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18th September 2006, 05:57 PM
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aadaab arz hai:- aaj phir meiN aap sab ke Khidmat meiN haazir ho rahaa hooN.. aik gairmuraddif Ghazal peSh hai .. jis ki farmaa'iSh aap meiN se to kisi ne bhi naheeN kii, par apni hii farmaa'iSh par peSh kar rahaa huuN ..  vaazeh ho k is Ghazal kee "Zameen" jis par maine 'Khast kaari'kee hai, 'janaab-e-jigar mooradaabaadi Saahib' ki hai... yeH Ghazal aap sab kee nazar karta huuN.. (maine ess Ghazal se apna taKhallus 'Ghaafil' istemaal kiya hai) tau, leejiye, Ghazal haazir hai.. aap agar ise dheeme dheeme gungunaa kar paRheN to kyaa baat ho! ************************************************ Matla arz hai:- 'kahaaN tak kisi par sitam dhhaaiyegaa' sitam dhaaieyega tau pachtaaieyegaa  na dil apna yuuN aap taRpaaiyegaa Khataa gar ho ham se tau samajhaaiyegaa  yeH Sher deKhiye:- agar baat naa ban sake muskuraa kar tau aShkoN se daaman bhigo laaiyegaa  haiN dar par tumhaare sadaa dast_basta jo ho hukm sarkaar farmaaiyegaa  (dast_basta: hands folded . haath joRe) Khilona jo samjhaa, bane ham Khilona KhilonoN se kya dil ko behlaaiyega.  bagaawat, adaavat, jafaa aur zulmat muHabbat meiN kya raNg diKhlaaiyega  bhulaane kee koShiSh kareiN ess tarah kee jo bhoole haiN ham ab, na yaad aaiyegaa  Gaur farmaaiye:- muHabbat hai dil meiN Shikaayat zabaaN par kareN kya ab izhaar farmaaiyegaa Maqta arz hai:- judaa ho ke :GHAFIL: nahiiN jee sakegaa agar jaaieyegaa tau laut aaiyegaa  (Ghaafil: Care less also taKhallus here) Khair-aNdesh - Mayank 'Ghaafil'[/b] |
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18th September 2006, 08:38 PM
mayank ji kaise ho aap
aapki peshkas bahot hi alag hoti hai yaar har bar ki tarha bhot achha laga ye peshkas padhke aap bahot hi umda likhte hai ummid haiage bhi aap kiumda peshkas hame un padhne ko milegi aapka dost dhaval |
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18th September 2006, 11:09 PM
ek bar phir tum ne ahsas dila diya ek tum kya ho bahut khoobsoorat kalam laye ho
aur sare sher lajawab hain par mujeh jo sab se zyada ahhe lage woh ye hain bahut khoob hain Anil na dil apna yuuN aap taRpaaiyegaa, Khataa gar ho ham se tau samajhaaiyegaa.. agar baat naa ban sake muskuraa kar, tau aShkoN se daaman bhigo laaiyegaa.. muHabbat hai dil meiN Shikaayat zabaaN par, kareN kya ab izhaar farmaaiyegaa.. judaa ho ke :GHAFIL: nahiiN jee sakegaa agar jaaieyegaa tau laut aaiyegaa.. kho gaye hain woh log ab un kee justzoo hai |
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Re: Ghazal:'kahaaN tak kisi par sitam dhhaaiyegaa', -
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Mayank saahab tasleemaat aapki Ghazal padhi aur bohat pasaNd bhi aayi.....tam'aam ash'aar achche haiN, meri mubarakbaad qabuul kijiye rab raakha maikash is tarhe teri yaad meiN har shaam dhaley hai goyaa koyi nagin si kalejey pe chaley hai maikash ............................... |
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19th September 2006, 01:52 PM
wah! wah! wah!
janab jitni tareef ki jaye kam hai....behad pasand aaya kalaam daad qabool kijiyega |
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Re: Ghazal:'kahaaN tak kisi par sitam dhhaaiyegaa', -
19th September 2006, 08:00 PM
Namaskar Ghaafil Ji
Socha jab aapne takhallus change kiya hay to ghaafil hi likhein....Aapki Yeh Ghazal bahut khoobsurat hay.....pichle baar to kuch mistakes dhuund payi thi par iss baar koyi mistake nahin dhuund payi...it's perfect.....itney khoobsurat Ghazal ke liye hamare daad aur mubarakbaad kabul kijeyega...'kahaaN tak kisi par sitam dhhaaiyegaa', sitam dhaaieyega tau pachtaaieyegaa.. judaa ho ke :GHAFIL: nahiiN jee sakegaa agar jaaieyegaa tau laut aaiyegaa.. Yeh donon sher bahut khoobsurat hain....yuunhi likhtey rahiye.... Sada kush rahiye |
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Re: Ghazal:'kahaaN tak kisi par sitam dhhaaiyegaa', -
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aadab arz hai aaj aapne ek aur behtreen kalam pesh kiya hai jiski jitni bhi tarif ki jaye kam hai......... aapke likhne ka tarika itna nayab hai ki ise padte huye esa laga ki kisi mushayre main shirkat ki ja rahi ho janab dil se daad kabool farmaiyega dilip  " Dilip " -Ek Adhoora khwab Dard bantne se ab darr lagta hai mere gamo ka usnane falsafa bana diya |
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20th September 2006, 12:44 PM
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Jaan kar behad Khushi huii kee har baar kee taarh aap ko hamaari yeh peShkaSh pasand aaii.. aur jab aap ko ham par ummeed hai tau uss par kaamyaab hone kee zaroor koShiSh kareNge.. YuuN hee aap aate raheN.. -Ghafil[/color] |
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Namsakaar, zarra navaazi ke liye Khaaksaar aap ka Shukr-guzaar hai.. aap ne beShtar Sher pasand kiye haiN aur aur jis aNdaaz se aap ne ise saraaha hai, us se meri be-had hausila-afzaa'ii hu'i hai. bohat bohat ShukriYa.. Khair-andeSh - Mayank'Ghafil'[/color] |
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Re: Re: Ghazal:'kahaaN tak kisi par sitam dhhaaiyegaa', -
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PurKkhuloos Tasleemaat Ghazal ki pasaNdeedagii ke liye sar-aa-paa mamnoon huuN... huzoor, chuuN kee aap Khud ek kuhna-mashq Shaa'ir haiN, is liye aap ki daad-o-mubaarak baad Khaaksaar ke liye be-had hausala-afzaa'i hai. aap ki navaaziSh ke liye aap ka bohat bohat Shukriya... Khair andeSh Mayank'Ghafil'[/color] |
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Re: Ghazal:'kahaaN tak kisi par sitam dhhaaiyegaa', -
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appke kalaam to hote hi badiya hain par yeh kalaam to kaya kahney, bahut hi badiya banna hain. majja aa gaya padkar. yu hi likhtey rahiye taki humey bi kuch seekhney ko milta rahey. take care aapki dost .....Sunita Thakur..... यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया ....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए... 
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20th September 2006, 08:07 PM
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aap ne jis daryaa-dilii se is Ghazal ki daad dii hai, us se mujhe be-intehaa khuShi huii hai..par kyaa yeh waaqe'i is qaabil hai ke is par musalsaal waah, waah ke naare buland kiye jaayeN? vaise, agar aap ko aisa hi mehsoos huaa hai to yeh mere liye be-intehaa'ii KhuShi aur fakr kee baat hai aur maiN, aap ki taraf se mili huii is hausala-afzaa'i ke liye, aap ka tah-e-dil se shukr-guzaar huuN.. yuuN hee bazm meiN sirkat karti raheN.. ess Ghazal ka ek Sher jo maine Ghazal meiN Shaamil nahiiN kiya, aap ko sunaata huuN... na puucheNge ham kaisi hai be-qaraari, kabhii tau hamaiN khud hi batlaaiyega.. Aji rooTh kar ab kahaaN jaaiyega.. jaate jaate ek baar phir se Shukriya adaa karna chaahuNga.. -Ghaafil[/color] |
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Re: Re: Ghazal:'kahaaN tak kisi par sitam dhhaaiyegaa', -
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Namsakaar, Aap jo bhee naam se pukaareN ham samjh hee jaayeNge, chaahe mayank, kaheN, chaahe Ghaafil ya chaahe kuchh aur Takhallus beShaq hamne badal liya hai, par haiN ham wahii.. Ghazal kee pasandag'i ke liye maiN aap ka Shukr-guzaar huuN.. Pichhle baar aap ne GhaltiyaaN dhunDh lee thee kyoN kee Ghazal ko ham ne bina pRhe hee post kar diya.. Chhote beh'r meiN tha tau kuchh excited thaa.. par socha kee ess baar kisii ko ko'i mauqa na diya jaaye, jis Geet ke bol par yeH ghazal hai. us ke bol yuuN hai 'Aji rooTh kar ab kahaaN jaa'iyega' par ham ne kuchh aur hee liKh diya hai.. Kuch ek Sher aur Khaas kar ke maqte ko pasand karne ke liye tah-e-dil se Shukriya.. Ham beShaq yuuN hee liKhate raheNge ba-Sharte aap paRhti raheN-Mayank[/color] |
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21st September 2006, 08:11 AM
Aji ruuthkar ab kahaan jaayiegaa...
jahaan jaayiegaa hamein paayiegaa one of my favorite songs...lol...ispe likha na tumne? Bahut achhe...i sang instead of reading it...aur bahut bahut mazzaa aaya...tumhari yeh tehreer padhkar... hain ‘gaafil’ andaaz tumhare niraale yaqeenan dilon se yuun takraayiga Daad kabuul farmaayiegaa!! gayi ruton ka sulagataa sa intezaar bhii ho mere khuloos kaa andaaz ye bhii sachhaa hai rakhuun na rabt magar dostii shumaar bhii ho --Sayyidaa Fatimaa Hasan |
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21st September 2006, 04:09 PM
bhai sahab is GAFIl se to pehli mulakat hui hai humari. waise ye hai kaun??
janaab aapne aaj kal radeef se lagta hai faasla hi bana liya hai,kyun? ghazal kaafi ahchi thi bade bhai sirf laga jyada badi ho gayi hai.waise kehne ka haq to nahi par haan aisa laga jaroor.umeed karta hun ki aap aage v yunhi mehfilen sajate rahenge.hum jaise naadaano ke seekhne ke liye. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ http://alfaaz-e-taish.blogspot.in/ Ishq hota tha, ishq karte haiN, Vo zamana tha, ye zamana hai... ----Taish ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ |
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27th October 2006, 07:41 PM
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Dilip Saahib: maiN aap ka be-had sHukr guzaar huuN ki aap ne meri is Chhoti si koShiSh ko na sirf paRhaa bal-ki ise saraahaa bhi!!! aur jis dariya-dilii se aap ne is ki taareef ki hai, us ne to mujhe laa-jaavaab kar ke rakh diyaa hai. ab sivaaye is ke maiN aap ka hazaar baar shukriya adaa karooN aur kyaa kar sakta huuN? to, leejiye, hazaar baar shukriya qubool keejiye.. -Mayank |
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28th October 2006, 06:38 PM
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Waah mayank saheb......naam se kai baar mukalta sa lag jata hai janaab.....id kambakhat hamre demaag se kyuiN nikalta hai......bahoot hi sunder kalaam.....bahoot gehra sochte ho...... bhulaane kee koShiSh kareiN ess tarah kee, jo bhoole haiN ham ab, na yaad aaiyegaa......choo jata hai dil ko..... Ek ek asharka lutf demaag ne uthhaya hai shayad aapko in asharoN ne khud azmaya hai Bahoot khoob dost Harash |
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janaab myank saab appko raj ka namaskaar....appki peshkash wakiya hee bhut dilkash hai.....har share apni kahani kghud byaan kar raha hai....meri dil se daad kabool kijiyega.....yu hee mehfil ko mehkaye rakhiyega......take care......raj..... ab mujhe bewafa kahiye ya bawafa kahiye...(Raj) |
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30th October 2006, 11:32 AM
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Namaskaar, Behad Shukriya ki aap ki meri yeH ghazal bhiiiiii pasand aaii.... haalaaki mujeh ummeed thaa ki yeH ghazal shaayad hii kisii ko pasand aaye.. bahut bahut shukriya aap ka kii aap ne, hamesha ki tarah, aaj bhi hausila--afza'ii ki hai.. maiN apna naya kalaam aap ko zaroor sunaauNga gar kuchh liKh paaya to.. Take careMayank |
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30th October 2006, 11:46 AM
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Namaste: Jawaab meiN taaKheer ke liye ma'azrat-Khwaah huuN aur aap ka mamnoon-o-mutaShakkir huuN ki aap ko yeH Ghazal ess qadar pasand aaii hai.. HaaN jii, aap ne duruust farmaaya hai yeH Ghazal usi Ghazal ke bol par liKhi huii hai.. Aur Ghazal ko paRhne ki bajuz agar gaaya jaaye to Ghazal bhi Ghazak sa mazaa milta hai... zah e qismat ke aap ne mere ess Ghazal ko paRh kar mujhe par ek Sher farmaaya... ab aap hi bataayeN kii, mujh jaise Khaak-nisheeN ke liye is se baRi mubaarak baad Kya ho sakti hai.. ess bahrpoor daad ke liye, aap ka bharpoor Shukriya azeeza.. qubool farmaayeN... Mayank |
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Namaskaar, "ghaafil" ko samajhna itna aasaan nahiiN hai lucky thoRa sa waqt lagega samjhne meiN, jab samajh jaaoge tab aage aur nahiiN puuchhoge ki yeH ghaafil saahab kauN haiN Ghazal ko pasand kiya tum ne ess ke liye maiN aap ka Shukr-guzaar huuN.. aur rahii baat lambaa'ii kii to yeH nahiiN lagta ki lambaa'ii zeyaadah hai... Khayaal aate rahe aur maiN liKhata gaya.. lambaa;i parr dhyaan nahiiN gaya.. Mayank |
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HarSh Bhaa'ii , Namaste: Ab naam meiN kya raKkha hai , Jis naam se bhi pukaar leN banda ye samajh jaayegaa.. maiN aap ka be-had sHukr guzaar huuN ki aap ne meri is chhoti si koShiSh ko na sirf paRhaa bal-ki ise saraahaa bhi... aur jis dariya-dilii se aap ne ess ki taareef ki hai, us ne to mujhe laa-jaavaab kar ke rakh diyaa hai. Ek ek asharka lutf demaag ne uthhaya hai shayad aapko in asharoN ne khud azmaya hai hoti hai yahaaN azmaaiSheN kuchh ess qadar diloN ki, puuche jaate haiN sawaal, jinka jawaab nahiiN hota, [Mayank] navaazish hai aap ki, ba-raah-e-karam, agar aap isi tarah se hausilaa-afzaa'ii karte raheN ge to khaaksaar yuuN hi liKhata rahegaa.. Shukriya.. Mayank |
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31st October 2006, 04:41 PM
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Rajveer jee, Namaskaar: Aap ne meri ghazal ko qaabil-e-taareef samjhaa uske liye aap kaa bahut shukriyaa. aap ka bohat Shukriyaa kii aapne apna waqt nikaal kar meri ghazal par reply liKhe aur ise saraahaa bhii. ummiid hai aaindaH bhi aap se baateN hoti raheNgii. yuuN hi aate raheN… Mayank |
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Aap ne Ghazal ko qaabil-e-taariif samjha yeh jaan kar behad Khushi huii.. aap ka Shukriya jo aap ne waqt nikal kar apni raa’ey zaahir ki.. ummeed hai yuuN hi aati raheNgii… Take care.. Mayank |
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10th September 2008, 06:04 PM
mayank bhai !
badii dil fareb ghazal likhi hai ! kuch ashaar to jaise nashtar ki maanind siine meiN utar gaye ! 'kahaaN tak kisi par sitam dhhaaiyegaa' sitam dhaaieyega tau pachtaaieyegaa *bhai kahiN naa kahiN to zulm o sitam kaa hisaab kitaab hona hi hai unke kadam nishaan ban ke unke piche to rah hi jayenge ! agar baat naa ban sake muskuraa kar, tau aShkoN se daaman bhigo laaiyegaa.. *rag pakad li aapne bewafa sanam kii ,jab unke muskuraane kaa asar khatam ho jata hai to aasuoN ke zariye bevkuuf banaane kaa kaam karte haiN ! bhulaane kee koShiSh kareiN ess tarah kee, jo bhoole haiN ham ab, na yaad aaiyegaa.. *bilkul bajaa farmayaa kisii ko roz bhulana aur bhulaa ke fir wapis bulana aur fir bhulaane se to behtar hai ki usse hamesha ke liye bhulaa diya jaaye ! judaa ho ke :GHAFIL: nahiiN jee sakegaa agar jaaieyegaa tau laut aaiyegaa.. isske liye maiN kya jawaab likhuN saiib ye to laa jawaab hai ! mujhe ghazal ka har ashaar har misra bharpoor pasand aaya ! yakiinan aapne apne juzbaatoN ko ek mukammal shakal aikhtiyaar dii ! meri taraf se iss koshish e kadR par mubaaraQbaad ..aur daad Qabool farmaayeiN ! abhi ijaazat dijiye apnaa khyaal rakhiye ! |
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23rd January 2009, 06:33 PM
Mayank Ji
Namaskaar Fursat ke samay mein aapki yeh ghazal saamne aayi jisse parhna sukhad raha. Bahaut hee bareeki se shabdon ka sambodhan kiya hai aapne. aabhaar vipin 
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25th January 2009, 08:15 PM
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aadaab Kshitiz bhai, meri is Ghazal ko pasand farmaane ke liye aap ka bohat bohat shukriya. aap ki hausila-afzaaii mere liye bohat maani rakhti hai... aur jis andaaz se aap ne is Ghazal ki daad di hai, sach kahuu.n to mera 5 ser Khoon baDh gayaa hai aur seena bhi chauDa ho gaya hai.. aur jab aap jaise daad dene waale ho.n to koii Ghazal kyun na likhe.n........waise bhai, aap ne jis andaaz se mujhe daad diya hai, us ne mujhe la-jawaab kar kar ke chhoDh diya hai... aur mujhe baar baar sochane me.n majbuur kar raha hai ki 'kyaa waqaii Ghazal itni behtar hai jo aap is tarah daad de rahe hai.n.' lekin aap ko lagta hai to, ho sakta hai aap ki daad-o-mubaaraq baad sar aa.nkho.n pat.. yuu.n hi aage bhi hausila afzaaii karte rahe.n... tah-e-dil se shukriyah! Mayank |
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26th January 2009, 12:45 PM
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namaskaar! kaise hai.n aap? aur khaa.n gaayab hai.n. aap ko yahaan dekh kar khushi huii.. aur ab aap ayae hai.n to yuu.n hi aate rahe.n.... aap ne is dabi huii Ghazal ko phir se nikaal kat paDha jaan kar bhead khushii huii........Ghazal ki pasandeegi ke liye bhi main aap ka shukr-guzaar huu.n... yuu.n hi aate rahe.n Mayank |
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22nd February 2009, 12:58 PM
mayank ji
apko daad dene ke liye hamare pass lafz to nahi hain per itna jaroor kehna chahoongi ki aapka her lafz dil ko choo leta hai.kabhi lagta hai ke kisi derd ki baat ho rahi hai to kabhi halki si shararat to kabhi pyar ki gehrai...ek hi gazalme jab itne sare roop dekhney aur parhney ko miley to hamare pas daad dene ke liye lagzo ki kami hona munasib hai... yun hi likhtey rahiye..duaon ke sath.... |
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26th February 2009, 09:40 PM
agar baat naa ban sake muskuraa kar,
tau aShkoN se daaman bhigo laaiyegaa.. muHabbat hai dil meiN Shikaayat zabaaN par, kareN kya ab izhaar farmaaiyegaa.. bohat acha likha hai aapne mayank ji wesay to poori ghazal achi hai magar ye do ashaar behad pasand aye likhte rahiyega apne ander se pash pash hoon main zaaat hai aetbaar e zaaat nahin ab to main khud bhi apne saath nahin |
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27th February 2009, 03:53 PM
bahot khub mayank ji, bahot hi khubsurat gazal hai, yun hi sunate rahe, take care bye
koi doulat chahe to koi shaan chahe, hum to jindagi ke sataye huwe hai, ‘Eliyas’ to khudase do gaaz zameen aur kafan chahe - ELIYAS SHAIKH |
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8th July 2009, 02:09 PM
Bohat khoobsurat ghazal hai mayank jii.........Lagta hai kisi ke judaai ke gham me likhi gayi hai yeh ghazal.........
.......Saare sher bohat acche haiN........ummeed hai aapki aor se jald hi kuch naya padhne ko milega........... yuhi likhte rahiye khush rahiye.................. .........Zainy PalkoN ki baand ko tod ke daaman pe aa gira Ek aaNsu mere zabt ki tauheen kar gaya... Nm |
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8th July 2009, 02:28 PM
Bohat khoob Ghafil saheb.........
Par tujhe bevafa bhi kehna achcha nahi lagta... Mob.: +971 501297654
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9th July 2009, 05:37 PM
Good Shayari Keep It Up................................
अपनी शर्तो पर जी रहा हूँ आज , अब तेरी शर्तो की फ़िक्र नही............ Visit my blog- http://supershayari.blogspot.com |
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10th July 2009, 11:32 AM
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bhulaane kee koShiSh kareiN ess tarah kee jo bhoole haiN ham ab, na yaad aaiyegaa sabhi sher pasand aaye..khaas kar is sher par meri daad kubool kijiye Aapka Tanha _dil Duniya mein dard-e-dil ki dawa hoti to pee gaye hote Zindagi itni aasaan hoti .....to jee gaye hote. |
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