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Jaane shikwa bhala kounsaa reh gaya -
10th January 2010, 04:01 PM
Ahel e Bazm ko mera salam,
Bazm mein aaye hua kareeb mujhe 10 mahine ho agye, aur maine aaj apni paheli gazal bher mein likhi hai, mujhe yahan bahut madat mili bahut sikha huN, aur janab ZIdd sahab ka main bahut shukra guzar hun ke unhone mujhe sikhane mein apna kimti waqt de rahe hai............  Yeh gazal mutaadarik saalim bher mein hai, 212 / 212 / 212 / 212 Waseem barelvi shab ki gazal " Aate aate mera naam sa reh gaya" ki zameen per kahne ki gustaki hai ummid hia aapko pasand aayengi.......... WoH kareeb aaye magar faslaa reh gaya Jaane shikwa bhala kounsaa reh gaya Ruberu hii maiN uske khada tha magar Maire saaye ko wo dekhtaa reh gaya Mujhko dekha na to mujhse kuch kahaa Uske dil mein hia kya sochtaa reh gaya Samne hii maire kahe gaye jhuth woH Unki ankhoN mein main jhaktaa reh gaya Aarzoo dil ki dil mein dabi reh gayee Usse kya puchta, puchnaa reh gaya Koi Kwahish poorii huyii naa kabhi sirf gardishoN ka hi samnaa reh gaya 
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10th January 2010, 04:13 PM
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apna khayal rakhiyega.... duaaon ke saath.... Sorry......abhi reps added ho nahi raha....phir sahi...  YuuN Besabab Aansoo Aate NahiN Lag Zaroor Koii Baat Dil Ko Rahii Hai ... Fareb Kaa ChaDhtaa Bazaar Dekh Insaaf Se Bastii Khaalii Ho Rahii Hai ... ---Naresh Mehra---- |
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10th January 2010, 05:41 PM
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My sincere compliments Yunhi likhte rahein, ok...? Duaaon ke saath Haqeekat meri jaaN liye jaa rahi hai 
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10th January 2010, 09:41 PM
Sameer Bhai,,
Adaab! Aap ki behr-band ghazal boht hi kamal hai... Hur aik shair daad k qaabil hai, Teh-e-dil se daad haazir hai, qabool kijiye.........(Rep+++) Likhtey rahiye, Regardz,, tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di! kabhi fursat meiN sun lena, bohat ashaar baqi haiN... ("Asad") |
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10th January 2010, 10:10 PM
Samne hii maire kahe gaye jhuth woH
Unki ankhoN mein main jhaktaa reh gaya sameer bhai...kaise haiN aap...? pehle to aapki pehli behar meiN kahi ghazal ke liye mubaraqbaad.... behtren peshkash....lajawaab...maza aa gaya padh kar... uppar jo sher quote kiya hai....behad pasand aaya...behad simple lekin dil meiN utar jaane wala...."aaNkhoN meiN maiN jhankata reh gaya".....ek behad umda khayal pesh kiya hai i's sheyr ke janib....bahut kuch likhna chahta hooN...lekin shayad abhi i's layaq nahi ki kisi post par kuch apne khayalat likh sakuN.... reps dene ki koshish ki thi....lekin de nahi paya...sdc ka apna ek funda hai....jo ki sahi bhi hai....lekin daad ke saath saath....mere dil ki reps bhi qubuul kareN....behad umda koshish...... isi tarha likhna barkaraar rakhiyega.... ab to apna khayal bhi zaroor rakhiyega...kyoNki aane wale waqt meiN mujhe aapki aur bahut saari ghazals padhni haiN.... aapka dost, vikram... Uss Rizk Se Tau Maut Bhali Jis Rizk Se Aatee Ho Tere Parwaaz MeiN Kotaahi.... vikramjethi@gmail.com |
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11th January 2010, 07:46 AM
Sameer ji,
Aadaab! Kaise hain aap? Arre wah ghazal bahut bahut pasand aayii ... shayad yeh meri sab se fav haiii.... simply lovely aur itniii saadgiii ... just loved it ....!!! likhtey rahye... khush rahyee duaon ke saath ijazaat mandeep ~ Mandeep Kaur ~ |
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11th January 2010, 08:05 AM
Bohat khoob Kwaish Saheb Wasim barelwi saheb ki yeh Ghazal mujhe bohat pasand hain aur aapki koshish bhi bohat behtareen hain.
Lekin mostly aapke sher bohat milte jhulte lage, koshish kare ke har sher me alag pehlu bayaa.N ho Ghazal ka sahi maza tab hi aata hain. Par tujhe bevafa bhi kehna achcha nahi lagta... Mob.: +971 501297654
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Huii Sabse Paraayi
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11th January 2010, 03:02 PM
Sameer jee,
mubarak ho Dost ....aakhir mehnat rang dikhaya ghazal ke bare meN to kya kahun aapki soch humesha umdaa hai beHr mein ghazal kah kar usse char chand laga diye yun hi buzm ko roshan karte rahiye humesha khus rahiye DuaoN ke saath Diya  Mohabbat ke baad mohabbat mumkin hai faraz. Magar toot ke chahna sirf ek baar hota hai Goodbye SDC Diya |
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11th January 2010, 07:31 PM
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Good one Khwaahish, Aarzoo dil ki dil mein dabi reh gayee Usse kya puchta, puchnaa reh gaya kaafee aasaan lafzon men tumne kaafee aassan baat kah dee (aisaa karna badaa mushkil hotaa hai, khaaskar mere liye) yeh bhi achchaa rahaa WoH kareeb aaye magar faslaa reh gaya Jaane shikwa bhala kounsaa reh gaya किसी में शाम न मिली तो किसी में सहर नहीं |
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11th January 2010, 11:16 PM
khawish ji apki tareef me kuchh kehna to theek nahi hoga...bahut acchhi gazel likhi hai...nirasha aur apne chahne wale ki ignorance jhalakti hai gazel me..
badhayi.  ~*~*~* उदास पथिक ~*~*~*दिल की चीखे जब बढ जाती हैं और जज्बातो की आंधी रोके नही रुकती.. तो लिख लेती हू.... |
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13th January 2010, 02:39 PM
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Jee shabd to mann mutabik nahi jod paya isliye kaha tha ke kamzor shabd lage, phir bhi aapko meri yeh gazall achchi lagi main tahe dil se shukra guzar huN............ Aage bhi aapka saath aur hounsla milta rahe yehi dua, duaoN ka behad shukra guzar hun, Apna khayal rakhiye, Khuda Hafez...........
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13th January 2010, 06:57 PM
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bahut khoob dear.... ehsaas kaatil hai... dil chhu gaye... yuhi likhte raho... khush raho... rep++++++++++++ added...  "LAMHA"mujhko acchaa nahiiN lagtaa ko’ii hamnaam teraa , ko’ii tujhsaa ho to phir naam bhii tujhsaa rakhe.... |
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15th January 2010, 03:17 PM
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Jee kuch nahi bhi kehti aap to bhaut hai humare liye jo aap yahan aayi......... ......... Koshish jari hia aage bhi apna saath banaye rakhana........Khush rahiye, Ana khayall rakhiye, Khuda Hafez..........
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16th January 2010, 03:54 PM
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Aapko humari kalam pasand aayi aur daad ke kabil lagi hume bahut khushi huyi........ aage bhi apna saath banaye rakhiye, aur apna khayal rakhiye........ Jee koshish jari hia isse bhi behtari ki taraf jane ki........ Aap logoN ki dua hai jo likh lete hia........Khush rhiaye, Khuda Hafez......
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16th January 2010, 07:48 PM
Samne hii maire kahe gaye jhuth woH
Unki ankhoN mein main jhaktaa reh gaya bahut khoob sameer bhai... aapki ghazal humein bahut pasand aayi.. ummid hai aapse or bhi achi ghazal padhne ko milti rahengi.. khush rahiye duaaon ke sath aapka dost vicky |
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17th January 2010, 02:26 PM
Aarzoo dil ki dil mein dabi reh gayee
Usse kya puchta, puchnaa reh gaya Koi Kwahish poorii huyii naa kabhi sirf gardishoN ka hi samnaa reh gaya wah bhayee kamaal kar hi dikhayaa chalo chalo hum bhi peechy aa rahe hai and thanx to zid bhayee |
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18th January 2010, 01:15 PM
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har sher tareef-e-kabil h... daad kubul keejiye... |
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23rd January 2010, 04:06 PM
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janab aapka bahut bahut shukriya hounsla afzai aur daad ke liye.......... AApki daad dil se kabool hai......... Aate rhiaye, Apna saath banaye rakhiye, Khuda Hafez...............
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24th February 2010, 10:05 PM
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I m Fine Bhai, And thank you very much for wishing and encouraging me........ Bhai yeh to apni apni soch aur samajh ka dayara hai ke kounsi baat kisiko bahut pasand aa jatai hai kisiko nahi aati, Aur aapne bhi usi sher ko pasand kiya jo mera bhi sabse azez sher hai is gazal ka......... Aur bhai main koi shayar nahi hun aap apni rai mujhe to bejhijhak de sakte hai mujhe itraz hua to main itraz jatata bhi huN........ khushi hoti agar aap mujhe apna samjh kar kuch kah dete......... Koshish jari hia InshaAllah jaldi kuch likhunga, Apna saath banaye rakhiye.... Apna khayal rakhiye, Khush rhaiye, Khuda hafez.........
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27th February 2010, 11:33 AM
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kaise hain aap? umeed hai khairiyat se hi honge.. aapki likhi ghazl mujhe pasand aayi..yeh sher kuch khaas pasand aaya: Aarzoo dil ki dil mein dabi reh gayee Usse kya puchta, puchnaa reh gaya bahot khoob..yunhi likhte rahiye..khush rahiye yehi dua hai...god bless aapka dost, Pradhyuman gore ghareeban hai ye 'bismil', kyun tu naashaad nazar aata hai? musht-e-khaak hai basi yahan, bata kahan fuwaad nazar aata hai? -------------------------------------------------- |
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6th March 2010, 05:05 PM
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Im fine, Aap kaisi hai? Gazal ki pasandidgii aur hounsla afzai ka bahut bahut shukriyaa aapne bahut hi jyada tarif kardii mujhe bahut khushi huyi....... Jee koshish jari hai...... Aap bhi apna saath banaye rakhiye, khush rahiye, Apna khayal rakhiye Khuda Hafez.........
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14th April 2010, 03:10 PM
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sab se pahele o aapko watan wapsi per mubarak bad.... Je yeh meri paheli koshish thi bhe mein aur radiff ek hi rakhne ki wajah se mian shayad kuch alag bayan nahi kar paya..... Insha Allah koshish karunga ke kuch alag aur achcha pesh karun.. Khush rhaiye, Apna khayal rakhiye, Khuda hafez......
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17th May 2010, 04:55 PM
Koi Kwahish poorii huyii naa kabhi
sirf gardishoN ka hi samnaa reh gaya bahut khub likha aapne.. koshish bahut hi kargar lagi... shubhkamnao sahit, Akant... आहट सी कोइ आये तो समझ लेना कि तुम हो... AahaT si koi aaye to samajh lena ki tum ho... |
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10th October 2014, 11:48 PM
Sameer bhai.........aapke naam par aakar thehar gye hu...kahan hai aap...kaise hai aap...bahut waqt hua aap ko SDC par dekhe hue....missing u
.....Sunita Thakur..... यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया ....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए... 
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17th October 2014, 12:30 AM
Dii Aadaab .... !
Aapne yaad kiya aur maiN haazir huN Dii ... Sab theek hai Jee bus ab waqt nahi mil raha isliye sauna nahi huaa ... Thanks a lot Dii aapne apne is bhai yaad rakha ... Koshish karuNga ke ab zyada se zyaada waqt hazir rahuN ... Shaad O aabaad rahiye ... Khuda Hafez ..
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