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29th March 2009, 04:37 PM
"क्या है?"
यह जो हो रही है दो दिलों के दरमियान ,
यह अजब सी गुफ्तगू क्या है,
कभी होता था मौसम गुलाबों का जहाँ ,
आज वहां काटों सी चुभन क्या है,
मुस्कुराहटों का दौर हुआ करता था जिन होटों पे कभी,
आज उन होटों पे गम-ऐ-ग़ज़ल क्या है,
किसी ज़माने में हंसा करती थी जो आँखें,
उन आंखों मैं यह आंसू क्या है,
मानके खुदा तुझे किए सजदे तेरे इश्क में,
तोह यह इबादतों मैं बेवफाई का ज़िक्र क्या है,
कहते है शायर की है बेंतेहा सुकूं इश्क में,
तोः फिर यह बेकरारी सी दिल मैं क्या है,
क्यूँ भरते है वो दम मोहोब्बत का अपनी,
जो ख़ुद समझते नही मोहोब्बत की आबरू क्या है,
इसी उम्मीद पे काटी है ज़िन्दगी नलिन ने,
वो काश पूछते की आरजू क्या है,
नलिन
Nalin
Uski Har "Uff" pe hum apni jaan lutate rahe,
Uski Shaqsiyat ko karke buland hum khudko mitate rahe,
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woh dete rahe zakhm pe zakhm aur ham muskurate rahe
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29th March 2009, 09:43 PM
bahut khoob kaha aapne Nalin jii.........................
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.....Sunita Thakur.....
यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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29th March 2009, 10:37 PM
?????????
Roman version please dude ? ? ? ? ?Jaise aapne ghazini me use kiya mujhe apki ghazini wali poetry bahut achhi lagi
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30th March 2009, 11:37 AM
Quote:
Originally Posted by nalinmehra
"क्या है?"
यह जो हो रही है दो दिलों के दरमियान ,
यह अजब सी गुफ्तगू क्या है,
कभी होता था मौसम गुलाबों का जहाँ ,
आज वहां काटों सी चुभन क्या है,
मुस्कुराहटों का दौर हुआ करता था जिन होटों पे कभी,
आज उन होटों पे गम-ऐ-ग़ज़ल क्या है,
किसी ज़माने में हंसा करती थी जो आँखें,
उन आंखों मैं यह आंसू क्या है,
मानके खुदा तुझे किए सजदे तेरे इश्क में,
तोह यह इबादतों मैं बेवफाई का ज़िक्र क्या है,
कहते है शायर की है बेंतेहा सुकूं इश्क में,
तोः फिर यह बेकरारी सी दिल मैं क्या है,
क्यूँ भरते है वो दम मोहोब्बत का अपनी,
जो ख़ुद समझते नही मोहोब्बत की आबरू क्या है,
इसी उम्मीद पे काटी है ज़िन्दगी नलिन ने,
वो काश पूछते की आरजू क्या है,
नलिन
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Kabhi kabhi koi baat dilko bht chu jaati hai.........aur aapki ye poem its very touching........aisa lagta hai kisi ne mere feelings ko sabdo ka roop de diya........gud job
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30th March 2009, 12:33 PM
i Cannot Read Hindi...........
can Some One Write This In.... Roman English. :d
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30th March 2009, 12:43 PM
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Originally Posted by Baqtiar
i Cannot Read Hindi...........
can Some One Write This In.... Roman English. :d
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Yeh jo ho rahi hai do dilo.n ke darmiya.n
Ye ajab si guftagu kya hai
Kabhi hota tha mausam gulabo.n ka jahan
Aaj wahan kaaton si chubhan kya hai,
Muskurahato.n ka daur hua karta tha jin hoto.n pe kabhi,
Aaj un hoto.n pe Gam-e-ghazal kya hai,
Kisi zamane mein hasa karti thi jo aankein,
Un aakhon mein ye aansoo.n kya hai,
Mana ke Khuda tujhe kiye sajde tere ishq mein,
to ye ibadato.n mein bewafai ka zikr kya hai,
Kehte hain shayar ki hai b.intinah.n ishq mein,
to fir ye bekarari si dil mein kya hai
Kyun bharte ho dam mohabbat ka apni,
Jo khud samajhte nahin.n mohabbat ki aabru kya hai,
Isi umeed pe kaati hai zindagi Nalin ne,
woh kash poochte ki aarzoo kya hai
Save me from the safety of my SILENCE
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30th March 2009, 12:59 PM
This ghazal seems similar to GHALIB's ghazal...
Har Ek Baat Pe Kahte Ho Tum Ki Tu Kya Hai
Tumhi Kaho Ki Yeh Andaz-E-Guftagu Kya Hai
Ragon Main Daurte Phirne Ke Hum Nahin Qayal
Jab Aankh Se Hi Na Tapka To Phir Lahoo Kya Hai
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6th April 2009, 02:49 AM
Dost Fathomless, bahut shukriya meri gazhal ka english transaltaion karne ke liye..................................
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Originally Posted by Fathomless
Yeh jo ho rahi hai do dilo.n ke darmiya.n
Ye ajab si guftagu kya hai
Kabhi hota tha mausam gulabo.n ka jahan
Aaj wahan kaaton si chubhan kya hai,
Muskurahato.n ka daur hua karta tha jin hoto.n pe kabhi,
Aaj un hoto.n pe Gam-e-ghazal kya hai,
Kisi zamane mein hasa karti thi jo aankein,
Un aakhon mein ye aansoo.n kya hai,
Mana ke Khuda tujhe kiye sajde tere ishq mein,
to ye ibadato.n mein bewafai ka zikr kya hai,
Kehte hain shayar ki hai b.intinah.n ishq mein,
to fir ye bekarari si dil mein kya hai
Kyun bharte ho dam mohabbat ka apni,
Jo khud samajhte nahin.n mohabbat ki aabru kya hai,
Isi umeed pe kaati hai zindagi Nalin ne,
woh kash poochte ki aarzoo kya hai
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Nalin
Uski Har "Uff" pe hum apni jaan lutate rahe,
Uski Shaqsiyat ko karke buland hum khudko mitate rahe,
Raahe-e-mohobbat me hamne kuch yun paya sila wafa ka,
woh dete rahe zakhm pe zakhm aur ham muskurate rahe
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3rd June 2009, 08:22 PM
Nalin
Uski Har "Uff" pe hum apni jaan lutate rahe,
Uski Shaqsiyat ko karke buland hum khudko mitate rahe,
Raahe-e-mohobbat me hamne kuch yun paya sila wafa ka,
woh dete rahe zakhm pe zakhm aur ham muskurate rahe
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4th June 2009, 01:45 PM
Nice Nalin Jee.... Its Really A Good Work ... Aise Likkhte Rahiye.........
एक हाथ में दिल उनके एक हाथ में खंजर था
चेहरे पे दोस्त का मुखौटा अजीब सा मंजर था
Arvind Saxena
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4th June 2009, 03:38 PM
Thankssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssss
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Nice Nalin Jee.... Its Really A Good Work ... Aise Likkhte Rahiye.........
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Nalin
Uski Har "Uff" pe hum apni jaan lutate rahe,
Uski Shaqsiyat ko karke buland hum khudko mitate rahe,
Raahe-e-mohobbat me hamne kuch yun paya sila wafa ka,
woh dete rahe zakhm pe zakhm aur ham muskurate rahe
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21st June 2009, 09:29 AM
Ha Nanil ji....agar piyar mai ganit hota toh aapke sawalo ke samikaran zarur hal jate.....very nice creation....bahut acha likha hai aapne....aise likhte rahiye....acha lagta hai.....
YuuN Besabab Aansoo Aate NahiN
Lag Zaroor Koii Baat Dil Ko Rahii Hai ...
Fareb Kaa ChaDhtaa Bazaar Dekh
Insaaf Se Bastii Khaalii Ho Rahii Hai ...
---Naresh Mehra----
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21st June 2009, 10:29 AM
Naresh Ji, Baat Ganit Ki Nahi Hai
he he he he he, bas yunhi mere jazbaat kagaz par utar aaye toh pesh-e-khidmat kar diye............. haan par sach me aisi koi ganit hoti agar pyar ki, toh me yeh saare samikaran zarur hal karta...............
bahut bahut shukriya yeh poem padhne ke liye........
bahut dhanywad
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Originally Posted by naresh_mehra110
Ha Nanil ji....agar piyar mai ganit hota toh aapke sawalo ke samikaran zarur hal jate.....very nice creation....bahut acha likha hai aapne....aise likhte rahiye....acha lagta hai.....
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Nalin
Uski Har "Uff" pe hum apni jaan lutate rahe,
Uski Shaqsiyat ko karke buland hum khudko mitate rahe,
Raahe-e-mohobbat me hamne kuch yun paya sila wafa ka,
woh dete rahe zakhm pe zakhm aur ham muskurate rahe
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21st June 2009, 10:58 PM
waah janaab kya khoob alfaaz hain
issi tarah likhte rahiye
kaabile taareef hai
UR GREAT DUDE
Quote:
Originally Posted by nalinmehra
"क्या है?"
यह जो हो रही है दो दिलों के दरमियान ,
यह अजब सी गुफ्तगू क्या है,
कभी होता था मौसम गुलाबों का जहाँ ,
आज वहां काटों सी चुभन क्या है,
मुस्कुराहटों का दौर हुआ करता था जिन होटों पे कभी,
आज उन होटों पे गम-ऐ-ग़ज़ल क्या है,
किसी ज़माने में हंसा करती थी जो आँखें,
उन आंखों मैं यह आंसू क्या है,
मानके खुदा तुझे किए सजदे तेरे इश्क में,
तोह यह इबादतों मैं बेवफाई का ज़िक्र क्या है,
कहते है शायर की है बेंतेहा सुकूं इश्क में,
तोः फिर यह बेकरारी सी दिल मैं क्या है,
क्यूँ भरते है वो दम मोहोब्बत का अपनी,
जो ख़ुद समझते नही मोहोब्बत की आबरू क्या है,
इसी उम्मीद पे काटी है ज़िन्दगी नलिन ने,
वो काश पूछते की आरजू क्या है,
नलिन
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22nd June 2009, 03:43 AM
Rahil Je Bahut Bahut Shukriya.
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waah janaab kya khoob alfaaz hain
issi tarah likhte rahiye
kaabile taareef hai
UR GREAT DUDE
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Nalin
Uski Har "Uff" pe hum apni jaan lutate rahe,
Uski Shaqsiyat ko karke buland hum khudko mitate rahe,
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woh dete rahe zakhm pe zakhm aur ham muskurate rahe
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20th July 2009, 09:41 PM
buland Bhai Jaan,
pehle toh bahut shukriya, ghajini poem ki tareef ke liye, waise aap hai kahan aajkal, SDC se gayab lag rahe hain
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Originally Posted by Buland Shayar
mujhe apki ghazini wali poetry bahut achhi lagi
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Nalin
Uski Har "Uff" pe hum apni jaan lutate rahe,
Uski Shaqsiyat ko karke buland hum khudko mitate rahe,
Raahe-e-mohobbat me hamne kuch yun paya sila wafa ka,
woh dete rahe zakhm pe zakhm aur ham muskurate rahe
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22nd July 2009, 01:30 PM
Hi naliN jee,
kaise ho aap ..?
janab aaj kal kahan gayab rahte ho .......
aapki kalam se new poem sunne keliye sab betab hai yahan
jald hi ek pyar bhari nagma lekar hajir ho jayiye
aapki yeh poem bahot achha laga hume
ehesaas apnasa laga
youN hi likhte rahiye
aapki dost
Diya
Mohabbat ke baad mohabbat mumkin hai faraz.
Magar toot ke chahna sirf ek baar hota hai
Goodbye SDC
Diya
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24th July 2009, 04:51 PM
Diya Ji,
bahut jaldi hazir hounga, is poem ki tareef ke liye behad shukriya........
apka
Nalin
Nalin
Uski Har "Uff" pe hum apni jaan lutate rahe,
Uski Shaqsiyat ko karke buland hum khudko mitate rahe,
Raahe-e-mohobbat me hamne kuch yun paya sila wafa ka,
woh dete rahe zakhm pe zakhm aur ham muskurate rahe
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25th July 2009, 03:15 PM
ab sir mai yo itna samjhta b nahi..........par bs itna kahunga ki
mahkta gulab kya,
ye mitti sarab kya,
sher lazawab kya,
ap to bs ap hai....
ap to ba ap hai...
wo mohbbat thi gum,gum-e-mohobbat mai mohobbat mai tha,
ki ab to sukr mana mujh jese maikhano ka........
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25th July 2009, 03:24 PM
rakesh bhai jaan,
is tareef ke liye behad shukriya, par mujhe nahi lagta ki main iske kaabil hun, apne itni izzat bakshi, uska bahutbahut shukriya janab..
khush rahiye
apka dost
Nalin
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Originally Posted by rakesh
ab sir mai yo itna samjhta b nahi..........par bs itna kahunga ki
mahkta gulab kya,
ye mitti sarab kya,
sher lazawab kya,
ap to bs ap hai....
ap to ba ap hai...
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Nalin
Uski Har "Uff" pe hum apni jaan lutate rahe,
Uski Shaqsiyat ko karke buland hum khudko mitate rahe,
Raahe-e-mohobbat me hamne kuch yun paya sila wafa ka,
woh dete rahe zakhm pe zakhm aur ham muskurate rahe
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