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Pal bhar mein.... -
8th October 2008, 11:54 AM
Pal bhar mein tamam umer ki sochein badal jati hain
jin rahon per chaltey hain wohi, rahein badal jati hain
karney ko kia nahi kartey log muhabbat mein
sirf hamarey liye hi kyun? rasmein badal jati hain
woh aisa hai k us ka naam sunney k tasawwur say hi
hamari tamaam tar saatein badal jati hain
sochta hoon jane kaise? kah paoon gha main us say
milta hoon to dil ki sari batein badal jati hain
chahe "Manzil" "Dushwar" ho aur "Duur" bhi
humsafer us jaisa ho to musaftein badal jati hain
yun to "Raat" ka alam haseen hota hai, madhosh bhi
magar"chand" dekhoon to meri ratein badal jati hain
mat chaho, k mujhe aadat nahi itna chahne walon ki
yeh na ho log kahein, jald hi adatein badal jati hain
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9th October 2008, 11:47 PM
janaab baQtiyar sahib !
aapka pehla kadam hai ye aur pehle kadam pe hi itni shaistgi !
pehle to maiN aapka ahal e mahfil meiN isteQbaal kartaa huN !
ab baat ki jaaye ghazal kii ..
to ..
ghazal har lihaaz se behtareen , purasar aur ek mukammal shakl meiN hai !
mujhe sabhi ashaar aat hurf ba hurf pasand aaye !
kuch ashaar to aisa laga jaise mere juzbaat aapne bayaN kar diye ho !
karney ko kia nahi kartey log muhabbat mein
sirf hamarey liye hi kyun? rasmein badal jati hain
yun to "Raat" ka alam haseen hota hai, madhosh bhi
magar"chand" dekhoon to meri ratein badal jati hain
aur maQtaa pe to laa jawaab huN
mat chaho, k mujhe aadat nahi itna chahne walon ki
yeh na ho log kahein, jald hi adatein badal jati hain
agar aap khud likhte haiN
to ...
meri mubaarQbaad aur daad
dil se haiN ..
Qabool farmaayeiN
apnaa khyaal rakhiye !
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25th February 2009, 05:34 PM
Badi maaziiraat chahata huun.... apka jawab likhne mein taqiiiiiiir ki mein ney.
Bahut shukriya apko meri ghazal pasand ayi.
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25th February 2009, 05:54 PM
Gud going............................................. ..!
Save me from the safety of my SILENCE
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25th February 2009, 06:15 PM
Ahaaan.... seeing the other side of me
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25th February 2009, 06:28 PM
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Ahaaan.... seeing the other side of me
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Yes........................................... !!!!!!!!!!!
Save me from the safety of my SILENCE
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25th February 2009, 06:30 PM
Thank you...................bro..!!!
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27th February 2009, 04:08 PM
wah ! wah ! wah ! bahot hi achi gazal pesh ki hai apne, yun hi likhte rahe, take care, bye
koi pyaar chahe to koi jahan chahe,
koi doulat chahe to koi shaan chahe,
hum to jindagi ke sataye huwe hai,
‘Eliyas’ to khudase do gaaz zameen aur kafan chahe
- ELIYAS SHAIKH
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28th February 2009, 11:43 AM
Yun to guzar raha hai har pal khushi ke saath
Phir bhi koi kami si hai kyun zindagi ke saath
Rishtey, wafayen, dosti sab kuch to paas hai
Kya baat hai pata nahin dil kyun udaas hai
Har lamha hai haseen nayi dilkashi ke saath
Phir bhi koi kami si hai kyun zindagi ke saath
Chahat bhi hai, sukoon bhi hai, dilbari bhi
Aankhon mein khuwab hain labon par hansi bhi
Dil ko nahin hai koi shikayat kisi ke saath
Phir bhi koi kami si hai kyun zindagi ke saath
Socha tha jaisay waisa jeevan to hai magar
Ab aur kis talash mein bechain hai nazar
Qudrat ki fayyazi hai darya dili ke saath
Phir bhi koi kami si hai kyun zindagi ke saath...
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Nice Sharing -
28th February 2009, 12:01 PM
Baqtiar ji Namaskaar
aapne jo gazal share ki hai eske ahsaas hume behad pasand haiN, yeh gazal main 1-2 aur sites par bhi pad chuki hoon.....shukriya ki aapne SDC par bhi esko post kiya.....aur haan janab ek baat ka khayal rakhiye ki jo gazal aapki kalam se na likhi gaye ho uske neeche "Writer ka naam" ya phir "NOT MINE" jaroor likha kijiye taaki sahi haqdaar ko uska credit mil sake....
kush rahiye aate rahiye
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.....Sunita Thakur.....
यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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28th February 2009, 12:27 PM
Sunita... nice suggestion
Actually it is from the collection and as u read the qhazal the writer didnt mention his/her name "takalluss" in the last couplet.
But never the less i will mention 'NOT MINE'
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28th February 2009, 12:31 PM
Kyun tumsay mulaqaat ka din door chala hai
Yeh aazmaish hai ya khuda mujh say khafa hai
Har din mujhay milne ka to wada hi mila hai
Yeh aazmaish hai ya khuda mujhsay khafa hai
Pal pal bana din, din banay hafton say mahinay
Lamhon kay bhanwar say bachay sab dil kay safeenay
Lekin meri kishtee ka tawazun bigrda hai
Yeh aazmaish hai ya khuda mujhsay khafa hai
Kyun tumsay mulaqaat ka din door chala hai
Yeh aazmaish hai ke khuda mujh say khafa hai ....................(Mine)
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28th February 2009, 09:46 PM
Quote:
Originally Posted by Baqtiar
Sunita... nice suggestion
Actually it is from the collection and as u read the qhazal the writer didnt mention his/her name "takalluss" in the last couplet.
But never the less i will mention 'NOT MINE'
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Shukriya Baqtiar jii......hume accha laga ki aapne meri baat ko samja
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Originally Posted by Baqtiar
Kyun tumsay mulaqaat ka din door chala hai
Yeh aazmaish hai ya khuda mujh say khafa hai
Har din mujhay milne ka to wada hi mila hai
Yeh aazmaish hai ya khuda mujhsay khafa hai
Pal pal bana din, din banay hafton say mahinay
Lamhon kay bhanwar say bachay sab dil kay safeenay
Lekin meri kishtee ka tawazun bigrda hai
Yeh aazmaish hai ya khuda mujhsay khafa hai
Kyun tumsay mulaqaat ka din door chala hai
Yeh aazmaish hai ke khuda mujh say khafa hai ....................(Mine)
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ahsaas acche lage ! likhtey rahiye......kush rahiye
"maana ki intzaar ka bhi ek alag sa majja hai,
par aisa intzaar bhi kya, jo ta-umr khatam hi na ho"
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.....Sunita Thakur.....
यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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1st March 2009, 11:53 AM
Thank you .............Mrs. Singh
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7th March 2009, 04:41 PM
sochta hoon jane kaise? kah paoon gha main us say
milta hoon to dil ki sari batein badal jati hain
chahe "Manzil" "Dushwar" ho aur "Duur" bhi
humsafer us jaisa ho to musaftein badal jati hain
bohat khoobsurat ehsaas hain baqtiar saheb..yuhi likhte rahiye..
zainy
Zainy
PalkoN ki baand ko tod ke daaman pe aa gira
Ek aaNsu mere zabt ki tauheen kar gaya...
Nm
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7th March 2009, 04:48 PM
Thanks Zainy... Collection ki thi pasand ayii tou yahan aplog ke saath share kiya..
Inshallah aplog ke saath raha tou kabhi na kabhi shayari seekhh hi jaonga.
Good Day..
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20th March 2009, 05:21 PM
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Originally Posted by Baqtiar
Kyun tumsay mulaqaat ka din door chala hai
Yeh aazmaish hai ya khuda mujh say khafa hai
Har din mujhay milne ka to wada hi mila hai
Yeh aazmaish hai ya khuda mujhsay khafa hai
Pal pal bana din, din banay hafton say mahinay
Lamhon kay bhanwar say bachay sab dil kay safeenay
Lekin meri kishtee ka tawazun bigrda hai
Yeh aazmaish hai ya khuda mujhsay khafa hai
Kyun tumsay mulaqaat ka din door chala hai
Yeh aazmaish hai ke khuda mujh say khafa hai ....................(Mine)
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Hmmmmmmmmm..............
Baqtiar Jiiiiiiiiii aapke ehsaas bht khoobsurat hain.........technically thoda gadbad hai lekin aapke ehsaas ki khoobsurti ne use chupa dia.........hope aage aap aur bhi achcha likhenge........hum aapki aur ghazal ka wait karenge........
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20th March 2009, 06:04 PM
GA SAKUN NAGMA WO SAAJ KAHAN SE LAOUN...
SUNA SAKUN KUCH AAPKO WO ANDAJ KAHAN SE LAOUN
YU TO CHAND KI TARIF KARNA ASAN HAI
KAR SAKU TARIF AAPKI WO ALFAAJ KAHAN SE LAOUN
Mat pucho kis kis ne mara laat mere janaje par...............
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20th March 2009, 08:54 PM
Is everything okai....Naaz.... ya phir jorrr ka jatka ... dirrey se lag gaya...
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7th April 2010, 04:04 PM
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Badi maaziiraat chahata huun.... apka jawab likhne mein taqiiiiiiir ki mein ney.
Bahut shukriya apko meri ghazal pasand ayi.
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Damn.........I am here since 2008.............
When am reading my own replies am like i was under some bad spell or bad omen or what....
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7th April 2010, 05:44 PM
Hota hai Bhai........
Insaan badal jate hai ahsaas badal jate hai
kuch ulti raah chalne lagte hai kuch sidhi raah per aa jate hai......
Waise tumhari pasand achchi thi..... usi mutabik tumme badlaav aaya...
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7th April 2010, 10:05 PM
karney ko kia nahi kartey log muhabbat mein
sirf hamarey liye hi kyun? rasmein badal jati hain
sochta hoon jane kaise? kah paoon gha main us say
milta hoon to dil ki sari batein badal jati hain
yun to "Raat" ka alam haseen hota hai, madhosh bhi
magar"chand" dekhoon to meri ratein badal jati hain
bahut hi badhiya baqs saheb, daad haazir hai....
'E Taahire Laahuti!!!
Uss Rizk Se Tau Maut Bhali
Jis Rizk Se Aatee Ho
Tere Parwaaz MeiN Kotaahi....
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8th April 2010, 07:16 PM
Achcha hai bohat achcha hai........daad kabool kare Baqtiar saheb.......Maqta behad pasand aaya
mat chaho, k mujhe aadat nahi itna chahne walon ki
yeh na ho log kahein, jald hi adatein badal jati hain
Jhoot kehdu yeh meri fitrat me nahi shamil
Par tujhe bevafa bhi kehna achcha nahi lagta...
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8th April 2010, 07:19 PM
good one Baqz...................................
"LAMHA"
mujhko acchaa nahiiN lagtaa ko’ii hamnaam teraa ,
ko’ii tujhsaa ho to phir naam bhii tujhsaa rakhe....
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11th April 2010, 01:37 PM
Sajid, Vikram, Lamha......Glad after a looooooooong time u guyz read it.
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