arsaa hua hai.

RAHUL TRIVEDI · **ek chota sa sher. -** 21st September 2002, 11:47 AM

jee is bazm me bahot arse baad lauta hun....ek sher aapki nazar karne jaa raha hun.....ise matlaa bana ke ghazal likh saka to jaroor pesh karunga.....filhaal....

bahot berukhi darbadar dekhte hain
woh meri nazar se shaher dekhte hain

aadaab.

RAHUL TRIVEDI · **saahil se dekh le. -** 21st September 2002, 11:52 AM

ek aur adhoora sher.....waqt ki paabandi ki wajah se is adhoore sher ko poora nahi kar paya......fir bhi aapke jawaabaat ka intezaar rahega.....

chal doobta hun main saahil se dekh le
acchi rahegi maut jaraa dil se dekh le

kitne kareeb aake badnaam ho gaye
pardaa hataa ke meri manjil se dekh le

( yahan hamari manjil ko humne unka hi ghar bataya hai. )

arsaa hue hai baithe teri chaukhat pe hamnashin
ki tu ek baar fursat me mehfil se dekh le.

aadaab.

RAHUL TRIVEDI · **arsaa hua hai. -** 21st September 2002, 11:59 AM

arsaa hua hai aapka deedaar kiye hue
arsaa hua hai kisi se takraar kiye hue
kuch din aur ruk jayenge teri khaatir
arsaa hua hai kisi ka intezaar kiye hue.

aadaab.

luvsuman · **hi.... -** 29th September 2002, 12:29 AM

hi

aap ka sher aur ghazal dono hi bahut achhee hai.aap aur achha likhen is liye main bhagwaan se prarthna karti hoon. all the best.

RAHUL TRIVEDI · **shukriyaa..luvsuman jee. -** 30th September 2002, 11:13 AM

luvsuman jee bahot bahot shukriya ki aapko hamara kalaam pasand aaya......jee aajkal bazm me haazri hi nahi lagvaa paate waqt hi nahi milta......fir bhi aapko sher pasand aaya aur aap hamare liye duaa kar rahe hain......hame bahot accha laga. shukriya. aapke ehsaanmand rahenge....in sheron ko ghazal bana ke aapke saamne fir se haazir ho jayenge...
enjoy your life. and take care of yourself.

rahUL i

**wahh rahulji -** 19th October 2002, 02:07 PM

ajee kya sher kaha hai aapne..maan gaye rahulji.
sab ke sab sher kamaal ke the..hame bahot pasand aaye.