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18th July 2010, 11:52 AM
Namaskaar Dosto.N ! Aj Bazm me.N sharaab par kuch alfaaz baya.N karne ja rahi hooN. ummeed hai aap tak pahuchegi meri ye "Sharab"... Is ghazal ko keval sharab ke sandarbh me.N na paDh kar uske saNdarbh me.N padhiye jise aap sabse jyada chahte haiN..... success...happiness...love...friendship....SDC...y a aur kuch.... "MaiN sharabi hooN mujhe thoDi sharab de do, Acchi nahi to kya hua,ghatiya bekar de do... Jo dekhta hai meri oar GhraNa ki badboo aati hai use, jara nighahe.N uhta kar apni thoDi khushboo udhar de do... Kal jab maiN sahi tha tab to mujhpe haNste the, Aj jab galat hooN to apni ek hasi.N shaam de do... Tum chaho to aaj chhoD du maiN isse, Zindgi bhar sath nibhane ka vada de do... Har kisi ne dutkara mujhe is moD pe la khaDa kiya, Tut raha hooN har pal jara palko.N ka sahara de do... Mana ke yeh sharab maar dalegi mujhe ek din, Gar na piyu.N toh amar hone ka vishvas de do... MaiN sharabi hooN mujhe thodi sharab de do..." ~Ritu~ Life smiles at you when you are happy.. But, Life salutes you when you make others happy!!" # Feel The Difference # |
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20th July 2010, 12:48 PM
wow ritu jee, aap sharaab pe likhengi umeed na thi. Kya khoob likha hai maza aa gaya. Nasha ho gaya hai mujhe padkar.
एक हाथ में दिल उनके एक हाथ में खंजर था चेहरे पे दोस्त का मुखौटा अजीब सा मंजर था Arvind Saxena Ph. No. 7905856220 |
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20th July 2010, 01:03 PM
wow ritu jee, aap sharaab pe likhengi umeed na thi. Kya khoob likha hai maza aa gaya. Nasha ho gaya hai mujhe padkar. Keep it up.
एक हाथ में दिल उनके एक हाथ में खंजर था चेहरे पे दोस्त का मुखौटा अजीब सा मंजर था Arvind Saxena Ph. No. 7905856220 |
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20th July 2010, 09:36 PM
hmmmmmmmm.......
acchchaaaaaa hai  |
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21st July 2010, 07:57 PM
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yeh kisliye?? Life smiles at you when you are happy.. But, Life salutes you when you make others happy!!" # Feel The Difference # |
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22nd July 2010, 02:17 AM
Ritu jee AadaaB!
Haaaaannnnnn.........  ,............ ritu jee aap bhi yahaaN aa gayi ab to gine chune hi log bache hoge yahaaN is mehfil se ........  Achchi koshish hai ........ per ise sharabi thread meiN post karne jaise sirf do sher lage mujhe ...... Shayad Zidd sahab isiliye hase......... Wel is achchi koshish per daad hazir hai..........  Khush rahiye..... Khuda Hafez...... 
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25th July 2010, 12:02 PM
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Sameer jee, bina piye likhi thi shayad isliye jyada relevent nahi.N hai 'sharab' se.. next time isse acchi likhne ki koshish karuNgi. Waqt dene ka tah-e-dil se shukriya. God Bless You, Aapki Dost ritu Life smiles at you when you are happy.. But, Life salutes you when you make others happy!!" # Feel The Difference # |
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25th July 2010, 05:36 PM
Wow ritu ji!
Itna zabardast lagaav sharaab se! aapkii sharab ham tak pahunch gayii hai. bhejne ka bahut bahut shukriya. abhii toh filhaal iskii bekhudii ka lutf utha raha hoon.. .... |
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30th July 2010, 02:50 PM
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God Bless You. Apki Dost Ritu Life smiles at you when you are happy.. But, Life salutes you when you make others happy!!" # Feel The Difference # |
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19th March 2011, 02:31 AM
bahut hi achi rachna hai. padh kar acha laga.
thanks for sharing...................................... |
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14th June 2011, 11:27 AM
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Shukriya Pali jee. God Bless you Keep coming.. Life smiles at you when you are happy.. But, Life salutes you when you make others happy!!" # Feel The Difference # |
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16th June 2011, 04:55 AM
Adaab Mohtrma Ritu Sahiba!
I'll be frank..I liked the spirit behind the penning this work of yours! Khush Rahein! |
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24th November 2011, 02:12 PM
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Thanks a lot EnigmA!! God Bless You Regards, Ritu Life smiles at you when you are happy.. But, Life salutes you when you make others happy!!" # Feel The Difference # |
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taareef -
13th December 2011, 04:30 PM
Ritu Ji
achaa likha hai aapne. http://www.anidaan.@gmail.com All right reserved with Poet@Ajay nidaan  Kisi ek chehare ki talash me bhatakti rahee zindagi par mila nahi zindagi ko apni pahchaan ka chehara.
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13th December 2011, 09:07 PM
Okay.. on a frank and honest note, I didn't understand anything and it was bit vague. Things were not connecting fine. Thoughts are confused. Ritu, you have a rhythm. Try to think of short but clean thoughts. Try to write and then read and then rework on your works. You'd love to see your own final creation.
Keep it up... ****** Your attitude towards life decides Life's attitude towards you... |
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14th December 2011, 12:36 AM
Hello Ritu jee !!
Aapne jo apni nazm se pahle likha ki ise kis sandarbh mein dekhna hai, agar mai us sandarbh mein dekhta hoon to mujhe sab theek dikhta hai ... Sivaay ek sher ke jisme thodi confusion si ho gayi hai shayad Kal jab maiN sahi tha tab to mujhpe haNste the, (Ek tarah se matlab ye ki Sahi tha to log majjak banaate the, ya sath mein haste the? ) Aj jab galat hooN to apni ek hasi.N shaam de do... (Aaj jab galat hoon, to sath de do, matlab ye ki koi sath nahi hai tumhi sath de do) To saara mudda pahli line ke meaning pe atak gaya hai ... uska meaning aisa nikal raha hai ki majjak banate the, us se doosri line ka sense nahi ban raha.... Aur agar pahli line ka matlab ye hai ki jab mai sahi tha to log mere sath haste the, to aapne jo word choose kiya hai ki "mujhpar haste the" wo thoda galat ho gaya hai .... Ye meri soch hui jo mujhe padh ke lagi ... Aapne kya soch ke likhi ho sakta hai kuch alag ho ... please don't mind .... But mujhe theme aapki sahi lagi, jo mai samajh saka, bas ek sher thoda confusing hai ... Good Work ... Keep writing ... :-) ------------------------------------ Men may come , Men may go .. But i will go on forever ... :-) |
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31st December 2011, 01:26 PM
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God Bless You, Life smiles at you when you are happy.. But, Life salutes you when you make others happy!!" # Feel The Difference # |
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11th January 2012, 04:52 PM
Hazaron sal nergis apni benoori pe roti hai !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Adab Mai bilkul naya hun aur likhney ke bajay pedhney or dusron ko sunen kar hosla badahney ke kam aaunga!!!!!! Ameeen |
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15th January 2012, 02:27 PM
Maiykada chod kar khaaN jayen
Jamaana Badaa Khrab Hai Sakee NM |
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15th January 2012, 02:34 PM
Huusn waaloN ka ehtram Karo Kuch to duniya Mein nek kam karo
Sheikh ayeN hein bavaju hokar , ab to piney ka intejam karo NM |
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15th January 2012, 02:39 PM
MaiN Teri Mast Neegaahee ka Bharam Rakh Luunga
Hosj AAya To keh doonga Mujeh Hosh NaheeN NM |
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26th July 2012, 04:24 PM
Teri aankhon ke ye jo pyale hain,
Meri andheri raaton ke ujale hain, Peeta hoon jaam par jaam tere naam ka, Hum to sharabi….be-sharab wale hain |
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