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2nd July 2010, 08:15 AM
sdc k sabhii members ko namaskaar.dosto aap sab ki khidmat meiN pesh ek or rachna.kaisi lagi jaroor likhiayga.thanks
Saari mehfil ne kaha,lajwaab ho tum
meri nazroN ne kaha sabka jwaab ho tum.
ooper neechay ander bahar hii nahi
meray dil meiN bhii basay janaab ho tum.
suraj chanda or sitaray heiN sab hisaab meiN
teri babat kya kahuN,be-hisab ho tum.
tera husan bhii kyamat or jalwa bhi
or us pe bhii kyamat, be-naqab ho tum.
dekhtay hii tujhay "seep" kehnay laga
dhoondta tha jisay vohi khwab ho tum.
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2nd July 2010, 08:21 AM
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Originally Posted by rajinderseep
sdc k sabhii members ko namaskaar.dosto aap sab ki khidmat meiN pesh ek or rachna.kaisi lagi jaroor likhiayga.thanks
Saari mehfil ne kaha,lajwaab ho tum
meri nazroN ne kaha sabka jwaab ho tum.
ooper neechay ander bahar hii nahi
meray dil meiN bhii basay janaab ho tum.
suraj chanda or sitaray heiN sab hisaab meiN
teri babat kya kahuN,be-hisab ho tum.
tera husan bhii kyamat or jalwa bhi
or us pe bhii kyamat, be-naqab ho tum.
dekhtay hii tujhay "seep" kehnay laga
dhoondta tha jisay vohi khwab ho tum.
rajinderseep
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seep bhai
radhe radhe
ahsaas bahut sundar hai achhe lage likhte rahen aise hi
duaon ke saath
Aapka Apna Ishk
'इश्क' के बदले इश्क चाहना तिजारत है
इज़हार किससे करें महबूब तो दिल में है
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2nd July 2010, 08:46 AM
Quote:
Originally Posted by rajinderseep
sdc k sabhii members ko namaskaar.dosto aap sab ki khidmat meiN pesh ek or rachna.kaisi lagi jaroor likhiayga.thanks
Saari mehfil ne kaha,lajwaab ho tum
meri nazroN ne kaha sabka jwaab ho tum.
ooper neechay ander bahar hii nahi
meray dil meiN bhii basay janaab ho tum.
suraj chanda or sitaray heiN sab hisaab meiN
teri babat kya kahuN,be-hisab ho tum.
tera husan bhii kyamat or jalwa bhi
or us pe bhii kyamat, be-naqab ho tum.
dekhtay hii tujhay "seep" kehnay laga
dhoondta tha jisay vohi khwab ho tum.
rajinderseep
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bahut achi gahzal pesh ki hia aapne, pahli baar baar padha shayed aapko,
humesha aapko padht hi dekha tha, likhte pahli baar, aur aapne itni masoom se khayal pesh kiya acha laga
ye wala bahut acha laga ... ghumaavdaar khyaal, mazaa aayaa
ooper neechay ander bahar hii nahi
meray dil meiN bhii basay janaab ho tum.
reps for this
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2nd July 2010, 07:11 PM
Bohat khoob Rajinder saheb............
Jhoot kehdu yeh meri fitrat me nahi shamil
Par tujhe bevafa bhi kehna achcha nahi lagta...
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4th July 2010, 01:58 PM
bahut bdia ranjinder ji...... nd these lines are ultimate.......
tera husan bhii kyamat or jalwa bhi
or us pe bhii kyamat, be-naqab ho tum.
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6th July 2010, 09:13 AM
Radhay Radhay ishq ji
bahut bahut shukria.
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6th July 2010, 09:15 AM
Ghayal sahib
namaskaar
daad k liay bahut bahut shukria.
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6th July 2010, 09:20 AM
originaly posted by janumanu
bahut achi gahzal pesh ki hia aapne, pahli baar baar padha shayed aapko,
humesha aapko padht hi dekha tha, likhte pahli baar, aur aapne itni masoom se khayal pesh kiya acha laga
ye wala bahut acha laga ... ghumaavdaar khyaal, mazaa aayaa
ooper neechay ander bahar hii nahi
meray dil meiN bhii basay janaab ho tum.
Janumanu ji,
namaskaar
meray liay yehi bahut badi baat hai k aap ki nazar meray ooper padi.
rachna ko padna or pasand kar k daad dena,meray liay bahut khushi ki baat hai.
thank you very much
bas isi trah khyal rakhtay rehay.
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7th July 2010, 03:07 PM
bhot acha likha hai aapne kuch or kamal dekhne ka intzaar rehega
jo muje acha lga vo sher ye hai
Saari mehfil ne kaha,lajwaab ho tum
meri nazroN ne kaha sabka jwaab ho tum.
ab reply kar raha hu to sher to bolna hi padega to pesh-e-khidmat hai
main sach kahunga or haar jaunga
vo jhut bolegi or lazwaab kahlayegi,
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10th July 2010, 10:05 AM
Bahut umdaa khayal pesh kiye hai aapne......Rajinder Ji ! bahut khoob ! dil se daad hazir hai...khush rahen....
apna khayal rakhen...
duaaon ke saath....
YuuN Besabab Aansoo Aate NahiN
Lag Zaroor Koii Baat Dil Ko Rahii Hai ...
Fareb Kaa ChaDhtaa Bazaar Dekh
Insaaf Se Bastii Khaalii Ho Rahii Hai ...
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13th July 2010, 02:47 AM
Seep sahab AadaaB!
Aapko is bazm meiN dekhkar bahut khushi mehsus huyi........ aapki koshish bahut achchi rahi ....... khayaal bhi bahut achche rahe..... mehboob ki shaan meiN kahna bahut mushkil kaam hai.... aur aapne bahut khoob kaha hai aapke tajurbe ki kuch ek baateN maiN bhi apne ilm meiN darj kar raha huN........
Kuch ek lafz kamzor lage mujhe maiN koshish kar raha huN ke kuch alag lafz wahaN bitha sakuN agar aapko pasand aaye to thanks kahiyeNga..... aur pasand nahi aaye to maiN apni koshish dobara karne ki koshish karuNga......
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Originally Posted by rajinderseep
sdc k sabhii members ko namaskaar.dosto aap sab ki khidmat meiN pesh ek or rachna.kaisi lagi jaroor likhiayga.thanks
Jee zaroor........
Saari mehfil ne kaha,lajwaab ho tum
meri nazroN ne kaha sabka jwaab ho tum.
Kya baat hai seep sahab mere Ilm meiN le liya hai ise bahut khoob ...... daad....
ooper neechay ander bahar hii nahi
meray dil meiN bhii basay janaab ho tum.
is sher ki first line ko maiN aisa kahna chahuNga agar aapko pasand aye to meri khushnaseebi....
Meri nigaahoN ke takhoN meiN hi nahi
Mere Dil meiN bhi base janaab ho tum
suraj chanda or sitaray heiN sab hisaab meiN
teri babat kya kahuN,be-hisab ho tum.
hmmm yeh sher bhi khoob hai per secound line meiN babat word kamzor lag raha hai.......
suraj chanda or sitaray heiN sab hisaab meiN
teri tariff kya kahuN,be-hisab ho tum.
tera husan bhii kyamat or jalwa bhi
or us pe bhii kyamat, be-naqab ho tum.
Kya baat hai sahab dil ko cheerta bhi gaya per bahut gehre ahsaas se.... bahut khoob thoda lafzon ko guma raha huN......
Tera husn qayamat hai aur jalwa bhi
or us pe bhi qayamat be-naqaab ho tum
dekhtay hii tujhay "seep" kehnay laga
dhoondta tha jisay vohi khwab ho tum.
Wah................ Ek haseeN khawaab ka end ho gaya bahut khoob....
rajinderseep
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Aise hi likhate rahiye........ janab aur khush rahiye........
Agar meri koi baat galat lagi ho aap be jhijhak mujh per iteraaz kar sakte hai ........
Apna khayaal rakhiye.......
Khuda Hafez........
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15th July 2010, 08:59 PM
Pawan ji bahut bahut shukria bas yuNhi saath banay rakhay.thanks
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15th July 2010, 09:00 PM
Naresh bhai sahib ji bahut bahut shukria.bas yuNhi khyal rakhay.
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15th July 2010, 09:14 PM
originally posted by kwahish ji
Seep sahab AadaaB!
Aapko is bazm meiN dekhkar bahut khushi mehsus huyi........ aapki koshish bahut achchi rahi ....... khayaal bhi bahut achche rahe..... mehboob ki shaan meiN kahna bahut mushkil kaam hai.... aur aapne bahut khoob kaha hai aapke tajurbe ki kuch ek baateN maiN bhi apne ilm meiN darj kar raha huN........
Kuch ek lafz kamzor lage mujhe maiN koshish kar raha huN ke kuch alag lafz wahaN bitha sakuN agar aapko pasand aaye to thanks kahiyeNga..... aur pasand nahi aaye to maiN apni koshish dobara karne ki koshish karuNga......
Quote:
Originally Posted by rajinderseep
sdc k sabhii members ko namaskaar.dosto aap sab ki khidmat meiN pesh ek or rachna.kaisi lagi jaroor likhiayga.thanks
Jee zaroor........
Saari mehfil ne kaha,lajwaab ho tum
meri nazroN ne kaha sabka jwaab ho tum.
Kya baat hai seep sahab mere Ilm meiN le liya hai ise bahut khoob ...... daad....
ooper neechay ander bahar hii nahi
meray dil meiN bhii basay janaab ho tum.
is sher ki first line ko maiN aisa kahna chahuNga agar aapko pasand aye to meri khushnaseebi....
Meri nigaahoN ke takhoN meiN hi nahi
Mere Dil meiN bhi base janaab ho tum
suraj chanda or sitaray heiN sab hisaab meiN
teri babat kya kahuN,be-hisab ho tum.
hmmm yeh sher bhi khoob hai per secound line meiN babat word kamzor lag raha hai.......
suraj chanda or sitaray heiN sab hisaab meiN
teri tariff kya kahuN,be-hisab ho tum.
tera husan bhii kyamat or jalwa bhi
or us pe bhii kyamat, be-naqab ho tum.
Kya baat hai sahab dil ko cheerta bhi gaya per bahut gehre ahsaas se.... bahut khoob thoda lafzon ko guma raha huN......
Tera husn qayamat hai aur jalwa bhi
or us pe bhi qayamat be-naqaab ho tum
dekhtay hii tujhay "seep" kehnay laga
dhoondta tha jisay vohi khwab ho tum.
Wah................ Ek haseeN khawaab ka end ho gaya bahut khoob....
rajinderseep
Aise hi likhate rahiye........ janab aur khush rahiye........
Agar meri koi baat galat lagi ho aap be jhijhak mujh per iteraaz kar sakte hai ........
Apna khayaal rakhiye.......
Khuda Hafez........
Kwahish ( An Incomplite Dream )
Jaldbazi mein koi faisla mat karna...
Khushi mein koi wadaa mat karna...
kwahish ji bahut bahut shukria.mujhay is baat ki bahut khushi hui k aap ne isay itnay gor se padha.or apne rang me dhalne ki koshish ki.mujhay aap ka style ya yuN kahiay k thoda shabdoN ka badlaav bhi pasand aaya.ismay koi etraaz wali baat nahi hoti hai jab koi bhi writter ya shayer kisi bhi baat ko likhta hai ya zahir karta hai to usme uska apna andaze vyaN shamil hota hai ya har kisi ka apna apna shabadkosh hota hai or usi k hisab se likhta hai.zahir c baat hai k aap ka shabad kosh mujhse adhik hai.mujhay aap k is sujhav se koi etraaz nahi balki khushi hai.aagay bhi maiN chahuNga ka aap yuN hi baareeki se meri kavitaoN ko padheiN or apna khyal zahir kareiN.
thanks again
regards
rajinderseep
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15th July 2010, 09:17 PM
originally posted by loveleen
bahut bdia ranjinder ji...... nd these lines are ultimate.......
tera husan bhii kyamat or jalwa bhi
or us pe bhii kyamat, be-naqab ho tum.
Loveleen ji bahut bahut shukria
apna khyal rakheiN
rajinderseep
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15th July 2010, 09:44 PM
Quote:
Originally Posted by rajinderseep
sdc k sabhii members ko namaskaar.dosto aap sab ki khidmat meiN pesh ek or rachna.kaisi lagi jaroor likhiayga.thanks
Saari mehfil ne kaha,lajwaab ho tum
meri nazroN ne kaha sabka jwaab ho tum.
ooper neechay ander bahar hii nahi
meray dil meiN bhii basay janaab ho tum.
suraj chanda or sitaray heiN sab hisaab meiN
teri babat kya kahuN,be-hisab ho tum.
tera husan bhii kyamat or jalwa bhi
or us pe bhii kyamat, be-naqab ho tum.
dekhtay hii tujhay "seep" kehnay laga
dhoondta tha jisay vohi khwab ho tum.
rajinderseep
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' Seep ' se ek anmol moti nikaal kar pesh kiyaa hai aapne, Rajinder Ji...! Bahut accha lagaa...! Dil se daad kabool karein...!
Apna khayaal rakheiN, ok...?
Duaaon ke saath
Jeene ke liye mujhe ek sapna dedo
Haqeekat meri jaaN liye jaa rahi hai
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20th July 2010, 09:05 PM
originally posted by mushkil ji
uote:
Originally Posted by rajinderseep
sdc k sabhii members ko namaskaar.dosto aap sab ki khidmat meiN pesh ek or rachna.kaisi lagi jaroor likhiayga.thanks
Saari mehfil ne kaha,lajwaab ho tum
meri nazroN ne kaha sabka jwaab ho tum.
ooper neechay ander bahar hii nahi
meray dil meiN bhii basay janaab ho tum.
suraj chanda or sitaray heiN sab hisaab meiN
teri babat kya kahuN,be-hisab ho tum.
tera husan bhii kyamat or jalwa bhi
or us pe bhii kyamat, be-naqab ho tum.
dekhtay hii tujhay "seep" kehnay laga
dhoondta tha jisay vohi khwab ho tum.
rajinderseep
' Seep ' se ek anmol moti nikaal kar pesh kiyaa hai aapne, Rajinder Ji...! Bahut accha lagaa...! Dil se daad kabool karein...!
Apna khayaal rakheiN, ok...?
Duaaon ke saath
Meray bhai mushkil ji
bahut bahut shukria k aap ne isay tareef k laaek samjha.meray liay is se badh kar kya khushi ho sakti hai.
bas apna duaoN bhara haath or saath banay rakheiN.
aap ka apna
rajinderseep
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