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23rd May 2008, 04:59 PM
Very nice mausam ji, lamha ji, acharya ji and all...........
kuch kadam chale the wo mere saath bhi,
jinaki yaad me tum gamgeen se ho........
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28th May 2008, 10:46 AM
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Very nice mausam ji, lamha ji, acharya ji and all...........
kuch kadam chale the wo mere saath bhi,
jinaki yaad me tum gamgeen se ho........
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"aaye to yuu.N to ke jaise hameshaa ke meharabaa.N
bhuule to yuu.N ke goyaa kabhii aashanaa na thy"
-Faiz Ahmed Faiz
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.....Sunita Thakur.....
यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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29th May 2008, 06:02 PM
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Woh mila to dar - daricho sabpe tari tha sukoon
Woh gaya, tanhaiyaan meri lautke ghar aa gayi
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wahhhhhhhhhhhhhh diiiiiiiiiii
vo jaate hai.n aatii hai qayamat ki sahar aaj
rotaa hai duaao.n se gale milke asar aaj
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mujhko acchaa nahiiN lagtaa ko’ii hamnaam teraa ,
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29th May 2008, 06:06 PM
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Very nice mausam ji, lamha ji, acharya ji and all...........
kuch kadam chale the wo mere saath bhi,
jinaki yaad me tum gamgeen se ho........
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tumhii.n to ho jise kahatii hai naaKhudaa duniyaa
bachaa sako to bachaa lo ki Dubataa huu.N mai.n
[Majaz]
"LAMHA"
mujhko acchaa nahiiN lagtaa ko’ii hamnaam teraa ,
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29th May 2008, 06:09 PM
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"aaye to yuu.N to ke jaise hameshaa ke meharabaa.N
bhuule to yuu.N ke goyaa kabhii aashanaa na thy"
-Faiz Ahmed Faiz
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na jaane kis liye ummiidavaar baiThaa huu.N
ik aisi raah pe jo terii rahaguzar bhii nahii.n
[Faiz Ahmed Faiz]
[ummiidavaar = hopeful]
"LAMHA"
mujhko acchaa nahiiN lagtaa ko’ii hamnaam teraa ,
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29th May 2008, 07:34 PM
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na jaane kis liye ummiidavaar baiThaa huu.N
ik aisi raah pe jo terii rahaguzar bhii nahii.n
[Faiz Ahmed Faiz]
[ummiidavaar = hopeful]
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ummid se hi ummid ka ehshash hota hai
jo dil me aata hai vahi apne pass hota hai
AankheN khuleeN to jaag uTheeN hasrateN tamaam Uss ko bhi kho diyaa jissay paya thaa khwaab mein
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30th May 2008, 10:00 AM
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na jaane kis liye ummiidavaar baiThaa huu.N
ik aisi raah pe jo terii rahaguzar bhii nahii.n
[Faiz Ahmed Faiz]
[ummiidavaar = hopeful]
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jii chaahe us kii rahguzar meiN khaRhe raheN
is aashiqi meiN ham to gaye kaam kaaj se
mazahab ko_ii lauTaale aur uskii jagah de-de
taHzeeb saleeke kee, insaan qareene ke
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30th May 2008, 12:24 PM
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jii chaahe us kii rahguzar meiN khaRhe raheN
is aashiqi meiN ham to gaye kaam kaaj se
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balvinder jee, aap ke sher ka jawaab haazir hai!
ishq kii maar ba.Dii dardiilii ishq me.n jii na pha.Nsaanaa jii
sab kuchh karanaa ishq na karanaa ishq se jaan bachaanaa jii
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30th May 2008, 01:09 PM
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balvinder jee, aap ke sher ka jawaab haazir hai!
ishq kii maar ba.Dii dardiilii ishq me.n jii na pha.Nsaanaa jii
sab kuchh karanaa ishq na karanaa ishq se jaan bachaanaa jii
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''Mayank'' sahab dekhiye ''Munavvar'' lakhnavi sahab kyaa farmaate haiN..
ishq baqaa-e-rooh hai, ishq ghizaa-e-rooh hai
yah jo nahiiN to dahar meN, lutf-e-hayaat hi nahiiN
mazahab ko_ii lauTaale aur uskii jagah de-de
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30th May 2008, 01:17 PM
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''Mayank'' sahab dekhiye ''Munavvar'' lakhnavi sahab kyaa farmaate haiN..
ishq baqaa-e-rooh hai, ishq ghizaa-e-rooh hai
yah jo nahiiN to dahar meN, lutf-e-hayaat hi nahiiN
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ishq fanaa kaa naam hai, ishq me.n zindagii na dekh
jalwa-e-aaftaab ban, zarre me.n roshanii na dekh
Jaane kya samjha woh mujhe
Jaane kya samjhi main useN
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30th May 2008, 01:53 PM
mobbhat me koi kisi ko na kabi khuda kare,
bas itna Ahessan kare jab bi kare wafa hi kare,
ham to saath unke kanton pe chalte jaye,
woh ek baar hume apna humsafar to kare,
muje pata hi nahi kaise juda hote hai,
mere dil se koi teri tasvir ko juda to kare.......
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30th May 2008, 02:56 PM
Shaayar ka naam yaad nahi,magar ye sher kabhi bhool nahi paaya..(kisi ko ilm ho bataaye ye kis ka sher hai.inaayat hogi aur shaayar ke saath insaaf bhi)bahar-hal sher nazar karta hoon..
KABHI KABHI TO BAHUT INTEZAAR RAHTA HAI
IK AISE SHAKHS KA JO MUJH KO JAANTA BHI NAHIN.
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30th May 2008, 03:06 PM
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Shaayar ka naam yaad nahi,magar ye sher kabhi bhool nahi paaya..(kisi ko ilm ho bataaye ye kis ka sher hai.inaayat hogi aur shaayar ke saath insaaf bhi)bahar-hal sher nazar karta hoon..
KABHI KABHI TO BAHUT INTEZAAR RAHTA HAI
IK AISE SHAKHS KA JO MUJH KO JAANTA BHI NAHIN.
(contributed by prashant vasl)
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dil pe karte hen dimaghon pe asar karte hen
hum ajab log hain zehnon men safar karte hain
Jaane kya samjha woh mujhe
Jaane kya samjhi main useN
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30th May 2008, 03:09 PM
muddato.n pahale jab tujh se taarruf bhii na thaa
terii tasviir banaate the Khayaalat mere
[Unknown]
jahan tak meri samajh hai..ye badhiya sher thoda bahar(meter) se out ho gaya hai..shayad typing ki galti ho..sher mein agar pahla misra yun kaha jaaye,to baat ban jayegi..
"muddaton pahle KI jab tujh se ta-arruf bhi na tha"
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30th May 2008, 03:24 PM
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muddato.n pahale jab tujh se taarruf bhii na thaa
terii tasviir banaate the Khayaalat mere
[Unknown]
jahan tak meri samajh hai..ye badhiya sher thoda bahar(meter) se out ho gaya hai..shayad typing ki galti ho..sher mein agar pahla misra yun kaha jaaye,to baat ban jayegi..
"muddaton pahle KI jab tujh se ta-arruf bhi na tha"
prashant vasl
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terii tasviir se karataa thaa baate.n
mere ghar me.n aa_iinaa nahii.n thaa
[Majaz]
Jaane kya samjha woh mujhe
Jaane kya samjhi main useN
Faasla nazar aaya....Kuch kadmon ke saath se
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30th May 2008, 06:03 PM
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terii tasviir se karataa thaa baate.n
mere ghar me.n aa_iinaa nahii.n thaa
[Majaz]
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haadise aur bhii guzare terii ulfat ke sivaa
haa.N mujhe dekh mujhe ab merii tasviir na dekh
[Majrooh Sultanpuri]
"LAMHA"
mujhko acchaa nahiiN lagtaa ko’ii hamnaam teraa ,
ko’ii tujhsaa ho to phir naam bhii tujhsaa rakhe....
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30th May 2008, 06:33 PM
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haadise aur bhii guzare terii ulfat ke sivaa
haa.N mujhe dekh mujhe ab merii tasviir na dekh
[Majrooh Sultanpuri]
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dekhaa huaa saa kuchh hai to sochaa huaa saa kuchh
har vaqt mere saath hai ulajhaa huaa saa kuchh
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30th May 2008, 06:52 PM
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dekhaa huaa saa kuchh hai to sochaa huaa saa kuchh
har vaqt mere saath hai ulajhaa huaa saa kuchh
[Nida fazli]
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Gazal us ne chhedi mujhe saaz denaa
zaraa umr-e-raftaa ko aavaaz denaa
[Safi Lucknawi]
"LAMHA"
mujhko acchaa nahiiN lagtaa ko’ii hamnaam teraa ,
ko’ii tujhsaa ho to phir naam bhii tujhsaa rakhe....
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30th May 2008, 06:57 PM
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muddato.n pahale jab tujh se taarruf bhii na thaa
terii tasviir banaate the Khayaalat mere
[Unknown]
jahan tak meri samajh hai..ye badhiya sher thoda bahar(meter) se out ho gaya hai..shayad typing ki galti ho..sher mein agar pahla misra yun kaha jaaye,to baat ban jayegi..
"muddaton pahle KI jab tujh se ta-arruf bhi na tha"
prashant vasl
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aour ''Prashant'' sahab meraa naaqis ilm kahtaa hai ki sher ki asl soorat vahii hai jo aapne pahle bayaaN kii hai....
hairaaN hue na the jo tasavvur meiN bhii kabhii
tasveer ho gaye merii tasveer dekh kar
mazahab ko_ii lauTaale aur uskii jagah de-de
taHzeeb saleeke kee, insaan qareene ke
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30th May 2008, 07:02 PM
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aour ''Prashant'' sahab meraa naaqis ilm kahtaa hai ki sher ki asl soorat vahii hai jo aapne pahle bayaaN kii hai....
hairaaN hue na the jo tasavvur meiN bhii kabhii
tasveer ho gaye merii tasveer dekh kar
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hum un kii tasviir dil me.n chhipaaye baiThe hai.n
viiraan zindagii me.n ek gul khilaaye baiThe hai.n
[Unknown]
"LAMHA"
mujhko acchaa nahiiN lagtaa ko’ii hamnaam teraa ,
ko’ii tujhsaa ho to phir naam bhii tujhsaa rakhe....
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30th May 2008, 07:10 PM
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Gazal us ne chhedi mujhe saaz denaa
zaraa umr-e-raftaa ko aavaaz denaa
[Safi Lucknawi]
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kal raat uRh rahe they sitaarey havaa ke saath
aor maiN udaas baiThaa huaa thaa Khudaa ke saath
(shamiim ravish)
mazahab ko_ii lauTaale aur uskii jagah de-de
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30th May 2008, 07:16 PM
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kal raat uRh rahe they sitaarey havaa ke saath
aor maiN udaas baiThaa huaa thaa Khudaa ke saath
(shamiim ravish)
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ko_ii chaudhvii.n raat kaa chaa.Nd ban kar tumhaare tasavvur me.n aayaa to hogaa
kisii se to kii hogii tum ne muhabbat kisii ko gale se lagaayaa to hogaa
[akhtar azad]
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30th May 2008, 07:22 PM
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ko_ii chaudhvii.n raat kaa chaa.Nd ban kar tumhaare tasavvur me.n aayaa to hogaa
kisii se to kii hogii tum ne muhabbat kisii ko gale se lagaayaa to hogaa
[akhtar azad]
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vah aag muhabbat kii lagte bhii nahiiN dekhii
rag-rag meN jo rah-rah kar shole-se uThaaye hai
''Firaq''
mazahab ko_ii lauTaale aur uskii jagah de-de
taHzeeb saleeke kee, insaan qareene ke
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30th May 2008, 07:32 PM
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vah aag muhabbat kii lagte bhii nahiiN dekhii
rag-rag meN jo rah-rah kar shole-se uThaaye hai
''Firaq''
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aag ho to jalane me.n der kitanii lagatii hai
barf ke pighalane me.n der kitanii lagatii hai
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30th May 2008, 07:35 PM
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aag ho to jalane me.n der kitanii lagatii hai
barf ke pighalane me.n der kitanii lagatii hai
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der lagii aane meN tum ko shukr hai fir bhiiaaye to
aas ne dil ka saath na chhoRha vaise ham ghabraaye to
mazahab ko_ii lauTaale aur uskii jagah de-de
taHzeeb saleeke kee, insaan qareene ke
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30th May 2008, 07:56 PM
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der lagii aane meN tum ko shukr hai fir bhiiaaye to
aas ne dil ka saath na chhoRha vaise ham ghabraaye to
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Ik ik kar ke huye jaate hain taare raushan
Merii manzil kii taraf tere qadam aate hain
Jaane kya samjha woh mujhe
Jaane kya samjhi main useN
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31st May 2008, 09:18 AM
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Ik ik kar ke huye jaate hain taare raushan
Merii manzil kii taraf tere qadam aate hain
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tere aane kii jab khabar mahke
terii khushboo se saara ghar mahke
mazahab ko_ii lauTaale aur uskii jagah de-de
taHzeeb saleeke kee, insaan qareene ke
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31st May 2008, 05:48 PM
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tere aane kii jab khabar mahke
terii khushboo se saara ghar mahke
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bechain bahaaro.n me.n kyaa-kyaa hai jaan kii Khushbuu aatii hai
jo phuul mahakataa hai usase tuufaan kii Khushbuu aatii hai
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31st May 2008, 10:28 PM
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bechain bahaaro.n me.n kyaa-kyaa hai jaan kii Khushbuu aatii hai
jo phuul mahakataa hai usase tuufaan kii Khushbuu aatii hai
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rusvaa_ii to vaise bhii taqdiir hai aashiq kii
zillat bhii milii ham ko ulfat ke fasaane se
[Saeed Rahi]
[rusvaa_ii = bad name; zillat = insults]
"LAMHA"
mujhko acchaa nahiiN lagtaa ko’ii hamnaam teraa ,
ko’ii tujhsaa ho to phir naam bhii tujhsaa rakhe....
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31st May 2008, 10:33 PM
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rusvaa_ii to vaise bhii taqdiir hai aashiq kii
zillat bhii milii ham ko ulfat ke fasaane se
[Saeed Rahi]
[rusvaa_ii = bad name; zillat = insults]
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Apni ruswai main terey naam ka charcha dekhoun
Aik zara sher kahoun aur kiya kiya dekhoun (Perveen Shakir)
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Apni ruswai main terey naam ka charcha dekhoun
Aik zara sher kahoun aur kiya kiya dekhoun (Perveen Shakir)
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kuch nazar nahi aata un ke tasavvur ke sivaa
hasarat-e-didaar ne aaNkho ko andhaa kar diyaa
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mujhko acchaa nahiiN lagtaa ko’ii hamnaam teraa ,
ko’ii tujhsaa ho to phir naam bhii tujhsaa rakhe....
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2nd June 2008, 07:04 PM
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Apni ruswai main terey naam ka charcha dekhoun
Aik zara sher kahoun aur kiya kiya dekhoun (Perveen Shakir)
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gustaakhii muaaf janaab, lekin ye sher kuchh yooN hai....
apnii rusvaaii, tere naam ka charcha dekhooN
ek zaraa sher kahooN aour maiN kya-kya dekhooN
aour ab jawaab meN ye sher haazir hai mulaahiza farmaayeiN..
ham ghazal meN teraa charcha nehiiN hone dete
terii yaadoN ko bhii rusvaa nehiiN hone dete
mazahab ko_ii lauTaale aur uskii jagah de-de
taHzeeb saleeke kee, insaan qareene ke
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2nd June 2008, 07:12 PM
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ham ghazal meN teraa charcha nehiiN hone dete
terii yaadoN ko bhii rusvaa nehiiN hone dete
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yaad karanaa har gha.Dii us yaar kaa
hai vazifaa mujh dil-e-bimaar kaa
Jaane kya samjha woh mujhe
Jaane kya samjhi main useN
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yaad karanaa har gha.Dii us yaar kaa
hai vazifaa mujh dil-e-bimaar kaa
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ab to biimaar-e-muhabbat tere
qaabil-e-Gaur hue jaate hai.n
[Daag Dehlvi]
"LAMHA"
mujhko acchaa nahiiN lagtaa ko’ii hamnaam teraa ,
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2nd June 2008, 07:25 PM
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kuch nazar nahi aata un ke tasavvur ke sivaa
hasarat-e-didaar ne aaNkho ko andhaa kar diyaa
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jab kuch na rahaa mujh meiN to kholiiN mirii aaNkheN!
qaatil ne KahaaN hasrat-e-deedaar nikaalee
mazahab ko_ii lauTaale aur uskii jagah de-de
taHzeeb saleeke kee, insaan qareene ke
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2nd June 2008, 07:29 PM
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Originally Posted by LAMHA
ab to biimaar-e-muhabbat tere
qaabil-e-Gaur hue jaate hai.n
[Daag Dehlvi]
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jis ko tirii aankhoN se sarokaar rahegaa
bil-farz jiyaa bhii to vo biimaar rahegaa
mazahab ko_ii lauTaale aur uskii jagah de-de
taHzeeb saleeke kee, insaan qareene ke
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2nd June 2008, 07:46 PM
poothi pad pad jag mua pandit bhaya na koi,
dhai aakhar prem ke pade so pandit hoe
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2nd June 2008, 07:51 PM
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Originally Posted by balvinder
gustaakhii muaaf janaab, lekin ye sher kuchh yooN hai....
apnii rusvaaii, tere naam ka charcha dekhooN
ek zaraa sher kahooN aour maiN kya-kya dekhooN
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Lol
kamal hai janab ............mein kahon k glass adha khali hai or app kahien ke nahi adha bhera howa hai to baat to aik hi howi per baat who hi nahi hai ...
aisa maine nahi kaha ........Aamir khan ki new coming movie ka song hai
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2nd June 2008, 11:29 PM
Woh mila to dar - daricho sabpe tari tha sukoon
Woh gaya, tanhaiyaan meri lautke ghar aa gayi
The expression,concept,words are beautiful..but
is sher ko bahar(meter mein)mein rakhne ke liye do tarah se kaha jaa sakta hai..
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wo mila to dar dareecho(n) sab pe tari tha sukoon
wo gaya,tanhaaiyan meri palat kar aa gayeen.
or like this..
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wo mila to dar dareecho(n) sab pe tari tha sukoon
wo gaya tanhai meri laut kar phir aa gayi.
i think i m not crossing limits or offending any one..i m doing it for the first time(and last if i m told)..and doing it only because some ONE on this meaningful site accused me that i only talk about me and do not share my opinion about shayri out here...having said it i m only offering my opinion and i may be WRONG..so please understand my sentiments..all of U there..shukriya.
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3rd June 2008, 04:04 PM
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Originally Posted by prashant vasl
Woh mila to dar - daricho sabpe tari tha sukoon
Woh gaya, tanhaiyaan meri lautke ghar aa gayi
The expression,concept,words are beautiful..but
is sher ko bahar(meter mein)mein rakhne ke liye do tarah se kaha jaa sakta hai..
1.
wo mila to dar dareecho(n) sab pe tari tha sukoon
wo gaya,tanhaaiyan meri palat kar aa gayeen.
or like this..
2.
wo mila to dar dareecho(n) sab pe tari tha sukoon
wo gaya tanhai meri laut kar phir aa gayi.
i think i m not crossing limits or offending any one..i m doing it for the first time(and last if i m told)..and doing it only because some ONE on this meaningful site accused me that i only talk about me and do not share my opinion about shayri out here...having said it i m only offering my opinion and i may be WRONG..so please understand my sentiments..all of U there..shukriya.
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Aslam u alaikum ,
First of all , i am really thankful to you , keh app hamary dermiyan hamari islah ke liye aye hain .......appka jitna shukriya ada kiya jaaey kam hai , or app yeh kaisi baat ker rahy hain keh hamien bura lagay ga ... bilkul bhi nahi janab ... balkeh yeh hamary liye fakher ki baat hai keh hamien app se kuch seekhny ko mil raha hai ...aisy hi saath dety rahiye hamien app ki zaroorat hai
sach yeh hai keh mujhy shayri ki abc ka bilkul pata nahi hai , bahut dafa confuse ho jata hon , abhi app ki is correction se mujhy sirf itna pata chala hai ke is sher main mistak (wahid , jamma ) singular & plural ki hai ...is liye meine unko highlight kiya hai kya meine sahi samjha hai ya reason kuch or bhi hai ................
Appka Shuker Guzar
Mujeeb
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