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saNbhaal saqii mujhko ,dagmagaa gaya huuN maiN |
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saNbhaal saqii mujhko ,dagmagaa gaya huuN maiN -
14th August 2002, 03:32 PM
saNbhaal saqii mujhko ,dagmagaa gaya huuN maiN
bas zaraa sii pii hai ,ladkhadaa gaya huuN maiN maanaa ke do hi din ke the unse taa'lluqaat do din meiN umr bhar ka mazaa pa gaya huuN maiN shaana-b-shaana saath chaleN , maiN jidhar chaluuN kuch is junuuN se raNj-o-gham ko bhaa gaya huuN maiN shaana-b-shaana = shoulder by shoulder ab na aaNkh lagey bas ye duaa maaNg raha huuN khwaab voh dekhaa hai ke ghabraa gaya huuN maiN "maikasH" karo na mujhse zikr-e-shahr-e-mohabbat jaauNgaa udhar ab na, kasam khaa gaya huuN maiN maikasH is tarhe teri yaad meiN har shaam dhaley hai goyaa koyi nagin si kalejey pe chaley hai maikash ............................... |
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20th August 2002, 04:04 AM
Adaab maikash ji.....
saNbhaal saqii mujhko ,dagmagaa gaya huuN maiN bas zaraa sii pii hai ,ladkhadaa gaya huuN maiN ....ah-haa.....saNbhaal saqii mujhko ,dagmagaa gaya huuN maiN....bas zaraa sii pii hai ,ladkhadaa gaya huuN maiN....wah ji wah!!..... maanaa ke do hi din ke the unse taa'lluqaat do din meiN umr bhar ka mazaa pa gaya huuN maiN ....hume yeh ashaar bahut pasand aaya..shayad kyunki hum is se relate kar sakte hain....bahut khoob.... shaana-b-shaana saath chaleN , maiN jidhar chaluuN kuch is junuuN se raNj-o-gham ko bhaa gaya huuN maiN ....wah wah..... ab na aaNkh lagey bas ye duaa maaNg raha huuN khwaab voh dekhaa hai ke ghabraa gaya huuN maiN ...wah kya baat hain.... us darr ka khyaal kaafi achche se illustrate kiya hain.... "maikasH" karo na mujhse zikr-e-shahr-e-mohabbat jaauNgaa udhar ab na, kasam khaa gaya huuN maiN .....bahut khoob........bahut achchi koshish hain......aapko anamika ka salaam..... kabhee saba ko kabhee naamaabar ko dekhte haiN woh aaye ghar meiN hamaare KHuda ki kudrat hai kabhee ham unko, kabhee apane ghar ko dekhte haiN nazar lage na kaheeN uske dast-o-baazoo ko ye log kyoN mere zaKHm-e-jigar ko dekhtaiN haiN ? |
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24th August 2002, 03:16 AM
maikash sahab
aadaab... aap kii ghazal paDhii aur koshish par mubaarakbaad bhi qubuul ho.. maiN is gahzal par apnii tafsiilii rai dene se qabl aap se puuchnaa chaahtaa huuN ki aap ne ye ghazal kis bahr meiN kahii hai.. kyuNkey mujhey bahr samajhney meiN diqqat aa rahii hai.... kisii kisii misrey meiN mujhey ye ghazal khumaar barabankvii kii is ghazal kii hum-bahr lag rahii hai ik pal meiN ik khushii ka mazaa um se puuchiye.. do din kii zindagii kaa mazaa hum se puuchchiye. zaraa wazaahat farmaayiyegaa. Feroz Feroz ye zindagi hai kya 'feroz' shayari hai kya kuchh haulnaak haadsey asha'ar ho gaye |
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Bahut khoob..!! |
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Bahut khoob..!! -
26th August 2002, 01:34 AM
Wah Wah maikasH ji...aaj baDe dino baad aapka koi naya kalaam parhne ko mila aur kya baat hai ghazal to bilkul aapke takhallus se mel kha rahi hai
 Sabhi ashaar bahut acche haiN magar in ashaar ka kehna hi kya..wahhhhh...maanaa ke do hi din ke the unse taa'lluqaat do din meiN umr bhar ka mazaa pa gaya huuN maiN ab na aaNkh lagey bas ye duaa maaNg raha huuN khwaab voh dekhaa hai ke ghabraa gaya huuN maiN "maikasH" karo na mujhse zikr-e-shahr-e-mohabbat jaauNgaa udhar ab na, kasam khaa gaya huuN maiN BAhut hi khoob!!! Zor-e-qalam aur ziyaada!! Shumaila kahiiN zameeN to kahiiN aasmaN nahi milta!! |
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6th September 2002, 02:56 AM
anamika ji
aadaab aapko khaaksaar ki koshish achchii lagi uske liye bohat shukurguzaar huuN aapka.......ummiid hai aap yuuN hi hausla-afzaa'i karti raheNgii..... maikasH is tarhe teri yaad meiN har shaam dhaley hai goyaa koyi nagin si kalejey pe chaley hai maikash ............................... |
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6th September 2002, 03:08 AM
zarasuniye ji
aadaab kabuul kijiye aapka sha'iraana jawaab paDhaa.....be'had pasaNd aaya......is inaayat ke liye badaa mashkoor huuN jee aapka.... ghazal agar bah'r meiN hoti to chaar chaaNd lag jaate....haalaNke meri apni ghazal bah'r meiN nahiiN hai isliye mera haq nahiiN banta aapko nasiihat karne ka ba-har-haal jawaab ka shukriya ......ummiid hai aapka saath milta rahega maikasH is tarhe teri yaad meiN har shaam dhaley hai goyaa koyi nagin si kalejey pe chaley hai maikash ............................... |
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6th September 2002, 03:19 AM
ustaad-e-mohtaram janaab feroz sahab
aadaab aapka shaq bilkul durust hai .....ghazal bah'r meiN nahiiN hai aur ghazal khumaar sahab ki usii ghazal ki humvaar bah'r meiN hai jiska ki aapne zikr kiya......darasl baat ye hai ke ye ghazal kuch bad'havaasi ki si haalat meiN likh kar maine haath-ke-haath post kar di jo ki ek badii hi ghair-zimmedaarana harqat thi..  ...muaaf kijiyega ..... maine bah'r durust karne ki koshish to ki thi lekin haalat aise the ke koshish muqaam na pa saki......aap agar apne qeemati waqt meiN kuch lamhe nikaal paayeN to apni rae se zaroor nawaaziyega mujhe badii shiddat se iNtezaar rahega.......aapka khaadim maikasH is tarhe teri yaad meiN har shaam dhaley hai goyaa koyi nagin si kalejey pe chaley hai maikash ............................... |
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6th September 2002, 03:22 AM
shumaila jee
aadaab aapko ghazal qaabil-e-daad lagi.....mera dil reh gaya bohat shukria.....!! maikasH is tarhe teri yaad meiN har shaam dhaley hai goyaa koyi nagin si kalejey pe chaley hai maikash ............................... |
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Shukriya -
15th September 2002, 04:44 AM
Maikashi ji:
Shukriya ke aapne hamare jawaab par nazar to daali. Varna hame to kabhie umeed bhie na thi ki aap kabhie hamari kahi baat ka is kadar sab ke saamne jawaab bhie denge. Hamara saath to hamesha ke liye ab aap hi ke saath hai. Zara Suniye Yakeenan yaha koi sailaab aaya hoga |
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