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Yeh Mulaqaat Ger Mohabbet Mein Badal Jaye/tahir Kkkhan -
28th August 2008, 12:40 PM
YEH MULAQAAT GER MOHABBAT MEIN BADAL JAAYE TOH HUMSE IQRAAR KIJIYE GA,
JO AA JAAYE AAPKE KHWABO MEIN TOH HUMSE PYAAR KIJIYE GA......./
YU KHAMOSH BAITHI HUI TANHAAI MEIN EK PARI SI LAGTI HO,
JAB BAITHEIN AAP AAINE K SAMNE TOH PEHLE NAZAR UTAAR LI JIYE GA../
CHHIPA LIJIYE APNE CHEHRE KO ZULFO SE KAHI NAZAR NA LAG JAAYE,
JHAAK RAHAA HAIN CHAND ZAMI PER,ZERA ISSE PERDE KI DIVAAR KI JIYE GA................................................ ......../
WOH MUSKURANA,WOH SHERMANA,WOH AAPKE CHEHRE KI MASOOMIYAT,
JAB AAIYEGA HUMAARI BAAHO MEIN TOH HUMSE BAATEIN HAZAAR KIJIYEGA.......................................... ............/
NA JAANTA THA JISE MEIN MEIN PAL HI MEIN WOH ZINDAGI BANGAI,
GER PADE ZAROORAT AAPKO SANSO KI TOH "TAHIR"KO PUKAAR LI JIYEGA............................................ .........../
"ANAA"mein saans baad mein leta hu,per tumhari yaad pehle aajati hain.............Tahir kkkhan
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Huii Sabse Paraayi
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12th September 2008, 11:54 PM
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Originally Posted by Tahir kkkhan
YEH MULAQAAT GER MOHABBAT MEIN BADAL JAAYE TOH HUMSE IQRAAR KIJIYE GA,
JO AA JAAYE AAPKE KHWABO MEIN TOH HUMSE PYAAR KIJIYE GA......./
YU KHAMOSH BAITHI HUI TANHAAI MEIN EK PARI SI LAGTI HO,
JAB BAITHEIN AAP AAINE K SAMNE TOH PEHLE NAZAR UTAAR LI JIYE GA../
CHHIPA LIJIYE APNE CHEHRE KO ZULFO SE KAHI NAZAR NA LAG JAAYE,
JHAAK RAHAA HAIN CHAND ZAMI PER,ZERA ISSE PERDE KI DIVAAR KI JIYE GA................................................ ......../
WOH MUSKURANA,WOH SHERMANA,WOH AAPKE CHEHRE KI MASOOMIYAT,
JAB AAIYEGA HUMAARI BAAHO MEIN TOH HUMSE BAATEIN HAZAAR KIJIYEGA.......................................... ............/
NA JAANTA THA JISE MEIN MEIN PAL HI MEIN WOH ZINDAGI BANGAI,
GER PADE ZAROORAT AAPKO SANSO KI TOH "TAHIR"KO PUKAAR LI JIYEGA............................................ .........../
"ANAA"mein saans baad mein leta hu,per tumhari yaad pehle aajati hain.............Tahir kkkhan
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OK,DIYA,SHAYRI E ISHQ SECTION MEIN MEINE EK GAZAL SUBMITT KI THI,AAP USKO PADHKER MUJHE ZAROOR BATANA KI USME KIYA KAMI HAIN,
JISKA TITLE HAIN"YEH MULAQAT GER MOHABBAT MEIN BADAL JAYE"
AAPKE JAWAAB KA INTIZAAR RAHENGA/TAHIR KKKHAN ..........
Tahir ji
Main to koi sayar nehin na hi mujhe sayari ya gazal main galtiyan kya dekhna aati hai....main sirf alfaz ko mehesush karti hun ..jo achha lage usi pe comment karti hun....Aap ne is Gazl main kami kya yeh batane ko bole hain........bahot muskil hai mereliye batana ki kami kismain hai ...per sab se badi kami ismain jo mujhe laga 2 lines main mel nehin hai ...
YEH MULAQAAT GER MOHABBAT MEIN BADAL JAAYE TOH HUMSE IQRAAR KIJIYE GA, JO AA JAAYE AAPKE KHWABO MEIN TOH HUMSE PYAAR KIJIYE GA.
ismain 2 line hai .....1st line main aap jyada word use kiye hain 2nd line main kam ......yeh gazal ke khilaf hai .....2no line bara bar hona chahiye .........baki main itni badi sayar nehin aur mujhe jyada sahi ya galat pata nehin ....
Diya
Mohabbat ke baad mohabbat mumkin hai faraz.
Magar toot ke chahna sirf ek baar hota hai
Goodbye SDC
Diya
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13th September 2008, 05:08 AM
aslkm tahir jii hum mehreen hai hume aapki shayeri bohath pyari lagti yeh aur pehle bhi jo aapne likhi mashallah aapke andaaz e bayaan bohath pyaare hote hai................
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13th September 2008, 02:15 PM
its good ahsas achha hai, or isse kisi ke piayar ki khusboo bhi hai. likhte rahe.
kon tha jane kaise duba koi sakeena sahil par
ati jati in maujo me maut ka matam aj bhi hai
Kuch tasvere biti yade, punji hai hum deewano ki,
mere labo par nam usi ka har pal hardam aj bhi hai (NOT MINE)
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13th September 2008, 02:31 PM
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Originally Posted by mehreen
aslkm tahir jii hum mehreen hai hume aapki shayeri bohath pyari lagti yeh aur pehle bhi jo aapne likhi mashallah aapke andaaz e bayaan bohath pyaare hote hai................
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va alai kum assalaam ,varehmatullahi va barakatuhu,yagfurullaha alana valakum,
MEHREEN aapne ne mere jazbaato ki qadar ki,mein iske liye aapka shukr guzaar hu,yekeen hain inshallah aap ki meri shayri se mayoos nahi honggi,
khuda haafiz
shayer mit jaate hain jahaa se magar unka qall fanaah nahi hota,
Tanhaai bhie tanha hoti hain magar,TAHIR tanha nahi hota................./
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13th September 2008, 02:35 PM
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Originally Posted by raj_ys
its good ahsas achha hai, or isse kisi ke piayar ki khusboo bhi hai. likhte rahe.
kon tha jane kaise duba koi sakeena sahil par
ati jati in maujo me maut ka matam aj bhi hai
Kuch tasvere biti yade, punji hai hum deewano ki,
mere labo par nam usi ka har pal hardam aj bhi hai (NOT MINE)
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SHUKRIYA RAAJ SAHAB MEIN TEHDIL SE AAPKA SHUKR GUZAAR HU,
shayer mit jaate hain jahaa se magar unka qall fanaah nahi hota,
Tanhaai bhie tanha hoti hain magar,TAHIR tanha nahi hota................./
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16th September 2008, 01:45 AM
SALAM
SUPER TAHIR.VERY VERY NICE.AJJ FIRST TIME APKI POST PHARHI OR BOHAT ACHI LAGI.BEST OF LUCK FOR UR SHAYRI.
TAKECARE
ALLAHHAFIZ
KOI ATA HAI YAAD BOHUT SONE SE PEHLE,
JO CHEEN LAITA HAI ANSOO MERAY RONE SE PEHLE,
PHIR REHTA HAI WOH RAAT BHAR AISAY SAMNE,
MAIN AKSAR CHAL PARTI HON USKA HAATH THAMNE,
AB NEEND BHI AYE TO MAIN SONA NAHI CHATI,
KISI QEEMAT PE BHI MAIN USKO KHONA NAHI CHATI,
HO JAYE WOH KASH MERA MUJHE KHONE SE PEHLE,
JO ATA HAI YAAD BOHUT SONE SE PEHLE.
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16th September 2008, 03:01 PM
Namaskaar tahir jee
aapne bahut khoob likha hai, mujhe ahsaas behad aache lage, sabhi sher tareef ke kabil haiN, aur jee haaN, maine DIYA ka review pada uski baat mujhe sahi lagi, sher ki length barabar hi honi chahiye...aur es gazal ke regarding maine aapko ek PM bhi kiya hai fursat mein pad lijiyega...shayad aapko meri baat sahi lage.
god bless u
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.....Sunita Thakur.....
यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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16th September 2008, 11:23 PM
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SALAM
SUPER TAHIR.VERY VERY NICE.AJJ FIRST TIME APKI POST PHARHI OR BOHAT ACHI LAGI.BEST OF LUCK FOR UR SHAYRI.
TAKECARE
ALLAHHAFIZ
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va alaikum assalaam MUSKAAN,AAPNE MERI GAZAL KO PADA OR MERE JAZBAATO KI QADR KI,ISKE LIYE MEIN AAPKA TEH DIL SE SHUKR GUZAAR HU,
FE AMAANA ALLAH
shayer mit jaate hain jahaa se magar unka qall fanaah nahi hota,
Tanhaai bhie tanha hoti hain magar,TAHIR tanha nahi hota................./
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16th September 2008, 11:27 PM
"HADAQAS SAKAAM" SUNITA JIE,MUJHE BADA ACHCHHA LAGA AAPNE MUJHE MERI SHAYRI K TALLUQ SE SAMJHAYA,AAGE SE MEIN AAPKE SUGGESTION KA KHAYAAL RAKHOONGA.MEINE AAPKA PM PADHA AAPNE VAAKAI BAHUT ACHCHHI KOSHISH KI MERI GALTI KO SUDHARNE KI,PADHKER AISA LAGA AAP QAAFI ARSE SE SHAYRI SE JUDI HUI HAIN,THANKS FOR ACCURATE SUGGESTION
shayer mit jaate hain jahaa se magar unka qall fanaah nahi hota,
Tanhaai bhie tanha hoti hain magar,TAHIR tanha nahi hota................./
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17th September 2008, 08:43 AM
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"HADAQAS SAKAAM" SUNITA JIE,MUJHE BADA ACHCHHA LAGA AAPNE MUJHE MERI SHAYRI K TALLUQ SE SAMJHAYA,AAGE SE MEIN AAPKE SUGGESTION KA KHAYAAL RAKHOONGA.MEINE AAPKA PM PADHA AAPNE VAAKAI BAHUT ACHCHHI KOSHISH KI MERI GALTI KO SUDHARNE KI,PADHKER AISA LAGA AAP QAAFI ARSE SE SHAYRI SE JUDI HUI HAIN,THANKS FOR ACCURATE SUGGESTION
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tahir jee....shukriya aapko meri baat galat nahi lagi....kai baar kuch member mashbira dene se bura maan jatey haiN, so bahut himmat karkr aapko pm kiya tha
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.....Sunita Thakur.....
यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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17th September 2008, 10:41 PM
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tahir jee....shukriya aapko meri baat galat nahi lagi....kai baar kuch member mashbira dene se bura maan jatey haiN, so bahut himmat karkr aapko pm kiya tha
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HADAQASS SALAAM...AAP JAISE SHAYERA JAB TAK IS FORUM SE JUDE HUE HAIN,TAB TAK MERE JAISE CHHOTE SHAYER APNI GALTIYO KO THEEK KERTE RAHENGE, MUJHE AAPKE SAMJHANE KA TAREEQA BAHUT ACHCHHA LAGA, HA AGAR AAP KO AAGE BHIE MERI GAZAL MEIN KOI KAMI NAZAR AAYE TOH AAP MUJHE BINA KISI DAR K PM KER SAKTI HAIN, HA MAGAR MUJHE INFORM ZAROOR KER DEJIYENGA...AAPKA SHUKR GUZAAR TAHIR KKKHAN ..TAKE CARE,SUNITA JIE MEIN BADA BOL TOH NAHI BOLTA LEKIN AAJ JO MEIN GAZAL POST KERNE JAA RAHA HU, AAP USME KOI GALTI NAHI NIKAAL SAKTI, JISKA TITLE HAIN 'CHORI CHORI CHUPKE CHUPKE"KYONKI IS GAZAL KA PEHLU MERI "ANAA' SE MILTA HAIN,
PHIR BHIE MEIN AAPSE KEHTA HU,ISE PADIYENGA,OR KOSHISH KIJIYENGA KI ISME KYA KAMI HO SAKTI HAIN,LEKIN MUJHE UMMED HAIN AAP ISME KOI KAMI NAHI NIKAAL PAYENGI....TAKE CARE "TAHIR KKKHAN"
shayer mit jaate hain jahaa se magar unka qall fanaah nahi hota,
Tanhaai bhie tanha hoti hain magar,TAHIR tanha nahi hota................./
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22nd September 2008, 05:21 PM
hey .....kya kahoon aapki ab tak jitni b shairiyaan padi hai sab bahot acchi hai...............it gvs a lot of meaning yr............good........
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22nd September 2008, 05:37 PM
Lagta hai Tahir ji humse naraz ho gaye ..hume galti batane ko kahe aur hum bataye to sayad bura maan gaye ..isiliye humare post ke jawab hi nehin diye ...koi baat nehin khus rahiye ...younhi ehesas share karte rahiye
-Diya
Mohabbat ke baad mohabbat mumkin hai faraz.
Magar toot ke chahna sirf ek baar hota hai
Goodbye SDC
Diya
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22nd September 2008, 07:20 PM
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Lagta hai Tahir ji humse naraz ho gaye ..hume galti batane ko kahe aur hum bataye to sayad bura maan gaye ..isiliye humare post ke jawab hi nehin diye ...koi baat nehin khus rahiye ...younhi ehesas share karte rahiye
-Diya
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are nani diya aisi koi baaat nah hain,mujhe bada achchha laga tumne mere kehne per meri galti bataai,mein aapse koi naraaz nahi hu, bus in dino thoda busy hu, isliya aapko koi comment nahi kiya,jabki aap jaise acchhe shayerra yaha is forum mein hai, bahut achhha lagta hain,or ha tumne jo meri galti pakdi woh bilkul sahi hai, yeh mein bhie jaanta hu, or haa sister khan ne bhie mujhe yahi galti bataai,i swear DIYA koi naraazgi nahi hai,meri baat ka yakeen kerna,bas aajkal isi forum ki EK BADI SHAYERA se kuchh seekh raha hu,kuchh waqt baad mein zaroor apke sare sawalo k jawaab doonga, ,magar tab tak aapko intizaarkerna hoga,tab tak k liye sorry....ok take care
shayer mit jaate hain jahaa se magar unka qall fanaah nahi hota,
Tanhaai bhie tanha hoti hain magar,TAHIR tanha nahi hota................./
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22nd September 2008, 10:32 PM
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hey .....kya kahoon aapki ab tak jitni b shairiyaan padi hai sab bahot acchi hai...............it gvs a lot of meaning yr............good........
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THANKS NASUHA ,
FE AMAAN ALLAH
shayer mit jaate hain jahaa se magar unka qall fanaah nahi hota,
Tanhaai bhie tanha hoti hain magar,TAHIR tanha nahi hota................./
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