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20th June 2005, 10:55 PM
DostoN
ek baar phir humaara pyaar bhara Aadaab kubool kareN
Aaj hum apna dard laayeN haiN aap sab ke saath baantne ke liye.... ye ghazal us waqt kahee thi jab dil dard se behaal ho chukaa tha, ye ek eysi ghazal thi ki jisko sirf aur sirf jazbaat ne kaagaz pe utaara tha........
yeh dard, yeh sitam, yeh maajraa kyaa haiy
mere humdam mujhe bata tujhe huva kyaa haiy
yuN kab talak tu karegaa shiqaayateN mujh se
meiN maanta huN jurm,de bhi de saza kyaa haiy
mera ghum tujh se abhi tak haiy agar poshida
bevajah mujh se mera haal poochtaa kyaa haiy
mujh ko to dekh liya,jaanch liya, jaan liya
tera bhi rang dikha tu bhi to bataa kyaa haiy
meri rusvaaiyoN meN tu bhi haiy shareek mera
mere kiss`se, sar-e-mehfil uchaaltaa kyaa haiy
hum ek umr se vaakif haiN, ab na samjhaaO
ke ishq kya haiy,wafa kya haiy aur jafa kyaa haiy
meri nayyaa tu sambhaale ye tere bas me nahi
doob jaane de mujhe itnaa sochtaa kyaa haiy
Aap sabhi ki aaraa ka intezaar rahega....................
Safiya...
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Re: ye_dard_ye_sitam_ye maajra kya haiy ...........Ek Ghazal -
20th June 2005, 11:02 PM
yeh dard, yeh sitam, yeh maajraa kyaa haiy
mere humdam mujhe bata tujhe huva kyaa haiy
yuN kab talak tu karegaa shiqaayateN mujh se
meiN maanta huN jurm,de bhi de saza kyaa haiy
hai....
mera ghum tujh se abhi tak haiy agar poshida
bevajah mujh se mera haal poochtaa kyaa haiy
mujh ko to dekh liya,jaanch liya, jaan liya
tera bhi rang dikha tu bhi to bataa kyaa haiy
hmmm.....
meri rusvaaiyoN meN tu bhi haiy shareek mera
mere kiss`se, sar-e-mehfil uchaaltaa kyaa haiy
hum ek umr se vaakif haiN, ab na samjhaaO
ke ishq kya haiy,wafa kya haiy aur jafa kyaa haiy
Bahut khoob....
meri nayyaa tu sambhaale ye tere bas me nahi
doob jaane de mujhe itnaa sochtaa kyaa haiy
Kya baat hai....
Hi Aapa,
Kaise hain aap..... umeed hain aaram farma rahi hongi .....
Aapka yeh dard padhkar gmagin ho gaya hoon mein....
Magar ek baat jaroor kahoonga.... dard chupana bhi khoob jaanti hain aap....
Apna khayal rakhiyega....
Shukriya
Rohin
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20th June 2005, 11:20 PM
Ye Ghazal to bahout hi pyaara hai...Safiya ji!
Shukriya
Danny..,
Jeene ke liye mujhe ek sapna dedo
Haqeekat meri jaaN liye jaa rahi hai
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21st June 2005, 06:08 AM
mujh ko to dekh liya,jaanch liya, jaan liya
tera bhi rang dikha tu bhi to bataa kyaa haiy
meri rusvaaiyoN meN tu bhi haiy shareek mera
mere kiss`se, sar-e-mehfil uchaaltaa kyaa haiy
Uff....Safiya jee...
padhte padhte aapki bebaaqi pe naaz ho chala...laga ki saafiya ne kaha...'hey buddy enough is enough! tum apna kaho, tumhari kya aukaat hai...' sach bahut achha laga padhkar...wahi josh, wahi himmat...meri daad kabool kijieyga...bahut der se intezzar thaa apke kalaam ka...
aur tabiyat kaisee hai ab...apna khayal bhi rakhieyga...
beshumaar duaaon ke saath...paras
nayi ruton mein wo kuchh aur qareeb aaye
gayi ruton ka sulagataa sa intezaar bhii ho
mere khuloos kaa andaaz ye bhii sachhaa hai
rakhuun na rabt magar dostii shumaar bhii ho
--Sayyidaa Fatimaa Hasan
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21st June 2005, 11:48 AM
Safiya Sahiba... Adaab,
Vaade ke mutaabik haazir hoon !!
Beshak ek dilkash, pur-asar kaavish pesh ki hai aapne. Meri jaanib se aap daad kubool farmaiye. Jo ashaar zyada pasand aaye woh yeh hain..
hum ek umr se vaakif haiN, ab na samjhaaO
ke ishq kya haiy,wafa kya haiy aur jafa kyaa haiy
meri nayyaa tu sambhaale ye tere bas me nahi
doob jaane de mujhe itnaa sochtaa kyaa haiy
aur ik baat hai dil mein gar giraaN na guzre tau kehne ki jurrat karta hoon. iss ek sher ke doosre misre mein gar lafzoN ko her pher kiya jaaye to kaisa rahega..
meri rusvaaiyoN meN tu bhi haiy shareek mera
mere kiss`se, sar-e-mehfil uchaaltaa kyaa haiy
yahaN kiss'se ka (s) aur sar-e-mehfil ka (s)..collide nahi ho raha..?
ise agar yuuN kahe tau..
meri rusvaaiyoN meN tu bhi haiy shareek mera
sar-e-mehfil mere kiss`se, uchaaltaa kyaa haiy
yeh sirf mera nazariya ho sakta hai, baad isske aap zyaada behtar jaanti hai, Gustakhi mauf..
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21st June 2005, 12:00 PM
yuN kab talak tu karegaa shiqaayateN mujh se
meiN maanta huN jurm,de bhi de saza kyaa haiy
Safiya ji,,...
kafi dinoN bad aapko padh raha huN .. wakai aapki kalam ka jadoo barkaraar hai ... accha laga ye ehsaas bhi .. par kahiN kahiN kalaam ki rythm toot-ti si nazar aayi... jis tarah Talib ji ne yahaN correct kiya.. par jazbati nazar se dekha jaye to ek pur asar aur pu soz kalaam ..
aapka apna
kunal
KunaaL (Sifar).........
Hai 'sifar' bhi reyazi ka hissa..
Shayrii bhi hisaab ki hogi..
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21st June 2005, 03:01 PM
yeh dard, yeh sitam, yeh maajraa kyaa haiy
mere humdam mujhe bata tujhe huva kyaa haiy
yuN kab talak tu karegaa shiqaayateN mujh se
meiN maanta huN jurm,de bhi de saza kyaa haiy
Waaaaaaahhh... Bahut khoob!
mera ghum tujh se abhi tak haiy agar poshida
bevajah mujh se mera haal poochtaa kyaa haiy
mujh ko to dekh liya,jaanch liya, jaan liya
tera bhi rang dikha tu bhi to bataa kyaa haiy
WaaaaaaaH... bahut khoob bayaan kiya hai yahaan... Loved it!
meri rusvaaiyoN meN tu bhi haiy shareek mera
mere kiss`se, sar-e-mehfil uchaaltaa kyaa haiy
hum ek umr se vaakif haiN, ab na samjhaaO
ke ishq kya haiy,wafa kya haiy aur jafa kyaa haiy
Waaaaah Waahh Waaah... Really well said!!
meri nayyaa tu sambhaale ye tere bas me nahi
doob jaane de mujhe itnaa sochtaa kyaa haiy
WaaaaaH!
Dear Safiya!
Ek aur behad asardaar aur behad khoobsurat ghazal likhne aur humaare beech laane ke liye meri daad kubool kijiyega...Bahut hi khoobsurati se bayaan kiye hain aapne apne ehsaas... Humesha ki tarah aapko padh behad khushi hui... Iase hi likhti rahiye...Mehfil sajaati rahiye...
Apna khayal bhi rakhiyega.. TC
Kab sochaa thha milegaa humsafar "Shweta" jaisaa
Lagta hai is baar "Pulkit", kismat teri bhi rang laayii hai
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KAISEY HO AAP.MUGHEY AAP KI SHAYREEE BOHT ACHEE LAGEEE.PLS AGAR BURA NAN LAGAY TU KOI KARAKTI KARAKT GHAZAL SEND KAR MUGHEY.MAIN SAD GHAZALS BOHT PASAND KARTA HOON.
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21st June 2005, 09:01 PM
Namaskar Safiya ji
Duusri baar aapko padha.........bahut acha likhti hain Aap........aapki yeh ghazal dil ko chuu gayi
mera ghum tujh se abhi tak haiy agar poshida
bevajah mujh se mera haal poochtaa kyaa haiy
mujh ko to dekh liya,jaanch liya, jaan liya
tera bhi rang dikha tu bhi to bataa kyaa haiy
Mere daad kabul kijeyga
sada kush raho
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Re: Re: ye_dard_ye_sitam_ye maajra kya haiy ...........Ek Ghazal -
21st June 2005, 09:54 PM
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Originally posted by Rohin
yeh dard, yeh sitam, yeh maajraa kyaa haiy
mere humdam mujhe bata tujhe huva kyaa haiy
yuN kab talak tu karegaa shiqaayateN mujh se
meiN maanta huN jurm,de bhi de saza kyaa haiy
hai....
mera ghum tujh se abhi tak haiy agar poshida
bevajah mujh se mera haal poochtaa kyaa haiy
mujh ko to dekh liya,jaanch liya, jaan liya
tera bhi rang dikha tu bhi to bataa kyaa haiy
hmmm.....
meri rusvaaiyoN meN tu bhi haiy shareek mera
mere kiss`se, sar-e-mehfil uchaaltaa kyaa haiy
hum ek umr se vaakif haiN, ab na samjhaaO
ke ishq kya haiy,wafa kya haiy aur jafa kyaa haiy
Bahut khoob....
meri nayyaa tu sambhaale ye tere bas me nahi
doob jaane de mujhe itnaa sochtaa kyaa haiy
Kya baat hai....
Hi Aapa,
Kaise hain aap..... umeed hain aaram farma rahi hongi .....
Aapka yeh dard padhkar gmagin ho gaya hoon mein....
Magar ek baat jaroor kahoonga.... dard chupana bhi khoob jaanti hain aap....
Apna khayal rakhiyega....
Shukriya
Rohin
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Rohin bhai,
Adaab, aap sunaayeN aap keyseN haiN? hum to aapki duaa se ab behter haiN pehle se, haaN magar aaraam aur parhez abhi aur 6 maheena chalega, kheyr ye waqt bhi guzar hi jaayega aapki duaaOn ke sahaare.
Aap humaara dard paRkar ghumgeen ho gaye aur bas humaara dard batt kar kam ho gayaa, dard agar chupaana naa aaye to vo insaan ko kamzarf banaa deta haiy isiliye hum apne dard ko in ghazaloN ke peeche chipaa deteN haiN. ghazal ko pasand karne ke liye bohot bohot shukriya. aapki raay humaare liye bohot keemti haiy.
Safiya...
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21st June 2005, 09:56 PM
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Ye Ghazal to bahout hi pyaara hai...Safiya ji!
Shukriya
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Danny sahab,
aapko ghazal pasand aayii, bas aur kya chahiye !!
taareef ke liye bohot shukriya...................
Safiya...
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21st June 2005, 10:04 PM
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mujh ko to dekh liya,jaanch liya, jaan liya
tera bhi rang dikha tu bhi to bataa kyaa haiy
meri rusvaaiyoN meN tu bhi haiy shareek mera
mere kiss`se, sar-e-mehfil uchaaltaa kyaa haiy
Uff....Safiya jee...
padhte padhte aapki bebaaqi pe naaz ho chala...laga ki saafiya ne kaha...'hey buddy enough is enough! tum apna kaho, tumhari kya aukaat hai...' sach bahut achha laga padhkar...wahi josh, wahi himmat...meri daad kabool kijieyga...bahut der se intezzar thaa apke kalaam ka...
aur tabiyat kaisee hai ab...apna khayal bhi rakhieyga...
beshumaar duaaon ke saath...paras
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Pyaari pyaari Paras,
Aaj kal kahaaN hoti ho, na koee pm , na call ??
kabhi kabhi Paras insaan thak kar bebaak hone par majboor ho jaataa haiy, jab koee bewafa aapki wafaOn ko naa pehchaan kar ultaa app hi se baar baar jawaab talab karta haiy to dil bebaak ho kar yehi poochta haiy ki, mujh par ungli uthaane waale , ek baar to apne girebaaN me jhaaNk kar dekh!
hume bhi aapke dil-kash andaaz-e-bayaaN par naaz haiy, taareef ke liye ye dil aapka mamnoon haiy. aap humesha hi baRe pyaare se andaaz me, himmat-afzaaii kartiN haiN, aur hum khuda ka shukr adaa karteN haiN ki unhone hume aap jeyse dostoN se nawaaza.
Safiya...
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21st June 2005, 10:35 PM
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yuN kab talak tu karegaa shiqaayateN mujh se
meiN maanta huN jurm,de bhi de saza kyaa haiy
Safiya ji,,...
kafi dinoN bad aapko padh raha huN .. wakai aapki kalam ka jadoo barkaraar hai ... accha laga ye ehsaas bhi .. par kahiN kahiN kalaam ki rythm toot-ti si nazar aayi... jis tarah Talib ji ne yahaN correct kiya.. par jazbati nazar se dekha jaye to ek pur asar aur pu soz kalaam ..
aapka apna
kunal
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Kunal sahab,
aap tasfreef laaye aur apni keemtii raay se nawaaza, hum aapke tah-e-dil se shukrguzaar haiN, ye jaan kar khushi huvi ki aapko humaare kalaam me koii baat nazar aayii
kalaam me rawaani ki kami peshi ki jo aapne baat ki, is par hum ne koshish ki ke andaaza laga sakeN ki aapka ishaara kis ashaar ya misre ki taraf haiy, magar mvaaf kijiyega, hume andaaza na ho saka.
Talib sahab ne jis aur ishaara kiya haiy vo bilkul sahee kiya magar vahaan masla rawaani ka hargiz nahi tha, balki huruf ki takraar ka tha, baaqi wazan ya rawaani pe unhone koii baat nahi ki, ye acchha hota agar aap is baat ki bhi nishaan`dehi kar dete ki aapko kami kahaaN nazar aayii to hum shayad vahaan sudhaar laane ki koshish kar sakte.
Tareef aur islaah dono ke liye hum aapke mamnoon haiN, aap sabhi dostoN ki raay humaari liye bohot maayne rakhti haiy.
Safiya...
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21st June 2005, 10:42 PM
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Originally posted by Pulkit_gupta
yeh dard, yeh sitam, yeh maajraa kyaa haiy
mere humdam mujhe bata tujhe huva kyaa haiy
yuN kab talak tu karegaa shiqaayateN mujh se
meiN maanta huN jurm,de bhi de saza kyaa haiy
Waaaaaaahhh... Bahut khoob!
mera ghum tujh se abhi tak haiy agar poshida
bevajah mujh se mera haal poochtaa kyaa haiy
mujh ko to dekh liya,jaanch liya, jaan liya
tera bhi rang dikha tu bhi to bataa kyaa haiy
WaaaaaaaH... bahut khoob bayaan kiya hai yahaan... Loved it!
meri rusvaaiyoN meN tu bhi haiy shareek mera
mere kiss`se, sar-e-mehfil uchaaltaa kyaa haiy
hum ek umr se vaakif haiN, ab na samjhaaO
ke ishq kya haiy,wafa kya haiy aur jafa kyaa haiy
Waaaaah Waahh Waaah... Really well said!!
meri nayyaa tu sambhaale ye tere bas me nahi
doob jaane de mujhe itnaa sochtaa kyaa haiy
WaaaaaH!
Dear Safiya!
Ek aur behad asardaar aur behad khoobsurat ghazal likhne aur humaare beech laane ke liye meri daad kubool kijiyega...Bahut hi khoobsurati se bayaan kiye hain aapne apne ehsaas... Humesha ki tarah aapko padh behad khushi hui... Iase hi likhti rahiye...Mehfil sajaati rahiye...
Apna khayal bhi rakhiyega.. TC
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Gupta sahab,
Mehfil shayar se nahi ahbaab se sajtii haiy, aap jeyse dost mehfil ki raonak hoteN haiN, aap ne humesha ki tarah taareef ke pool khaRe kar diye, ab hum kya kaheN.
Yehi keh sakteN haiN ki shukriya, shukriya, bohot bohot shukriya !!!
Aap ki yehi mohabbat to hume baar baar yahaan kheench laati haiy, doctor ne ziyada der beythne se sakhti se manaa kiya haiy, magar hum apne aap ko rOk nahi paateN haiN.
Bas ye mohabbat kam na hone dijiyega, aur isi tarah humaari himmat baRaate rahiyega...........................
Safiya...
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21st June 2005, 10:53 PM
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HI
KAISEY HO AAP.MUGHEY AAP KI SHAYREEE BOHT ACHEE LAGEEE.PLS AGAR BURA NAN LAGAY TU KOI KARAKTI KARAKT GHAZAL SEND KAR MUGHEY.MAIN SAD GHAZALS BOHT PASAND KARTA HOON.
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Sajid sahab
Aadaab, hum bilkul theek haiN Alhumdolillah, aap sunaayeN aap keyseN haiN ??
Humaari khushnaseebi ki aapko ghazal itni pasand aayii.
Hume buraa kyuN lagega Sajid sahab, agar aap hum se ghazal ki farmaaish kareN to isme buraa maanne ki to bilkul koii baat nahi haiy.
Haan magar ghazal bhejne ke bajaaye kya ye behtar nahi ke hum humesha ki tarah yaheeN post karte raheN aur aap yaheeN par aakar paR liya kareN, doosre sabhi dost ahbaab bhi yehi karteN haiN, Shayri.com banaaya hi isiliye gaya haiy.
Aap agar vo ghazaleN paRna chahteN haiN jo humne isse pehle yahaaN post ki thi to aap humaari profile se haasil kar sakteN haiN,
Aur agar koii mushkil pesh aaye to aap hume pm kar ke battaayeN hum zaroor aapki madad karenge is silsile me.
aur jahaan tak sad Ghazals ka sawaal haiy to aap lucky haiN kyunki humaari ghazaloN me to dard hi dard hota haiY beshumaar.
tareef ke liye shukriya, aur aate jaate rahiyega, yahaan aapko aur bhi acche shayroN ke acche kalaam paRne ko mileNgeN.
Safiya...
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21st June 2005, 10:58 PM
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Namaskar Safiya ji
Duusri baar aapko padha.........bahut acha likhti hain Aap........aapki yeh ghazal dil ko chuu gayi
mera ghum tujh se abhi tak haiy agar poshida
bevajah mujh se mera haal poochtaa kyaa haiy
mujh ko to dekh liya,jaanch liya, jaan liya
tera bhi rang dikha tu bhi to bataa kyaa haiy
Mere daad kabul kijeyga
sada kush raho
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Sukanya ji,
Aadaab kubool kijiye,
zah-e-naseeb humaare ki ek baar hume bardaasht karne ke baad aapne hume doosri baar paRne ki himmat ki , humaare liye to yehi taareef bohot haiy
Ye to aapki zarra nawaazi haiy ki aap ye maanti haiN ki hum accha likhteN haiN, jo ashaar aapne pasand kiye hain vo humaare dil ke bohot kareeb haiN. aapki daad sir-aankhoN par.
ab humne aap se umeed baandh li haiy ki aap humesha isi tarah humaari himmat afzaaii karengi, shukriya.
Safiya...
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23rd June 2005, 01:05 PM
safiya
behad khoobsurati se likha hai aapne
humari daad kubul kijiye
sonal
~~ u never know where ur destiny takes u ~~
There would come a time when
we have to stop loving a person
not because that person started hating us .....
but because we found out that they'd be happier if we let me go.....
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Re: ye_dard_ye_sitam_ye maajra kya haiy ...........Ek Ghazal -
23rd June 2005, 04:05 PM
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DostoN
ek baar phir humaara pyaar bhara Aadaab kubool kareN
Aaj hum apna dard laayeN haiN aap sab ke saath baantne ke liye.... ye ghazal us waqt kahee thi jab dil dard se behaal ho chukaa tha, ye ek eysi ghazal thi ki jisko sirf aur sirf jazbaat ne kaagaz pe utaara tha........
yeh dard, yeh sitam, yeh maajraa kyaa haiy
mere humdam mujhe bata tujhe huva kyaa haiy
yuN kab talak tu karegaa shiqaayateN mujh se
meiN maanta huN jurm,de bhi de saza kyaa haiy
mera ghum tujh se abhi tak haiy agar poshida
bevajah mujh se mera haal poochtaa kyaa haiy
mujh ko to dekh liya,jaanch liya, jaan liya
tera bhi rang dikha tu bhi to bataa kyaa haiy
meri rusvaaiyoN meN tu bhi haiy shareek mera
mere kiss`se, sar-e-mehfil uchaaltaa kyaa haiy
hum ek umr se vaakif haiN, ab na samjhaaO
ke ishq kya haiy,wafa kya haiy aur jafa kyaa haiy
meri nayyaa tu sambhaale ye tere bas me nahi
doob jaane de mujhe itnaa sochtaa kyaa haiy
Aap sabhi ki aaraa ka intezaar rahega....................
Safiya...
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safiya ji....
aap 2nd time padh rahi hu aapko... pehli baar dont knw q reply nahi kar saki thi.. but... i must sayy.. u write so welll just keep writing.. & we wd love to share ur feeling.....
take care
Pallavi...
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25th June 2005, 04:33 AM
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safiya
behad khoobsurati se likha hai aapne
humari daad kubul kijiye
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Sonal ji,
Bohot bohot shukriya aapka ki aapne humaare likhe huve ko saraaha aur hume izzat baqshi, aap khud bhi yakeenan ek khoobsoorat sahqshiyet haiN isiliye is kalaam me khoobsoorti dhoond nikaali aapne. thankyou.
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Re: Re: ye_dard_ye_sitam_ye maajra kya haiy ...........Ek Ghazal -
25th June 2005, 04:38 AM
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safiya ji....
aap 2nd time padh rahi hu aapko... pehli baar dont knw q reply nahi kar saki thi.. but... i must sayy.. u write so welll just keep writing.. & we wd love to share ur feeling.....
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Pallavi ji,
Aadaab,
ye humaari kismet ki kharaabi thi shayad ki isse pehle aap jawaab na de paayiiN, kheyr koee baat nahi , vo kehteN haiN na , ke "der aaye durust aaye"
Lekin ab agar aap kaayal ho hi gayeeN haiN humaari tukbandi ki to ab hume humesha aapse jawaab ki umeed rahegi, aapka bohot bohot shukriya Ghazal ko pasand karne ke liye. hume khushi haiy ki aaj kitne saare dost humaare saath humaari feelings ko share karna chahteN haiN, hum aapke mamnoon haiN.
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25th June 2005, 06:43 AM
bohot khoob likha hai aapne safiya ji, mujhe behad khushi hui aap ki yeh gazal padh ke.
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25th June 2005, 11:35 PM
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bohot khoob likha hai aapne safiya ji, mujhe behad khushi hui aap ki yeh gazal padh ke.
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Aadaab,
Bohot bohot shukriya Zeba sahiba, hume bhi aapse apni ghazal ki taareef sun kar be had khushi huvi, himmat afzaaiii ke liye hum aapke mamnoon haiN.
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27th June 2005, 10:02 AM
Lucky ji,
aap itne pyaar se taareef karenge to hum chahheN bhi to likhna nahi choR sakte haiN. aapki taareef ke liye bohot bohot shukriya.
ye jo aap jeyse dost comments deteN haiN, aapko nahi pataa ki ye hum jeyse likhne waaloN ke liye kitne besh-keemtii hoteN haiN.
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27th June 2005, 01:42 PM
Hi Safiya Ji!
Aap shayad mujke janti nahi hongi, par bahut se log mujhe yahan ... mera matlab .. Shayari ki is duniya mein jaante hain.
Khair....
Achanak aapki GHazal par nazar gayi aur phir to ek ek Sher ko bas paarhte hi chale gaye.
Aisa laga ki mera zindagi ka sach aapke alfaazon mein jhalak aaya ho.. apne wakai kabile taarif Ghazal likhi hai
Khaas baat hai ki Ghazal mein beher, Kafiye ka bohat dhyan rakha hai aapne, aur Jazbaat... woh to jo dil mein hote hain to apne aap hi Kalam ke raste kagaz pe utar aate hain...
Bas ab aour kyaa kahoon...
Aise hi Dil- ko - chhoo lene wali Ghazalein Share karti rahiye..
Aadab......
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28th June 2005, 09:49 AM
Dearest Safiya Ji,
Pehle toh aapki is haseen mehfil mein deri se pahunchne ke liye maafi chaahte hai.
Ek gehre dard se larazta kalaam jo dil ki teh tak dard jaga jaata hai. Anmol jazbaat aur shadeed dard bakhubi is kalaam mein bayan kiya hai. Bohot khoob Safiya Ji. Apne nayaab kalaamo ka silsila uhi chalaye rakhiye.
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8th July 2005, 08:14 PM
Salam safiya ji,
tareefoon ki ambaar to pehley hi lagi hui hai phir bhi kahain gey ke aisa fun aisa andaz gar khuda har kisi ko nawazey to shayad hum sub main ek safiya ji mojud ho very well said ap ki Ghazal ki sub se achi baat jo hamain lagi woh lafzoon ki rawani aur jazbaat ka izhar bahaut khood plz do keep sharing
ap ke ghazal ko padh ker ek sher yaad aa raha hai jo shayad hum ne apni shayri aur ghazal ke collection main bhi nahi likha yahaan share karta hoon
na hota gar charcha-e-kais zer-e-nazar apney
mohabbat hum bhi kartey dil main aarzoo rakhtey
( saqib sahili )
Uski Shanoo.n pe jis ki har sham guzarti SAQIB
Wo zindagi kabhi merey naam thi hi nahi
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8th July 2005, 08:24 PM
Uffffff,
ye kya likh gayi hai aap, dil ko jinjhhor ke rakh diya,
dil se tariff kabool ki jiye
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Koi bhi izhar ke kabil na raha,
Is dil me bas gayi tasveer Afshan ki,
Ab to chaand bhi deedar ke kabil na raha
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11th July 2005, 04:59 AM
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Hi Safiya Ji!
Aap shayad mujke janti nahi hongi, par bahut se log mujhe yahan ... mera matlab .. Shayari ki is duniya mein jaante hain.
Khair....
Achanak aapki GHazal par nazar gayi aur phir to ek ek Sher ko bas paarhte hi chale gaye.
Aisa laga ki mera zindagi ka sach aapke alfaazon mein jhalak aaya ho.. apne wakai kabile taarif Ghazal likhi hai
Khaas baat hai ki Ghazal mein beher, Kafiye ka bohat dhyan rakha hai aapne, aur Jazbaat... woh to jo dil mein hote hain to apne aap hi Kalam ke raste kagaz pe utar aate hain...
Bas ab aour kyaa kahoon...
Aise hi Dil- ko - chhoo lene wali Ghazalein Share karti rahiye..
Aadab......
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Gumnam sahab,
Aapne sahee farmaayaa ki hum aapko jaante nahi the, aur jaante bhi keyse , aap gumnaam jo thehre
Lekin dekheN kitni der laghti haiy jaan pehchaan banaane meN. Ab aap bhi hume jaanteN haiN aur hum aapko
Jawaab dene meN jo hum se talqhi huvi haiy uske liye maa`zrat-khwaan hain,
umeed haiy ki aap humaari ye pehli ghalatii mvaaf kar denge, kyunki abhi to dostii ki shurooaat haiy, abhi to hume bohot saari ghalatiyaaN karni haiy
Ghazal ki jo aapne taareef ki haiy vo sun kar dil ko behad khushi huvi,
kyunki iskaa matlab haiy duniya me dil pe chott lekar ghoomne waale hum akele hi nahi, is zakhm ke maare aur bhi bohot haiN.
Radeef, kafiya aur beher ki jahaaN tak baat aatii haiy to janaab hum to baRi koshish karteN haiN ki inhe baandh kar chaleN magar phir bhi ye be-lagaam ghoRoN ki tarah idhar udhar ho hi jaateN haiN. Aap humaari mehfil meN tashreef laaye aur hume izzat baqshi, hum aapke tah-e-dil se mashkoor haiN.
ab ye silsila tootna nahi chahiye
shukriya
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11th July 2005, 05:18 AM
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Dearest Safiya Ji,
Pehle toh aapki is haseen mehfil mein deri se pahunchne ke liye maafi chaahte hai.
Ek gehre dard se larazta kalaam jo dil ki teh tak dard jaga jaata hai. Anmol jazbaat aur shadeed dard bakhubi is kalaam mein bayan kiya hai. Bohot khoob Safiya Ji. Apne nayaab kalaamo ka silsila uhi chalaye rakhiye.
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Salim sahab,
Aapne to vo kahaawat sunii hi hogi ke "der aaye durust aaye"
aur veyse hum bhi aapka jawaab waqt pe nahi de paaye, to baat ab baraabar ho gayee.
humaare is adna se kalaam ne aapke dil me dard jaga diya isse ziyada ab iski khusnaseebi bhala kya ho sakti haiy.
Jazbaat aapke hoN ya humaare sabhi anmol hoteN haiN, isiliye hum baRe pyaar se motiyoN ki tarah inko ek maalaa me pirone ki koshish me laghe rehteN haiN.
Aap to jaanteN haiN ki chott khaaye beghair dard ka pataa nahi chaltaa, aur jis dil me dard na ho , naa hi vo acchha liikh sakta haiy aur naahi kisi ka likha samajh saktaa haiy.
isiliye badksimetii se ye dard bohot zaroori haiy is sukhan ki duniya ko aabaad rakhne ke liye
aur ye dard hi ka rishta haiy aapke aur humaare beech jo humaare diloN ko baandhe rakhta haiy.
Aap yakeen maaniye ki ye aap logoN ki hausla-afzaaii hi haiy, jo ye bandi roz kalam uthaane ki himmat kartii haiy, agar aap ka saath yuN hi banaa rahe to InshaAllah hum zaroor likhte raheNge.
bohot bohot shukriya
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11th July 2005, 05:26 AM
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Originally posted by saqib_sahili
Salam safiya ji,
tareefoon ki ambaar to pehley hi lagi hui hai phir bhi kahain gey ke aisa fun aisa andaz gar khuda har kisi ko nawazey to shayad hum sub main ek safiya ji mojud ho very well said ap ki Ghazal ki sub se achi baat jo hamain lagi woh lafzoon ki rawani aur jazbaat ka izhar bahaut khood plz do keep sharing
ap ke ghazal ko padh ker ek sher yaad aa raha hai jo shayad hum ne apni shayri aur ghazal ke collection main bhi nahi likha yahaan share karta hoon
na hota gar charcha-e-kais zer-e-nazar apney
mohabbat hum bhi kartey dil main aarzoo rakhtey
( saqib sahili )
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Saqib sahab,
Aadaab,
Waah waah, subhaanAllah , kya sheyr yaad aayaa haiy aapko, bohot acche !!!
Janaab aapki bohot bohot nawaazish , aap ki taareef ki kaabil nahiN haiN hum, magar phir bhi aapke in lafzoN ne hume kitni izzat baqshi haiy, aap soch nahi sakte.
Aapko ye ghazal itni pasand aayee, iske to naseeb sanwar gaye, kal shaam hi se ithlaatii phir rahi haiy, kaaboo hi me nahi aa rahi
Ye aapki nazar ka kamaal haiy, bas yuN hi apni nazr-e-karam banaaye rakhiyega. Hum bhi InshaAllah koshish jaari rakhengeN.
jawaab dene me jo talqhi huvi haiy uske liye mvaafi chahtii hoon.
aapki mamnoon
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11th July 2005, 05:31 AM
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Uffffff,
ye kya likh gayi hai aap, dil ko jinjhhor ke rakh diya,
dil se tariff kabool ki jiye
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Kadeer sahab,
are are janaab , dil ko sambhaaliye zara, humaara ye maqsad hargiz na tha ki aapka dil jhinjhoR ke rakhdeN
Ye to aapki inaayat haiy ki aap humaari mehfil meN tashreef laaye aur is ghazal ko is laayak samjha ki ispe commment bhi kiya,
hum aapke behad mashkoor haiN, bas yehi iltejaa haiy aapse ki isi tarah humaari himmat baRaate rahiyega. by the way hume aapka avatar bohot achha lagha.
Bohot nawaazish
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30th September 2015, 05:28 PM
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DostoN
ek baar phir humaara pyaar bhara Aadaab kubool kareN
Aaj hum apna dard laayeN haiN aap sab ke saath baantne ke liye.... ye ghazal us waqt kahee thi jab dil dard se behaal ho chukaa tha, ye ek eysi ghazal thi ki jisko sirf aur sirf jazbaat ne kaagaz pe utaara tha........
yeh dard, yeh sitam, yeh maajraa kyaa haiy
mere humdam mujhe bata tujhe huva kyaa haiy
yuN kab talak tu karegaa shiqaayateN mujh se
meiN maanta huN jurm,de bhi de saza kyaa haiy
mera ghum tujh se abhi tak haiy agar poshida
bevajah mujh se mera haal poochtaa kyaa haiy
mujh ko to dekh liya,jaanch liya, jaan liya
tera bhi rang dikha tu bhi to bataa kyaa haiy
meri rusvaaiyoN meN tu bhi haiy shareek mera
mere kiss`se, sar-e-mehfil uchaaltaa kyaa haiy
hum ek umr se vaakif haiN, ab na samjhaaO
ke ishq kya haiy,wafa kya haiy aur jafa kyaa haiy
meri nayyaa tu sambhaale ye tere bas me nahi
doob jaane de mujhe itnaa sochtaa kyaa haiy
Aap sabhi ki aaraa ka intezaar rahega....................
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waqt ke panno.N meiN dabi aik daasta nikaal laaye hai ham,
Saafiya ka likha aik paigaam mehfil ko suna aaye hai ham
Saafiya ji.........behad khoobsurat kalaam...agar aap ab bhi kabhi sdc par aati hai to please regular ho jayeN hame aapki rachna bahut kamaal ki lagi.
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