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ae mere maseeha, chaara-gar-o-ghum-khwaar!
mera yaar faraaz pe hai aur maiN pasti meiN
in halaat meiN tu hi bata maiN kia karooN
hansooN ya jee bhar ke aankheN bhigo.oN?

Waah

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Waaaaah

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Kya baat hai N@zneen ji

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doston ... nasheb-o-faraaz par waaqayee bahaut saare khoobsurat qalaam aaye.

sabhi shoraa ka tah-e-dil se shukrguzaar hoon aur sabhi qadrdaanon ka mashqoor-o-manoon

ab agla lafz le kar haazir ho raha hoon


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naya lafz - 28th August 2014, 11:55 PM



doston ... chaliye ab hum nasheb-o-faraaz ke oonche-neeche safar ki thakaan mitaane ka kuchh intezaam karte hain .... agle lafz ke zariye ...

is baar ek chhota sa, masti bhara, rindon ka azeez lafz hai .... BAADA

"baada" simply means ... wine / spirit / sharaab /madira

"baada" mein "d" is pronounced as in din (day), dus (10), dost (friend)

ye lafz shayari meiN bahaut bahaut baar dekha jaata hai, aur bade hi rindaana andaaz mein dekha jaata hai aksar, magar sanjeeda aur pur-soz khayaal bhi kahe ja sakte hain is ke zariye

baada se bahaut saare jumle hote hain, un mein se kuchh hain :

baada peene waala = baada-kash / baada-khwaar / baada-gusaar

baada peena = baada-noshi / baada-khwaari / baada-aashaami

baada milne ki jagah = baada-khaana

is lafz ki taqti mere hisaab se hai 2X ... any other opinion is welcome.

ab dekhte hain lafz "baada" par ustaad shoraa ke kuchh aashaar ...

la phir ik baar wahee baada-o-jaam ai saaqee
haath aa jaaye mujhe mera maqaam ai saaqee
- Iqbaal

kisee tarah to jame bazm mayyqade waaloN
naheeN jo baada-o-saaghar to ha-o-hoo hi sahi
- Faiz

kuchh mohtasiboN ki khalwat meiN kuchh waaiz ke ghar jaatee hai
hum baada-kashoN ke hisse ki ab jaam meiN kam-tar jaatee hai
- Faiz

hai hawa meiN sharaab ki taameer
baada-noshee hai baada-paimaaee
- Ghalib

ye masaail-e-tasawwuf ye tera bayaan "ghalib"
tujhe hum walee samajhte jo n baada-khwaar hota
- Ghalib

huwee is daur meiN mansoob mujh se baada-aashaamee
phir aaya wo zamaana jab jahaaN meiN jaam-e-jam nikle
- Ghalib

wo cheez jis ke liye hum ko ho bahisht azeez
siwa-e-baada-e-gulfaam-e-mushk-boo kya hai
- Ghalib

raNg hawa se yooN tapke hai jaise sharaab chhuwaate haiN
aage ho mayy-khaane ke niklo ahd-e-baada-gusaaraaN hai
- Meer Taqi Meer

bik gaye jab tere lab phir tujh ko kya shikwa agar
zindagaanee baada-o-saghar se behlaayee gayee
- Saahir Ludhianvi

"majaaz" ik baada-kash to hai yaqeenan
jo hum sunte the wo aalam naheeN hai
- Majaaz

zaahid mazaa to jab hai azaab-o-sawaab ka
dozakh meiN baada-kash n hoN jannat meiN tu n ho
- Daagh Dehlevi

yahaaN jo kuchh bhi hai wo partav-e-ehsaas hai saaqee
ba-juz baada jawaab-e-gardish-e-aiyyaam kya hoga
- Bekal Utsaahi

baada phir baada hai maiN zeher bhi pee jaaoN "qateel"
shart ye hai koyee baahoN meiN sambhaale mujh ko
- Qateel Shifaaee

tumhaaree berukhee ne laaj rakh li baada-khaane ki
tum aaNkhoN se pila dete to paimaane kahaaN jaate
- Qateel Shifaaee

to hum lafz "baada" par ghaur karenge agle 5 dinon tak, yaani Sept 2nd raat 9:00 PM India time ya 3:30 PM GMT

to intezaar kis baat ka hai !! apne qalaam ko paimaana banaaiye aur lafz "baada" ki baada-noshi ka lutf uthaaiye !!

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29th August 2014, 12:38 AM

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waah Naaz...

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29th August 2014, 02:11 AM

Main mai se Main ko bhool jaata hun
Har subah sochta hun, k raat baada-khaana fazool jaata hun
na gaya kabhi ibadat k liye mandir ya kaaba
jitne imaan-o-siddatt se har roz "ya-rasool" jaata hun
mujh par padhta nahi mausam ka asar koi
ho fasaad ka din wo, ya waqt maqool jaata hun
Log kehte hain k main aadmi achha hun, magar
Main se mai Main ko bhool jaata hun.





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WWWWWWAAAAAHHHHHH !!!!! kya soch pesh ki hai Ananthpak sahab !!!! ghazab !!! bahaut si daad !!!

Bohat bohat shukriya Zarraa sahab...iss hausla affzaayii k
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29th August 2014, 02:07 PM

doston ... lafz "baada" ke introduction mein Ghalib ke ek sher mein 2 spelling errors ho gayeen theen. maazrat. ye dekhiye neeche with corrections ...


hai hawaa meiN sharaab ki taaseer
baada noshi hai baad paimaayee

- Ghalib

ye waaqayee ek behad hi dilchasp magar pecheeda sher hai ... jo ki Ghalib ke sher ke saath aksar hota hai Ye sher Ghalib ki genius ka ek aur nishaan hai.

ek behad hi umdah commentary is sher par dekhee. us ka link neeche copy kar raha hoon

http://www.columbia.edu/itc/mealac/p...81/181_06.html

achchha, ek baat aur, is commentary mein saani ke aakhiri do alfaaz ko ek jumle ke taur par dikhaaya gaya hai "baad-paimaayee". magar main ne "-" naheen lagaaya kyunki main pardhne waale par ye chhordhna chaahta hoon ki ise jumla maan kar bhi dekh sakte hain aur 2 alag alag lafz maan kar bhi dekh sakte hain. agar jumla maanein to is ke 2 khoobsurat maani commentray mein diye gaye hain. un ke alaawa mujhe laga ki agar in 2 lafzon ko jumle ki tarah na dekha jaaye, aur baad ka "afterwards" waala meaning lein to ek aur bhi maani paida ho sakta hai jo baaki maaniyon ke saath co-exist karta hai ..... "ki agar baad mein baada noshi karoge to wo bas baada ki paimaayee ke jaisa hi hoga kyunki ki peene jaane waali sharaab ka asar hi naheen hoga kyunki piye jaane waali se behtar sharaab yaani ki hawaa waali sharaab to pehle hi pi li hai" ... cheers !!


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Main mai se Main ko bhool jaata hun
Har subah sochta hun, k raat baada-khaana fazool jaata hun
na gaya kabhi ibadat k liye mandir ya kaaba
jitne imaan-o-siddatt se har roz "ya-rasool" jaata hun
mujh par padhta nahi mausam ka asar koi
ho fasaad ka din wo, ya waqt maqool jaata hun
Log kehte hain k main aadmi achha hun, magar
Main se mai Main ko bhool jaata hun.
Waaaahh !!! Kya baat hai !! Baada-khaane ke zariye kya pur-soz aur dard bhare ehsaas pesh kiye Ananthpak sahab !! Bahaut khoob !!


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sirf kar paimaaish-e-baada hi is se rind tu
wus'at-e-gham naap mat ek-ek paimaane ke baad


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WWWAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHH!!!kya baat hai Zarraa sahab...bohat umda likha hai aapne...dheron daad





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Waaaahh !!! Kya baat hai !! Baada-khaane ke zariye kya pur-soz aur dard bhare ehsaas pesh kiye Ananthpak sahab !! Bahaut khoob !!
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rind mujhe ba adab bulaatein hain baada-noshi k liye

k baad*-e-jaam-e-sharaab main kisse aachhi sunata hun

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Bahot sukriyaH zarraji the link u shared is awesome....umdaa comment and discussn dekhne mili jitna samajhtey gai utna hi i was in awe Ghalib sahab was genius aur aapne jo baad-paimaayee ko alag karke do jumla banakr maiyne pesh kiya just hats off to u sahi maiyne me aap ek ustaad haiN jis muhabbat se ap humeiN sher-o-shayari ki alag alag pehluoN se ru ba ru karwatey hain dilse mamnoon hun itna to 5 saaloN meiN sdc par nahiN seekhi jitna aapse ek mahine meiN seekhi u r very modest zarraji but u hv to take this credit
N@zneen ji ... bahaut khushi huwee ki aap ko ye link pasand aaya. Ye website ilm aur baseerat ka ek khazaana hai !! My hats off to the author of this massive project !! It's simply brilliant!! The entire research is done by a European lady, Francis W Prichett. Un ke you tube mein kuchh lectures bhi hain Ghalib par. She speaks amazing Urdu and her knowledge of Ghalib is phenomenal !!!

Main koshish karoonga, ki jahaan bhi topic ke saath munaasib rahe, is ke sections share karta rahoon.

Ji bahaut achchha laga ki aap itni shiddat se yahaan huwee guftagoo ka faayda utha raheen hain. Ye kamaal mera naheen hai, aap ka hai, yaqeen maaniye. Behad khushi huwee ki aap ki shayari ka safar tez raftaar se aage bardh raha hai.

N@zneen ji ... aap ne itne apnepan aur aadar se jo taareef ki, us ka kis qadar mashqoor o mamnoon hoon bayaan naheen kar sakta. jitna deserve karta hoon us se kaheen kaheen zyaada aap ne mujhe credit diya hai. par itne pyaar se ki gayee taareef ko sar jhuka ke qabool karta hoon, aur dua hai ki ye shayari seekhne ka aur guftagu-e-sukhan ka silsila yoon hi chalta rahe !!

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Waaaaahhhh! behad umdaa zarraji misra-e-saani is a jolt, bahot mubarakbaad is aala tareen sher keliye aur dheron dheron daad

Apki sher behad complicated hai zarraji i am translating it pls do correct me if i am wrong

You just go on making me drunkard only with the measurement of wine(sarcasm)
Dont measure extent of my sorrow with every measurement of wine

Is my translation correct zarraji? Ur sher is very complicated meri samajh meiN thikse aya ya nahiN can u pls explain ur sher zarraji taaki chupi hui khoobsurti ko puri tarah samajh sakun only if u dnt mind



N@zneen ji ... aadaab .... is sher mein itni dilchaspi dikhaane ke liye shukriya. Aap ne jis dariyadili se daad ata farmaayee hai us ka tah e dil se mashqoor hoon !!

pehle main aap ko daad dean chaahoonga aap ke interpretation par .... wo kyoon, is peeche ka afsaaana neeche dekhiye

sirf kar paimaaish-e-baada hi is se rind tu
wus'at-e-gham naap mat ek-ek paimaane ke baad

- zarraa

is sher ke 2 kism ke maaynee mere zehn mein the ....

1. yahaan assumption hai ki ek hi shakhs sharaab pi raha hai, jis ko rind kaha gaya hai. us se ye kaha ja raha hai ki paimaane ko baada ki paimaaish ke liye hi istemaal kar .. yaani measure kar ke aur peene ke liye ... har paimaane ke baad apne ghamon ki had mat naap, sharaab pee kar apne ghamon ko yaad mat kar, unhein naap mat, kyunki sharaab pee kar gham aur barhe lagte hain, zakhm hare ho jaate hain wagairah wagairah.

yahaan "paimaaish"' "paimaana", "wus'at" aur "naap" se wordplay banaane ki koshish ki gayee thi.

2. yahaan assumotion hai ki 2 log sharaab pi rahe hain, ek jise rind kaha gaya hai aur doosra shayar jis ka zikr ayaan naheen hai bas us ko imagine ki karna hoga is interpretation ke tahat . is mein ye kehne ki koshish hai ki ai rind paimaane ka kaam sirf baada ki paimaaish hai. tu mere gham ka andaaza is baat se mat laga ki main kitni sharaab pi raha hoon. aur sharaab mein dhutt hone ki haalat mein mere ghamon ki daastaan mujh se ugalwaane ki koshish mat kar.

yahaan bhi similar word play ki koshish thi, yaani "paimaaish"' "paimaana", "wus'at" aur "naap".

mere hisaab se, is sher mein 1st maani zyaada khula hai aur 2nd maani thorha indirect hai. yaqeen maaniye, main ne in donon mein se kis ko main maani banaaoon aur kis ko nihaan rehne doon, is par barhi der tak soch vichaar kiya tha. main ne sher ke ek aur version mein oola ke aakhiri 2 lafz "rind tu" ki jagah "saaqiya" bhi kaha tha, kyunki mujhe laga ki lafz "saaqiya" 2nd maani ke saath zyaada insaaf karega, magar us se 1st maani ki soorat pooree tarah khatm ho ja rahi thi. phir aakhir mein "rind tu" waala hi version rakkha ki donon maaniyon ka imkaan zinda rahe

main ne daad aap ko is liye di ki aap ne jo maani pinhaan tha tha, use dhoondh nikaala hai. shayar ke dil ko is se zyaada khushi aur kya hogi. aur*ye is baat ka bhi ishaara hai ki aap mein shayari ko samajhne ki aur maani ki rooh tak pahunchne ka hunar maujood hai.

chaliye, kaafi waqt le liya aap ka. ek baar phir aap ko shukriya, aur daad bhi *

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ek taaza sher ....

buri is qadar jo sharaab hai, to phir apna khud hi hisaab hai
jise mil raha ye azaab hai, rahe khush wo baada-gusaar kyooN

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Bohat bohat shukriya zarraa sahab aap ki hausla affzaayi k liye ....khitab achha diya aapne ...par mujhe sharaab ka shauq nahi...yahan jo bhi alfaaz baada par likhunga wo mere ek dost k experiences aur addiction par based hain





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Waaaahhhh! jij bahot khoob......waise jij ye sher sirf khiyal hai ya haqeeqat?
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ek taaza sher ....
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jise mil raha ye azaab hai, rahe khush wo baada-gusaar kyooN
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Zarraji behad mamnoon hun aapne mere sawal ko itni izzat bakshi, ek dilchasp baat batati hun aapne apni sher ka jo pehla maani khola hai wo ananth jij samajh gaye the lekin mujhse nihaaN thi aur dusra maani jo aapne khola wo mai samjh gai lekin jij se nihaaN thi ye baat hamari fb par hui jij kii transalation quote kr rahi huN unki ijazat ke bagair is yakeeN ke sath wo mind nhi karenge
Behad umdaa sher kahi zarraji is discussion ke baad to ye sher puri tarah nikhar ke saamne agai aur behad sukriyaH dil ko khushi bakshne keliye ki mai is sher-o-shayari ke safar meiN kuch progress kar rahi huN, ustaad to wahi hai jo apne shagird ka hath thaamkar uske raastey meiN arahi har mushkil ko suljhata chale aur raastaa dikhata chale aur wo ustaad aap haiN shayad hi koi is thread par ap jaisa raah-bar hota
Saali sahiba bilkul nahi mind karunga....main ne yahan wo post isiliye nahi ki kyuki main already comment kar chuka tha uss sher par ....Zarraa sahab ne kitni khoobsurti se sab explain kiya hai..aur uss ghalib sahab k link k liye bhi behad shukrguzaar hun aap ka...mere ek colleague the railways main jo ghalib sahab k bohat bade fan hain...unko ghalib sahab ki unginat ghazals,nazm muhzubani yaad rehti hain...wo internet use nahi karte warna ye link dekhkar bohat khush hote





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Zarraji behad mamnoon hun aapne mere sawal ko itni izzat bakshi, ek dilchasp baat batati hun aapne apni sher ka jo pehla maani khola hai wo ananth jij samajh gaye the lekin mujhse nihaaN thi aur dusra maani jo aapne khola wo mai samjh gai lekin jij se nihaaN thi ye baat hamari fb par hui jij kii transalation quote kr rahi huN unki ijazat ke bagair is yakeeN ke sath wo mind nhi karenge

Behad umdaa sher kahi zarraji is discussion ke baad to ye sher puri tarah nikhar ke saamne agai aur behad sukriyaH dil ko khushi bakshne keliye ki mai is sher-o-shayari ke safar meiN kuch progress kar rahi huN, ustaad to wahi hai jo apne shagird ka hath thaamkar uske raastey meiN arahi har mushkil ko suljhata chale aur raastaa dikhata chale aur wo ustaad aap haiN shayad hi koi is thread par ap jaisa raah-bar hota
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Saali sahiba bilkul nahi mind karunga....main ne yahan wo post isiliye nahi ki kyuki main already comment kar chuka tha uss sher par ....Zarraa sahab ne kitni khoobsurti se sab explain kiya hai..aur uss ghalib sahab k link k liye bhi behad shukrguzaar hun aap ka...mere ek colleague the railways main jo ghalib sahab k bohat bade fan hain...unko ghalib sahab ki unginat ghazals,nazm muhzubani yaad rehti hain...wo internet use nahi karte warna ye link dekhkar bohat khush hote
N@zneen ji, Ananthpak sahab .... bayaan naheen kar sakta kis qadar khushi huwee aap donon ki gufagoo se. Ji bahaut bahaut shukriya mere sher par apna keemtee waqt aur beshkeemtee jazbaat dene ke liye.

Aur waah !! Aap donon ko daad doonga ki is sher ke sachche maaniyon ka is khoobsurti se bayaan kiya hai ... itni safaayee se to main khud maani bayaan naheen kar paata

Aur is bazm ka sahi maqsad aap jaise sher-o-sukhan ke chaahne waalon ki koshishon se haasil ho raha hai !!

Ek baar phir, bahuaut saara shukriya aur dheron duaein !!!


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Waaahhhh !!!!! Sharaab ki ghoont aur zindagi ki ghoont se bahaut hi khoobsurat khayaal banaya hai !!! Bahaut khoob N@zneen ji !!!


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Waaaahh !!!! Bahaut khoob Ananthpak sahab !! Bahaut asardaar sher kaha hai. Kaheen ye suna tha ki ek achchha shayar wo hota hai jo sirf apni hi naheen, auron ke dil ki baat bhi keh deta hai. Aap ke pichhle reply se pata laga ki aap aur logon ke tajurbe aur ehsaasaat ko bhi aawaaz de rahe hain apni shayari mein jis se aap mein ek achchhe shayar hone ki khoobi nazar aa rahi hai.

Is sher ka word play bhi achchha laga ... "utha" aur "chhoota" ka combination dilchasp laga .... sher par dheron daad ...

just by way of a small suggestion, jo main apni limited aur incomplete knowledge ki binaah par de raha hoon ... aap ek baar bas 2 lafzon par nazar-e-saani kar ke dekh lein .... "Jaam" ka gender masculine ke taur par dekh lein aur "behisaab" ko as an adjective dekh lein ... Just see in case it makes any difference .... as always, would be more than eager to hear any other opinion or viewpoint

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Bohat achhe...Zarraa sahab...kya khoob likha hai...dheron daad meri taraf se qubool farmaaiyye
Aap ka tah e dil se shukrguzaar hoon pazeeraayee ka Ananthpak sahab !!!


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Baad-paimaaish rehney dey saaqee
Ghum-o-badaa key hisaab kii adat nahiN
Wwwaaahhhh !!!! Bahaut khoob !!! Gham-o-baada ke hisaab ki aadat naheen !!! Seedhe seedhe alfaaz mein maani paida karna bahaut badi baat hoti hai. yahaan gham aur baada ek saath aate hain to un ke beech ke connection se maani paida ho raha hai ... jo ki sher mein lutf paida kar raha hai .. aur ye soorat paida ho rahi hai donon ki aadat na hona kya cause and effect hai ... aise kayee saare khayaal paida hote hain ... aur saath saath resolve bhi ... waah !! zabardast N@zneen ji.

bas ek chhota sa clarification ... oola mein did you mean baada-paimaaish or baad-paimaaish. agar baada-paimaaish hai to self explanatory hai. agar baad-paimaaish hai to sher thoda aur complicate hota hai ... jis par aur sochne ke liye aap ka clarification kaam mein aayega

dekhiye, ghalib sahab ke us sher par guftagoo karne ke baad, main "baad" aur "baada" ki uljhan mein aise giraftaar ho gaya hoon ... ki agar "baad" par khatm hone waale kisi shahar mein bhi agar jaaoonga, jaise Allahabad / Ahmedabad / Ghaziabaad etc, to har qadam phoonk phoonk ke rakkhoonga Dekhiye Ghalib sahab ke fusoon-e-alfaaz ne kya haalat kar di hai meri

To ek baar phir aap ko asardaar sher par dheron daad N@zneen ji !!


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Ek aur sher pesh hai....rind ke jazbaat bayaaN karne ki ek koshish


Baada-noshee nahiN sabab qadmoN ki laghzish kii
MaiN raah par huN ye Kaaenaat ghoom rahii hai
Waaah aur hahahahahaha

kya baat hai !!!! mazahiya andaaz bhi badi nazaakat se dikhaaya hai !!! bahaut khoob !!! rind aap ke sher ka kaafi practical faayeda utha sakte hain ... bahaane aur uzr talaashne ke liye

bahaut khoob aur daad N@zneen ji !!!


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Waaaahh !!!! Bahaut khoob Ananthpak sahab !! Bahaut asardaar sher kaha hai. Kaheen ye suna tha ki ek achchha shayar wo hota hai jo sirf apni hi naheen, auron ke dil ki baat bhi keh deta hai. Aap ke pichhle reply se pata laga ki aap aur logon ke tajurbe aur ehsaasaat ko bhi aawaaz de rahe hain apni shayari mein jis se aap mein ek achchhe shayar hone ki khoobi nazar aa rahi hai.
Is sher ka word play bhi achchha laga ... "utha" aur "chhoota" ka combination dilchasp laga .... sher par dheron daad ...
just by way of a small suggestion, jo main apni limited aur incomplete knowledge ki binaah par de raha hoon ... aap ek baar bas 2 lafzon par nazar-e-saani kar ke dekh lein .... "Jaam" ka gender masculine ke taur par dekh lein aur "behisaab" ko as an adjective dekh lein ... Just see in case it makes any difference .... as always, would be more than eager to hear any other opinion or viewpoint
ek baar phir se ek intense aur emphatic sher par bahaut si daad aap ko !!
Bohat bohat shukriya Zarraa nawazish k liye...your comments are always inspirational...ji zaroor aap ka viewpoint sar-ankhon par


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ghamgusar,hijr-e-yaar,khusi ka izhaar,doston ka pyaar,koi tehwar,kal itwaar

rindon ke liye baada-khwaari k bahane aur bhi hain





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ghamgusar,hijr-e-yaar,khusi ka izhaar,doston ka pyaar,koi tehwar,kal itwaar

rindon ke liye baada-khwaari k bahane aur bhi hain
HAHAHA....good one...

sahi hai!..........




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ghamgusar,hijr-e-yaar,khusi ka izhaar,doston ka pyaar,koi tehwar,kal itwaar

rindon ke liye baada-khwaari k bahane aur bhi hain
wwwwwwwwaaaaahhhhhhh !! superbbbbbbbbb !!

zabardast pur-lutf sher kaha Ananthpak sahab !!! maza aa gaya !! dheron dheron daad aap ko !!

chaliye, rind-bahana-fund mein mera adna sa contribution, aap ki ijaazat se :

mausam-e-bahaar
saaqi ka israar
mehbooba ka inkaar
biwi se takraar
office ki maaraamaar
cricket mein haar
happy hour



on a serious note, sharaab peene ke bahaanon par, Ghalib ke 2 behtareen sher yaad aate hain ...

"ghalib" chhuti sharaab par ab bhi kabhi kabhi
peetaa hooN roz-e-abr-o-shab-e-maahtaab meiN
-ghalib

piyooN sharaab agar khum bhi dekh looN do chaar
ye sheeha-o-qadah-o-kooza-o-suboo kya hai
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wwwwwwwwaaaaahhhhhhh !! superbbbbbbbbb !!

zabardast pur-lutf sher kaha Ananthpak sahab !!! maza aa gaya !! dheron dheron daad aap ko !!

chaliye, rind-bahana-fund mein mera adna sa contribution, aap ki ijaazat se :

mausam-e-bahaar
saaqi ka israar
mehbooba ka inkaar
biwi se takraar
office ki maaraamaar
cricket mein haar
happy hour



hahaha...nice collection....




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HAHAHA....good one...
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