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6th May 2010, 01:43 PM
apni barbaadi ka jashan yu mana rahe hai hum
tute hue rishte ko ab bhi nibha rahe hai hum
bhul chuke hai sara alaam unki mohabaat mein
khudgarz par apni chahatein luta rahe hai hum
meri wafao ka janaza nikle toh ik zamana hua
phir kyu is jhute pyaar ko nibha rahe hai hum
vo samajh na paye kabhi mere dil ki jazbaaton ko
unse hi ab apni jazbaaton ko chupa rahe hai hum
aye khuda kis fursat mein likhi tune meri kismat
badnaseebi ki lakeer ab tak mita rahe hai hum
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Kaash k khamoshi bhi ek zabaaN hoti
Main dekta rehta unhe aur haal-e-dil bayaaN hota
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apni barbaadi ka jashan yu mana rahe hai hum
tute hue rishte ko ab bhi nibha rahe hai hum
bhul chuke hai sara alaam unki mohabaat mein
khudgarz par apni chahatein luta rahe hai hum
meri wafao ka janaza nikle toh ik zamana hua
phir kyu is jhute pyaar ko nibha rahe hai hum
vo samajh na paye kabhi mere dil ki jazbaaton ko
unse hi ab apni jazbaaton ko chupa rahe hai hum
aye khuda kis fursat mein likhi tune meri kismat
badnaseebi ki lakeer ab tak mita rahe hai hum
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praneeta jee
radhe radhe
bahut khoob ahsaas hai pasand aaye sabhi ashar achhe hai daad dil se
aise hi likhti rahen
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6th May 2010, 03:50 PM
apni barbaadi ka jashan yu mana rahe hai hum
tute hue rishte ko ab bhi nibha rahe hai hum
bhul chuke hai sara alaam unki mohabaat mein
khudgarz par apni chahatein luta rahe hai hum
meri wafao ka janaza nikle toh ik zamana hua
phir kyu is jhute pyaar ko nibha rahe hai hum
vo samajh na paye kabhi mere dil ki jazbaaton ko
unse hi ab apni jazbaaton ko chupa rahe hai hum
aye khuda kis fursat mein likhi tune meri kismat
badnaseebi ki lakeer ab tak mita rahe hai hum[/quote]
very nice pareentaa
badnaseebi ki lakeer ab tak mita rahe hai hum
this one is outstanding
meri wafao ka janaza nikle toh ik zamana hua
phir kyu is jhute pyaar ko nibha rahe hai hum
and this one also
keep it up
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6th May 2010, 04:13 PM
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apni barbaadi ka jashan yu mana rahe hai hum
tute hue rishte ko ab bhi nibha rahe hai hum
bhul chuke hai sara alaam unki mohabaat mein
khudgarz par apni chahatein luta rahe hai hum
meri wafao ka janaza nikle toh ik zamana hua
phir kyu is jhute pyaar ko nibha rahe hai hum
vo samajh na paye kabhi mere dil ki jazbaaton ko
unse hi ab apni jazbaaton ko chupa rahe hai hum
aye khuda kis fursat mein likhi tune meri kismat
badnaseebi ki lakeer ab tak mita rahe hai hum
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very nice pareentaa
badnaseebi ki lakeer ab tak mita rahe hai hum
this one is outstanding
meri wafao ka janaza nikle toh ik zamana hua
phir kyu is jhute pyaar ko nibha rahe hai hum
and this one also
keep it up
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REALLY NICE.... WORDS ARE VERY SOFT
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6th May 2010, 05:38 PM
Parineeta je aadaab!
Bae dino bad aapne kuch likha hai.....
Aur bahut khoob likha hai.....
sabhi sher achche lage.....
Likhate rhaiye,
Khush rahiye
khuda Hafez....
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6th May 2010, 05:49 PM
Praneeta Ji....Namaste ! aapki arse baad nayi ghazal padhi.....bahut accha laga.....magar shaadi ke baad itna dard.....sab theek toh hai na......bas yeh dard sirf ghazal tak rahe...aapke jeevan me nahi......yahi duaa hai....
itne din baad bhi .....aapki ghazal me woh hi gehraai aur purasar adaayegi kaayam hai....saaf bayaani ghazal me khaas nazar aai....har ashaar me be-intaaha dard .....dil ko bahut gehre tak chhu gaya.....
yeh do sheyr toh mujhe bahut kamaal ke lage.....
meri wafao ka janaza nikle toh ik zamana hua
phir kyu is jhute pyaar ko nibha rahe hai hum
aye khuda kis fursat mein likhi tune meri kismat
badnaseebi ki lakeer ab tak mita rahe hai hum
dil se daad hazir hai....qubuul farmaayen....
yunhi behtar kalaam ke saath humesha aati rahiye....khush rahen....
apna theek se khayal rakhen....
duaaon ke saath.....
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6th May 2010, 08:11 PM
aye khuda kis fursat mein likhi tune meri kismat
badnaseebi ki lakeer ab tak mita rahe hai hum
ji.....Very nice lines...... !
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Parneeta ji namaskaar bahut dard vyaN kar rehi hai aap ki yeh rachna.....
achi lagi.....daad hazir hai.
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praneeta jee
radhe radhe
bahut khoob ahsaas hai pasand aaye sabhi ashar achhe hai daad dil se
aise hi likhti rahen
duaon ke saath
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apni barbaadi ka jashan yu mana rahe hai hum
tute hue rishte ko ab bhi nibha rahe hai hum
bhul chuke hai sara alaam unki mohabaat mein
khudgarz par apni chahatein luta rahe hai hum
meri wafao ka janaza nikle toh ik zamana hua
phir kyu is jhute pyaar ko nibha rahe hai hum
vo samajh na paye kabhi mere dil ki jazbaaton ko
unse hi ab apni jazbaaton ko chupa rahe hai hum
aye khuda kis fursat mein likhi tune meri kismat
badnaseebi ki lakeer ab tak mita rahe hai hum
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very nice pareentaa
badnaseebi ki lakeer ab tak mita rahe hai hum
this one is outstanding
meri wafao ka janaza nikle toh ik zamana hua
phir kyu is jhute pyaar ko nibha rahe hai hum
and this one also
keep it up
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thnx vikas ji
keep reading n giving ur invaluable opinion
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very nice pareentaa
badnaseebi ki lakeer ab tak mita rahe hai hum
this one is outstanding
meri wafao ka janaza nikle toh ik zamana hua
phir kyu is jhute pyaar ko nibha rahe hai hum
and this one also
keep it up
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shukriya kwahish sahab
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apni barbaadi ka jashan yu mana rahe hai hum
tute hue rishte ko ab bhi nibha rahe hai hum
bhul chuke hai sara alaam unki mohabaat mein
khudgarz par apni chahatein luta rahe hai hum
meri wafao ka janaza nikle toh ik zamana hua
phir kyu is jhute pyaar ko nibha rahe hai hum
vo samajh na paye kabhi mere dil ki jazbaaton ko
unse hi ab apni jazbaaton ko chupa rahe hai hum
aye khuda kis fursat mein likhi tune meri kismat
badnaseebi ki lakeer ab tak mita rahe hai hum
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ye sher aapka praneeta ji
aye khuda kis fursat mein likhi tune meri kismat
badnaseebi ki lakeer ab tak mita rahe hai hum
itna dhakad raha ki kya batauu...
bahut khoob
aur
tamaam ghazal acchi lagi aapki
dad hazir hai
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8th May 2010, 09:51 PM
pari ...
tumne is martba bohat hi accha likha hai ... mujhe behad khushi hai tumhe yahan dekh ke ... meri daad aapke naam
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KunaaL (Sifar).........
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Daad qubuul karen parneeta ji..
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Praneeta Ji....Namaste ! aapki arse baad nayi ghazal padhi.....bahut accha laga.....magar shaadi ke baad itna dard.....sab theek toh hai na......bas yeh dard sirf ghazal tak rahe...aapke jeevan me nahi......yahi duaa hai....
itne din baad bhi .....aapki ghazal me woh hi gehraai aur purasar adaayegi kaayam hai....saaf bayaani ghazal me khaas nazar aai....har ashaar me be-intaaha dard .....dil ko bahut gehre tak chhu gaya.....
yeh do sheyr toh mujhe bahut kamaal ke lage.....
meri wafao ka janaza nikle toh ik zamana hua
phir kyu is jhute pyaar ko nibha rahe hai hum
aye khuda kis fursat mein likhi tune meri kismat
badnaseebi ki lakeer ab tak mita rahe hai hum
dil se daad hazir hai....qubuul farmaayen....
yunhi behtar kalaam ke saath humesha aati rahiye....khush rahen....
apna theek se khayal rakhen....
duaaon ke saath.....
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aap ke response ka shukriya
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yuhi saath banaye rakhiyen
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Ghazal tou achi hai par.................
Shaadi ke kuch mahino ke baad hi aisi ghazal........"Confused'
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aye khuda kis fursat mein likhi tune meri kismat
badnaseebi ki lakeer ab tak mita rahe hai hum
ji.....Very nice lines...... !
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5th June 2010, 11:53 AM
Simple but effective word........Nice work Praneeta jee
meri wafao ka janaza nikle toh ik zamana hua
phir kyu is jhute pyaar ko nibha rahe hai hum
Jhoot kehdu yeh meri fitrat me nahi shamil
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vo samajh na paye kabhi mere dil ki jazbaaton ko
unse hi ab apni jazbaaton ko chupa rahe hai hum
Good one praneeta...keep writing.....
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achi lagi.....daad hazir hai.
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ye sher aapka praneeta ji
aye khuda kis fursat mein likhi tune meri kismat
badnaseebi ki lakeer ab tak mita rahe hai hum
itna dhakad raha ki kya batauu...
bahut khoob
aur
tamaam ghazal acchi lagi aapki
dad hazir hai
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pari ...
tumne is martba bohat hi accha likha hai ... mujhe behad khushi hai tumhe yahan dekh ke ... meri daad aapke naam
Kunaal
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Daad qubuul karen parneeta ji..
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daad qabul hai
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Ghazal tou achi hai par.................
Shaadi ke kuch mahino ke baad hi aisi ghazal........"Confused'
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confuse hone ki koi zarurat nahi
bas ghazal ko enjoy kare
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Simple but effective word........Nice work Praneeta jee
meri wafao ka janaza nikle toh ik zamana hua
phir kyu is jhute pyaar ko nibha rahe hai hum
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vo samajh na paye kabhi mere dil ki jazbaaton ko
unse hi ab apni jazbaaton ko chupa rahe hai hum
Good one praneeta...keep writing.....
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thanks Zainy thanks for your response dear
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