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mere dar se uth kar agar ja rahe ho - 28th August 2014, 06:00 PM

mere dar se uth kar agar ja rahe ho
bata kar to jao kidhar ja rahe ho

bhari hain nami se tumhari bhi aankhen
bure haal men ho magar ja rahe ho

wafa hi wafa main ne ki hai hamesha
mujh hi se chura ke nazar ja rahe ho

zara main bhi janu ke kis ghum ko lekar
idhar ja rahe ho, udhar ja rahe ho

khuda se dua main eh hi maangta hun
udhar khush raho tum jidhar ja rahe ho

mujhe zher de kar abhi mar dalo
agar waqai chod kar ja rahe ho

hai Parwaaz ko bas isi baat ka ghum
ke apni qasam tod kar ja rahe ho

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28th August 2014, 07:49 PM

mujhe zher de kar abhi mar dalo
agar waqai chod kar ja rahe ho

waahhhhh

janaab ye faqat ghazal nahii ek daastaan hai..... ek afsaana... ek risaalaa hai......

bas noor hi noor jhalak rahaa hai mere bhai.. daad qubool kijiye...

duaago

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31st August 2014, 09:42 PM

wafa hi wafa main ne ki hai hamesha
mujh hi se chura ke nazar ja rahe ho

Waaaaaaaaaaaaaaahh! Mujeeb saheb,

Dard aur ishQ ka imtezaaj khoob kiya hai aap ne...
dherooN dherooN daad iss besh-qeemati ghazal ke liye!
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Likhte rahiye,

DuaooN ke saath,


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tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di!
kabhi fursat meiN sun lena, bohat ashaar baqi haiN...
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31st August 2014, 10:12 PM

mujib sahab .... ye ghazal zabaan ke meethe paani aur bayaan ki rawaani ka ek jharna hai jis ki ek ghoont le kar tishna-e-sukhan ko masarrat aur itmenaan ka ehsaas hota hai. agar baat karein is ke ehsaasaat ki, to waaah ... kayee kism ke jazbaat ... shikayat naarazgi supurdgi intesaab .... ka taana baana buna hai .... in sab jalwon se beintehaayee zauq-e-sukhan haasil hota hai. beshaq ek laajawaab pur-jamaal qalaam hai .... aap ko bahaut bahaut mubaarakbaad aur dheron dheron daad !!!!


safar ki daastaaN kehte agar manzil koyee paate
chalo kisse suna dete haiN kuchh pairoN ke chhaaloN ke

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2nd September 2014, 06:11 PM

Bohut bohut shukriya Sameer Saheb....Age bhi sath dete rahiyega. main inshallah age aur bhi kalam pesh karta rahun ga.

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2nd September 2014, 06:12 PM

Sorry for belated response Hassan Saheb.

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My dear Zarraa ji,

Jitni khoobsurat meri Ghazal hai usse bhi kahin ziyadah khoobsurat aap ka eh bayaan(Comment) hai.

I feel humble of being heard to your such amazing comment. It is so nice of you.

Lots of thanks to you.

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2nd September 2014, 06:43 PM

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mere dar se uth kar agar ja rahe ho
bata kar to jao kidhar ja rahe ho

bhari hain nami se tumhari bhi aankhen
bure haal men ho magar ja rahe ho

wafa hi wafa main ne ki hai hamesha
mujh hi se chura ke nazar ja rahe ho

zara main bhi janu ke kis ghum ko lekar
idhar ja rahe ho, udhar ja rahe ho

khuda se dua main eh hi maangta hun
udhar khush raho tum jidhar ja rahe ho

mujhe zher de kar abhi mar dalo
agar waqai chod kar ja rahe ho

hai Parwaaz ko bas isi baat ka ghum
ke apni qasam tod kar ja rahe ho
Wah wah! Mujeeb ji

Apne itna khoobsurat likha hai ki koi kahin bhi ja raha ho yahin aaker theher jaayega.

Likhte rahiye. Khush rahiye.


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3rd September 2014, 12:39 PM

Bohut bohut Shukriya

Hanste hue daad qubool kar raha hun.
Kyon ki is bhagti hui duniya men koi Ghazal sunkar theher jaye to bohut badi baat hogi.

Isi tarah saath dete rahiye.

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3rd September 2014, 02:23 PM

Oh very very sorry Nazneen ji.

Beintehah office ke kamon men phans gaya hun...is liye shayad acknowledgement dena bhool gaya.

Waise aap ko jaan kar taajub hoga ke peshe main Sr. Scientist hun ....magar ek zamane se zauq-e-shayeri rakhta hun....lekin bohut ziyada nahin.

Aap se mazrat chhata hun......is baat ka phir se shukriya ada karta hun ke aap ne meri Ghazal ko meticulously padha, samjha aur sincerely comment bhi kiya.

Aap ka nacheez dost
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Dear Nazneenji...aap se mukhatib ho kar ..ap ke message padh kar...kalam padhkar ek andruni khushi hoti hai mujhe....pata hai !!

main aksar ghazal isi purani beher ( rythm) "faulun faulun faulun faulun" men likhta hun.

Purani ( Traditional) beher is liye ke.....Jeegar Muradabadi ki ek mashhoor Ghazal bhi isi beher men hai.

Is Ghazal ka ek matla aur do sher .....arz kar raha hun..

jo ab bhi na takleef farmayiyega
to bas haath malte hi reh jayiyega

ham hi jab na honge to kya rang-e-mehfil
kise dekh kar aap sharmayiyega.

bhoolana hamara mubarak mubarak
magar shart eh hai na yaad ayiyega......By Jeegar Muradabadi



do filmi geet bhi isi beher main....aur bhi kai honge...

1. Ajee rooth kar ab kahan jayiyega....jahan jayiyega hamen payiyega

2. bane chhahe dushman zamana hamara..salamat rahe dostana hamara.

Ok. Cheers!
With best wishes.
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mere dar se uth kar agar ja rahe ho
bata kar to jao kidhar ja rahe ho

bhari hain nami se tumhari bhi aankhen
bure haal men ho magar ja rahe ho

wafa hi wafa main ne ki hai hamesha
mujh hi se chura ke nazar ja rahe ho

zara main bhi janu ke kis ghum ko lekar
idhar ja rahe ho, udhar ja rahe ho

khuda se dua main eh hi maangta hun
udhar khush raho tum jidhar ja rahe ho

mujhe zher de kar abhi mar dalo
agar waqai chod kar ja rahe ho

hai Parwaaz ko bas isi baat ka ghum
ke apni qasam tod kar ja rahe ho
Its simply awesome mujib ji......bas padte rahne ka dil karta hai.....aise hi likhte rahein...taki hame aapko padne ka aur seekhne ka mauka milta rahein....



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Bohut bohut shukriya Madhu ji.

Aap ki kavitayen bhi kafi asardaar hoti hain. Main to forum men dhoond dhoond kar aap ki kavita padhta hun. Bade khule dil se aap likhti hain...aur rawani bhi khoob achhi.

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