho..khush raho

Purvi

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to apka nama vicky hai
aaj hi pata laga isme likha hai na...

but ye lash ki baat ku
itni achi gazal ki watt ku lagayee ye lash ajisa likhke haa
gazal achi hai
bas khush rahna

sakhi
thanks raj ji....

apne padha or taareef ki iske liye shukriya...

or han ji mera naam vicky hi hai...

agar main ghazal ki waat na lagaaun to shayar na ban jaunga

isliye socha ki khud ko mar dun...

taaki kisiko to bura laga mera marna...

aapne jo ijjat bakhshi uske liye tahe dil se shukriya...

god bless u..

vicky
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10th May 2009, 10:12 PM
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Bht khoobsurat ghazal hai, feelings & thoughts r x'cellent, mujhe ye do sher zada pasand aaye.........

kaun hai mera apnaa jab yeh pehchan na saka
mujhe gairoN ki berukhi se ab malaal kya hoga

jitnaa sajaa lo khud ko tum dulhan kii tarah
mehboob ko na bha saka to vo jamaal kya hoga
thanks naaz ... aap lagataar humein padhti rahi hain..

acha lagta hai aapka reply padhke...

aise hi sath deti rahiye

or humesha khush rahiye

god bless u..


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12th May 2009, 08:03 AM
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VicKy Bhai.........

So super yaar bahut hi sahaj aur khubsoorat lafzon me tumne is Gazal ko bayan kiya hai...

Puri Gazal hi tarife Qabil hai....

Yeh lines bahot hi umda lage..... jitnaa sajaa lo khud ko tum dulhan kii tarah
mehboob ko na bha saka to vo jamaal kya hoga

lipat kar royegi jab woh teri laash se "vicky"
jaane sabke dilon meiN tab khayaal kya hoga

Is dilfareb andaze bayan per daad kabool kijiye sahab.. Aur likhate rahiye..
sameer bhai itni jyada taareef ke liye shukriya..
main to pehle se kehta aaya hun main shayar nhi
bus likh dete hain jo bhi mann ko bhaaye...

aap aise hi sath dete rehna...

thanks again for such a nice compliment

god bless u

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12th May 2009, 08:06 AM
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wah vicky har bar ki tarah is bar bhi ek umdaa ghazal pesh kiya hai tumne
ghazal ki saare aashar hume pasand aayi

saja sunane ke baad ab razaa puchhte ho tum
jo hosh meiN hi nahi apne vo halaal kya hoga

jitnaa sajaa lo khud ko tum dulhan kii tarah
mehboob ko na bha saka to vo jamaal kya hoga

yeh do sher sachai ko bayaan karte hai

daad ke saath

Diya
thanks diya....

in sheron ko pasand karne ke liye...

or waise bhi ye ghazal tere bin adhuri thi...

tuney is ghazal ko ek naya roop diya or ache se sajaya hai...

thanks to u babu...

aise hi sath deti rehna...

god bless u

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12th May 2009, 04:52 PM
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kaise haiN vikky saahib ?

bahut zabardast zor aazmaish karii aapne , mujhe behad pasand aayi !

aapki soch gehrii hai aur sawaal masoom !

sher dar sher maine aapki kawaaid ka maza liya !

ek mashwara hai , wuzn ka khyaal rakheiN ...kalaam aur khoobsoorat banega !

daad Qabool farmaaeiN

apna khyaal rakheiN !
thanks kshitiz ji aapne humein padha humein acha laga..

taareef ke liye shukriya...

par mujhe ghazal likhni nhi aati..
isliye ghazal likhte likkhte mera apna wujn badh gaya

ab aap hi humein sikhayein ki wuzn kya hota hai or
ise kaise control kiya jaye...

aapka shukargujaar hounga ji main...

khush rahiye

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wah..wah wah..wah.. diL khus kar diya reee..

Me to heading dekh ke fida ho gaya tha..

" tujhko pata hai bin tere meraa haal kya hoga "

...excellent work dude... very well wrriteen..
thanks omi..

sirf heading hi to nhi padhi...

saari ghazal bhi padh liya kar...

thanks for the compliment ..

keep smiling...

god bless u...
   
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bahut khuub janabd. bahut hi gehre ehsaas pesh likhe hai aapne. daad kabool kijiye....

Aapka Dost

Manish
shukriya jii...

aise hi sath dete rahiye...

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Vicky Sahab,

Great yaar, kamaal karteiN hai aap, Itnaa achchha kaise likh leteiN hai aap.

Kuch tips humieN bhi dijiye.

Dil se daad

Best wishes

-Rashid
shukriya rashid jii

aap jaise log hi humein likhne ki himmat dete hain

aise hi sath dete rahiye

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Vicky.....

ek umda ghazal ke liye dil se daad........

Yunhi likhte raho..khush raho

Purvi
thanks purvi jii

ummeed hai aap aage bhi aise hi sath denge..

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