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!yahaaN bhee dil ujhaaR hai wahaaN bhee taar-taar hai! - 15th April 2009, 05:25 PM

salaam dostoN!
baRe dinoN baad kuchh tabiyat huee to ek ghazal kahee hai! mulaaizaa farmaayiye aur apnee beshqeemat raai ataa keejiye.

shukriyaa!


yahaaN bhee dil ujhaaR hai wahaaN bhee taar-taar hai,
to kaun uRaa gayaa khabar keh mausam e bahaar hai!

fareb aur jhooTh kaa chhapaa ik ishtehaar hai!
"koee bhee khaaksaar, raatoN-raat saahukaar hai!"

hayaat tere maikade meN ek hee sharaab hai,
ise bhee dard kaa nashaa use bhee gham kee maar hai!

waheeN jahaaN thee ibitadaa, safar kee intehaa bhee hai,
nazar kaa her-pher hai, go ek hee nigaar* hai!

nigaar = statue(moortee)

yeh hichkiyaaN haiN besabab yah koee waj'h khaas hai,
"mire liye bhi kyaa koee udaas beqaraar hai!" - shehryaar

haNsee ke mu'aamle meN ho gaye haiN sab qifaayatee!
tijoriyoN ke jewaroN meN iskaa bhee shumaar hai!

nafe kee waj'h aap the, ziyaaN badaulat e khudaa?
ab aap hee bataayiye bhalaa yeh kyaa mayaar hai?

jo zindagee kee dauR dhoop meN nah bhoolaa raam-naam,
hayaat ke bhaNwar meN ek usee kaa beRaa paar hai!

nah itnaa ehtiyaat e guftgoo barat keh yuN lage,
"nah 'dheer' der tak Thahar yeh ghair kaa dayaar hai!"


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18th April 2009, 12:56 PM

Dheer bhaiya:

namaste!

kaise haiN aap?

aapka aNdaaz-e-bayaa.n haMeShaa ki tarah laa-jawaab rahaa! aur Ghazal ke aSh'aar dil-fareb raheN !
waah waah!
yeh Sher bahot Khuub rahaa!
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YuuNhi liKhate raheN ... bazm ki raunaQ baRhaate raheN! aapko paRh ke KhuShii hu'ii! daad hi daad!

KhuSh raheN... apnaa Khayaal raKheN

duaaoN ke saath ijaazat

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wah ! wah ! wah !

kiyaa kehne , be-adab zubaan se nikle kuch shabdoN ki daad qabool fermaaieN , behtreen ghazal per meri janib se daad qabool fermaaieN , app likhte to bahut acha hai aur saath saath app ki sooch bhi meHdood nahieN hai , maalik e do jahaN app ko aur taraQi daiN .



sahukaar lafz meri smajh meN nahieN aaya , doosra dheer bhai aik aur baat bhi poochni thi , maiN ne aik jagah peRhaa tha lafz " diyaar " aur app ne likha "dayaar" lafz ba-maani aik hi hai ... ab poochna yeh hai keh saHeeh lafz kyaa hai ? diyaar ya dayaar


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Dheer bhaiya:

namaste!

kaise haiN aap?

aapka aNdaaz-e-bayaa.n haMeShaa ki tarah laa-jawaab rahaa! aur Ghazal ke aSh'aar dil-fareb raheN !
waah waah!
yeh Sher bahot Khuub rahaa!

YuuNhi liKhate raheN ... bazm ki raunaQ baRhaate raheN! aapko paRh ke KhuShii hu'ii! daad hi daad!

KhuSh raheN... apnaa Khayaal raKheN

duaaoN ke saath ijaazat

aapka

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shukriyaa Dhaval bhaai!
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wah ! wah ! wah !

kiyaa kehne , be-adab zubaan se nikle kuch shabdoN ki daad qabool fermaaieN , behtreen ghazal per meri janib se daad qabool fermaaieN , app likhte to bahut acha hai aur saath saath app ki sooch bhi meHdood nahieN hai , maalik e do jahaN app ko aur taraQi daiN .



sahukaar lafz meri smajh meN nahieN aaya , doosra dheer bhai aik aur baat bhi poochni thi , maiN ne aik jagah peRhaa tha lafz " diyaar " aur app ne likha "dayaar" lafz ba-maani aik hi hai ... ab poochna yeh hai keh saHeeh lafz kyaa hai ? diyaar ya dayaar


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bhaai ghazal par aapkee daad ke liye mamnoon o mashkoor huN. filhaal to yuN hai keh aanan-faanan meN kahee gayee yeh kaavish meN 2-1 sher ke ilaavaa saare hee behtaree chaahte haiN. albatta Sarwar saHeb ko ghazal "pasand" naheeN aayee.
bah'rhaal lafz e saahukaar to aam hai. saahukaar yaane saHib e zar jo paise ke len-den kaa kaam kartaa hai.
lafz e diyaar - ko dayaar bhee likh dete hai kabhee kabhee. saHeeH talaffuz ke liye dictionary dekhnee paRegee. kyoN'k aam taur par asaatijah ne donoN hee sooratoN ko baandhaa hai.
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Dheer S'hab,

Bahot acha kaha hai apne...aapke ehsaas pasand aaye...yeh kuch sher mujhe behad ache lage:

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salaam dostoN!
baRe dinoN baad kuchh tabiyat huee to ek ghazal kahee hai! mulaaizaa farmaayiye aur apnee beshqeemat raai ataa keejiye.

shukriyaa!


yahaaN bhee dil ujhaaR hai wahaaN bhee taar-taar hai,
to kaun uRaa gayaa khabar keh mausam e bahaar hai!

hayaat tere maikade meN ek hee sharaab hai,
ise bhee dard kaa nashaa use bhee gham kee maar hai!

yeh hichkiyaaN haiN besabab yah koee waj'h khaas hai,
"mire liye bhi kyaa koee udaas beqaraar hai!" - shehryaar

yunhi likhte rahiye ...khush rahiye..

God bless,

Pradhyuman


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Dheer ji wakai bht hi umda ghazal hai, ekdum flawless, kya lafz istemaal kiye haiN 'MASHA ALLAH' har sher mukammal aur apne aap mei bemisaal hai.....mujhe kuch sher bht zada pasand ayi.....

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fareb aur jhooTh kaa chhapaa ik ishtehaar hai!
"koee bhee khaaksaar, raatoN-raat saahukaar hai!"

hayaat tere maikade meN ek hee sharaab hai,
ise bhee dard kaa nashaa use bhee gham kee maar hai!

yeh hichkiyaaN haiN besabab yah koee waj'h khaas hai,
"mire liye bhi kyaa koee udaas beqaraar hai!" - shehryaar
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wwowww..............wakai bahot acha laga padhkar, aur kuch new words bhi mile mujhse sikhne ke liye..... thanks brother


aapki tareef mere bas ki baat nai hai, muaf kijiyega..........


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Dheer S'hab,

Bahot acha kaha hai apne...aapke ehsaas pasand aaye...yeh kuch sher mujhe behad ache lage:



yunhi likhte rahiye ...khush rahiye..

God bless,

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himmat_afzaayi ke liye behad mamnoon huN!

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Dheer ji wakai bht hi umda ghazal hai, ekdum flawless, kya lafz istemaal kiye haiN 'MASHA ALLAH' har sher mukammal aur apne aap mei bemisaal hai.....mujhe kuch sher bht zada pasand ayi.....



YuNhi likhte rahiye.........
bahut bahut shukriyaa !

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wwowww..............wakai bahot acha laga padhkar, aur kuch new words bhi mile mujhse sikhne ke liye..... thanks brother


aapki tareef mere bas ki baat nai hai, muaf kijiyega..........
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Dheer jii Aadab!

Aapki Gazal padi aur behisab khayalon me kho gaya, Kya likha hai aapne tarif ke
liye alfaz bhi nahi chhode, Kai baar maine aapki Gazal padhi per reply nahi de paya.

Bahut hi umda aur behad nirale ahsason se layes is gazal ki tarif mai mere alfaz sath nahi de rahe hai.

Dil se daad nikli hai kabool kijiye.
Aur yunhi likhte rahiye,

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Dheer jii Aadab!

Aapki Gazal padi aur behisab khayalon me kho gaya, Kya likha hai aapne tarif ke
liye alfaz bhi nahi chhode, Kai baar maine aapki Gazal padhi per reply nahi de paya.

Bahut hi umda aur behad nirale ahsason se layes is gazal ki tarif mai mere alfaz sath nahi de rahe hai.

Dil se daad nikli hai kabool kijiye.
Aur yunhi likhte rahiye,

Khush rahiye,
aapkee muhabbat hai saHeb!! aur kuchh naheeN! aapkee daad sar aaNkhoN par!
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salaam dostoN!
baRe dinoN baad kuchh tabiyat huee to ek ghazal kahee hai! mulaaizaa farmaayiye aur apnee beshqeemat raai ataa keejiye.

shukriyaa!

yahaaN bhee dil ujhaaR hai wahaaN bhee taar-taar hai,
to kaun uRaa gayaa khabar keh mausam e bahaar hai!

fareb aur jhooTh kaa chhapaa ik ishtehaar hai!
"koee bhee khaaksaar, raatoN-raat saahukaar hai!"

hayaat tere maikade meN ek hee sharaab hai,
ise bhee dard kaa nashaa use bhee gham kee maar hai!

waheeN jahaaN thee ibitadaa, safar kee intehaa bhee hai,
nazar kaa her-pher hai, go ek hee nigaar* hai!

nigaar = statue(moortee)

yeh hichkiyaaN haiN besabab yah koee waj'h khaas hai,
"mire liye bhi kyaa koee udaas beqaraar hai!" - shehryaar

haNsee ke mu'aamle meN ho gaye haiN sab qifaayatee!
tijoriyoN ke jewaroN meN iskaa bhee shumaar hai!

nafe kee waj'h aap the, ziyaaN badaulat e khudaa?
ab aap hee bataayiye bhalaa yeh kyaa mayaar hai?

jo zindagee kee dauR dhoop meN nah bhoolaa raam-naam,
hayaat ke bhaNwar meN ek usee kaa beRaa paar hai!

nah itnaa ehtiyaat e guftgoo barat keh yuN lage,
"nah 'dheer' der tak Thahar yeh ghair kaa dayaar hai!"

very nice dheer keep writing more and more for all of us...........

yeh hichkiyaaN haiN besabab yah koee waj'h khaas hai,
"mire liye bhi kyaa koee udaas beqaraar hai!" - shehryaar


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very nice dheer keep writing more and more for all of us...........

yeh hichkiyaaN haiN besabab yah koee waj'h khaas hai,
"mire liye bhi kyaa koee udaas beqaraar hai!" - shehryaar
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dheer sahib ,

ghazal beshaQ Qabil e tareef hai !

daad merii jaanib se bhi ...

yuN to kisi khaas sher ki tareef karna tauheen e ghazal hogii par maQtaa nihaytii khoobsoorat hai !

nah itnaa ehtiyaat e guftgoo barat keh yuN lage,
"nah 'dheer' der tak Thahar yeh ghair kaa dayaar hai!

zor e Qalam aur ziyada !


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dheer sahib ,

ghazal beshaQ Qabil e tareef hai !

daad merii jaanib se bhi ...

yuN to kisi khaas sher ki tareef karna tauheen e ghazal hogii par maQtaa nihaytii khoobsoorat hai !

nah itnaa ehtiyaat e guftgoo barat keh yuN lage,
"nah 'dheer' der tak Thahar yeh ghair kaa dayaar hai!

zor e Qalam aur ziyada !
kshitij bhaai!
namaste!
baRe dinoN baad nazar aaye. kaisaa chal rahaa hai aapkaa vaivaahik jeevan ? aapkee daad sar aaNkhoN par. yuN hee saath dete rahiyegaa.
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salaam dostoN!
baRe dinoN baad kuchh tabiyat huee to ek ghazal kahee hai! mulaaizaa farmaayiye aur apnee beshqeemat raai ataa keejiye.

shukriyaa!

yahaaN bhee dil ujhaaR hai wahaaN bhee taar-taar hai,
to kaun uRaa gayaa khabar keh mausam e bahaar hai!

fareb aur jhooTh kaa chhapaa ik ishtehaar hai!
"koee bhee khaaksaar, raatoN-raat saahukaar hai!"

hayaat tere maikade meN ek hee sharaab hai,
ise bhee dard kaa nashaa use bhee gham kee maar hai!

waheeN jahaaN thee ibitadaa, safar kee intehaa bhee hai,
nazar kaa her-pher hai, go ek hee nigaar* hai!

nigaar = statue(moortee)

yeh hichkiyaaN haiN besabab yah koee waj'h khaas hai,
"mire liye bhi kyaa koee udaas beqaraar hai!" - shehryaar

haNsee ke mu'aamle meN ho gaye haiN sab qifaayatee!
tijoriyoN ke jewaroN meN iskaa bhee shumaar hai!

nafe kee waj'h aap the, ziyaaN badaulat e khudaa?
ab aap hee bataayiye bhalaa yeh kyaa mayaar hai?

jo zindagee kee dauR dhoop meN nah bhoolaa raam-naam,
hayaat ke bhaNwar meN ek usee kaa beRaa paar hai!

nah itnaa ehtiyaat e guftgoo barat keh yuN lage,
"nah 'dheer' der tak Thahar yeh ghair kaa dayaar hai!"

Dheer bhai aadab

Ek bahot hi khoobsurat ghazal ke liye dili daad qubool farmayen...........................
waise aapki sabhi ghazlen bahot umda hoti hain aur apki mehnat saaf nazar aati hai.................
aise hi likhte rahiye aur mehfil ki raunaq badhate rahiye...........
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Dheer bhai aadab

Ek bahot hi khoobsurat ghazal ke liye dili daad qubool farmayen...........................
waise aapki sabhi ghazlen bahot umda hoti hain aur apki mehnat saaf nazar aati hai.................
aise hi likhte rahiye aur mehfil ki raunaq badhate rahiye...........
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Hoslaa-afzaayee aur daad ke liye tah e dil se mamnoon o mashkoor huN.
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salaam dostoN!
baRe dinoN baad kuchh tabiyat huee to ek ghazal kahee hai! mulaaizaa farmaayiye aur apnee beshqeemat raai ataa keejiye.

shukriyaa!


yahaaN bhee dil ujhaaR hai wahaaN bhee taar-taar hai,
to kaun uRaa gayaa khabar keh mausam e bahaar hai!

fareb aur jhooTh kaa chhapaa ik ishtehaar hai!
"koee bhee khaaksaar, raatoN-raat saahukaar hai!"

hayaat tere maikade meN ek hee sharaab hai,
ise bhee dard kaa nashaa use bhee gham kee maar hai!

waheeN jahaaN thee ibitadaa, safar kee intehaa bhee hai,
nazar kaa her-pher hai, go ek hee nigaar* hai!

nigaar = statue(moortee)

yeh hichkiyaaN haiN besabab yah koee waj'h khaas hai,
"mire liye bhi kyaa koee udaas beqaraar hai!" - shehryaar

haNsee ke mu'aamle meN ho gaye haiN sab qifaayatee!
tijoriyoN ke jewaroN meN iskaa bhee shumaar hai!

nafe kee waj'h aap the, ziyaaN badaulat e khudaa?
ab aap hee bataayiye bhalaa yeh kyaa mayaar hai?

jo zindagee kee dauR dhoop meN nah bhoolaa raam-naam,
hayaat ke bhaNwar meN ek usee kaa beRaa paar hai!

nah itnaa ehtiyaat e guftgoo barat keh yuN lage,
"nah 'dheer' der tak Thahar yeh ghair kaa dayaar hai!"

dheer janaab qaafee arse baad itnee khoobsurat ghazal padhane ko mili hai, ek behtareen likhaavat se sajii hui is ghazal par dil se mubarakbaad quubuul farmaaye, bhagwan aap ko aur hunarmand kare, likhate rahiyega

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dheer janaab qaafee arse baad itnee khoobsurat ghazal padhane ko mili hai, ek behtareen likhaavat se sajii hui is ghazal par dil se mubarakbaad quubuul farmaaye, bhagwan aap ko aur hunarmand kare, likhate rahiyega

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shukriyaa hazoor!
is baar baRe dinoN baad tashreef laa rahe haiN. sab khairiyat se to hai! aapkee daad ke liye behad mamnoon huN. aate rahiye. yuN id kaa chand honaa Theek naheeN.

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dheeraj bhaii,

kaise ho? aaj yuu.n hi dil kiyaa ki, aap ki Ghazale.n paDhi jaaye, to yeh Ghazal haath lagii, aur us par dekhaa kii, maine apni daad bhii nahii.n dii hai to sochaa ki sab se pahle, yehii nek kaam kar duu.n.. to ek khuubsuurat Ghazal ke liye, meri aur se daad aur mubaaraq baad haazir hai qubool keejiyegaa...

ab aaya huu.n to, sochaa ki Ghazal apni 2 kauDi ki raa'ey bhii deta chaluu.n.. gar ijaazat ho? shukriyah!

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yahaaN bhee dil ujhaaR hai wahaaN bhee taar-taar hai,
to kaun uRaa gayaa khabar keh mausam e bahaar hai!
matla achchha hai.. par yahaa.n aur wahaa.n zyaadah sahii nahii.n lag rahaa hai.. ek suurat mere jaanib me.n yuu.n aayee...

meraa bhee dil ujhaaR hai teraa bhee taar-taar hai,
to kaun uRaa gayaa khabar kee mausam e bahaar hai!


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"koee bhee khaaksaar, raatoN-raat saahukaar hai!"
mazrat chaahu.nga, par mujhe, yeh sher kuchh kamzor sa lagaa.. rabt kee bhii kamii mehsoos huii.. shakl kuchh aur bhii sochaa jaa sakta haii..

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hayaat tere maikade meN ek hee sharaab hai,
ise bhee dard kaa nashaa use bhee gham kee maar hai!
yeh sher mujh par khul nahii.n paaya... mazrat

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waheeN jahaaN thee ibitadaa, safar kee intehaa bhee hai,
nazar kaa her-pher hai, go ek hee nigaar* hai!
safar kii intehaa?? yeh sher bhii nahii.n khul paa raha hai..

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yeh hichkiyaaN haiN besabab yah koee waj'h khaas hai,
"mire liye bhi kyaa koee udaas beqaraar hai!" - shehryaar
bohat khuub girah lagaayee hai dheeraj bhaaii, daad qubool keejiye...

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ab aap hee bataayiye bhalaa yeh kyaa mayaar hai?
sher achchha hai, par duusra misra kuchh aur behtar ho jaaye to mazz aa jaaye
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jo zindagee kee dauR dhoop meN nah bhoolaa raam-naam,
hayaat ke bhaNwar meN ek usee kaa beRaa paar hai!
sher pasand aaya.. aisa lagaa kii kisii mahaa.n sakhsiyaat ko paDh rahaa huu.n.. yeh baat aur hai kii aap nhii hamaare nazar me.n mahaan sakhsiyat se kam nahii.n hai.n , daad qubool keejiye janaab....

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nah itnaa ehtiyaat e guftgoo barat keh yuN lage,
"nah 'dheer' der tak Thahar yeh ghair kaa dayaar hai!"
maqta bhii achcha lagaa.. aisa bhii hotaa hai aksar...

aap ki yeh Ghazal mujhe pasand aayee, daad qubool keejiyegaa.. oopar dee gayee raa'ey meri zaati hai, mai.n khud ek taalib-e-ilm huu.n, so Ghalat hone ki gunjaaish bohat hai.. isiliye koii baat pasand na aaye to khayaal mat keejiyegaa

daad aur mubaaraq baad ek baar phir se haazir hai....

likhte rahiye

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very good...
bahut hi achchha likha hai aapne...padh ke reply likhe bina nahi raha gaya.. likhate rahiye aur hume apane vicharo ko padhane ka mauka dete rahiye..

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dheeraj bhaii,

kaise ho? aaj yuu.n hi dil kiyaa ki, aap ki Ghazale.n paDhi jaaye, to yeh Ghazal haath lagii, aur us par dekhaa kii, maine apni daad bhii nahii.n dii hai to sochaa ki sab se pahle, yehii nek kaam kar duu.n.. to ek khuubsuurat Ghazal ke liye, meri aur se daad aur mubaaraq baad haazir hai qubool keejiyegaa...

ab aaya huu.n to, sochaa ki Ghazal apni 2 kauDi ki raa'ey bhii deta chaluu.n.. gar ijaazat ho? shukriyah!



matla achchha hai.. par yahaa.n aur wahaa.n zyaadah sahii nahii.n lag rahaa hai.. ek suurat mere jaanib me.n yuu.n aayee...

meraa bhee dil ujhaaR hai teraa bhee taar-taar hai,
to kaun uRaa gayaa khabar kee mausam e bahaar hai!




mazrat chaahu.nga, par mujhe, yeh sher kuchh kamzor sa lagaa.. rabt kee bhii kamii mehsoos huii.. shakl kuchh aur bhii sochaa jaa sakta haii..



yeh sher mujh par khul nahii.n paaya... mazrat


safar kii intehaa?? yeh sher bhii nahii.n khul paa raha hai..


bohat khuub girah lagaayee hai dheeraj bhaaii, daad qubool keejiye...



sher achchha hai, par duusra misra kuchh aur behtar ho jaaye to mazz aa jaaye


sher pasand aaya.. aisa lagaa kii kisii mahaa.n sakhsiyaat ko paDh rahaa huu.n.. yeh baat aur hai kii aap nhii hamaare nazar me.n mahaan sakhsiyat se kam nahii.n hai.n , daad qubool keejiye janaab....



maqta bhii achcha lagaa.. aisa bhii hotaa hai aksar...

aap ki yeh Ghazal mujhe pasand aayee, daad qubool keejiyegaa.. oopar dee gayee raa'ey meri zaati hai, mai.n khud ek taalib-e-ilm huu.n, so Ghalat hone ki gunjaaish bohat hai.. isiliye koii baat pasand na aaye to khayaal mat keejiyegaa

daad aur mubaaraq baad ek baar phir se haazir hai....

likhte rahiye

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namaste Mayank bhaai!
bhaai aapkee behad mamnoon huN keh tafseel se ghazal par nigaah e karam farmaayaa. itnaa ghaur se kalaam ko parakhnaa apne aap meN daad dene jaise hai. so bahut bahut shukriyaa!
ghazal maamulee see thee aur aamad thee. maine is par baad meN kuchh khaas kaam to naheeN kiyaa magar, darj soorat ke kuchh tabdiliyaaN zaroor kee thee, so pesh kar rahaa huN,

yeh kaun uRaa gayaa khabar keh mausam e bahaar hai?
yahaaN to dil ujaaR hai, jigar bhee taar taar hai!

fareb aur jhooTh kaa chhapaa ik ishtehaar hai!
"jo ham se kaam le woh raatoN-raat maal-daar hai!"

sharaab e kaif kab milee hai maikadeh meN zeest ke,
yahaaN hai jo bhee, nashshaa e alam kaa woh shikaar hai!

yeh hichkiyaaN haiN besabab yah koee waj'h khaas hai,
"mire liye bhi kyaa koee udaas, beqaraar hai!" - shehryaar

tamaam naf'ah aap se, ziyaaN badaulat e khudaa?
koee naheeN jo apne hee kiye pe sharm-saar hai!

jo zindagee kee dauR meN kabhee nah bhoole Ram-naam
hayaat ke bhaNwar meN ek usee kaa beRaa paar hai!

nah itnee ihtiyaat e guftgoo barat keh yuN lage,
puraane raabateh pe "dheer", waqt kaa ghubaar hai!

shukriyaa!!

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shubhkamnao sahit,

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bahut bahut shukriyaa Akant saHeb! koshish jaaree rakhungaa!

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