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~* Wo Pahli Mulaqaat... Jab Shaam Dhale Wo Aayi Thi *~ - 17th December 2011, 03:04 AM

Sabhi dosto ko saadar pranaam !!

Aaj kuch khayaal karke mai muskara gaya ... aur use mai kuch youn likh baitha jo aapko saamne rakh raha hoon ... pata nahi kaisi ban padi hai ... par kyunki ye khayal kuch khaas hai to mere dil ke paas hai :-)
Baaki aap sab ki raay ka intejaar rahega ...

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Sharmayi si ghabrayi si
Jab shaam dhale wo aayi thi

Haatho mein pallu ka kona
Raste bhar ghumati aayi thi

Maine puchha jo adab se
Theek to ho
Boli... wo.. woo...
Wo mai mandir ke bahaane aayi thi

Uske marmari haatho ko
Maine chhu ke dekha
Jaise barf se dho kar aayi thi

Muh fer ke khadi ho gayi
Jaise wo meri nahi paraayi thi

Jee me to aaya
Aagosh mein bhar ke
Uske kaano mein kah du
Mere dil mein tumhi samayi thi

Khayaal kiya duniya ka
Ghoonth piya sabr ka
Aur socha bigad na jaaye
Baat meri jo bani banayi thi

Maine has ke bola
ek pal... jara idhar bhi dekho
Shayad tum mujhse milne aayi thi

Pahli... doosri... teesri...
Kuch mulaqaatein aise hi guzri
Dheere Dheere aise ghul gaye jaise
Mai phool aur uski khushbu mujhme samayi thi


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17th December 2011, 07:22 AM

waah bhai waahhh.. bahot Naazuk, meethe aur maasoom se ehsaas hain raja.. kyaa khoob likhaa hai aapne is baar bhi...ke bas waahhh hi nikalta hai...


ab jaise ye dekhun to...

Boli... wo.. woo...
Wo mai mandir ke bahaane aayi thi


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17th December 2011, 12:48 PM

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waah bhai waahhh.. bahot Naazuk, meethe aur maasoom se ehsaas hain raja.. kyaa khoob likhaa hai aapne is baar bhi...ke bas waahhh hi nikalta hai...


ab jaise ye dekhun to...

Boli... wo.. woo...
Wo mai mandir ke bahaane aayi thi


kitne komal aur sacche lafzon ka istemaal karke aapne apne ehsaason ko dhaala hai... i appreciate you for this buddy.... Reps+++ bhi le lijiye isi baaat par...
likhte rahiye.. khush rahiye... shukriiyaa
Shaad bhai ... thanks for appreciating the writing ... and motivating :-)
Tahe dil se shukargujar hoon ki aapne humare likhe ko padha aur saraha ...
Younhi saath dete rahiye aur humara maargdarshan bhi karte rahiye jaise ki aap humesha karte rahte hain ...
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17th December 2011, 06:42 PM

Wah wah.. Bhai sahab, bade adab se aur bahut badiya tareeke se likha hai aapne... BOLE to EK DAM JHAKAS hai BAVAAA..
anyways..

Shuru ki line to aapne ek dam satik likhi hai par baad me aisa laga ki aapne unhe kuch jayda hi kheechana chaha hai..

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Sharmayi si ghabrayi si
Jab shaam dhale wo aayi thi

Haatho mein pallu ka kona
Raste bhar ghumati aayi thi

Maine puchha jo adab se
Theek to ho
Boli... wo.. woo...
Wo mai mandir ke bahaane aayi thi

Uske marmari haatho ko
Maine chhu ke dekha
Jaise barf se dho kar aayi thi

Muh fer ke khadi ho gayi
Jaise wo meri nahi paraayi thi

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these lines are awesome & perfect. inhe aur jayda kheechane ki jaroorat nahi thi

Agar meri raaye aapko kuch bhuri lagi hoo toh, maaf kariyega..

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17th December 2011, 06:49 PM

Uske marmari haatho ko
Maine chhu ke dekha
Jaise barf se dho kar aayi thi

Muh fer ke khadi ho gayi
Jaise wo meri nahi paraayi thi

Nazm Ke Naazuki Ehsaas AchChhe HaiN ... Deep Ji !

Nice Effort ... Mubaaraqbaad !!!




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17th December 2011, 09:28 PM

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Wah wah.. Bhai sahab, bade adab se aur bahut badiya tareeke se likha hai aapne... BOLE to EK DAM JHAKAS hai BAVAAA..
anyways..

Shuru ki line to aapne ek dam satik likhi hai par baad me aisa laga ki aapne unhe kuch jayda hi kheechana chaha hai..



these lines are awesome & perfect. inhe aur jayda kheechane ki jaroorat nahi thi

Agar meri raaye aapko kuch bhuri lagi hoo toh, maaf kariyega..

regard,
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Omi bhai aap ek dam sahi kah rahe ho ...
Dar-asal baat kya hui ki ye jo khayaal tha us ek pal ka tha jab shaam dhale wo aayi thi ... [] ... to huwa youn ki mai jara bhaavnao.n mein bah gaya aur bahte bahte kaafi door nikal gaya ...
Maine bhi ek baar likh ke jab ise dubara dekha tha to mujhe kuch jyada hi lambi lagi thi ... sach kah raha hoon ye meri jaanbujh kar lambi khinchi hui nahi hai ... aur mai ise sirf kavitai ke lihaaz se kaant chhant nahi karna chaah raha tha ... jo bhi raw likha gaya ek flow mein , as it is post kar di ... mai shayad ise dubara edit karta to shayad kuch aur chhota kar sakta tha ... par mujhe laga ki kahani fir mukammal nahi hogi ...

Please mere baat ko aleja nahi leejiyega ... aapne shayri ke lihaaz se ek dam sahi raay di hai ... aap ki raay se mujhe seekh hi mili hai ... ki apni to kah di padhne waalo ki bhi sochni chahiye [] ...
Mai aage se khayal rakhunga bhaijaan !!
Bahot bahot shukriyaa !!
Aapka yonhi hume sikhate rahiye ... aage kuch aur achha likh ke dikhayenge

Aapka dost !! Deep !!


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Uske marmari haatho ko
Maine chhu ke dekha
Jaise barf se dho kar aayi thi

Muh fer ke khadi ho gayi
Jaise wo meri nahi paraayi thi

Nazm Ke Naazuki Ehsaas AchChhe HaiN ... Deep Ji !

Nice Effort ... Mubaaraqbaad !!!

Naresh jee !! mujhe umeed nahi thi ye logo ko pasand aayegi ... bas apni dilli tassali ke liye post kar di thi ...
Aapki taareef se mujhe bahot hausla mila hai, ki shayad hum bhi kuch likh sakenge aap logo ki sangatti mein ...
Isliye aapka bahot bahot shukargujaar hoon !!
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17th December 2011, 10:56 PM

hahahahaha koi koi nai Dost.. Keep Up..!!
Par yaar.. Control yourself... jayda bhavnao me naa behak jaya karo.. Werna kisi din over flow wali bhawnaaye mushkil me daal degi...

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Omi bhai aap ek dam sahi kah rahe ho ...
Dar-asal baat kya hui ki ye jo khayaal tha us ek pal ka tha jab shaam dhale wo aayi thi ... [] ... to huwa youn ki mai jara bhaavnao.n mein bah gaya aur bahte bahte kaafi door nikal gaya ...
Maine bhi ek baar likh ke jab ise dubara dekha tha to mujhe kuch jyada hi lambi lagi thi ... sach kah raha hoon ye meri jaanbujh kar lambi khinchi hui nahi hai ... aur mai ise sirf kavitai ke lihaaz se kaant chhant nahi karna chaah raha tha ... jo bhi raw likha gaya ek flow mein , as it is post kar di ... mai shayad ise dubara edit karta to shayad kuch aur chhota kar sakta tha ... par mujhe laga ki kahani fir mukammal nahi hogi ...

Please mere baat ko aleja nahi leejiyega ... aapne shayri ke lihaaz se ek dam sahi raay di hai ... aap ki raay se mujhe seekh hi mili hai ... ki apni to kah di padhne waalo ki bhi sochni chahiye [] ...
Mai aage se khayal rakhunga bhaijaan !!
Bahot bahot shukriyaa !!
Aapka yonhi hume sikhate rahiye ... aage kuch aur achha likh ke dikhayenge

Aapka dost !! Deep !!


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Sabhi dosto ko saadar pranaam !!

Aaj kuch khayaal karke mai muskara gaya ... aur use mai kuch youn likh baitha jo aapko saamne rakh raha hoon ... pata nahi kaisi ban padi hai ... par kyunki ye khayal kuch khaas hai to mere dil ke paas hai :-)
Baaki aap sab ki raay ka intejaar rahega ...

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Sharmayi si ghabrayi si
Jab shaam dhale wo aayi thi

Haatho mein pallu ka kona
Raste bhar ghumati aayi thi

Maine puchha jo adab se
Theek to ho
Boli... wo.. woo...
Wo mai mandir ke bahaane aayi thi

Uske marmari haatho ko
Maine chhu ke dekha
Jaise barf se dho kar aayi thi

Muh fer ke khadi ho gayi
Jaise wo meri nahi paraayi thi

Jee me to aaya
Aagosh mein bhar ke
Uske kaano mein kah du
Mere dil mein tumhi samayi thi

Khayaal kiya duniya ka
Ghoonth piya sabr ka
Aur socha bigad na jaaye
Baat meri jo bani banayi thi

Maine has ke bola
ek pal... jara idhar bhi dekho
Shayad tum mujhse milne aayi thi

Pahli... doosri... teesri...
Kuch mulaqaatein aise hi guzri
Dheere Dheere aise ghul gaye jaise
Mai phool aur uski khushbu mujhme samayi thi


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kya khoob likha hai jawab nahi aapka.....





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bahut khooooooooooob ....... Deep Ji ! radhe radhe ...............


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kya khoob likha hai jawab nahi aapka.....
bas jee aapki jarra nawazi hai ... hausla badhaane ka bahot bahot shukriyaa !!
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Jat Sb.............. Achi Lagi Aap Ki Ye Nazm.......... Boht Meethay Or Naazuk KHayalaat Ko Tarteeb Dia Hai Is Me Aap Ne.......... Daad Qabool Farmayen...... Likhtay Rahen...................Khush Rahen
Shakil bhai salaam !! Aapko humara likha pasand aaya, aur aapne humare liye waqt nikala... badi meharbaani aapki ...
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Wow!

How romantic!

aise jaise koi movie ka scene aankhon ke aage chal rahe ho.

bohut khoob.........

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Sabhi dosto ko saadar pranaam !!

Aaj kuch khayaal karke mai muskara gaya ... aur use mai kuch youn likh baitha jo aapko saamne rakh raha hoon ... pata nahi kaisi ban padi hai ... par kyunki ye khayal kuch khaas hai to mere dil ke paas hai :-)
Baaki aap sab ki raay ka intejaar rahega ...

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Sharmayi si ghabrayi si
Jab shaam dhale wo aayi thi

Haatho mein pallu ka kona
Raste bhar ghumati aayi thi

Maine puchha jo adab se
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Boli... wo.. woo...
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Mujhe aapke ehsasaat bohot pasand aaye saahb.
Aate rahiye, mehfil mein rounaq aayegii.
Khush rahiye.


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18th July 2015, 10:39 AM

Shukriya Sarika Jee, meri chhoti si koshish ko sarhaane ke liye...
Aajkal roji roti me itne busy ho gaye hain ki is behtareen jagah par aane ke liye bhi taras gaye hain ... Vaise beech beech me koshish rahti hai meri, aur sirf read only mode me aake kuch dair kuch achhe khayal padh kar nikal jaate hain ...
Aage se koshish rahegi ki thoda jaldi jaldi aaya jaaye...
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Bahut kaamyaab koshish shayri to nahi par ek aacha prose kahungaa aur behtareen tarah se aapke ise alfaaz diye hai..Daad qubool farmiYeGaa

Jee aapne ek dam sahi kaha, vaise shayri mujhe aati bhi nahi :P
Bas aise kuch ahsaas ek apni sochi hui si rythm me piro lete hain kabhi kabhi...

Hausla badhane ka bahot bahot shukriyaa :-)


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Khush rahiye.
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waaaahh!bahut hee pyaare masoom se khyaal hain aur aapne bade hee sachche seedhe lafzon me utara hai inhe kagaz par....bahot khoob deep ji...

ummeed hai aage bhi aapke khoobsoorat kalaam padhne ko milenge hame..
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