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bohat umdah Kaifiyat dii hai bhai ....

is per aik koshish :-



maiN jab bhi sanwar ke baahir nikalta hooN
un se mulaqaat ke liye zaroor jaata hooN

un ke aaankhoN ke samandar ko maiN!
dil meiN sama ke chupa ke rakhta hooN

saaz saare ke saare be-saaz hue jate haiN!
koyal si awaaz un ki jab bhi sunta hooN…

aalam-e-izteraab hota hai waqt-e-rukhsat!
bin paani machli ki manind machalta hooN


aalam-e-izteraab : condition of anxiety
manind : alike

shab-e-hijr meiN pal pal tadapta ‘parStaar’
'ki aag hi nahi rehta, dhuaaN bhi hota hooN'
Hassan bhai,

Kya khoob saaz-e-bayaan hua hai dost, kya kahifiyat bayaan kar gaye par bhai hidayaat yeh bhi thi ki lafz kisi ek sher mein hona laazmi hai. Agar aap gaur-talab kar paaye to inaayat hogi..Shukriyaa



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bohat umdah Kaifiyat dii hai bhai ....

is per aik koshish :-



maiN jab bhi sanwar ke baahir nikalta hooN
un se mulaqaat ke liye zaroor jaata hooN

un ke aaankhoN ke samandar ko maiN!
dil meiN sama ke chupa ke rakhta hooN

saaz saare ke saare be-saaz hue jate haiN!
koyal si awaaz un ki jab bhi sunta hooN…

aalam-e-izteraab hota hai waqt-e-rukhsat!
bin paani machli ki manind machalta hooN


aalam-e-izteraab : condition of anxiety
manind : alike

shab-e-hijr meiN pal pal tadapta ‘parStaar’
'ki aag hi nahi rehta, dhuaaN bhi hota hooN'
Waaah!
bahut khoob nibhaya aapne diye huye alfaaz ko....behatreen kalaam......
Likhte rahein.....



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Hassan bhai,

Kya khoob saaz-e-bayaan hua hai dost, kya kahifiyat bayaan kar gaye par bhai hidayaat yeh bhi thi ki lafz kisi ek sher mein hona laazmi hai. Agar aap gaur-talab kar paaye to inaayat hogi..Shukriyaa
Mast bhai ... behad shukriyaa ... aur mujhe samjhne meiN ghalti huii... i thought ky
aap ne is dafa koi lafz dene ke bajaaye ghazal likhne ky liye koi kaifiyat (condition) dii hy ...
us per ghazal likhni hy ... aur example sher ki kafiyat per kuch likhna hy ...
chaleN correction is ghazal meiN .... :-


maiN jab bhi sanwar ke baahir nikalta hooN
un se mulaqaat ke liye zaroor jaata hooN

un ke aaankhoN ke samandar ko maiN!
dil meiN sama ke chupa ke rakhta hooN

saaz saare ke saare be-saaz hue jate haiN!
koyal si awaaz un ki jab bhi sunta hooN…

waqt-e-rukhsat kaifiyat-e-dil mat pooocho!
bin paani machli ki manind machalta hooN

kaifiyat-e-dil : condition of heart
manind : alike

shab-e-hijr meiN pal pal tadapta ‘parStaar’
'ki aag hi nahi rehta, dhuaaN bhi hota hooN'


*hSn* : parStaar

tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di!
kabhi fursat meiN sun lena, bohat ashaar baqi haiN...
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Mast bhai ... behad shukriyaa ... aur mujhe samjhne meiN ghalti huii... i thought ky
aap ne is dafa koi lafz dene ke bajaaye ghazal likhne ky liye koi kaifiyat (condition) dii hy ...
us per ghazal likhni hy ... aur example sher ki kafiyat per kuch likhna hy ...
chaleN correction is ghazal meiN .... :-


maiN jab bhi sanwar ke baahir nikalta hooN
un se mulaqaat ke liye zaroor jaata hooN

un ke aaankhoN ke samandar ko maiN!
dil meiN sama ke chupa ke rakhta hooN

saaz saare ke saare be-saaz hue jate haiN!
koyal si awaaz un ki jab bhi sunta hooN…

waqt-e-rukhsat kaifiyat-e-dil mat pooocho!
bin paani machli ki manind machalta hooN

kaifiyat-e-dil : condition of heart
manind : alike

shab-e-hijr meiN pal pal tadapta ‘parStaar’
'ki aag hi nahi rehta, dhuaaN bhi hota hooN'
Bhai aapne jo ashaar bina ghazal ka tarz badle kiye hai dil se bas waah nikli...nacheez ki baat ka khayaal rakhne ka shukriya aur pur asar ghazal huyi hai janaab. aapko dheero mubaarakbaad.



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Waaah!
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Likhte rahein.....
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Bhai aapne jo ashaar bina ghazal ka tarz badle kiye hai dil se bas waah nikli...nacheez ki baat ka khayaal rakhne ka shukriya aur pur asar ghazal huyi hai janaab. aapko dheero mubaarakbaad.
manoon-o-mashkoor hooN dostoN....

salamat rahen ..


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Mast bhai ... behad shukriyaa ... aur mujhe samjhne meiN ghalti huii... i thought ky
aap ne is dafa koi lafz dene ke bajaaye ghazal likhne ky liye koi kaifiyat (condition) dii hy ...
us per ghazal likhni hy ... aur example sher ki kafiyat per kuch likhna hy ...
chaleN correction is ghazal meiN .... :-


maiN jab bhi sanwar ke baahir nikalta hooN
un se mulaqaat ke liye zaroor jaata hooN

un ke aaankhoN ke samandar ko maiN!
dil meiN sama ke chupa ke rakhta hooN

saaz saare ke saare be-saaz hue jate haiN!
koyal si awaaz un ki jab bhi sunta hooN…

waqt-e-rukhsat kaifiyat-e-dil mat pooocho!
bin paani machli ki manind machalta hooN

kaifiyat-e-dil : condition of heart
manind : alike

shab-e-hijr meiN pal pal tadapta ‘parStaar’
'ki aag hi nahi rehta, dhuaaN bhi hota hooN'



HSN bhai..............bahut khoobsurat likha hai aapne.....daad hazir hai


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Doston mahfil ko aapkI ghazalon ka intzaar hai....
Aapse guzarish gai...aaiye aur bazm ko aage badaiye..



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kaifiyat-e-dil - 15th May 2015, 01:05 AM

Lafz thoda peecheeda tha aur isliye is baar ghazal tayaar hone mein thoda waqt gaya...lijiye aapki nazar kuch alfaaz kar raha hoon batayiegaa kaise lage

KHalish-o-soz-e-dil-figaar* haiN itne
kya hoga kaifiyat-e-dil sunaane se

*bruise

zabaan-e-gul mein bhi kitne khaar chipte hai
Gham milta hai kisi na kisi bahaane se

firaaq-e-yaar ab kaunsii khalish dega
guzar gaya hoon yun zindagi bitaane se

savaal-e-vasl** mere raqiib achaa hai
qurbate.N hoti nahi faasle mitaane se

**question of reunion

Guzaarish 'mast' nigaahon ko kaabu karlo
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Mast Bhai....bahut accha likhe hai aap..............!


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Lafz thoda peecheeda tha aur isliye is baar ghazal tayaar hone mein thoda waqt gaya...lijiye aapki nazar kuch alfaaz kar raha hoon batayiegaa kaise lage

KHalish-o-soz-e-dil-figaar* haiN itne
kya hoga kaifiyat-e-dil sunaane se

*bruise

zabaan-e-gul mein bhi kitne khaar chipte hai
Gham milta hai kisi na kisi bahaane se

firaaq-e-yaar ab kaunsii khalish dega
guzar gaya hoon yun zindagi bitaane se

savaal-e-vasl** mere raqiib achaa hai
qurbate.N hoti nahi faaslaa mitaane se

**question of reunion

Guzaarish 'mast' nighaaon ko kaabu karlo
dhadkane sunn ho chuki hai ab zamaane se



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Ghazal me vaqt bhale hee laga ho par dil par iska asar hone me bilkul vaqt nahi laga janaab.....bahut khoob.......



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HSN bhai..............bahut khoobsurat likha hai aapne.....daad hazir hai
inayat hy baaji!

salamat rahen .........


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Lafz thoda peecheeda tha aur isliye is baar ghazal tayaar hone mein thoda waqt gaya...lijiye aapki nazar kuch alfaaz kar raha hoon batayiegaa kaise lage

KHalish-o-soz-e-dil-figaar* haiN itne
kya hoga kaifiyat-e-dil sunaane se

*bruise

zabaan-e-gul mein bhi kitne khaar chipte hai
Gham milta hai kisi na kisi bahaane se

firaaq-e-yaar ab kaunsii khalish dega
guzar gaya hoon yun zindagi bitaane se

savaal-e-vasl** mere raqiib achaa hai
qurbate.N hoti nahi faaslaa mitaane se

**question of reunion

Guzaarish 'mast' nighaaon ko kaabu karlo
dhadkane sunn ho chuki hai ab zamaane se



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diye gaye lafz per aik couplet mulaahiza farmaayeN dostoN.. :-


kefiyat kia bayaaN ho dil-e-beqaraar ki!
ishQ laahiq hua hai aise jese marz-e-laa-ilaaj...


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diye gaye lafz per aik couplet mulaahiza farmaayeN dostoN.. :-


kefiyat kia bayaaN ho dil-e-beqaraar ki!
ishQ laahiq hua hai aise jese marz-e-laa-ilaaj...


laahiq : attached
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kyaa baat kahi hai hassan bhai............ waah bhai waahhh


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diye gaye lafz per aik couplet mulaahiza farmaayeN dostoN.. :-


kefiyat kia bayaaN ho dil-e-beqaraar ki!
ishQ laahiq hua hai aise jese marz-e-laa-ilaaj...


laahiq : attached
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Waah! Bahut khoob hassan ji.....



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Sabko Namaskaar !!!!!!
Ek koshish.....jara dekhen....
Kaifiyat-e-jaan, allah re saaqi ki nazar !
Maut hairaan, nasha hai to kise hai !!

Wo jo bas khwaab me hi apna pata deti hai !
Uski khwaahish se gila hai to kise hai !!

Ek kamzarf sahi dil me use aane do !
Khauf duniya ka mujhe hai na use hai !!

Kuch ishaare bhari mahfil me kar ke laut gaye !
Tumne bataya nahi aakhiri salaam kise hai !!



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Mast bhai ... behad shukriyaa ... aur mujhe samjhne meiN ghalti huii... i thought ky
aap ne is dafa koi lafz dene ke bajaaye ghazal likhne ky liye koi kaifiyat (condition) dii hy ...
us per ghazal likhni hy ... aur example sher ki kafiyat per kuch likhna hy ...
chaleN correction is ghazal meiN .... :-


maiN jab bhi sanwar ke baahir nikalta hooN
un se mulaqaat ke liye zaroor jaata hooN

un ke aaankhoN ke samandar ko maiN!
dil meiN sama ke chupa ke rakhta hooN

saaz saare ke saare be-saaz hue jate haiN!
koyal si awaaz un ki jab bhi sunta hooN…

waqt-e-rukhsat kaifiyat-e-dil mat pooocho!
bin paani machli ki manind machalta hooN

kaifiyat-e-dil : condition of heart
manind : alike

shab-e-hijr meiN pal pal tadapta ‘parStaar’
'ki aag hi nahi rehta, dhuaaN bhi hota hooN'
Bahot umdah Hassan Bhai........aapne to bas kamaal hi kar diya......


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Lafz thoda peecheeda tha aur isliye is baar ghazal tayaar hone mein thoda waqt gaya...lijiye aapki nazar kuch alfaaz kar raha hoon batayiegaa kaise lage

KHalish-o-soz-e-dil-figaar* haiN itne
kya hoga kaifiyat-e-dil sunaane se

*bruise

zabaan-e-gul mein bhi kitne khaar chipte hai
Gham milta hai kisi na kisi bahaane se

firaaq-e-yaar ab kaunsii khalish dega
guzar gaya hoon yun zindagi bitaane se

savaal-e-vasl** mere raqiib achaa hai
qurbate.N hoti nahi faasle mitaane se

**question of reunion

Guzaarish 'mast' nigaahon ko kaabu karlo
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Bahot kamaal ki ghazal hui hai sahab.........aur lafz-e-kaifiyat ko muqammal guldasta haasil karaya hai aapne......dhero daad


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Maut hairaan, nasha hai to kise hai !!

Wo jo bas khwaab me hi apna pata deti hai !
Uski khwaahish se gila hai to kise hai !!

Ek kamzarf sahi dil me use aane do !
Khauf duniya ka mujhe hai na use hai !!

Kuch ishaare bhari mahfil me kar ke laut gaye !
Tumne bataya nahi aakhiri salaam kise hai !!

Behad Umdaa ghazal huyi hai Pankaj bhai. Kaifiyat alfaaz ko alag ehsaason mein. Ubhaar ke rakha hai aapne. Yunhi likhte rahiyegaa.



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Kaifiyat-e-jaan, allah re saaqi ki nazar !
Maut hairaan, nasha hai to kise hai !!

Wo jo bas khwaab me hi apna pata deti hai !
Uski khwaahish se gila hai to kise hai !!

Ek kamzarf sahi dil me use aane do !
Khauf duniya ka mujhe hai na use hai !!

Kuch ishaare bhari mahfil me kar ke laut gaye !
Tumne bataya nahi aakhiri salaam kise hai !!

Kya baat hai pankaj jii..bahut khoob peshkash...
likhte raheinn...



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Bahot kamaal ki ghazal hui hai sahab.........aur lafz-e-kaifiyat ko muqammal guldasta haasil karaya hai aapne......dhero daad
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Aap sab ne itnI khoobsoorat ghazalein pesh ki hai..kI main kuch likhne ki himmat hee nahi kar pa rahi...bas kuch alfaaz hain dil ki kalam se...ummeed hai pasand aayenge sabhi ko....

Hai zara zara khafa sa tu hai zara zara sa to pyaar bhi..
Tujhe roothna bhi to aaye na hai kamaal tu mere yaar bhi.

Ye jo kaifiyat tere dil ki hai teri aankhon se ye bayaan ho.
Mujhe raaz deti hai ye bata ki tu jaan kare hai nisaar bhi.

Tera dil bahal hi jayega tujhe doston ki kami nahi..
main jo door tujhse chali gayi mujhe aayega na qaraar bhi.

jo sata rahe ho mujhe sanam nahi meri tumko hai aarzu
Mere baad tujhko satayenge yahi mahfilen ye dayaar bhi.

Hame paas aur bhi layenge ye jo chaar din hain judai ke
Tu madhu ke dil me sada rahe chahe fasle ho hazaar bhi.



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Hai zara zara khafa sa tu hai zara zara sa to pyaar bhi..
Tujhe roothna bhi to aaye na hai kamaal tu mere yaar bhi.

Ye jo kaifiyat tere dil ki hai teri aankhon se ye bayaan ho.
Mujhe raaz deti hai ye bata ki tu jaan kare hai nisaar bhi.

Tera dil bahal hi jayega tujhe doston ki kami nahi..
main jo door tujhse chali gayi mujhe aayega na qaraar bhi.

jo sata rahe ho mujhe sanam nahi meri tumko hai aarzu
Mere baad tujhko satayenge yahi mahfilen ye dayaar bhi.

Hame paas aur bhi layenge ye jo chaar din hain judai ke
Tu madhu ke dil me sada rahe chahe fasle ho hazaar bhi.
Wah aapki isi adaa par to hum fidaa hai, kitni khoobsurti se ek behad peecheeda se lafz ko saral alfaazon mein baandh kar gahzal ka roop de diya...behad umdaa

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Tareef karne ke liye lafz shayad tatoolne padenge....yunhi mehfil mein umdaa ghazalon ki baarish karte rahiYeGaa

Aapko pasand aaya to yakeenan achcha hee hoga...varna sach kahoon..kashmakash me thi ki post karoon ya nahi....
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Chaliye bazm ko aage badhaate hai aur hamara agla lafz aasaan sa hai par ismein kai rang samaye hai, umeed hai aap sab apni ghazlon se is lafz ko lekar zindagi bayaan kar paayenge.

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nice word Mast bhai....

filhal ghazal to nahi albatta diye gaye lafz per aik sher arz hy :-


zindagi se aik hi shikwa raha "Parastaar"!
jitne mausam milay sabhi be-rang milay...


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Mast sahab ke huqm ki tameel karte huee ye sher bazm ko nazar kar raha hoon.... lafz Mausam ko dhyaan me rakhte hue....


koi mausam tumhaariii yaad kaa aisaa nahii jaataa,
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Mast sahab ke huqm ki tameel karte huee ye sher bazm ko nazar kar raha hoon.... lafz Mausam ko dhyaan me rakhte hue....


koi mausam tumhaariii yaad kaa aisaa nahii jaataa,
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nice word Mast bhai....

filhal ghazal to nahi albatta diye gaye lafz per aik sher arz hy :-


zindagi se aik hi shikwa raha "Parastaar"!
jitne mausam milay sabhi be-rang milay...
Bahut khoob sher hua hai Hassan bhai, umeed hai jald hi aapki ghazal bhi sunne ko mileGii..dua Go



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