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kissa ik ajeeb muhobbat ka!!! -
22nd October 2009, 12:05 AM
Mere jaane se yeh mehfil toh na uth jaayegee Muskuraata dekh mujhe tum koi hairaani na karo Riwayat aane-jaane ki rahi hai saddiyoN se Jata dekh mujhe tum jism se apne jaaN be-gaani na karo Main toh umroN se hi raha hu be-imaan Jud jaane ki mujhse dekho tum koi nadaani na karo Main toh ik banjaara hu hawa ke sang chalta hu Saath chalne ki mere tum zidd koi bach-kani na karo Aana mera aur phir chale jaana yeh toh ik dastoor puraana hai Iss dastoor se dekho tum koi chhed-khani na karo Bharam achhe haiN dil ke behlane ko Sach maan inhe aankh band karne ki tum koi nadaani na karo Tum ik kushnuma hissa ho meri Zindagi ka Rok mujhe mere khayalatoN ko tum be-mani na karo Main toh phir aaunga badalte kisi Mausam ke saath Tum mera intzaar mat karna...... Iss rishte ko tum koi kahaani na karo Waqt jo ke chala hai gaya woh ab laut nahi aane wala Likhe taqdeer ke lafzon ki dekho tum na-farmani na karo Uss Rizk Se Tau Maut Bhali Jis Rizk Se Aatee Ho Tere Parwaaz MeiN Kotaahi.... vikramjethi@gmail.com |
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22nd October 2009, 02:20 AM
"Main toh umroN se hi raha hu be-imaan
Jud jaane ki mujhse dekho tum koi nadaani na karo"....... "Aana mera aur phir chale jaana yeh toh ik dastoor puraana hai Iss dastoor se dekho tum koi chhed-khani na karo"..... "Main toh ik banjaara hu hawa ke sang chalta hu Saath chalne ki mere tum zidd koi bach-kani na karo" Kisi ki Julfo me Qaid kar jo dil ko chale aate hai Unke kisse itihaas ke panno me jabt ho jate hai..... Na Bolo in Bekar ki Baato ko, Aane jaane ki Bate fir kisi aur din karo Naadani bemani nahi hoti apne jajbato ke saath itni to Baimani na karo Banjaro ko bhi Hawa ka saath chaiye Bhavro ko bhi Shaama ka Haath Chaiye Itihaas Jo Baane hai vo to ban hi jaynge, kahaniya jo likhni hai vo to likhi hi jaygi apne dil ko in halki fulki baato se behalane ki nadani mat karo..... (Samjaha nahi raha hu...darkhawast kar raha hu.....) Aandhiya Gam Ki Chalegi To Sawar Jaoonga Me Mai To Dariya Hu Samoondar Me Utar Jaaonga Me Mujhe Suli Pe Chadane Ki Jaroorat Kya Hai Logo Mere Haato Se Kalam Cheen Lo Yuhi Mar Jaoonga Me (When i received You in my heart everything changed for me) |
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22nd October 2009, 08:22 PM
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Amit bhai, Bahut khoob likha hai, maza aa gaya padh ke.... Inn panktiyo.n ki main jawaab de tauheen nahi karunga.... Sach mein behad khoobsurat hain, shayad seedhe dil se nikli hain. Aap hme samjha bhi sakte hain janaab, bilkul yeh aap ka haq hai, kyonki aap mujhe padhne ke baad apne ehsaas likh rahe hain... Waise main kabhi bhi kisi samjhaish ko iss tarah nahi leta ki dusra vyakti mujhe nahi samjha sakta...agar aisi baat hoti to phir kya main khuda nahi hota??? Bhai aapke ehssas khoobsurat hain lekin iss taraf aisi koi baat nahi ke samjhaane ki naubat aaye  Main toh har rang ko dekhne aur mehsoos krne ke liye likhta hu aur isse likhte waqt main ek aise aadmi ki kalpna kar raha tha jo ki ek bada egoist ho aur apni premika ki na samajh raha ho..... Kyonki duniya mein aise kai aadmi dekhe hain to har rang ko touch krne ke liye kabhi kuch to kabhi kuch ban kar ya samajh kar likhne ki koshish karta hu... Aur aap se umm'eed karta hu ki aap mujhe har baar aise hi aapni rae se meri chitrkaari ko nikhaarne me madad karenge....Bhai saheb maine isse chitrkaari issliye likha hai kyonki likhte waqt main apni kalpna me kai chitr banata hu phir unko mehsoos karta hu aur phir aankh band kar ke likhta hu, hai to ye ajeeb baat lekin mere saath ye aise hi hai... Aapka bahut bahut shukriya... Vikram Jethi Uss Rizk Se Tau Maut Bhali Jis Rizk Se Aatee Ho Tere Parwaaz MeiN Kotaahi.... vikramjethi@gmail.com |
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22nd October 2009, 08:32 PM
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ek aur cheez par nazar rahiye........el line bahut badi ya choti na karein.... koshish kijiye ki har line ki length pahle line jaisi ho...... shayri me shumaar karna hai apko apne kalaam ko to kuch tarteeb ke hisab se chalna hoga aapko........ nahi to ap is section ko shayri nahi , ek shout box ki tarah istemaal kar rahe hai aisa ho jayega......... mai apke acche ke liye kah raha hu...kyuki mujhe ap jara serious dikh rahe hai.........varna na kahta..... |
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22nd October 2009, 09:25 PM
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Durust kaha hai aapne, Mujhe bhi khud mein yeh kami mehsoos hui...Koshish karunga iss par kaam karne ki aur isse durust karne ki.... Shikayat hai aapse ke aap yeh kyon likhte hain ki bura mat maniyega.. yeh to meri khushkismati hai ki mujhe koi bata raha hai.... Sirf tareef lene ke liye likhna nahi chahta, kabhi badhiya toh kabhi khraab nazme toh banti hi rehti hain.... Agar yeh baat hoti to open forum me nahi aata aur nahi kehta aapko ki apni rae deN....Mujhe pata hai ke jab koi kami khalti hai to ek jaankaar khud ko rok nahi paata... Aapki rae sar-aankhoN pe janaab Vikram Jethi... Uss Rizk Se Tau Maut Bhali Jis Rizk Se Aatee Ho Tere Parwaaz MeiN Kotaahi.... vikramjethi@gmail.com |
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22nd October 2009, 09:48 PM
Vikram jee
ziddi jee ke baat se main sehmat hun aapki ehesaas bahot achha hai bas usko achhi surat dijiye paresan na huiye waqt ke saath aap bhi umdaa shayar ban jaoge yeh mahfil har kisiko ek pehchaan de deti hai ek din aapko bhi sab shayar kahenge aameen take care Diya  Mohabbat ke baad mohabbat mumkin hai faraz. Magar toot ke chahna sirf ek baar hota hai Goodbye SDC Diya |
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24th October 2009, 05:38 PM
Vikram jii aadaab.............
Janab aapko padhker aise nahi lagata ke aap ekdum nausikhiye hai...... kafi khoobsurat ahsaas hai aapke aur bayan bhi behad khoob kiya hai aapne..... aapko padhne ke bad yeh to jaan gaya huN ke aapko likhane ka kafi ilm hai but kuch baaten hai jo dheere dheere sikh jayenge.... Aur yahan aapko baar baar instructions dene humare Bhai logs hai jo dete rahenge... aur hum sikhate rahenge... Aapki tehreer behad dilchasp aur behad khoob rahi... sabhi lines ek ki bayani achchi hai ek baat drurst hai jo ZIdd sahab farmaye... Aage dhayan rakhiye aur aapne kalam se ruberu karate rahiye.... Likhate rahiye Khush rahiye Khuda Hafez... 
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25th October 2009, 05:20 PM
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Aapki hausla afzai aur izzat afzai ka bahut bahut Shukriya... Aap theek farma rahe haiN, aap ki rae mere liye ehmiyat rakhti hai, app apni rae Aise hi dete raheN... Khuda hafiz Vikram Jethi Uss Rizk Se Tau Maut Bhali Jis Rizk Se Aatee Ho Tere Parwaaz MeiN Kotaahi.... vikramjethi@gmail.com |
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26th October 2009, 06:40 PM
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Aap agar issi tarha aate rahe aur mera hausla Buland karte rahe to yakeeN maniye Buland saheb Kabhi na Kabhi chahe ek baar hi sahi achha zaroor likh jaunga...... Vikram Uss Rizk Se Tau Maut Bhali Jis Rizk Se Aatee Ho Tere Parwaaz MeiN Kotaahi.... vikramjethi@gmail.com |
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27th October 2009, 12:33 AM
Vikram Jii,,
Aik achi koshish per dil say daad qabool kijiye... Likhtay rahiye,, Take care,, Regardz, HSN tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di! kabhi fursat meiN sun lena, bohat ashaar baqi haiN... ("Asad") |
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27th October 2009, 01:22 AM
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Hassan ji, Aapki zranawaazi ka bahut bahut Shukriya...... Aapki dil rakhne ki adaa Achhi lagi, varna to yeh khaaksaar Khud ilm rakhta hai ke ye koi kabile tareeff tehreer ho, lekin jab Kalam chale to mujhe lagta hai usse bin rok tok ke chalne dena chahiye...... Khair Aapka bahut bahut Shukriya ke aapne Waqt nikal isse pdha hi nahi balki mujhe apni azeem rae se bhi nawaza hai.... Shukriya.... Vikram Uss Rizk Se Tau Maut Bhali Jis Rizk Se Aatee Ho Tere Parwaaz MeiN Kotaahi.... vikramjethi@gmail.com |
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