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apne hi pyar ki doli ko saza raha hun |
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apne hi pyar ki doli ko saza raha hun -
30th May 2003, 03:22 PM
ajj zindagi ko mein cigeratte ke dhue mein udaa raha hun
har gum ko sharab ke nashe mein duba raha hun log keahte hai kyu karte hoo zindagi se itni nafrat... kya kahu ajj mein apni hi zindagi ko khud hi mita raha hun ajj mein apne hi pyar ki doli ko saza ke jaa raha hun... sab hai uski khushi mein ... koi nai hai mere janaze meein.. ajj mein khud hi apni lash ko kandha dee raha hun... mein apni lash ko ajj khud hi jala raha hun.. Zindagi Maut ke pehlu mein soo rai hai... Us bewafa se na pucho meri maut ki wajah... Woh to bus zamane ko dikhane ke liye roo rai hai... |
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30th May 2003, 09:30 PM
bhai itna dard ..
aapne to dard me mujhko bhin duba diya .. humari dua kabool kijiye khush rahne ke liye ameen .. |
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gr8 -
30th May 2003, 09:37 PM
Waqui tanhai ji,
bahut hi dard bhari nazm likhi hai aapne..... kaha se laate hai itna dard aap....khair hum jo hai yaha aapka dard baantne ke liye........ Pari  |
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ohhh -
30th May 2003, 10:01 PM
dost tanhai,
kya kahu???????????? kuchh bhi kahungi yaha par kam hi hoga. tumhare dard ka ahesaas hona ek sahaj sa hoga hai. sari ki sari nazam dard ka daria hai.... |
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31st May 2003, 01:17 AM
mein aur tanhai
bohat pur asr aur pur dard alfaaz aur aap keh haseen aur shaista tarz e bayan ne is nazm ko bohat zabardast nazm ki shakal di hai. eik baar parh ker dil bechain ho kar baar parhne per uksaata hai aur yeh hi is ke alaa darje ki daleel hai. wishing you all the best and keep it up. musharrafhusain |
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31st May 2003, 06:34 AM
Manish saahab,
Namaskaar! waaqaye bahot khoob likhaa hai aapne! "sab hai uski khushi mein ... koi nai hai mere janaze meein.." «-- waah, kyaa dard bhare khayaalaat haiN aapke. par shyad aapko pataa nahiiN kii aksar dard-bhare insaanoN kii nahiiN, bhalkii dard dene waale insaanoN kii mehfil meiN raushnii hotii hai. puurii ghazal dilchasp thii.. paD kar behad sakoon paayaa, kyooN kii aisaa laggaa kii kalam bhale aapkii ho, jazbaat dono ke haiN  ummiid hai kii isii taraH likhne meiN kaamyaab raheN ge.. apnaa khayaal rakhiiye, aman "je tu akhiiyaaN de saamne naii rehnaa, te bibba saada dil moD de..!" kya karooN? aisa hi hooN maiN.. |
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hi -
31st May 2003, 09:21 AM
mein aur tanhayi ji itna dard kya baat hai yaar hum dost banko hai na aapke saath aisa na kahyiye zindagi ko anmol bananane ki koshish kariye though i understand sometimes time doesnt go with us where we want to,,but try my friend
ajj zindagi ko mein cigeratte ke dhue mein udaa raha hun har gum ko sharab ke nashe mein duba raha hun log keahte hai kyu karte hoo zindagi se itni nafrat... kya kahu ajj mein apni hi zindagi ko khud hi mita raha hun gehrayi dard hai aapko likhne me duayon ke saath priya ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Jisnu Lagey, ohi'yo jaane, Kaun Jaane peer parayi! ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ |
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31st May 2003, 10:46 AM
huun tanhayi ji,
Ab aap kabar se bahar aakar jalne ke liye jaa rahen hain..iraade nek nahin lagte aapke Aapka dard dekhkar kabhi kabhi apna dard chota lagne lagta hai.. Really bahut achha likh gaye hai aap.. Likhte rahiye.. Varinder chal waha chal jahan tere jaise aur bhi hai... |
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31st May 2003, 02:17 PM
namastee...kshitiz.. jii..
aaree... dost... mere .. liye too..zindagi ka dusra naam hi dard hai yar... humdardi ka shukriya dost... bye and take care namastee...pari.. jii.. thanx.. pari ji.. joo apne.. iss dard ko jaana...wasie yar.... yeah dard..meri zindagi ke..sath..scheme.. mein aya tha.. zindagi ke sath dard free.. lolz... wasie.. yeah too hai app logo ke bich reah kar.. mujhe apna dard bhi kaaam lagta hai ... anywaz..thanx for appriciating it. .thanx again.. bye and take care.. namastee...meena.. jii.. aaree... yar.. abb kya karu zindagi hi ek dard ka samundar hoo gaya hai too abb joo bhi likhta hun dard bhara hi nikalta hai..anywaz... mere liye too yahi zindagi hai... thanx for appriciating it.. bye and take care.. namastee...musharrafhusain.. jii.. aaree sirkar..ab..kya kahu lagta hai apne kuch jayda hi keah dia hai iske barein mein ... per.. shurkriya..thanx.. again ....sirji ..thanx for appriciating it... bye and take care.. namaste... . aman.. ji.... aaaree sirkar.. ab kya kahu yar..jab.. app jaise.. bade log hum jaisi ki peeth thap thapa te hai tooo aisa .. kuch dil mein se nikal hi jata hai...waise yar.. apne baat too sahi kahi yar.. hum jaiso .. ke yahan roshni... nai hoti hai.... aare.. yar.. thanx..again..sirji..thanx for appriciating it.... bye and take care.. namaste... .Priyaa.... ji.... hmm...dost ..apne baat too sahi ki yar.. ke zindagi ko anmool banane ki koshish karni chaiye... per kya faydaa.. woh koshish karne.. ki joo har samay nakamyab.. hoo yar.. .wiase.. hamdardi ke liye shukriya.. thanx..again ... yar..thanx for appriciating it.. bye and take care.. namaste... . varinder... ji.... aaaree.. .yar.. kya kahu .. kabar mein chain nai milta aur nai mout mill rahi hai iss liye ..socha kyu na short cut marlu...waise bhi na mein koi dharam mein maanta hun aur nai aisi batoon mein yar.. aaree yar... thanx. .for appriciating it.. sirkar.. bye and take car e... Zindagi Maut ke pehlu mein soo rai hai... Us bewafa se na pucho meri maut ki wajah... Woh to bus zamane ko dikhane ke liye roo rai hai... |
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2nd June 2003, 10:31 AM
hey hi
you have written it very nice. |
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wah |
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wah -
2nd June 2003, 04:17 PM
hi manish.
dard, unki yaad, sharaab, sigarate ke dhunve, jara dekhiye to sahi aashiq ki aashiqi unhe kaha tak laai he...manish bhai...come on...dost...tamaaru dhyan raakha ji.....jaan he to jahaan he dost. ok? basss aa rite lakhata rahi ne dil nu dard ochhu kare raakhasho evi aasha raakhu chhu. aavajo. |
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