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' Do Phool HeiN Kam Jaymaala Banaane Ko ' Amanush '...! ' -
12th September 2010, 02:09 PM
Bachaa kar rakhna, Maalik, issko har buri nazar se
Yaha gulshan ko siiNchaa gaya hai khoon-e-jigar se Aate hein yahaan titliyan, bhaNwre aur macchar bhi Bas, duaa hai baad-e-fasaad na guzraa kare idhar se Rab ko chhoD, sabhi se hoti hai choti baDii galtiyan Aksar gir jaata hai maahir bandar bhi apne shajar se Phool houe to mehkeinge, khaar houe to chuubeinge Insaani seerat saNchi jaati hai khayaalon ke asar se Behtar jo na ho koyi rakeeb, agar ho dena izzat usse Kaun jaane kab dawaai taiyyar karna paDe zahar se Subah ko yaha surya aata hai nazar purab se hi kyun Aisse kayi shikaayatein bhi heiN logon ko Ishwar se Do phool heiN kam jaymaala banaane ko’ Amanush ’ Rab sa ban.na ho to khud ko saNwarna har hunar se  Haqeekat meri jaaN liye jaa rahi hai 
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12th September 2010, 10:34 PM
Danny ji, namaste!
Taareef ke shabd nahi mil rahe. Thank you very much!... |
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13th September 2010, 07:59 AM
Aate hein yahaan titliyan, bhaNwre aur macchar bhi
Bas, duaa hai fasaad-e-baad na guzraa kare idhar se Rab ko chhoD, sabhi se hoti hai choti baDii galtiyan Aksar gir jaata hai maahir bandar bhi apne shajar se Danny Ji ... Bahut khoob ... Bahut Sahi ... aur Nasiihat se bharpuur kahe hai ...aapne sabhi ashaar ... ! Maqtaa bhi behad pasand aaya ... sabhi sher me phuuloN ki taazgi aur naya pan nazar aaya... tahe dil se daad hazir hai... aise hi sundar kalaamoN ke saath aate rahe aage bhi ... khush rahen... duaaon ke saath...  YuuN Besabab Aansoo Aate NahiN Lag Zaroor Koii Baat Dil Ko Rahii Hai ... Fareb Kaa ChaDhtaa Bazaar Dekh Insaaf Se Bastii Khaalii Ho Rahii Hai ... ---Naresh Mehra---- |
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13th September 2010, 09:04 AM
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kishore bhai radhe radhe bahut khoob matle se makte tak sabhi sher achhe lage par makta dil ko sabs jyada bhaaya hai dil se daad likhte rahiye aate rahiye duaon ke saath Aapka Apna Ishk 'इश्क' के बदले इश्क चाहना तिजारत है इज़हार किससे करें महबूब तो दिल में है email: rkm179@gmail.com 
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13th September 2010, 12:18 PM
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Bachaa kar rakhna, Maalik, issko har buri nazar se Yaha gulshan ko siiNchaa gaya hai khoon-e-jigar se Aate hein yahaan titliyan, bhaNwre aur macchar bhi Bas, duaa hai fasaad-e-baad na guzraa kare idhar se Rab ko chhoD, sabhi se hoti hai choti baDii galtiyan Aksar gir jaata hai maahir bandar bhi apne shajar se Phool houe to mehkeinge, khaar houe to chuubeinge Insaani seerat saNchi jaati hai khayaalon ke asar se Behtar jo na ho koyi rakeeb, agar ho dena izzat usse Kaun jaane kab dawaai taiyyar karna paDe zahar se Subah ko yaha surya aata hai nazar purab se hi kyun Aisse kayi shikaayatein bhi heiN logon ko Ishwar se Do phool heiN kam jaymaala banaane ko’ Amanush ’ Rab sa ban.na ho to khud ko saNwarna har hunar se ji very nice creation......aapki har peshkash haqikat se ru-b-ru karti hai again very nice thoughts..................... Radhika  Seene Me Zakham Utarey Chale Gaye Jo Humpe Guzari Guzarey Chale Gaye Woh Aayega Ek Din Milne Humse Naam Uska Hi Pukarey Chale Gaye E-mail : radhika.nm2@gmail.com |
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13th September 2010, 02:39 PM
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13th September 2010, 03:55 PM
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It's me that should thank you for reading and appreciating this poetry, Mann Ji...! Apna khayaal rakheiN, thik hai...? Duaaon ke saath Haqeekat meri jaaN liye jaa rahi hai
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13th September 2010, 06:19 PM
Bahut hi khoobsoorat aashar!
Take Care.. ~Priya "Dikha kar khawaab in aankhon ko, De gaye aansoon in mein Tum.. Kaise chalka doo yeh aansoon, In mein bhi To rehTe ho Tum.." ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ Sirf Tanu Ki ChaahaT...... ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ |
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15th September 2010, 07:10 AM
Mushkilji,
bahut hi achchi lagi aapki rachna. thanks for sharing it. regards aarya inke sahaaron me raahai.n rahe.ngii lage.nge ye lejaa rahe alag raste un raston pe bhii kai seekhai.n to ho.ngii ye seekhai.n hameshaa sameTe rakhnaa inhii.n se to sabko manzil milai.ngii regards aarya |
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15th September 2010, 07:21 AM
Mushkilji,
bahut hi achchi lagi aapki rachna. thanks for sharing it. regards aarya inke sahaaron me raahai.n rahe.ngii lage.nge ye lejaa rahe alag raste un raston pe bhii kai seekhai.n to ho.ngii ye seekhai.n hameshaa sameTe rakhnaa inhii.n se to sabko manzil milai.ngii regards aarya |
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23rd September 2010, 03:55 AM
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Apna khayaal rakheiN, ok...? With blessings Haqeekat meri jaaN liye jaa rahi hai
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23rd September 2010, 04:02 AM
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Aap ki daad sar ankhoN par...! Thik se apna khayaal rakheiN, ok...? Duaaon ke saath Haqeekat meri jaaN liye jaa rahi hai
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23rd September 2010, 10:23 AM
Behtar jo na ho koyi rakeeb, agar ho dena izzat usse
Kaun jaane kab dawaai taiyyar karna paDe zahar se wah kya kehne............................................. ... path par kaante bahut hain tere par manjil par jaana too.ne dar na jatilata se jeewan ki isko saral banana too.ne pasat na hone paye honsle khud ka sahas khud hi juta le 
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25th September 2010, 04:35 AM
Bachaa kar rakhna, Maalik, issko har buri nazar se
Yaha gulshan ko siiNchaa gaya hai khoon-e-jigar se Aate hein yahaan titliyan, bhaNwre aur macchar bhi Bas, duaa hai fasaad-e-baad na guzraa kare idhar se Rab ko chhoD, sabhi se hoti hai choti baDii galtiyan Aksar gir jaata hai maahir bandar bhi apne shajar se Phool houe to mehkeinge, khaar houe to chuubeinge Insaani seerat saNchi jaati hai khayaalon ke asar se Behtar jo na ho koyi rakeeb, agar ho dena izzat usse Kaun jaane kab dawaai taiyyar karna paDe zahar se Subah ko yaha surya aata hai nazar purab se hi kyun Aisse kayi shikaayatein bhi heiN logon ko Ishwar se Do phool heiN kam jaymaala banaane ko’ Amanush ’ Rab sa ban.na ho to khud ko saNwarna har hunar se ji very nice creation......aapki har peshkash haqikat se ru-b-ru karti hai again very nice thoughts..................... [/QUOTE]Thanks for appreciating this one too, Radhika Ji...! Do keep encouraging and take care, ok...? With blessings Haqeekat meri jaaN liye jaa rahi hai
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25th September 2010, 04:39 AM
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YuNhi aate raheiN aur apna khayaal bhi rakheiN, ok...? Regards Haqeekat meri jaaN liye jaa rahi hai
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25th September 2010, 11:20 AM
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path par kaante bahut hain tere par manjil par jaana too.ne dar na jatilata se jeewan ki isko saral banana too.ne pasat na hone paye honsle khud ka sahas khud hi juta le
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17th December 2011, 11:59 PM
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KahaaN hein aap aajkal...? SDC is missing you...! Take very good care of yourself, ok...? With blessing Haqeekat meri jaaN liye jaa rahi hai
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18th December 2011, 12:02 AM
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Regards Haqeekat meri jaaN liye jaa rahi hai
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18th December 2011, 12:16 AM
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Isse duwaara paDne ke liye bahut shukriya...! Apna khayaal thik se rakheiN, ok...? With blessings Haqeekat meri jaaN liye jaa rahi hai
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18th December 2011, 06:01 AM
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namaskar amanush jee.kaise hai aap? pahele baar aapko padha hai.kya kamaal likhte hai aap?waa..........haaaa...........waa........haaaa. ........behatreen ghazal. waaa...........haaaa.......... reps added aur ek bar phir se waa......haaa............ |
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18th December 2011, 09:17 AM
Rab ko chhoD, sabhi se hoti hai choti baDii galtiyan
Aksar gir jaata hai maahir bandar bhi apne shajar se Phool houe to mehkeinge, khaar houe to chuubeinge Insaani seerat saNchi jaati hai khayaalon ke asar se Danny Boss, Wah wah janab... kia khiyaal hai aur kia andaaz hai janab ka... quoted verse to bas kamal hain...... is mukam'mal ghazal per meri taraf se dherooN daad qabool kijiye.... Apna khiyaal rakhiye ga,, DuaooN k saath ijaazat, tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di! kabhi fursat meiN sun lena, bohat ashaar baqi haiN... ("Asad") |
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18th December 2011, 09:51 AM
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Good Morning ChachaaJaan... Hope you are in fine Health.. Kyaaa baat hai janaab kyaa likhte ho aap.... Har sher ko kam se kam 2 baar padhaa hai maine, tab jaake uski gahraai tak utar paaya hooN...waaaahhhhMuafi ka talabgaar hoon jo bazm me shareeq hone me thodaa peeche rah gayaa.. magar jab aaj ise padhaa to yooN laga ke aapne meri Good Morning Banaa di.... Very well written sir... aur wo Macchar waala sher bahot pasand aaya.... DuaaoN me yaad rakhiye Chachoo..... Apna khoob khayaal rakhiye ... Likhte rahiye..... Shaad.. |
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19th December 2011, 07:45 PM
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Pehli baar aap hamare thread par aaye so aapki swaagat karte heiN...! YuNhi aana mat bhuuliyega...!  Kalaam ko pasand karne ke liye bahut shukriyaa aur itne saare waaah waahi ke liye bhi ( aur reps ke liye bhi...! )Apna khayaal rakhiyega, ok...? DuaaoN ke saath Haqeekat meri jaaN liye jaa rahi hai
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21st December 2011, 05:39 PM
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wah Chahu!!! kya khub ghazal kahi hai har ek sher lajawaab shukriya humare saath share karne ke liye aashirvad hum par banaye rakhe take care love and regards ur pari _______________________________________________ PRANEETA
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15th January 2012, 03:53 PM
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Tah-e-dil se daad qubuul hai...! Apna thik se khayaal rakhiyega, ok...? DuaaoN ke saath Haqeekat meri jaaN liye jaa rahi hai
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15th January 2012, 03:56 PM
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Shaayri ki itni tareef ke liye bahut shukriyaa...! YuNhi saath banaaye rakhna aur apna khayaal rakhna, ok...? DuaaoN ke saath Haqeekat meri jaaN liye jaa rahi hai
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16th January 2012, 11:39 AM
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wah kya khoobsurat bayaani hai....ghazal bahut achhi hui hai bhaiya... meri daad qubuul kijiyega.... Uss Rizk Se Tau Maut Bhali Jis Rizk Se Aatee Ho Tere Parwaaz MeiN Kotaahi.... vikramjethi@gmail.com |
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17th January 2012, 11:02 AM
Danny Bhai shab,
Kya baat... Kya baat... Kya baat...!! Bhai, kya shuruwaat ki hai.. wahh.. bahut hii umdaaH, ek-ek sher ko bade hi hunar se saza k likha hai aapne..!! Rep+++ added thanks for sharing with us. Regard, Omi Quote:
Har pal tere aane ki Aash mein....... |
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17th January 2012, 11:36 AM
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Janaab aapki Dua badi hi asardaar lagi har ashaar dil azeez raha ese hi likhte rahiye khaaksaar ki daad kubool kare...T C Dunia ke sitam ki koi perwah nahi mujhko, wo kyoun mujhpe ungliya uthaye ja rahe hain. Jis shaks ko janta tha ek chehre se ''kashif'' Uske kitne chehre samne laye ja rahe hain.  |
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23rd December 2012, 12:59 AM
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Shayri ko pasand karne ke liye aapka bahut shukriyaa...! Hamara aashirvaad hamesha se aap ke saath hi hai...! We miss you...! Take care of yourself, ok...? Haqeekat meri jaaN liye jaa rahi hai
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23rd December 2012, 01:34 AM
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Apna khayaal rakheiN, ok...? DuaaoN ke saath Haqeekat meri jaaN liye jaa rahi hai
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23rd December 2012, 07:29 PM
Danny Bhaiyaa namaste
kaise hai aap ?aapki gazal padi, saabhe sher bahut acche aur bahut gehri baate hai jo aapne kahi hai...aise hi likhte rahiye aur bazm ki ronak apne kalamoN se banaye rakhiye....! regards aapki chotti behan .....Sunita Thakur..... यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया ....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए... 
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16th October 2014, 07:27 PM
Just bringing back these feelings of mine on front page so that I too may realise what SDC means to us...!
Btw, bahut shukriya, Choti Behna for appreciating & for reminding me my poetries...! Love you all...! Haqeekat meri jaaN liye jaa rahi hai
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