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Kyun main har baat se anjaan sa huN -
17th October 2009, 04:18 PM
Kyun main har baat se anjaan sa huN
Kya main masoom sa Nadaan sa huN
Thi meri bhi chamak sitaroN si kabhi
AaJ MaiN BhI Ek AaM InsaaN sa huN
Jane Kiski Bad Dua Lag Gayi Mujh-ko
KyuN AaJ Kal Main PareshaN sa huN
Aaj Aaya HuN Kal Chala Bhi JauNga
GhaR AaYE Hua Ek MehMaaN sa huN
Naa Raha Josh na hosh Hi mujh meiN
Main Aaj Bikhare Hua TufaaN sa huN
Bus Karta Raha Ibadat Koi kami na ki
Kyun Nazar me Apni BeImaan sa huN
BadalTe WaqT Ko Dekha Jo KwaHisH
Aks Apna Dekh MaiN HairaaN sa huN
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18th October 2009, 09:12 AM
Good one Khwawish, this one was very good.
Naa Raha Josh na hosh Hi mujh meiN
Main Aaj Bikhare Hua TufaaN sa huN
yahan par kyun chipkaayee yeh ghazal? dikhaai bhi nahin deti
ता उम्र रहा इक रोज़-ए -मुकम्मल का इंतज़ार
किसी में शाम न मिली तो किसी में सहर नहीं
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18th October 2009, 01:01 PM
Sameer ji...Bahut acha likha hai aapne....har ashaar taarif ke kaabil hai....
Yeh do sher aur tisra maqtaa... mujhe khaas pasand aaye...
Aaj Aaya HuN Kal Chala Bhi JauNga
GhaR AaYE Hua Ek MehMaaN sa huN
Bus Karta Raha Ibadat Koi kami na ki
Kyun Nazar me Apni BeImaan sa huN
BadalTe WaqT Ko Dekha Jo KwaHisH
Aks Apna Dekh MaiN HairaaN sa huN
dil se daad....kabul kijiye...
duaaon ke saath
YuuN Besabab Aansoo Aate NahiN
Lag Zaroor Koii Baat Dil Ko Rahii Hai ...
Fareb Kaa ChaDhtaa Bazaar Dekh
Insaaf Se Bastii Khaalii Ho Rahii Hai ...
---Naresh Mehra----
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18th October 2009, 01:19 PM
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Originally Posted by kwahish
Kyun main har baat se anjaan sa huN
Kya main masoom sa Nadaan sa huN
wah wah
Thi meri bhi chamak sitaroN si kabhi
AaJ MaiN BhI Ek AaM InsaaN sa huN
not realy, i dnt thnk k tum aam insaan ho ! ! !
Jane Kiski Bad Dua Lag Gayi Mujh-ko
KyuN AaJ Kal Main PareshaN sa huN
aisa kyu ?
Aaj Aaya HuN Kal Chala Bhi JauNga
GhaR AaYE Hua Ek MehMaaN sa huN
Naa Raha Josh na hosh Hi mujh meiN
Main Aaj Bikhare Hua TufaaN sa huN
hmmm.. Too gud...
Bus Karta Raha Ibadat Koi kami na ki
Kyun Nazar me Apni BeImaan sa huN
'beimaan' dint get tht...
BadalTe WaqT Ko Dekha Jo KwaHisH
Aks Apna Dekh MaiN HairaaN sa huN
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ye badhiya hai...
Wakai me kamaal ka likha hai sameer bhai keep it up... Bt feel gud...
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18th October 2009, 01:34 PM
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Thi meri bhi chamak sitaroN si kabhi
AaJ MaiN BhI Ek AaM InsaaN sa huN
Aaj Aaya HuN Kal Chala Bhi JauNga
GhaR AaYE Hua Ek MehMaaN sa huN
Naa Raha Josh na hosh Hi mujh meiN
Main Aaj Bikhare Hua TufaaN sa huN
Bus Karta Raha Ibadat Koi kami na ki
Kyun Nazar me Apni BeImaan sa huN
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this is realy a very nice creation....................
aur yeh chand sher kabile tareef hai................
sameer bhai bahut khoob likha hai aapne.................
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18th October 2009, 02:36 PM
khwaiss sahab aadaab............................................ ..........................
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Kyun main har baat se anjaan sa huN
Kya main masoom sa Nadaan sa huN
rhetorical question ka jawab phir rhetorical question me?????
lekin bahut accha laga.....
daad hazir hai........
Thi meri bhi chamak sitaroN si kabhi
AaJ MaiN BhI Ek AaM InsaaN sa huN
koi known situation hota jispar ye sher hai to baat banti.....ya to ye sher kisi qita ya musalsal ghazal ka part hota,to baat banti.........
isliye ye accha hote hue bhi flat gaya........jaise thums up ka gas nikal jaye
Jane Kiski Bad Dua Lag Gayi Mujh-ko
KyuN AaJ Kal Main PareshaN sa huN
girah bahut acchi hai.....bahut jayada acchi......magar
apne pahle misre me ek statement diya hai............to uska seedha jawab jyada accha lagta.........jab apne kah hi diya ki baddua lag gayi hai to jahir hai ki ap pareshan honge........phir ' kyun pareshan hai'....ye poochne ka matlab kya??
Aaj Aaya HuN Kal Chala Bhi JauNga
GhaR AaYE Hua Ek MehMaaN sa huN
waaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaah......
ap to sahi maine me universal citizen ban gaye janab........
matlab sari dharti ko hi apne apna ghar bana liya !!!!
kash ,,sab apki soch rakhte.......
Naa Raha Josh na hosh Hi mujh meiN
Main Aaj Bikhare Hua TufaaN sa huN
bahut accha sher kaha apne...bus pahle misre ne apke' HOSH' ne thoda atpata banaya ........
magar samajne wale to sab samaj hi gaye.......
Bus Karta Raha Ibadat Koi kami na ki
Kyun Nazar me Apni BeImaan sa huN
bhai rabt nahi lagi yaha.........kabhi kabhi aisa hota hai......adami mann me kuch sochta hai to usse ulta line seedha nazar aane lagta hai..mann hi mann me........magar jab vo khayal paper par aata hai to dusro ko ulta lagta hai......
ap dekhiye...agar ap kahte pahle misre me theek ulta......jaise ki aisa kuch--"shayad ibaadat me mere kami rahi hogi'(sirf idea de raha hu)...tab apki dusri line rabt me aa jati
BadalTe WaqT Ko Dekha Jo KwaHisH
Aks Apna Dekh MaiN HairaaN sa huN
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mujpar ye sher nahi khula......
apki ghazal bahut acchi thi..........
jo mujhe laga vo maine socha ki ap tak pahuchana jaruri hai.......mujhe pata hai ap meri bato ka bura nahi manenge.......
apko tabadla e khayal ka poora haq hai..........
bejhijak apni baat samne rakhiyega.........
ek baar phir se daad.......
regards
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18th October 2009, 02:59 PM
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Good one Khwawish, this one was very good.
Naa Raha Josh na hosh Hi mujh meiN
Main Aaj Bikhare Hua TufaaN sa huN
yahan par kyun chipkaayee yeh ghazal? dikhaai bhi nahin deti
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Mayoos thanks for your appriciation, yeh sher mere bhi pasand ka hai, hounsala wa himmat harne ke bad insaan khudko bade se bade cheez se tol deta hai... maine tufaan se tol liya khudko
Bus younhi socha ke gazal kuch khaas nahi hai isliye yahan chipka dee
Phir bhi aap logoN ne dekha ise yahan mujhe behad khushi hui...
Khush raho aage bhi saath banaye rakho..
May God Bless you.
Khuda Hafez..
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18th October 2009, 03:34 PM
Oye..............
"anjaan.......... Nadaan .............Insaan...."
" Pareshaan' na ho...........Khud ko "mahemaan " Na samajh....
teri kalam meiN ek "tufaan" hai...... tu kahan "beimaan" hai ??
bas dekh kar teri kalam zamana thoRa 'Hairaan" hai.......
mere bhai.... tum to din ba din bahot khub likhne lage ho....
Mashallah..........
aise hee likhte raho
duwao ke saath
tumhari dii
~*~Kaash Dil ki aawaz mein aisa asar ho jaaye
Jise Hum Yaad karte hai use Khabar ho jaaye ~*~
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18th October 2009, 04:55 PM
Sameer Bhai,,
Kia baat hai janab,,,,,
BOht khooobsorat kalam hai aap ki...
I like it very much,,
read this again and again.....very beautiful,,,,,,
Keep writing bhai,,
Take care,,,
GOD BLESS YOU,,
*hSn* : parStaar
tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di!
kabhi fursat meiN sun lena, bohat ashaar baqi haiN... ("Asad")
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Very Nice Post..... -
19th October 2009, 04:52 PM
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Originally Posted by kwahish
Kyun main har baat se anjaan sa huN
Kya main masoom sa Nadaan sa huN
Thi meri bhi chamak sitaroN si kabhi
AaJ MaiN BhI Ek AaM InsaaN sa huN
Jane Kiski Bad Dua Lag Gayi Mujh-ko
KyuN AaJ Kal Main PareshaN sa huN
Aaj Aaya HuN Kal Chala Bhi JauNga
GhaR AaYE Hua Ek MehMaaN sa huN
Naa Raha Josh na hosh Hi mujh meiN
Main Aaj Bikhare Hua TufaaN sa huN
Bus Karta Raha Ibadat Koi kami na ki
Kyun Nazar me Apni BeImaan sa huN
BadalTe WaqT Ko Dekha Jo KwaHisH
Aks Apna Dekh MaiN HairaaN sa huN
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Khwahish ji,
Bahut khoob likha hai aapne:-)
Vibhuti.....
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19th October 2009, 09:41 PM
Kyun main har baat se anjaan sa huN
Kya main masoom sa Nadaan sa huN
masoom nadaan aur aap..?
Thi meri bhi chamak sitaroN si kabhi
AaJ MaiN BhI Ek AaM InsaaN sa huN
hmm sahi hai ya ghalat pata nahi magar achha hai sher
Jane Kiski Bad Dua Lag Gayi Mujh-ko
KyuN AaJ Kal Main PareshaN sa huN
meri to nahi kasam se
Aaj Aaya HuN Kal Chala Bhi JauNga
GhaR AaYE Hua Ek MehMaaN sa huN
har koi 2 din ka mehmaan hai sameer jee
aap itna sochiye mat
Naa Raha Josh na hosh Hi mujh meiN
Main Aaj Bikhare Hua TufaaN sa huN
tufaan bhi bikharta hai...?
Bus Karta Raha Ibadat Koi kami na ki
Kyun Nazar me Apni BeImaan sa huN
sochna padega ...................
BadalTe WaqT Ko Dekha Jo KwaHisH
Aks Apna Dekh MaiN HairaaN sa huN
main bhi itni achhi ghazal padh kar Hairan hu
aap ki kalam mein din ba din chaand ki chamak nazar aarahi hai
God aapko har taklif se dur rakhe
Youn hi mahfil ko roshan karate rahiye
khus rahiye
aapki dost
Diya
Mohabbat ke baad mohabbat mumkin hai faraz.
Magar toot ke chahna sirf ek baar hota hai
Goodbye SDC
Diya
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tareef -
22nd October 2009, 10:38 AM
kwahish ji
aapki ghazale read ki magar ek baat kahan chahugi aapke ghaza me theme
ek hi jaisa hai mujhe aisa lagata hai ki aap kuch subjective aur diff theme
par aapne nahi likha hai , aapki ghazale bahut aachi hai .
magar aap vahi tak simeet ho gaye hai.
saarika
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22nd October 2009, 02:24 PM
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Sameer ji...Bahut acha likha hai aapne....har ashaar taarif ke kaabil hai.... Yeh do sher aur tisra maqtaa... mujhe khaas pasand aaye... Aaj Aaya HuN Kal Chala Bhi JauNga GhaR AaYE Hua Ek MehMaaN sa huN Bus Karta Raha Ibadat Koi kami na ki Kyun Nazar me Apni BeImaan sa huN BadalTe WaqT Ko Dekha Jo KwaHisH Aks Apna Dekh MaiN HairaaN sa huN dil se daad....kabul kijiye... duaaon ke saath
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Naresh Jii......... AadaaB
Aapki pasandgi aur hounsla afzai se dil mutmain hua.... aapko mere likhe ashar pasand aaye... aur aapne pasandgi jatayi..... tahe dil se shukriya...
Aage bhi aapka saath bana rahe yehi ummid e dua...
Khush rahiye, apna saath banaye rakhiye...
Apna kahayal rakhiye
Khuda hafez...
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22nd October 2009, 02:33 PM
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ye badhiya hai...
Wakai me kamaal ka likha hai sameer bhai keep it up... Bt feel gud...
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Raj Bhai ...........
Aur dear kaise ho...? Yaar aapki kavitaye sunaye hum to bahut bore ho gaye yeh ghise pite ahsaas likha likha ker aur padh padhker.....
Aapko pasand aaye mere ahsaas achcha laga but now thats bad feeling gone cool day's came...
Aate rhaiye,
Khush rahiye..
Apna kahayal rakhiye
Khuda hafez...
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22nd October 2009, 04:27 PM
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Originally Posted by kwahish
Kyun main har baat se anjaan sa huN
Kya main masoom sa Nadaan sa huN
Thi meri bhi chamak sitaroN si kabhi
AaJ MaiN BhI Ek AaM InsaaN sa huN
Jane Kiski Bad Dua Lag Gayi Mujh-ko
KyuN AaJ Kal Main PareshaN sa huN
Aaj Aaya HuN Kal Chala Bhi JauNga
GhaR AaYE Hua Ek MehMaaN sa huN
Naa Raha Josh na hosh Hi mujh meiN
Main Aaj Bikhare Hua TufaaN sa huN
Bus Karta Raha Ibadat Koi kami na ki
Kyun Nazar me Apni BeImaan sa huN
BadalTe WaqT Ko Dekha Jo KwaHisH
Aks Apna Dekh MaiN HairaaN sa huN
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Khwahish sahib AAdab
Aapne bahot khoobsurat ghazal kahi hai
dil se daad qubool karen…
sare sher aur ehsaas ache lage……………………
Lekin aapne ise ‘Aapki shayri’ main post kiya hai isliye maine
ismein kuchh islaah karne ki koshish ki hai(halanki main khud
bhi shayri ki field mein abhi talib-e-ilm hi hun)
please bura na maniye ga……………………
Jaise har baat se anjaan sa huN
haan main masoom sa Nadaan sa huN
Thi sitaroN si chamak meri bhi
AaJ lekin AaM InsaaN sa huN
Bad Dua Kiski Lagi hai Mujh-ko
Kisliye AaJ PareshaN sa huN
Aaj Aaya HuN to Kal jana hai
Apne hi GhaR me main MehMaaN sa huN
aaj kuchh hosh nahin hai mujh ko
ek Bikhare Huwe TufaaN sa huN
lakh karta hun Ibadat phir bhi
khud ki Nazron me BeImaan sa huN
badla badla sa hai chehra ‘KhwaHisH’
Aaina Dekh ke HairaaN sa huN
Duaon ke sath
apka dost
Fezan
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Koi Aisa Kamaal Ho Jaye Zindigi Be-Misaal Ho Jaye
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22nd October 2009, 08:27 PM
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Originally Posted by kwahish
Kyun main har baat se anjaan sa huN
Kya main masoom sa Nadaan sa huN
Thi meri bhi chamak sitaroN si kabhi
AaJ MaiN BhI Ek AaM InsaaN sa huN
Jane Kiski Bad Dua Lag Gayi Mujh-ko
KyuN AaJ Kal Main PareshaN sa huN
Aaj Aaya HuN Kal Chala Bhi JauNga
GhaR AaYE Hua Ek MehMaaN sa huN
Naa Raha Josh na hosh Hi mujh meiN
Main Aaj Bikhare Hua TufaaN sa huN
Bus Karta Raha Ibadat Koi kami na ki
Kyun Nazar me Apni BeImaan sa huN
BadalTe WaqT Ko Dekha Jo KwaHisH
Aks Apna Dekh MaiN HairaaN sa huN
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Bhai,
Bahut khoob likha hai....
likhte rahiye...
Vikram jethi.
'E Taahire Laahuti!!!
Uss Rizk Se Tau Maut Bhali
Jis Rizk Se Aatee Ho
Tere Parwaaz MeiN Kotaahi....
vikramjethi@gmail.com
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23rd October 2009, 02:13 PM
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Originally Posted by manvinder singh
this is realy a very nice creation....................
aur yeh chand sher kabile tareef hai................
sameer bhai bahut khoob likha hai aapne.................
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Maan Jii ssk..........
Aapko apni kalam per dekhker achcha laga, aapne jo tarif aur hounsla afzai ki hai uska main tahe dil se mamnoon huN......
YouN to main Ishq aur dard per hi likhata huN but mujhe aapki likhi aur sachai per likhe samajik aur logoN ko prerit karne wali tehreere bahut pasand hai maine bhi kuch aisa likha tha aapki nazar karta hun waqt mile to padh lijiyenga....
Yeh links hai....
http://www.shayri.com/forums/showthr...725#post367725
http://www.shayri.com/forums/showthr...034#post368034
aage bhi aapka saath bana rahe, yehi dua...
Khush rahiye, bazam mein aate rahiye...
Apna khayal rakhiye..
Khuda Hafez.......
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23rd October 2009, 02:14 PM
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Originally Posted by manvinder singh
this is realy a very nice creation....................
aur yeh chand sher kabile tareef hai................
sameer bhai bahut khoob likha hai aapne.................
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Maan Jii ssk..........
Aapko apni kalam per dekhker achcha laga, aapne jo tarif aur hounsla afzai ki hai uska main tahe dil se mamnoon huN......
YouN to main Ishq aur dard per hi likhata huN but mujhe aapki likhi aur sachai per likhe samajik aur logoN ko prerit karne wali tehreere bahut pasand hai maine bhi kuch aisa likha tha aapki nazar karta hun waqt mile to padh lijiyenga....
Yeh links hai....
http://www.shayri.com/forums/showthr...725#post367725
http://www.shayri.com/forums/showthr...034#post368034
aage bhi aapka saath bana rahe, yehi dua...
Khush rahiye, bazam mein aate rahiye...
Apna khayal rakhiye..
Khuda Hafez.......
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23rd October 2009, 02:19 PM
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Originally Posted by manvinder singh
this is realy a very nice creation....................
aur yeh chand sher kabile tareef hai................
sameer bhai bahut khoob likha hai aapne.................
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Quote:
Originally Posted by manvinder singh
this is realy a very nice creation....................
aur yeh chand sher kabile tareef hai................
sameer bhai bahut khoob likha hai aapne.................
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Maan Jii ssk..........
Aapko apni kalam per dekhker achcha laga, aapne jo tarif aur hounsla afzai ki hai uska main tahe dil se mamnoon huN......
YouN to main Ishq aur dard per hi likhata huN but mujhe aapki likhi aur sachai per likhe samajik aur logoN ko prerit karne wali tehreere bahut pasand hai maine bhi kuch aisa likha tha aapki nazar karta hun waqt mile to padh lijiyenga....
Yeh links hai....
http://www.shayri.com/forums/showthr...725#post367725
http://www.shayri.com/forums/showthr...034#post368034
aage bhi aapka saath bana rahe, yehi dua...
Khush rahiye, bazam mein aate rahiye...
Apna khayal rakhiye..
Khuda Hafez.......
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23rd October 2009, 03:46 PM
dhanyawad sameer bhai....... bahut bahut shukriya aapka jo aapne muzhe is kabil samjha ............ aapki dono post parh li hai ...... dono hi jaberdast hai.......... aap ki kalam me hi jaadu hai............
aage bhi aise hi saath banaye rakhye ga........
allah hafez ............
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23rd October 2009, 04:32 PM
Sameer bhai......
same to u bhai
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23rd October 2009, 04:44 PM
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Sameer bhai......
same to u bhai
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Raj bhai uska matlab yeh ki yeh Ishq aur dard mein mohobbat ke ahsaas ke siva aur bhi kai ahsaas hai Jinhe hum shabdoN mein dhalte nahi, main kahin lafzon mein atak jata huN to kahiN ahsaas se guzra na hone ke wajah se bayan nahi kar pata huN, but you are simply explane which you think in your poetry..........
Bus lo maine nayi post ki hai aise hi ahsaas ko shabdoN mein dhala hai aur isme khaasker tumhe bhi samjhna hai mera sandesh....
Hope tum meri baat samjho.....
Khush raho, take care.. Bye..
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23rd October 2009, 04:52 PM
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Originally Posted by kwahish
Bus lo maine nayi post ki hai aise hi ahsaas ko shabdoN mein dhala hai aur isme khaasker tumhe bhi samjhna hai mera sandesh....
Hope tum meri baat samjho.....
Khush raho, take care.. Bye..
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thanx sameer bhai..
aur kaun c post k baare me keh re ho sameer bhai ????
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25th October 2009, 03:38 PM
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Originally Posted by zidd
khwaiss sahab aadaab............................................ ..........................
mujpar ye sher nahi khula......
apki ghazal bahut acchi thi..........
jo mujhe laga vo maine socha ki ap tak pahuchana jaruri hai.......mujhe pata hai ap meri bato ka bura nahi manenge.......
apko tabadla e khayal ka poora haq hai..........
bejhijak apni baat samne rakhiyega.........
ek baar phir se daad.......
regards
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Zidd sahab Aadaab............
Jii main aapki baatoN se puri tarha sehmat huN..... aur aapne mujhe bataya mujhe behad khushi hui.... Jaanker, Kyunki galtiyaN chupane walon se jyada main galatiyaN baane walo ko chahata huN.... Wohi log bade dil wale hote hai jo sahiN raah dikhaye.... aur aap baqubi bade dil wale hai....
Aage bhi be jhijak apni rai se nawaziyenga, tab hi mujhe lagenga ke aap bhi mujhe utna hi chahte hai jitna main aap sabko ....
Aap ka saath bana rahe yehi dua ,
Khush rhaiye aapna kahayal rakhiye
Khuda Hafez....
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28th October 2009, 03:26 PM
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Sameer Bhai,,
Kia baat hai janab,,,,,
BOht khooobsorat kalam hai aap ki...
I like it very much,,
read this again and again.....very beautiful,,,,,,
Keep writing bhai,,
Take care,,,
GOD BLESS YOU,,
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Hassan Bhai............
Aapko yeh andaz e achcha laga, mujhe khushi huyi.....
Tarif wa hounsla afzai ka bahut bahut shukriya....
Thanks for encourage me Bhai...
AAge bhi saath banaye rakhiye,
Khush rahiye,
Apna khayal rakhiey
Khuda Hafez...
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28th October 2009, 03:27 PM
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Khwahish ji,
Bahut khoob likha hai aapne:-)
Vibhuti.....
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Thanks Vibhuti Jii
aage bhi aapka saath bana rahe yehi dua....
Khush rhaiye,
apna khayal rakhiey
Khuda hafez..
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28th October 2009, 04:07 PM
Hmmm, aab lag raha hai ke aap meri gazal ka nahi mera hi tafsira kar rahi thi
Khair aapne jo tarif aur hounsla afzai ki uska tahe dil se mamnoon huN...
aage bhi aapka saath bana rahe yehi dua....
Khush rahiye
apna khayal rakhiye..
Khuda hafez...
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6th November 2009, 04:21 PM
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Khwahish sahib AAdab
Aapne bahot khoobsurat ghazal kahi hai
dil se daad qubool karen…
sare sher aur ehsaas ache lage……………………
Lekin aapne ise ‘Aapki shayri’ main post kiya hai isliye maine
ismein kuchh islaah karne ki koshish ki hai(halanki main khud
bhi shayri ki field mein abhi talib-e-ilm hi hun)
please bura na maniye ga……………………
Jaise har baat se anjaan sa huN
haan main masoom sa Nadaan sa huN
Thi sitaroN si chamak meri bhi
AaJ lekin AaM InsaaN sa huN
Bad Dua Kiski Lagi hai Mujh-ko
Kisliye AaJ PareshaN sa huN
Aaj Aaya HuN to Kal jana hai
Apne hi GhaR me main MehMaaN sa huN
aaj kuchh hosh nahin hai mujh ko
ek Bikhare Huwe TufaaN sa huN
lakh karta hun Ibadat phir bhi
khud ki Nazron me BeImaan sa huN
badla badla sa hai chehra ‘KhwaHisH’
Aaina Dekh ke HairaaN sa huN
Duaon ke sath
apka dost
Fezan
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Faizan sahab AadaaB..........
Badi masarrat hui aapko apni kalam per dekhker....
Aapko gazal pasand aayi main tahe dil se mamnoon huN aapki is beshkimti rai ka...
Jii aap bhale hi aapki nazar mein talib e ilm hai per humari nazar main nahi ... yeh to aapka bada pan hai ke aap khud ko talib e ilm keh rahe hai...
Aapne meri gazal ko jo bher mein lane ki koshish ki hai main uska wakai dil se shukra guzar huN, Mujhe bher ka koi ilm nahi bus aap logoN se jo bhi samjhta huN use apni kalam mein istemal karne ki koshish karta huN......
Aage bhi aapka saath bana rahe to nacheez bhi kuch achcha likhne lagenga...
Khush rahiye..
Khuda Hafez...
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11th November 2009, 06:24 PM
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Bhai,
Bahut khoob likha hai....
likhte rahiye...
Vikram jethi.
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Thanks for appriciate Vikram Bhai.........
Keep visiting....... And keep reply on posts..... which u like,,......
And also keep posting and keep in touch...
Take care... Bye..
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11th November 2009, 06:37 PM
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dhanyawad sameer bhai....... bahut bahut shukriya aapka jo aapne muzhe is kabil samjha ............ aapki dono post parh li hai ...... dono hi jaberdast hai.......... aap ki kalam me hi jaadu hai............
aage bhi aise hi saath banaye rakhye ga........
allah hafez ............
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Manvinder Jii......
Aur bazam mein aat
Dhanyawad to sanu aapka karna haiN aapne aapka kimti waqt jo sadi khaak kalam per diya hai.... Aapne meri post ko reply ke kabil samjha yehi mere liye bahut khushi ki baat hai.... Main aapka tahe dil se shukra guzar huN.... aage v aapka saath bana rahe yehi dua hai meri....
Khush rhaiye..
Apna khayal rakhiye..e rahiye..
Khuda Hafez...
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Sameer bhai......
same to u bhai
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Haa haa Bhai Tum nahi sudhroge........... Aab yeh mat kehna ke main bigdaa kab tha.
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thanx sameer bhai..
aur kaun c post k baare me keh re ho sameer bhai ????
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Bhai aap koi bhi paristiti ko kavita mien dhal dete ho... Koi bhi baat koi sur mein keh sakte ho... so I wana like ur way...... I wana more from u... R u Understand not only me.... SOme one is rely wana ur poetry.....
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16th November 2009, 04:45 PM
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Kyun main har baat se anjaan sa huN
Kya main masoom sa Nadaan sa huN
Thi meri bhi chamak sitaroN si kabhi
AaJ MaiN BhI Ek AaM InsaaN sa huN
Jane Kiski Bad Dua Lag Gayi Mujh-ko
KyuN AaJ Kal Main PareshaN sa huN
Aaj Aaya HuN Kal Chala Bhi JauNga
GhaR AaYE Hua Ek MehMaaN sa huN
Naa Raha Josh na hosh Hi mujh meiN
Main Aaj Bikhare Hua TufaaN sa huN
Bus Karta Raha Ibadat Koi kami na ki
Kyun Nazar me Apni BeImaan sa huN
BadalTe WaqT Ko Dekha Jo KwaHisH
Aks Apna Dekh MaiN HairaaN sa huN
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Bhut khoob likha hai....
bas karta raha ibadat koi kami na ki, kyun nazar me apni belmaan sa hun
keep writing
Gamo ki kader karo or unke sath jiyu,
Gam kabi fareb na denge khushi ki tarah.
........Shaan......
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Bhut khoob likha hai....
bas karta raha ibadat koi kami na ki, kyun nazar me apni belmaan sa hun
keep writing
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Tariq Ahmad sahab Aadaab.............
Bade dino bad aapko yahan bazm mein dekh ker bahut khushi huyi..... Aur apni post per aapki daad wakai dil mutmain hua........
Housla afzai aur tarif ke liye main tahe dil se shukra guzar huN.......
Bazm mein aate rhaiye.....
Khush rhaiye...
Khuda Hafez...
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27th November 2009, 05:21 AM
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Kyun main har baat se anjaan sa huN
Kya main masoom sa Nadaan sa huN
Thi meri bhi chamak sitaroN si kabhi
AaJ MaiN BhI Ek AaM InsaaN sa huN
Jane Kiski Bad Dua Lag Gayi Mujh-ko
KyuN AaJ Kal Main PareshaN sa huN
Aaj Aaya HuN Kal Chala Bhi JauNga
GhaR AaYE Hua Ek MehMaaN sa huN
Naa Raha Josh na hosh Hi mujh meiN
Main Aaj Bikhare Hua TufaaN sa huN
Bus Karta Raha Ibadat Koi kami na ki
Kyun Nazar me Apni BeImaan sa huN
BadalTe WaqT Ko Dekha Jo KwaHisH
Aks Apna Dekh MaiN HairaaN sa huN
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this is ur best one really ...........
Jane Kiski Bad Dua Lag Gayi Mujh-ko
KyuN AaJ Kal Main PareshaN sa huN
ultimate ..........!!
Aaj Aaya HuN Kal Chala Bhi JauNga
GhaR AaYE Hua Ek MehMaaN sa huN
another one
Thi meri bhi chamak sitaroN si kabhi
AaJ MaiN BhI Ek AaM InsaaN sa huN
yaar .... kya kahu ...
amazing ...........!!
faizaan bhayee ne jo bahar mai lane ki koshish ki hia kamaal hai
tumhare khyaal aur bhi katl kar rahe hai .........
repssss
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27th November 2009, 05:31 AM
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Khwahish sahib AAdab
Aapne bahot khoobsurat ghazal kahi hai
dil se daad qubool karen…
sare sher aur ehsaas ache lage……………………
Lekin aapne ise ‘Aapki shayri’ main post kiya hai isliye maine
ismein kuchh islaah karne ki koshish ki hai(halanki main khud
bhi shayri ki field mein abhi talib-e-ilm hi hun)
please bura na maniye ga……………………
Jaise har baat se anjaan sa huN
haan main masoom sa Nadaan sa huN
Thi sitaroN si chamak meri bhi
AaJ lekin AaM InsaaN sa huN
Bad Dua Kiski Lagi hai Mujh-ko
Kisliye AaJ PareshaN sa huN
Aaj Aaya HuN to Kal jana hai
Apne hi GhaR me main MehMaaN sa huN
aaj kuchh hosh nahin hai mujh ko
ek Bikhare Huwe TufaaN sa huN
lakh karta hun Ibadat phir bhi
khud ki Nazron me BeImaan sa huN
badla badla sa hai chehra ‘KhwaHisH’
Aaina Dekh ke HairaaN sa huN
Duaon ke sath
apka dost
Fezan
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fezaan bhayee
Bad Dua Kiski Lagi hai Mujh-ko
Kisliye AaJ PareshaN sa huN
aapne jo alfaaz ko chamak di hia kamaal hai
loved it
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this is ur best one really ...........
Jane Kiski Bad Dua Lag Gayi Mujh-ko
KyuN AaJ Kal Main PareshaN sa huN
ultimate ..........!!
Aaj Aaya HuN Kal Chala Bhi JauNga
GhaR AaYE Hua Ek MehMaaN sa huN
another one
Thi meri bhi chamak sitaroN si kabhi
AaJ MaiN BhI Ek AaM InsaaN sa huN
yaar .... kya kahu ...
amazing ...........!!
faizaan bhayee ne jo bahar mai lane ki koshish ki hia kamaal hai
tumhare khyaal aur bhi katl kar rahe hai .........
repssss
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Bhai Thanks for appriciate, and sorry for late reply.... waise aap per aise kayiN sorry baki hai aapne jistarha sher pasand kiye bahut achcha laga........ aage bhi apna saath banaye rakhiye........
Khush rhaiye,
khuda Hafez........
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5th January 2010, 01:11 PM
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Kyun main har baat se anjaan sa huN
Kya main masoom sa Nadaan sa huN
Thi meri bhi chamak sitaroN si kabhi
AaJ MaiN BhI Ek AaM InsaaN sa huN
Jane Kiski Bad Dua Lag Gayi Mujh-ko
KyuN AaJ Kal Main PareshaN sa huN
Aaj Aaya HuN Kal Chala Bhi JauNga
GhaR AaYE Hua Ek MehMaaN sa huN
Naa Raha Josh na hosh Hi mujh meiN
Main Aaj Bikhare Hua TufaaN sa huN
Bus Karta Raha Ibadat Koi kami na ki
Kyun Nazar me Apni BeImaan sa huN
BadalTe WaqT Ko Dekha Jo KwaHisH
Aks Apna Dekh MaiN HairaaN sa huN
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Assalam0Alaikum !!
MASHALLAH bohat khoob !!
i love it ....
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5th January 2010, 01:13 PM
Thi sitaroN si chamak meri bhi
AaJ lekin AaM InsaaN sa huN
Bad Dua Kiski Lagi hai Mujh-ko
Kisliye AaJ PareshaN sa huN
heart touching .... !! have no words to appreciate it !! MASHALLAH
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bahur hi khoobsurat gajal hai ji daad hajir hai
ibadat bhi khuda hai,bagavat bhi khuda hai
khuda baagi kahi hai,kahi baagi khuda hai.
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