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25th January 2009, 03:17 PM
Rishten bikte.n hai sare-aam yahan Baazaar mein Log bhi tolte hai.n use paiso ke mol, baazaar mein Kahne ko to har koi bas apna hai.n is jahan main Mango gar sath, chhod jate.n hai mazdhaar mein Miltii nahi yunh chahat, chahat ke badle yahan Dhundhte hai munafa pyaar ke is Vyopaar main Kishto.n mein nibhate.n hai waade.n bhi yahan sabke Usulo.n ka karte hai sauda is sansaar mein Pal pal badalte hain chehro.n per chahere.n yahan Kaise fire benaqab “Ghazal” naqabii gulzaar mein  ~*~Kaash Dil ki aawaz mein aisa asar ho jaaye
Jise Hum Yaad karte hai use Khabar ho jaaye ~*~ |
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25th January 2009, 03:56 PM
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aaise hi likhte rahiye aap ke har ek sher main aapni ek khubiiya chalak rahi hain rep ++ Rishtoon ko pehchan ne ki aadaa aab kaha bachi hain aaj ke is dayaar main Bhai bahen gar chale ek sath to kehte hain kya mastan hain dono pyaar main Kitne mare kitne aabhi rahoo.N me hai Kuch aa.Nsoo baki nigahoo.N me hai |
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25th January 2009, 04:33 PM
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haan aaj pehli baar mene apki gazal padhi hai me soch raha tha ki apne naam aisa kyu rakha hai ek gazal magar ab padhke laga ki apne sahi naam rakha hai isi liye app itni achi gazal likhte ho apka ye sher bahut acha hai dil ko tuch karta hai Miltii nahi yunh chahat, chahat ke badle yahan Dhundhte hai munafa pyaar ke is Vyopaar main AankheN khuleeN to jaag uTheeN hasrateN tamaam Uss ko bhi kho diyaa jissay paya thaa khwaab mein
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25th January 2009, 08:06 PM
Purvi jee,
namaste! aaj aap ki yeh poetry dekhii, mujeh lagta hai maine abhi tak aap ki jitni poetry paDhi hai, yeh sab se yeh behtar hai., is ke liye sab se pahle daad-o-mubaarakbaad haazir hai... Quote:
ye rasm ye wafaa bhi khoob diKhate hain jahaan me.n hai bik raha ya luT raha jo deKhiye vo pyaar hai.. Quote:
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waise, is 'chehre par chehre' waali baat par ham ne bhi ek sher kaha tha...chehre ke peechhe haiN chhupe chehre bohat, ShakleN hazaar duShman kee kyaa pehchaan hai aur dost kis ko jaaniYe? ek achchhi koshish ke liye mere jaanib se daad-o-mubaaraqbaad.. yuu,n hi likhti rahe.n, ham paDhte rahe.nge  Mayank |
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25th January 2009, 09:49 PM
Purvi jiii.......aapne bahut khoob likha hai sabhi sher bahut gahri baateN liye hue haiN, lafzo.n ko bhi sahi estemaal kiya hai aapne, hume aapki gazal pasand aaye.
kush rahiye aur yoon hi likhti rahiye duao.n ke saath .....Sunita Thakur..... यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया ....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए... 
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26th January 2009, 09:46 AM
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aapko aacha laga.. jankar muje bhaot khushi huyi......... bas isi tarah aap ka support banaye rakhiye...... bahna -Purvi ~*~Kaash Dil ki aawaz mein aisa asar ho jaaye
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26th January 2009, 09:49 AM
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aap ko mera likkha huwa pasand aaya.. jankar bahot accha laga.... Bas isi tarah padhte rahiyega.... Jay shree krishna... Ghazal.... ~*~Kaash Dil ki aawaz mein aisa asar ho jaaye
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26th January 2009, 10:08 AM
Mayankji....
Bahot sahi kaha aapne.... yeh sab se bahetarin hai....... aur is sab ki credit aap sabhi ko jaati hai....jisne bhi meri kalam ko thoda tez karne mein meri madad ki hai..... SDC ki member bani tab..... sirf shabd aur ahesaas the... aaj usko kaise mala mai pirona hai thoda sikh rahi hoon..... Koshish karungi aage usse bhi accha likh saku............... aur aap aaise hi padhte rahe......  ... aur haan sirf padhana nahi hai..... usko aur accha kaise banaya jaye.. batana bhi hai................. Ghazal................... ~*~Kaash Dil ki aawaz mein aisa asar ho jaaye
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26th January 2009, 10:13 AM
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AAp ki nazar mei yeh aaya aur aap ne pasand kiya mere liye yeh bahot badi baat hai..... koshish karti rahungi aur bahetar likhne ki...aap ka pyaar bas yunhi banaye rakhiye... Ghazal.... ~*~Kaash Dil ki aawaz mein aisa asar ho jaaye
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"Taish meN hai Taish"
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26th January 2009, 10:32 AM
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aadaab muhtarma, Jaisa ki mayank bhaiya ne kaha ye aapki ab tak ki sabse ahchi kosish thi, par behtari ki umeedeN haiN abhi bhi, maqta mujhe khaasa ahcha laga..! teesre aur chauthe sher me jo "is" lafz ka istemaal kiya hai aapne vo thoda thoonsa hua sa laga, aapse ek guzarish rahegi ki aap koi v kalaam likhne ke baad use padheN, aur jo v lafz aapka jyada lageN jinke bina ghazal me badlaav nahiN aata aur thoonse hue lage unhe hataa deN, isse flow bhi banta hai aur asar bhi badhta hai. aur maqte me mere khayal se "ChehroN per Chere" hoga ChereN nahiN hoga...!! shayad galat ho sakta huN par jo laga keh diya, waise ek mukkamal ghazal ke liye daad kubool farmaaiye, umeed hai ki aap aage v yuNhi likhti raheNgi....!! ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ http://alfaaz-e-taish.blogspot.in/ Ishq hota tha, ishq karte haiN, Vo zamana tha, ye zamana hai... ----Taish ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ |
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26th January 2009, 04:20 PM
bahut khoob ghazal urf purvi ji...
bahut acha likha hai aapne... daad kabool kijiye.. ummeed hai aapse or bhi achi achi ghazal padhne ko milengi.. god bless u.. keep smiling vicky |
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27th January 2009, 12:47 PM
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Muje padhne aur tarif ke liye aap ka bahot bahot shukriya....... aur koshish karungi aap ki ummeed ke bararar mein likh saku..... Ghazal ~*~Kaash Dil ki aawaz mein aisa asar ho jaaye
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27th January 2009, 12:58 PM
Waah Purvi waah.
Yakeen hi nahin aata ki itna achaa bhi likha ja sakta hai... Behtareen gazal ka namoona hai ye. Aur baaki mambers ki raye ke vipreet main ye kahunga ki agar ap poem nahin ehsaas likhti hain toh jo ek baar likh dein, usse modify na kijiyega. Dil se nikli hui pehli baat swayam khuda ki zabaan hote hain.unke saath chhedkhani achhi nahin... Haan, agar poem hai, toh beshak khoobsurat banane ke liye modifications zaroori hain |
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27th January 2009, 01:38 PM
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aap ka bahot bahot shukriya... ise padhne aur pasand karne ke liye..... Padhte rahiyega............................ ~*~Kaash Dil ki aawaz mein aisa asar ho jaaye
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27th January 2009, 04:10 PM
[quote=Ek Ghazal;326750]
Miltii nahi yunh chahat, chahat ke badle yahan Dhundhte hai munafa pyaar ke is Vyopaar main Very true but painful well written |
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27th January 2009, 05:24 PM
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Yunhi hamen padhte rahiye............................ ~*~Kaash Dil ki aawaz mein aisa asar ho jaaye
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27th January 2009, 06:18 PM
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Purvi Di, kitna sachai hai aapki baatoN mein ............bahot achha laga padhkar ..............khwahish ehi hai ki aage bhi aise hi umda ghazal padhne ko milegi aapki Diya  Mohabbat ke baad mohabbat mumkin hai faraz. Magar toot ke chahna sirf ek baar hota hai Goodbye SDC Diya |
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28th January 2009, 11:29 AM
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Dear Diya.......... Aap jaise dosto.n ki duwa rahi to aage bhi aap ko na ummid nahi karungi..... Padhte rahiyega..................... Tumhari Di Purvi ~*~Kaash Dil ki aawaz mein aisa asar ho jaaye
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31st May 2009, 03:40 PM
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bahot lambe arse baad reply karne ke liye maufi chahungi... dar- asal kabhi is comment ki taraf dhyan gaya hee nahi....  bilkul sahi farmaya hai aapne..... abhi jab yeh comment dekhti hoon to apni galti ko samajhna bahot aasaan hai..... Apni raayee dene ke liye shukriya aage bhee aise hee saath dete rahiyega... khush rahiye aap ki dost purvi ~*~Kaash Dil ki aawaz mein aisa asar ho jaaye
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2nd December 2011, 08:59 PM
Rishten bikte.n hai sare-aam yahan Baazaar mein
Log bhi tolte hai.n use paiso ke mol, baazaar mein Miltii nahi yunh chahat, chahat ke badle yahan Dhundhte hai munafa pyaar ke is Vyopaar main Very True .. Very Touching ... Toughts ... Purvi Ji ! Good Expressions ... ! SuperB CreatioN ... ! Dilee Daad O Mubaaraqbaad !!! Aate RaheN ... Nayaa Kuch Zaroor Likhte RaheN Aage Bhii ... !!!  YuuN Besabab Aansoo Aate NahiN Lag Zaroor Koii Baat Dil Ko Rahii Hai ... Fareb Kaa ChaDhtaa Bazaar Dekh Insaaf Se Bastii Khaalii Ho Rahii Hai ... ---Naresh Mehra---- |
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12th January 2012, 06:21 PM
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bahot khub dost thanks for sharing Regards _______________________________________________ PRANEETA
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12th January 2012, 07:24 PM
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Bhut khoob Purvi jii keep writing........................ aslam |
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14th January 2012, 01:38 PM
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aap ka bahot bahot shukriya Naresh jee.... Jab kabhi kuch naya likhenge .... yahan share jarur karenge.... ummid hai aapka saath aise hee milta rahega.... ~*~Kaash Dil ki aawaz mein aisa asar ho jaaye
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14th January 2012, 01:39 PM
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Thanks a lot Dost..... U were always there to support me... thanks once again.... God Bless You... ~*~Kaash Dil ki aawaz mein aisa asar ho jaaye
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14th January 2012, 01:40 PM
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aap ka saath aise hee dete rahiyega.... Khush raheN ~*~Kaash Dil ki aawaz mein aisa asar ho jaaye
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