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Abhi agar jana to jaldi laut aana! -
3rd September 2009, 08:31 PM
Is nacheez ke qalam se ISHQ k jazbe se bharpor
aik mohabbat bhari Shayri Arz hai: Ghazal-cum-Poem Hur bar woh kehti, abhi agar jana to jaldi laut aana Hur bar main kehta na mumkin hai jaldi laut aana Yahi takrar roz ka mamool ban gayi Abhi agar jana to jaldi laut aana Jab Jab woh kehti, Samajh main jata PYAR sara, Samajh main jata KHIYAL sara, Samajh main jata QARAR sara, Samajh main jata INTEZAAR sara, K....Usko mujh se hai Pyar boht, tabhi to kahe jaldi laut aana Sab Kaam aadhey adhoray chor kar main mumkin banata "jaldi laut aana" Mere jaldi ghar laut aane se woh boht khush hoti k HSN ko hai khiyaal boht Jab k sach to yeh hai ke, Han! Mujhe hai apna khiyaal boht Agar main jaldi na laut jaon To main us ko karon yaad boht Ussi ke liye main ghar jaldi laut jaon Ke usko hota tha intezaar boht Ab woh nahi to kis liye Jaldi laut Jaon??? Ab to kaano mein sirf ik awaz gonjti hai "Abhi Agar Jana to Jaldi Laut Aana....." (Hassan Rasheed) Kesa laga, sab ko bataiye ga zaroor...  |
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bahut dard mahsoos hua aapki poetry meiN |
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bahut dard mahsoos hua aapki poetry meiN -
4th September 2009, 04:17 PM
Hassan ji.........jo muje mahsoos hua padkar bilkul sach sach kahuNgi, aapki poetry padkar sach mein aisa mahsoos ho raha tha ki poori poetry hi aisi pyar bhari hogi, par last ki teen lines dard se bharpoor thi aur palko.n ke koney bheego gaye.....aur kya kahuN.
.....Sunita Thakur..... यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया ....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए... 
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4th September 2009, 06:43 PM
Dear Zidd!
Hansna aur Rona to zindagi ke sath sath hai, Lekin khas kisi k liye hansna aur khas kisi k liye rona, koi koi kar sakta hai, to kuch batien ya kuch lamhe aisey hote hain, jinhen yaad kar k dukh hota hai, aur qalam khud ba khud uth jata hai aur kuch likh dia jata hai. Apna khiyaal rakhiye, HSN |
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4th September 2009, 07:01 PM
Sunita Ji,
Dukh, sukh to insaan k saath saath hain, kuch lamhey aise hote hain ke insaan ji bhar kar hansta hai, aur kuch lamhey aisey bhayanak bhi aa jate hain k insaan ji bhar kar ro deta bhi hai. Isi ka naam to zindagi hai.... to kuch baton kuch yadon ko yaad kar ke kuch likh dia jata hai, aur is tarah woh batien woh yadien aur woh lamhey hamesha hamesha k liye lafzon mein qaid ho jate hain..... Khush rahiye ga, HSN |
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7th September 2009, 11:55 PM
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Ijazat do k main bhi is qadar anmool ban jaon..... tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di! kabhi fursat meiN sun lena, bohat ashaar baqi haiN... ("Asad") |
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9th September 2009, 09:02 PM
Ajeeb tarah se nakaam rahey hum dono "Mohsin"
Woh mujhe chah na saki, main usey bhula na saka.... tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di! kabhi fursat meiN sun lena, bohat ashaar baqi haiN... ("Asad") |
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11th September 2009, 11:42 PM
Zabt karna gham chupana ab zarori ho gaya, Rotay rotay muskurana ab zarori ho gaya, Hath mera dekh k yeh mashwara dia us ne, Kuch lakeron ko mitaana ab zarori ho gaya.... tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di! kabhi fursat meiN sun lena, bohat ashaar baqi haiN... ("Asad") |
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13th September 2009, 01:12 AM
Tumhare baad baqi or to sub theek hai lekin...! Jahan DIL tha kabhi pehly wahan ab dard rehta hai .... tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di! kabhi fursat meiN sun lena, bohat ashaar baqi haiN... ("Asad") |
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17th September 2009, 05:52 PM
Mohabbat farz hoti ja rahi hai, kis ka qarz hoti ja rahi hai Badan ko chaat lay gi yakenan mohabbat marz hoti ja rahi hai....! tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di! kabhi fursat meiN sun lena, bohat ashaar baqi haiN... ("Asad") |
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29th September 2009, 02:30 PM
Tu ne abhi agar jana.......!
To Jaldi se laut aanaaaaaaaaaa.....>>>>>> tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di! kabhi fursat meiN sun lena, bohat ashaar baqi haiN... ("Asad") |
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2nd October 2009, 12:28 AM
Uska Shukrya kuch es tra se Ada karon
Wo kare Bewafai Mai Sada Wafa karon Meri Muhabat ne bas itna Sikhaya mujhe Khud Mit jaoon magar Us k lea DUAA karun tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di! kabhi fursat meiN sun lena, bohat ashaar baqi haiN... ("Asad") |
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7th October 2009, 01:22 PM
Hassan jee,
aap ki is poem ke ehesaas ne dil chhu liya... aur to kya kahuN?? bas aise hee likhte rahiye aur mahefil sajaate rahiye aap ki dost purvi  ~*~Kaash Dil ki aawaz mein aisa asar ho jaaye
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Shukar guzaar hon ke aap ko meray ehsasaat pasand aaye, Aur meri hosla afzai ki.... Umeed hai k aagay bhi aisay hi aap ka saath milta rahy ga, GOD BLESS YOU, tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di! kabhi fursat meiN sun lena, bohat ashaar baqi haiN... ("Asad") |
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8th October 2009, 07:57 PM
Tu rukhsat hua to hath mila kar nahi gaya Tu kyun gaya, yeh bhi bata kar nahi gaya Youn lag raha hai jesay abhi laut aao gay Kyun k tu jalta hua chirag bhuja kar ni gaya tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di! kabhi fursat meiN sun lena, bohat ashaar baqi haiN... ("Asad") |
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9th October 2009, 10:00 AM
Dil Ko Dil se Churaaya Aap ne
Door Rehte Hue Apna Banaya Aap ne Kabhi Bhool nahi Payein ge Hum Aap ko Yaad Rakhna bhi To Sikhaya Aap ne tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di! kabhi fursat meiN sun lena, bohat ashaar baqi haiN... ("Asad") |
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11th October 2009, 06:49 AM
hello hassan ji
kaise hai aap? bahot khub likha hai aap ne jo bhi main padh rahi thi mano mere nazaron ke saamne se ho kar guzar raha hai aisa lag raha tha....toh sochiyen kya asar kiya hai aap ki is poetry ne mujh par....sach mein behadh pasand aayi mujhe ye poetry keep up n keep writing Regards _______________________________________________ PRANEETA
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11th October 2009, 10:09 AM
simply a very nice and emotional creation from ur side hassan bhai..
shuruaat se hi isme pyar ki jhalak mil rahi thi... or aakhri line ne to aankh hi bhigo di.. sach me very nice thoughts aise hi likhte raho or khush raho.. |
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Pari Jii,, Main theek hon, Aap kesi hain??? Yeh to aap ki zehra nawazi hai k apko meri composition phartay hue sab kuch apni ankhon ke samnay hota mehsoos hua.... Aisay hi mera saath detay rahiye ga,,, Apna khiyaal rakhiye ga,, GOD BLESS YOU,, tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di! kabhi fursat meiN sun lena, bohat ashaar baqi haiN... ("Asad") |
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Vicky Jii,, Aap ko meray emotions pasand aaye, Teh-e-dil se shukria..... Ishq ka rutba to ishq karnay walay hi jantay hain Vicky Jiii... Aap aisay hi mera saath detay rehna... Apna khiyaal rakhiye,, GOD BLESS YOU,, tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di! kabhi fursat meiN sun lena, bohat ashaar baqi haiN... ("Asad") |
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23rd October 2009, 08:37 PM
Wo meharbaan hai tho ikraar kyoon nahin karta
Wo badgumaan hai tho souu baar aazmaaye muJhe Main apni zaat mein neelam ho raha hoon 'qateel' Gham-e-hayaat se keh do khareed laaye mujhe tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di! kabhi fursat meiN sun lena, bohat ashaar baqi haiN... ("Asad") |
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30th December 2009, 07:06 PM
wahhhhhhh..... Hassan ji.... bahut khoob janab... bahut hi simple lafzon me aapne apne ehsaas pesh kiye jo dil me utar gaye....yuhi is mehfil ko roshan karte rahiye.... khush rahiye....
 "LAMHA"mujhko acchaa nahiiN lagtaa ko’ii hamnaam teraa , ko’ii tujhsaa ho to phir naam bhii tujhsaa rakhe.... |
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Mere ehsaas kisi k dil meiN utar jayen, boht badi baat hai mere liye...... Saath dete rahiye ga,, DuaooN k saath ijaazat, Faqat,,, tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di! kabhi fursat meiN sun lena, bohat ashaar baqi haiN... ("Asad") |
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7th April 2010, 12:10 PM
Hassan ji,
Deep feelings in your words. Keep writing and keep smiling! Mann |
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Daad is pazeeraayi k liye be-had shukriyaa.... Saath dete rahiye ga,, DuaooN k saath ijaazat, Faqat,, tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di! kabhi fursat meiN sun lena, bohat ashaar baqi haiN... ("Asad") |
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radhe radhe ishk par bahut pyari kavita likhi hai ... ehsaas khoobsurat lage .. dil se daad hazir hai ... yuuhi likhte rahiye ... Aapka Apna Ishk 'इश्क' के बदले इश्क चाहना तिजारत है इज़हार किससे करें महबूब तो दिल में है email: rkm179@gmail.com 
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Itni chuppi huii nazm ko manzar-aam per laanay aur paseendeedgi k liye main aap ka boht mashkoor hooN... Aise hi saath qaayim rakhiye ga, DuaooN k saath ijaazat, tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di! kabhi fursat meiN sun lena, bohat ashaar baqi haiN... ("Asad") |
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Khaak alfazooN ko itnii pazeeraayii dene k liye be-had shukar-guzaar hooN... Aise hii saath dete rahiye ga, DuaooN k saath ijaazat, tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di! kabhi fursat meiN sun lena, bohat ashaar baqi haiN... ("Asad") |
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Hassan bhai ummeed karta hoon khush honge aap... muaafi chahunga ke is kalaam pe deree se nazar gai meri.. lekin jab padha to dil me dhaDkaa sa kuch lagaa... iski adaaygi jis tarah hui hai wo kaabile tareef hai.. aur har lafz beintehaan muhabbat se bhara huaa hai... mujh haqeer ki taraf se mubarakbaad kubool karen.. khush rahiye..
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Shaad Bhai, Aap ki tareef sir ankhooN per... Aise hi saath dete rahiye, DuaooN k saath ijaazat, tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di! kabhi fursat meiN sun lena, bohat ashaar baqi haiN... ("Asad") |
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Thanks a lot for appreciation and your valuable time... Actually I just described the love between two true lover souls, the bond between them, the bond of love, which can't be broken... Yeah it's too real but in terms of feelings that how you respond to that feelings .. if it's seems so real to you then, yes, you are a true lover. that's just my opinion, you can argue..  Take care,, Regards,, tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di! kabhi fursat meiN sun lena, bohat ashaar baqi haiN... ("Asad") |
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 i think 2nd is better which may suits you... Thanks again for appreciating my opinion. tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di! kabhi fursat meiN sun lena, bohat ashaar baqi haiN... ("Asad") |
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Bahut khoob..... Khush rahiye..... Likhte rahiye.... अर्ज मेरी एे खुदा क्या सुन सकेगा तू कभी आसमां को बस इसी इक आस में तकते रहे madhu.. |
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Hassan ji !!!!! bahut achche khayaal aur andaaz-e-sukhan ki peshkash thi ye poetry aapki........sawaal jo jawaab ban ke bhi sawaal hi reh gaya......."Jaldi laut aana"........ke liye aapko bahut bahut mubarakbaad..... Reps added..... Magar wo apni hi fitrat se hardam haar jaata hai !! (Pankaj Mishra 'Nawaab') |
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Aap ki khaak alfaazoN ko itni tarjeeH bohat khushi ka sabab hai mere liye! Aagay bhi aise hi saath ki umeed rahe gi, Apna khayaal rakhiye ga, DuaooN ke saath, tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di! kabhi fursat meiN sun lena, bohat ashaar baqi haiN... ("Asad") |
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