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whenever life brings me into your company. - 25th January 2005, 10:49 AM

hi friends.
sumone encouraged me to right sumthing on sum gloden periods in my life which i really cherish.well hope u all love reading it.

Whenever life brings me into your company...
the earth appears more clearly to me than the moon...
The fragrance of crimson flowers rises along the paths of my heart...
As the day draws to an end, your voice calls to me...
and the earth appears more clearly to me than the moon.
Sometimes the memory of you claps sharply; sometimes it whispers...
Every day, the last watch of the night awakens me...
and the earth appears more clearly to me than the moon.
Why is separation the outcome of every meeting?
This matter now torments me constantly...
and the earth appears more clearly to me than the moon
whenever life brings me into your company.
   
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25th January 2005, 11:06 AM

Hi Jasleen,

Too Good.

Kabhi kabhi mere dil mein khayal aata hai...
Ki jaise tujh banaya gaya hai shayri kee liye..
Tu ab se pehle barrtan dho rahi thi kahin
Aaj shayri.com pe laya gaya hai humare liye...

Gustakhi maff. Kya kahoon apna kuch likhi nahi paaya ise padh kar.

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25th January 2005, 11:16 AM

ha ha ha

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Jas !! dont mind ..........but the way Rohin expressed is lovely ...
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25th January 2005, 11:20 AM

Hi Jasleen Ji,

So simple yet so beautiful. Really luv how u express ure feelings in such a poetic manner. Do keep up the good work.


Hi Rohin Ji,

REal nice parody song man. Hey why don't u expand it a bit more???


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25th January 2005, 11:30 AM

Jasleenji good work,
A small thought by just representing earth as present and moon as past, this moves into a new philosophical domain also. The indepth hidden meanings are many I need more searching as it is having many dimensions.


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25th January 2005, 11:31 AM

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Hi Jasleen,

Too Good.

Kabhi kabhi mere dil mein khayal aata hai...
Ki jaise tujh banaya gaya hai shayri kee liye..
Tu ab se pehle barrtan dho rahi thi kahin
Aaj shayri.com pe laya gaya hai humare liye...

Gustakhi maff. Kya kahoon apna kuch likhi nahi paaya ise padh kar.

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Agreed Rohin....


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25th January 2005, 12:48 PM

hi rohin,
well very true buddy wat all u said. i dun knw knw who the hell suggested me for writing here. anyways thx so much for making my post humourous one. still dun knw wat i hv to say to u. but few things r cuming up so here it goes for u........

U are one of the most CUTE person,
just a second dear
dont misunderstand.
CUTE means CREATING UNLESS TROUBLE EVERY WHERE.

scientist are trying 2........
figure out how long a person can live without BRAIN.
please tell him ur age rohin!

some ppl have 5 senses,
some have six.
u r gifted person as u have 7th sense:
NONSENSE.

HEY ROHIN,
THIS IS NOT FAIR........
HOW CUD U DO THIS?
NEVER EXPECTED THIS FRM U........
GOT WHOLE TV CHANNEL ON UR NAME AND U DIDNT TOLD EVEN ME?
ANIMAL PLANET!
WELL I HOPE U DONT MIND, BT ACTUALLY ME TO FORGOT MY POST N WAS THINKING HUMOROUS SO THT I CUD BRING SMILE ON ALLS FACE. THX BUDDY FOR REPLYING ME HERE.
TUM muskurate raho......
tum muskurate raho.......
muskurate raho,
muskurate raho.......
mera kya jata hai,
log tumhe hi pagal samjege
waise meri post ko humorous banane ke liye shukriya. and aage u only reply as ppl are more haapy with wat u said. thx for keeping my spirits high.
   
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25th January 2005, 12:54 PM

Hi Jasleen,

I am really CUTE
I am only 23 tell the scientists i can surivive till i am 103
You are right i am total Nonsense
Yaar ab apni tarif apne aap kaise karoon. TO Animal planet se jo tasveer tumhe bheji thi woh bhi dalna tha na.

Aur rahi baat post karne ki to ab to kabhi na.

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25th January 2005, 12:59 PM

hello abhishek,
well my dear mind karne ke liye mind hona bhi to chahiye. aur waise bhi i love reading wat my frnds reply for me in my post. well thx buddy for replying here n motivating rohin's spirits. u never told me wether u liked my post or not. anyways if my post n reply of rohin cud bring smile on ur face ours day is made.
   
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hi candy boy,
well buddy thx so much u loved reading my post . well plz try to explain rohin too. he has felt bad tht he has spoilt my post. waise he was the one jisne mere post ko char chaand laga diye. hey plz tell him to reply ahed with those lines n i wud love reading it. trhx buddy n allways keep smiling.
   
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25th January 2005, 01:02 PM

Are Jasleen aapka spirit wkaiye bahot high ho gaya, kitna percent tha alcohol content.


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hello shadow ji,
aapne meri post pe reply diya. thx buddy. well even u r like rohin. anyways thx for making my post lively. today i have really laughed. and the credit goes to rohin who is always so caring n loving. always wished tht sumthing cud bring smile on my face, n the best part is he is always successful. all the best for ur post too.
   
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25th January 2005, 02:09 PM

Whenever life brings me into your company...
the earth appears more clearly to me than the moon...
The fragrance of crimson flowers rises along the paths of my heart...

Wahhhh!


As the day draws to an end, your voice calls to me...
and the earth appears more clearly to me than the moon.
Sometimes the memory of you claps sharply; sometimes it whispers...

Beautifulll....


Every day, the last watch of the night awakens me...
and the earth appears more clearly to me than the moon.
Why is separation the outcome of every meeting?
This matter now torments me constantly...
and the earth appears more clearly to me than the moon
whenever life brings me into your company.

Wah Wah Wah!

Jasleen!

Once again beautiful words... Filled with emotions.... I loved them.... Bahut hi accha liikha hai... doo keep it up...


Rohin!
Aise mazaak karna... yeh acchi baat nahi hai

Ek sher main bhi arz karoonn....For Rohin

Tum hansa mat karo, tum hanste ho to lagta hai.. insaan bhi kabhi bandar thha....
Arreyy.. dekho tum naraaz na hona... Tum naraz hote ho to lagta hai insaan aa j bhi bandar hai


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25th January 2005, 02:22 PM

hi pulkit,
i was wondering till now tht why arent u replying to my post. waise i tell u tum dono rohin n u i mean are the same. u can pulls ones leg very finely. i knw u. u nvr replied me like rohin as u knew tht i was bit tense tht no one is replying to wat i posted. waise sahi maiyne ne jo aaj rohin ne likha, i loved it. post mein agar kuch raunak aa jaye to u love reading it. waise i knw u too, so plz cum out n reply wat u really wanted to say. i knw u too like rohin . so eagerly waiting for ur reply again.
   
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25th January 2005, 02:34 PM

Jasleen....

When did i pull your leg yaar? or even Rohin for that matter... u both r so heavy.. I will die if u fall over me... Fir Amrita ka kya hoga?

What did i really want to say? Accha likha hai tareef kar di... Rohin ke naam par Animla Planet bhi hai... I thot Cartooon Network was the only one... LOL... Rohin...u r a celebrity Brother!! ...

U r right... Humour is a part of me....Love Laughing but jo galta hai so galat hai..

Rohin!! too baddd!! Isse accha profession nahi mila tumhe....Bartan Dhho rahi thhi... Ha ha ha...

She must be using Rin...Tabhi itni raunak hai yahann

Jahan tak rahi rohin ki aur mere same hone ki baatt...He's a master craftsman in the art of leg-pulling... me's just an amateur


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25th January 2005, 02:44 PM

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Jasleen....

When did i pull your leg yaar? or even Rohin for that matter... u both r so heavy.. I will die if u fall over me... Fir Amrita ka kya hoga?

What did i really want to say? Accha likha hai tareef kar di... Rohin ke naam par Animla Planet bhi hai... I thot Cartooon Network was the only one... LOL... Rohin...u r a celebrity Brother!! ...

U r right... Humour is a part of me....Love Laughing but jo galta hai so galat hai..

Rohin!! too baddd!! Isse accha profession nahi mila tumhe....Bartan Dhho rahi thhi... Ha ha ha...

She must be using Rin...Tabhi itni raunak hai yahann

Jahan tak rahi rohin ki aur mere same hone ki baatt...He's a master craftsman in the art of leg-pulling... me's just an amateur
Hi Pulkit,

Yaar har kissi ke hoton ki haasi ke wajah hum hain,...
Aaj bandar hain to kal cartoon hain...
Wajah kissi ki aansoon ke bankar to jeena namumkin hai..
Aap sabke dil mein thodi jagah mil jaaye yehi bahut hai...
Kabhi aaplogon ke liye jaan bhi de dein to kum hai...

Thanks everyone for liking what i postd before an i hope u like this too.

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25th January 2005, 02:48 PM

hi pulkit,
shaitaan ka naam liya aur shaitaan hazir. i knew it tht hw was it possible tht u controlling urself. n i was right. well kya baat hai dun knw tumhari shaan mein kya likhon ab mein.
chal kuch yaad aaya aapke liye so replying ahead.......

kudrat ne jab tumhein banaya hoga!
total confusion ka mahol chaya hoga!
banana hoga gadha ya bandar
phir dona ka combination pasand aaya hoga.

tum mano ya na mano yeh hakikat hai,
dosti insaan ki zarurat hai,
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25th January 2005, 02:56 PM

hi rohin,
well wat to say now.u knw wat u r such a sweet friend of mine tht i always wish for u tht may god bless u with his fine glitters. i knw u love seeing smile on others face n same goes for u too . try to find out smile in others happiness. this is wat is life. today i am happy to see tht wat i wrote in this post n where this post lead too. i am so happy tht today after ages i laughed like anything.felt like saying sumthing for u. here it goes........

PHOOL KHILTE RAHEIN
ZINDAGHI KI RAAH MEIN
HASSI CHAMAKTI RAHE
AAPKI NIGAAH MEIN
KADAM KADAM PAR MILE
KHUSHI KI BAHAR AAPKO
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25th January 2005, 03:01 PM

See I told u Jasleen.. He's a master craftsman ... in the art of Falttery too

Kiddin Rohin... well.. thats what friends r for.... If we can make others smile by sounding fools even, u have achieved something.... not that i am calling you a fool.. just that u made us laugh

Hanste raho.. Hansate raho


Hey Bhagwaann... Tumne shayri ki taang tod di jasleen!!

Kisi din aao humari mehfil me , jaan jaoge zindagi kitni khoobssorat hai...

Me and Waiter... no... I am working as a Jester(Clown) on shayri.com ...


Kab sochaa thha milegaa humsafar "Shweta" jaisaa
Lagta hai is baar "Pulkit", kismat teri bhi rang laayii hai

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25th January 2005, 03:06 PM

i dun knw hw cum me too came today in ur catogary. but jo bhi hai today my day is made , i cud laugh n make others laugh too. thx to rohin who gv my post sum humorous mauhal. thx pulkit. yes its true tht wat are friends for, i really admire ur n rohins thought who are so lively n wenever a person feels low. u two r there to bring smile. i am pround n lucky tht god gave me such lovely friends and a family here.
   
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25th January 2005, 03:33 PM

jasleen,

It was a very finely made poem though I dont know ki Rohin saheb ko kaise pata chala ki aap "pehle bartan dhoo rahi ti kahin", Rohin saheb kya aap woh dhone wala bartan jasleen ko la kar de rahe thEy kya??? ha ha ha

well, it is as usual very good though i feel that the humor in the post made it loose its shine a bit.

Kya rohin ji aap se aaise umid nahin thi.. soocha tha ki koi nayaab cheez le kar aate hain aap... par yeh kya?

Chao!
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25th January 2005, 04:17 PM

Hi Vaaiz,

Yaar meine kuch kaha aur logo ne kuch smajha.

Meine taarif ki aur logo ne mazak samjah.

Bhai likha tha kyunki Jasleen is a Housewife
Aur abhi abhi unhone Shayri.com join kiya tha...

Hai re meri kismat... Tareef mein alfaz kya kahe
Yun humi ko joote pad gaye

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Ha ha ha aare Rohin saheb aap kya dooston ki baat ka bura mante hain yaar. Dosti Yaari main to yeh sub chalta hi rehta hai... kuch aap taang kheenche kuch hum.

Waise jasleen, I must complement you on one thing about this poem. When I was reading it the second time it gave me something more than the first time i had read. It is great but I must say one thing on these lines of yours:


Why is separation the outcome of every meeting?
This matter now torments me constantly...

Milene ke saath hi jo samay niyat ho jata hai woh hai bicharna. This is one of the biggest worries of my life. I dont know but the thought that everyone you know will get seperated from you some day makes me wake up a night completely drenched in sweat. Great that you made it up in such beautiful words.

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hi lokesh,
well wat to say now. this post was what n which direction it went. anyways thing is tht i m lucky tht my post cud bring smiles on everyones face n the effort was taken by robin. well still wondering sum one to reply really well in it who has really followed the post. jo aata hai mazak karke chala jata hai. i m still short with tht one reply which i am eagerly waiting for, the one who understood the depth of my feelings.anyways i am happy becoz u all r happy. my day is made.
   
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25th January 2005, 06:35 PM

Hi Vaaiz,

Nahi yaar aisa nahi hai. Mein bura manoo to kis ka aur kin baaton ka.

i never mind for i have no mind....lol

AAj subhe se sab mujhe gali de rahe hain,

Jasleen, Pulkit, Nidhi, Shadow bhai, Aur aap,

Aaj sab program banake aaye the kya..

Well dont worry i dont mind.


Jasleen,

I read each and ever line of urs and only then replied to ur post in the first place. Sometimes a few words say more than what a whole novel can say. So no few words are less and no pages enough to tell how good this poem was.

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Quote:
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hi friends.
sumone encouraged me to right sumthing on sum gloden periods in my life which i really cherish.well hope u all love reading it.

Whenever life brings me into your company...
the earth appears more clearly to me than the moon...
The fragrance of crimson flowers rises along the paths of my heart...
As the day draws to an end, your voice calls to me...
and the earth appears more clearly to me than the moon.
Sometimes the memory of you claps sharply; sometimes it whispers...
Every day, the last watch of the night awakens me...
and the earth appears more clearly to me than the moon.
Why is separation the outcome of every meeting?
This matter now torments me constantly...
and the earth appears more clearly to me than the moon
whenever life brings me into your company.


Hey Jasleen,

How r u?

I knew it that u have a gr8 potential to be a great writer and that too a versatile writer.You are really doing a gr8 job jasleen
seriously give a thought to ur mind and u'll get the answer that how good u have written this composition.....I really feel proud today to be your friend......So keep up the good work going!

Excellent stuff really awesome.................

take care....
Have a wonderful time...
bye


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Quote:
Whenever life brings me into your company...
the earth appears more clearly to me than the moon...
The fragrance of crimson flowers rises along the paths of my heart...
As the day draws to an end, your voice calls to me...
and the earth appears more clearly to me than the moon.
Sometimes the memory of you claps sharply; sometimes it whispers...
Every day, the last watch of the night awakens me...
and the earth appears more clearly to me than the moon.
Why is separation the outcome of every meeting?
This matter now torments me constantly...
and the earth appears more clearly to me than the moon
whenever life brings me into your company.

Hi Jasleen ji,
Tabaadil-e-alfaaz ka mera shauq majboor kar raha tha ki ise Hindustani mein likhun... par shayad yeh pehle hi kisi ne kar rakha hai.



zindagi jab bhi teri bazm mein laati hai hamen
ye zamin chand se behatar nazar aati hai hamen

surkh phulon se mahak uthati hain dil ki rahen
din dhale yun teri aawaz bulaati hai hamen

yaad teri kabhi dastak kabhi saragoshi se
raat ke pichhale prahar roz jagaati hai hamen

har mulaqat ka anjaam judai kyun hai
ab to har vaqt yahi baat satati hai hamen


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25th January 2005, 08:38 PM

Doston, Jasleen ji ki feelings to ab agrezi ghazal mein try karta hoon... beher bigdega, radeef hai nahin, kaafiye se kaam chalayen.

Life brings me to your proximity here whenever
Moon may be beautiful, but this place turns better

My path is fragrant with the crimson red flowers
And your voice calls me, my dear come here

Loud and soft by turn your memories call me
And I wake of at dawn, every day, no matter

Why must we meet only to go our own ways
Now this thought haunts me, it's a torture.

Hope you all like it...


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Kamakaze,
Hindustani translation is amazing, now I could appreciate Jasleens words much better. By the way you told it was already written, could you give more details of author, collection etc....

Thanks a lot for the post.....


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hello yash,
well thx buddy . its strange tht u came here n u werent humorous as others.anyways thx for replying here.keep smiling. all the best for ur posts to come
   
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hi kamakaze,
thx for replying to my post n translating it too. very true buddy it may be written sumwhere or sung . actually i dun remember bt i just knw tht its here in my dairy so wrote it for all of u.anyways i wud try to cum out with the author n will teel u n shadow ji too. allways keep smiling .
   
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hi rohin,
well thts true buddy tht i dun need sumone to reply me in a novel kind, bt i actually i was unable to tell u all wat i wanted to say. u all apprciate wat i write bt still i feel i m not gud in it as i am eagerly waiting for two perons to reply on post. one is talib ji n the other is meena didi. they are fabolous in their post n reply too to those which they like reading. bt still none of them replied me. i am trying hard to cum out with better words. this was wat i meant.
   
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hi rohin,
well thts true buddy tht i dun need sumone to reply me in a novel kind, bt i actually i was unable to tell u all wat i wanted to say. u all apprciate wat i write bt still i feel i m not gud in it as i am eagerly waiting for two perons to reply on post. one is talib ji n the other is meena didi. they are fabolous in their post n reply too to those which they like reading. bt still none of them replied me. i am trying hard to cum out with better words. this was wat i meant.

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hi - 26th January 2005, 11:45 PM

hi, really good one
u know what u asked the question we all ask us everyday..

Why is separation the outcome of every meeting?
This matter now torments me constantly...
and the earth appears more clearly to me than the moon
whenever life brings me into your company.

veyr nicely written words, full of emotions


ant kyu hai har mulakaat ki judayi
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i think no one has the answer to this so u know what: cherish whatever life has given u now, cuz we dont know how long it owuld last and u dont want to regret kater

when u looose dont loooose the lesson is what i tell myself..........

let it go and if somethign is yours it will come back

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Hindustani translation is amazing, now I could appreciate Jasleens words much better. By the way you told it was already written, could you give more details of author, collection etc....

Thanks a lot for the post.....
Hi Shadow,

The original Urdu ghazal is written by Shahryar. It was sung by Talat Aziz in Umrao Jaan.


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I have a answer for ur question - 27th January 2005, 10:30 AM

Hi Dear,

I Like ur massage so much, but i have answer for ur question:

"ant kyu hai har mulakaat ki judayi
aaj soch kar ye meri aankh bhar aayi"

Coz log milte hi bichdne ke liye hain, agar do pyar karne wale bichdenge nahi to unko milne ka maja kaise aaega.
Tell me.

Reply me
I m waiting


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hello meena didi,
i dont know wat made u replied here. who told u tht i was waiting for a reply frm ur side. well just to say tht aap aaye aur meri post pe reply diya. my day is made. meena didi i hv written many things in dard section. i think u never read them. its true tht this post is the english version of a gazal bt there r many composed by me too. do check it out wen u hv sum free time. thx so much for replying here. take care and always keep smiling
   
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hi priya ji,
its my pleasure tht u liked the wordings of my post. well watever u said is try. life teaches us lessons n its gud we learn each day n remember it for future too. thx buddy for replying me. in future too i wud try to write up to ur expectations. take care n keep smiling
   
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hi saurab,
well watever u said is true buddy bt sumtimes the circumstances are such tht things are not in ur hands. destiny plays it rolls as part n the parcel. sumtimes joy n sumtimes sorrows.bt wen a person leaves u for ever u r drowned in the depths of sorrows. anyways thx buddy for replying me. take care n keep smiling
   
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hello shadow ji,
thx buddy for telling me too as i dun knw wen did i translated n wrote in my dairy. thx so much buddy
   
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