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18th September 2015, 12:45 PM
Dosto, arse baad aaj kuch likha hai, kalam badi mushkil se chali hai...kuch ehsaas jo dil meiN machal rhe thy...unko lafzoN ka libaas pehna diya hai. mere liye bahut muhskil tha ab yeh likhna...kyuki maiN to likhna hi chord chuki thi...ab kuch aziz dosto ke kehne par kalam pakdi hai...umeed hai wo aziz ab khush hoNge
Ek uljii paheli zindgi,
gam ki saheli zindgi.
wo khushiya sab le gya,
ab veeran haweli zindgi.
bachpan bada haseen tha,
tab thi albeli zindgi.
mast hawa si joomti,
khuhboo chameli zindgi.
haath tera tha haath mei.
thi saaj-sureli zindgi.
ek ek pal rhi samet.ti,
ab khali hatheli zindgi.
apno ne hi kiye fareb,
kar di zehreli zindgi.
yu to sab saath hain,
phir bhi akeli zindgi.
-Sunita Virender
(17.09.2015)
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.....Sunita Thakur.....
यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
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18th September 2015, 01:10 PM
namastey di....
Aapka dard bhara kalaam padhkar dimaag me zindgi ki sachchai ki tasweercsi ban gayi aur dil me dard bhar aaya....aapko arse baad padha aapne meri khwahish poori ki is baat ka shukriya dil se..aur ab ye mat kahiyega ki likhna chhod diya hai maine......aapke kalaam me hame aapke ehsaas ke sath zindgi ka tazurba bhi milta hai..aur bahut kuch seekhne ke liye bhi......
Isliye likhti rahiye......muskarati rahiye...
Dua karoongi dard sirf kalaam me dikhe aapki zindagi me iska asar na ho......
Ishq ke ehsaas jald padhne milenge isi ummeed ke sath...
Is behatreen peshkash par meri taraf se daad qubool kijiyega.....
Rep++ dene ki gustakhi kar rahi hoon...
अर्ज मेरी एे खुदा क्या सुन सकेगा तू कभी
आसमां को बस इसी इक आस में तकते रहे
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18th September 2015, 01:38 PM
khoobsurat khayaalon se labrez kalaam likhaa hai aapne Sunita dee.....
ek ek panktii dil pe gahree chaap chhoortee huii hai..... daad pesh hai aapko is khoobsurat kalaam k liye....... bas ek guzaarish hai ke ab likhtii raha kijiye......
Shaad....
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18th September 2015, 02:13 PM
Accha hai saccha hai.. koi baat nahi kahunga .. samajh aata hai ki dil se likha gaya gaya .. kahin nahi kahin hath dil se jude lagte hai .. likhte rahiye khyaal rakhiye apna ..
Kunaal
KunaaL (Sifar).........
Hai 'sifar' bhi reyazi ka hissa..
Shayrii bhi hisaab ki hogi..
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18th September 2015, 04:28 PM
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Bahot waqt baad aapki koi peshkash bazm mein nazar aayii...aapki koshish mein hameshaa badii hi saadagee hotii hai...jo dil mein hai wo lafzon mein hotaa hai...zindagii ko lekar aapne jo apne dil ki baat kahi hay bahot hi gehrii baat kehbdii...bhagvaan se yahee praarthnaa kartaa hun ki zindagee khushiyon se saje aapki...aapse yahee guzaarish hai ki likhte rahiye...aapki koshish kp dekh kar bahot khushii huii sister.... apnaa khayaal rakhiyegaa...khush rahen
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*~*Dhaval*~*....Ek Ehsaas...
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18th September 2015, 06:37 PM
Namaste Di,
Finallyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyy aapne likha :-)
Padhkar aapko bahaut achha laga...aapki yeh koshish bahaut pyari aur bahaut sundar hai. Aapne zindagi ko kitne ache se explain kar diya...I am sure hum sab yehi feel karte hain zindagi ke bare mai kisi naa kisi mod pe aur aapne bas woh baat kehdi. Aapko padhna bahaut achha laga di...please request hai aage bhi aap aise hi likhte rehna thoda jaldi se...itna gap naa lijiyega...thank you di baat maan ne ke liye...am very happy :-)
Love you tons!
Zindagi wahi jise khul ke Jiya jaaye, apne armaanon ko pankh lagaa udhne do...
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18th September 2015, 11:03 PM
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Dosto, arse baad aaj kuch likha hai, kalam badi mushkil se chali hai...kuch ehsaas jo dil meiN machal rhe thy...unko lafzoN ka libaas pehna diya hai. mere liye bahut muhskil tha ab yeh likhna...kyuki maiN to likhna hi chord chuki thi...ab kuch aziz dosto ke kehne par kalam pakdi hai...umeed hai wo aziz ab khush hoNge
Ek uljii paheli zindgi,
gam ki saheli zindgi.
wo khushiya sab le gya,
ab veeran haweli zindgi.
bachpan bada haseen tha,
tab thi albeli zindgi.
mast hawa si joomti,
khuhboo chameli zindgi.
haath tera tha haath mei.
thi saaj-sureli zindgi.
ek ek pal rhi samet.ti,
ab khali hatheli zindgi.
apno ne hi kiye fareb,
kar di zehreli zindgi.
yu to sab saath hain,
phir bhi akeli zindgi.
-Sunita Virender
(17.09.2015)
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Sunita jee kya khoob likha hai aapne zindagi ke baare me aur kitna sach likha hai...
radhe radhe
Aapka Apna Ishk
'इश्क' के बदले इश्क चाहना तिजारत है
इज़हार किससे करें महबूब तो दिल में है
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21st September 2015, 01:18 PM
bohat khoob di.......................
Zainy
PalkoN ki baand ko tod ke daaman pe aa gira
Ek aaNsu mere zabt ki tauheen kar gaya...
Nm
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21st September 2015, 02:13 PM
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Originally Posted by sunita virender
Dosto, arse baad aaj kuch likha hai, kalam badi mushkil se chali hai...kuch ehsaas jo dil meiN machal rhe thy...unko lafzoN ka libaas pehna diya hai. mere liye bahut muhskil tha ab yeh likhna...kyuki maiN to likhna hi chord chuki thi...ab kuch aziz dosto ke kehne par kalam pakdi hai...umeed hai wo aziz ab khush hoNge
Ek uljii paheli zindgi,
gam ki saheli zindgi.
wo khushiya sab le gya,
ab veeran haweli zindgi.
bachpan bada haseen tha,
tab thi albeli zindgi.
mast hawa si joomti,
khuhboo chameli zindgi.
haath tera tha haath mei.
thi saaj-sureli zindgi.
ek ek pal rhi samet.ti,
ab khali hatheli zindgi.
apno ne hi kiye fareb,
kar di zehreli zindgi.
yu to sab saath hain,
phir bhi akeli zindgi.
-Sunita Virender
(17.09.2015)
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ek ek pal rhi samet.ti,
ab khali hatheli zindgi.
Wah bohat khoob Sunita ji
raah meiN hi manziloN ka zikr mat chedo Praveen
manziloN ne sun liya toh aur woh badh jaayeNgi
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22nd September 2015, 02:05 PM
*yu to sab saath hain,
phir bhi akeli zindgi.
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Wah ji wah ...aap ki ye lines tau kamaal ki lagi...ek karvi sachchayee batan ker di aapne .
Sunita ji bahut achcha laga aap ko padh ke.
Sanjay Sehgal
khone Pane ki daur mein yun uljha hai har bashar ,
Isee kashmeqash mein kat raha Zindagee ka safar.
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22nd September 2015, 07:58 PM
Didi
Bohut hi dard bhari lagi aapki rachna. ye kehna chahiye ki rachna nahi aapke dil ka aainaa si lagi.
Prarthna karoongi ishwar se ki aapke saare dard kat jaayein aur jija ji bhi lout kar aa jaaein. bohut tapasya ho gayi aapki.
Sorry agar zyada keh gayi hoon to.
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22nd September 2015, 10:00 PM
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Originally Posted by sunita virender
Dosto, arse baad aaj kuch likha hai, kalam badi mushkil se chali hai...kuch ehsaas jo dil meiN machal rhe thy...unko lafzoN ka libaas pehna diya hai. mere liye bahut muhskil tha ab yeh likhna...kyuki maiN to likhna hi chord chuki thi...ab kuch aziz dosto ke kehne par kalam pakdi hai...umeed hai wo aziz ab khush hoNge
Ek uljii paheli zindgi,
gam ki saheli zindgi.
wo khushiya sab le gya,
ab veeran haweli zindgi.
bachpan bada haseen tha,
tab thi albeli zindgi.
mast hawa si joomti,
khuhboo chameli zindgi.
haath tera tha haath mei.
thi saaj-sureli zindgi.
ek ek pal rhi samet.ti,
ab khali hatheli zindgi.
apno ne hi kiye fareb,
kar di zehreli zindgi.
yu to sab saath hain,
phir bhi akeli zindgi.
-Sunita Virender
(17.09.2015)
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Kamaal ho gaya dii. MaiN aapke kalaam ka muntizar thaa aur darasal kehne bhi wala thaa ke aap aajkal likhte nahi haiN. Aapne likhaa, aur yun likha ke dhamaka huaa.
Bohot bohot mubarakbaad. Aalishan peshkash.
Likhte rahiye aue apna khayal rakhiye.
Sagar Aashna
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24th September 2015, 10:05 AM
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Dosto, arse baad aaj kuch likha hai, kalam badi mushkil se chali hai...kuch ehsaas jo dil meiN machal rhe thy...unko lafzoN ka libaas pehna diya hai. mere liye bahut muhskil tha ab yeh likhna...kyuki maiN to likhna hi chord chuki thi...ab kuch aziz dosto ke kehne par kalam pakdi hai...umeed hai wo aziz ab khush hoNge
Ek uljii paheli zindgi,
gam ki saheli zindgi.
wo khushiya sab le gya,
ab veeran haweli zindgi.
bachpan bada haseen tha,
tab thi albeli zindgi.
mast hawa si joomti,
khuhboo chameli zindgi.
haath tera tha haath mei.
thi saaj-sureli zindgi.
ek ek pal rhi samet.ti,
ab khali hatheli zindgi.
apno ne hi kiye fareb,
kar di zehreli zindgi.
yu to sab saath hain,
phir bhi akeli zindgi.
-Sunita Virender
(17.09.2015)
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Yaha der se aa paaya hoon Didi par ise padhne waala shayad pehla shaqs mein tha...aur tab ki tarah ab bhi yahi kahungaa - likhte rahiYe aapke ehsaas aaine ki tarah saaf hai unhe alfaaz dene ki koshish karte rahiYe
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28th September 2015, 04:12 PM
Madhu
bas jo dil meiN aaya likh diya, arse baad likha hai...ab to kalam chalti hi nahi, bas tum jaise kuch ziddi dost zidd par aa gye to muje kalam phir se pakdni padi
tumhe mere ehsaas sahi lge aur tumne to muje reps points bhi diye hai...kya baat hai...bahut bahut shukriya dear.
god bless u
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यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
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28th September 2015, 11:49 PM
Sunita Ji
Aapka qalam to behat umdaa rachna keh gaya.Jawaab mein kuch lines
Kabhi apni kabhi begani si zindagi
Rait si hathon se fisalti zindagi
Waqt chalta hay Jaise chalti Zindagi
Yadon ka ek Jharokha Zindagi
Your poetries are always beautiful
Take care
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15th December 2015, 02:51 PM
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khoobsurat khayaalon se labrez kalaam likhaa hai aapne Sunita dee.....
ek ek panktii dil pe gahree chaap chhoortee huii hai..... daad pesh hai aapko is khoobsurat kalaam k liye....... bas ek guzaarish hai ke ab likhtii raha kijiye......
Shaad....
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Shaad bhai, aapko mera likha sahi lga aur pasand aaya, bahut khushi hue yeh jaan kar. aapki guzaarish par gaur kiya jayega
god bless u
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.....Sunita Thakur.....
यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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15th January 2016, 02:24 PM
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Accha hai saccha hai.. koi baat nahi kahunga .. samajh aata hai ki dil se likha gaya gaya .. kahin nahi kahin hath dil se jude lagte hai .. likhte rahiye khyaal rakhiye apna ..
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Kunaal ji...bilkul sahi kaha aapne "dil se likha gya hai" aap jaise shayar hi pehchaan sakte hai ki likhvat dil se hai ya dimaag se
shukriya
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.....Sunita Thakur.....
यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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15th January 2016, 02:27 PM
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Sister
Pranaam
Bahot waqt baad aapki koi peshkash bazm mein nazar aayii...aapki koshish mein hameshaa badii hi saadagee hotii hai...jo dil mein hai wo lafzon mein hotaa hai...zindagii ko lekar aapne jo apne dil ki baat kahi hay bahot hi gehrii baat kehbdii...bhagvaan se yahee praarthnaa kartaa hun ki zindagee khushiyon se saje aapki...aapse yahee guzaarish hai ki likhte rahiye...aapki koshish kp dekh kar bahot khushii huii sister.... apnaa khayaal rakhiyegaa...khush rahen
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Chottu....tuje maloom hi hai ki kam hi likhti hu, ab to jaise likhna chordh hi diya hai...kuch dostoN ne bahut majboor kar diya tha ki kuch likhuN to muje kalam chalni padi
teri pyrai si duaoN ke liye bahut bahut shukriya
pyar ke saath
sister
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.....Sunita Thakur.....
यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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2nd February 2016, 04:03 PM
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Namaste Di,
Finallyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyy aapne likha :-)
Padhkar aapko bahaut achha laga...aapki yeh koshish bahaut pyari aur bahaut sundar hai. Aapne zindagi ko kitne ache se explain kar diya...I am sure hum sab yehi feel karte hain zindagi ke bare mai kisi naa kisi mod pe aur aapne bas woh baat kehdi. Aapko padhna bahaut achha laga di...please request hai aage bhi aap aise hi likhte rehna thoda jaldi se...itna gap naa lijiyega...thank you di baat maan ne ke liye...am very happy :-)
Love you tons!
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.....Sunita Thakur.....
यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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2nd February 2016, 04:06 PM
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bohat khoob di.......................
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shukriya zainy
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Originally Posted by prasaxena
ek ek pal rhi samet.ti,
ab khali hatheli zindgi.
Wah bohat khoob Sunita ji
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Praveen ji....aapko pasand aaya mera likha...mere liye bahut badi baat hai...dil se shukriya.
Quote:
Originally Posted by Hamdam
*yu to sab saath hain,
phir bhi akeli zindgi.
*
Wah ji wah ...aap ki ye lines tau kamaal ki lagi...ek karvi sachchayee batan ker di aapne .
Sunita ji bahut achcha laga aap ko padh ke.
Sanjay Sehgal
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Sanjay ji....bahut accha lga aapse wahhh waahhhi pa kar yu hi saath detey rahiyega
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.....Sunita Thakur.....
यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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