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27th May 2009, 11:22 AM
Bazm ko ek baar fir is nacheez ka salaam, muddatoN baad nazm sa kuch likhne ki kosish ki hai umeed karta hooN jyada niraash nahiN kiya hoga, khaamiyoN ke liye maafi ka talabgaar hooN...!!
Waqt ki saakh se chand lamheN churaa loon, fir itminaan se khud ko sambhaalooN,, koi to bataaye mujhe is jahaaN men, marz-e-mohabbat ki kaun si davaa loon,, koi nahi milta hai isme sivaa tere, ab tu hi bata dil-e-khangushta ko aur kitna khangalooN,, mohabbat jab hui thi, tab to roka na tune, ab kaise ise duniyaa se chipaa loon,, waqt ki saakh se chand lamheN churaa loon………….
Mohabbat ki maiyyat pe ro raha tha,
Ashqon se tere likhe khat bhigo raha tha….
Haalat-e-ishq dekh ke dang reh gaya,
Mehboob ka daaman jo tang reh gaya.
Jis khusboo ke peeche deewana tha main,
Wo phool hi ab fakat ek rang reh gaya.
Us khusboo ki yaad me kho raha tha,
Ashqon se tere likhe khat bhigo raha tha….
Ashq palkoN ko sajaayeN to kya kareN,
SaaNseN jism ko sataayeN to kya kareN,
AansuoN me baha bhula dete ghum unka,
Gir ke tasveer unki banaayeN to kya kareN….
Un tasveeroN ko kaaNdhe pe dho raha tha,
Ashqon se tere likhe khat bhigo raha tha….
Zakhm, ashq, zillat aur hum,
Rahe saath jaise humdum..
Socha tha thoda aur jee looN,
Par tumne de di apni kasam.
Un kasmoN aur vaadoN pe ro raha tha,
Ashqon se tere likhe khat bhigo raha tha….
Mohabbat ki maiyyat pe ro raha tha,
Ashqon se tere likhe khat bhigo raha tha….
HaaN sach apni maiyyat pe ro raha tha..........
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27th May 2009, 11:30 AM
Mohabbat ki maiyyat pe ro raha tha,
Ashqon se tere likhe khat bhigo raha tha….
Haalat-e-ishq dekh ke dang reh gaya,
Mehboob ka daaman jo tang reh gaya.
Jis khusboo ke peeche deewana tha main,
Wo phool hi ab fakat ek rang reh gaya.
Waah kya baat hai .....
Us khusboo ki yaad me kho raha tha,
beautiful .........
Ashqon se tere likhe khat bhigo raha tha….
Ashq palkoN ko sajaayeN to kya kareN,
SaaNseN jism ko sataayeN to kya kareN,
AansuoN me baha bhula dete ghum unka,
Gir ke tasveer unki banaayeN to kya kareN….
Katl .......... yaar katl .....
Un tasveeroN ko kaaNdhe pe dho raha tha,
Ashqon se tere likhe khat bhigo raha tha….
Zakhm, ashq, zillat aur hum,
Rahe saath jaise humdum..
Socha tha thoda aur jee looN,
Par tumne de di apni kasam.
best of poem ..............
Apne dil ke ukdoN ko piroo raha tha,
but is baar yeh line poori tarah justify ni lag rahi ... jo upar ki 4 line ka
conclusion ho
tumhari nazm mai khaas yahi baat hai ki isme nazm ke jo do part hai . poori tarah sahi hai ....
pahli 4 line ... jisme jo do sher ko job ke banti hai... woh poora mukamal hai aur usme 5th line . jo 4 line aur most of last 2 line ko ek dam " Triveni " style bana de ..
keep it maan .... good going
bahut dino baad yaha mukammal poem padhi hai
Mohabbat ki maiyyat pe ro raha tha,
Ashqon se tere likhe khat bhigo raha tha….
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27th May 2009, 11:44 AM
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Bazm ko ek baar fir is nacheez ka salaam, muddatoN baad nazm sa kuch likhne ki kosish ki hai umeed karta hooN jyada niraash nahiN kiya hoga, khaamiyoN ke liye maafi ka talabgaar hooN...!!
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Jis khusboo ke peeche deewana tha main,
Wo phool hi ab fakat ek rang reh gaya.
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Ghayal Sahab,
lajawaab likha hai aapne...gehre ehsaas the...dil se daad kubool kijeye..
upar quote kiya gaya ash'ar to mujhe bahot pasand aaya...lekin aapko nahin lagta ki uski yeh soorat honi chahiye:
Jis ki khusboo ke peeche deewana tha main,
Wo phool hi ab fakat ek rang reh gaya.
yunhin likhte rahiye khush rahiye..
aapka dost,
Pradhyuman - Bismil
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gore ghareeban hai ye 'bismil', kyun tu naashaad nazar aata hai?
musht-e-khaak hai basi yahan, bata kahan fuwaad nazar aata hai?
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27th May 2009, 11:57 AM
Ghaayal bhaa'ii:
namaste!
arse baad fir se aapko paRhne kaa mauQaa milaa.. KhuShii hu'ii.. aik achchhi peShkaSh !
YuuNhi liKhate raheN aage bhee ! daad!
KhuSh raheN... apnaa Khayaal raKheN
duaaoN ke saath ijaazat
aapka
~ Dhaval
*~*Dhaval*~*....Ek Ehsaas...
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27th May 2009, 03:23 PM
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Originally Posted by janumanu
Mohabbat ki maiyyat pe ro raha tha,
Ashqon se tere likhe khat bhigo raha tha….
Haalat-e-ishq dekh ke dang reh gaya,
Mehboob ka daaman jo tang reh gaya.
Jis khusboo ke peeche deewana tha main,
Wo phool hi ab fakat ek rang reh gaya.
Waah kya baat hai .....
Us khusboo ki yaad me kho raha tha,
beautiful .........
Ashqon se tere likhe khat bhigo raha tha….
Ashq palkoN ko sajaayeN to kya kareN,
SaaNseN jism ko sataayeN to kya kareN,
AansuoN me baha bhula dete ghum unka,
Gir ke tasveer unki banaayeN to kya kareN….
Katl .......... yaar katl .....
Un tasveeroN ko kaaNdhe pe dho raha tha,
Ashqon se tere likhe khat bhigo raha tha….
Zakhm, ashq, zillat aur hum,
Rahe saath jaise humdum..
Socha tha thoda aur jee looN,
Par tumne de di apni kasam.
best of poem ..............
Apne dil ke ukdoN ko piroo raha tha,
but is baar yeh line poori tarah justify ni lag rahi ... jo upar ki 4 line ka
conclusion ho
tumhari nazm mai khaas yahi baat hai ki isme nazm ke jo do part hai . poori tarah sahi hai ....
pahli 4 line ... jisme jo do sher ko job ke banti hai... woh poora mukamal hai aur usme 5th line . jo 4 line aur most of last 2 line ko ek dam " Triveni " style bana de ..
keep it maan .... good going
bahut dino baad yaha mukammal poem padhi hai
Mohabbat ki maiyyat pe ro raha tha,
Ashqon se tere likhe khat bhigo raha tha….
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27th May 2009, 03:30 PM
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Bazm ko ek baar fir is nacheez ka salaam, muddatoN baad nazm sa kuch likhne ki kosish ki hai umeed karta hooN jyada niraash nahiN kiya hoga, khaamiyoN ke liye maafi ka talabgaar hooN...!!
Waqt ki saakh se chand lamheN churaa loon, fir itminaan se khud ko sambhaalooN,, koi to bataaye mujhe is jahaaN men, marz-e-mohabbat ki kaun si davaa loon,, koi nahi milta hai isme sivaa tere, ab tu hi bata dil-e-khangushta ko aur kitna khangalooN,, mohabbat jab hui thi, tab to roka na tune, ab kaise ise duniyaa se chipaa loon,, waqt ki saakh se chand lamheN churaa loon………….
Mohabbat ki maiyyat pe ro raha tha,
Ashqon se tere likhe khat bhigo raha tha….
Haalat-e-ishq dekh ke dang reh gaya,
Mehboob ka daaman jo tang reh gaya.
Jis khusboo ke peeche deewana tha main,
Wo phool hi ab fakat ek rang reh gaya.
Us khusboo ki yaad me kho raha tha,
Ashqon se tere likhe khat bhigo raha tha….
Ashq palkoN ko sajaayeN to kya kareN,
SaaNseN jism ko sataayeN to kya kareN,
AansuoN me baha bhula dete ghum unka,
Gir ke tasveer unki banaayeN to kya kareN….
Un tasveeroN ko kaaNdhe pe dho raha tha,
Ashqon se tere likhe khat bhigo raha tha….
Zakhm, ashq, zillat aur hum,
Rahe saath jaise humdum..
Socha tha thoda aur jee looN,
Par tumne de di apni kasam.
Un kasmoN aur vaadoN pe ro raha tha,
Ashqon se tere likhe khat bhigo raha tha….
Mohabbat ki maiyyat pe ro raha tha,
Ashqon se tere likhe khat bhigo raha tha….
HaaN sach apni maiyyat pe ro raha tha..........
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Luckyjee,
Jab bhi aap bazm mei.N aate hai... chha jate hai.......Yeh lines mujhe behad pasand aayi hai...
Ashq palkoN ko sajaayeN to kya kareN,
SaaNseN jism ko sataayeN to kya kareN,
AansuoN me baha bhula dete ghum unka,
Gir ke tasveer unki banaayeN to kya kareN….
Yunhi likhte rahiye aur.. Bazm roushan karte rahiye
Khush rahiye
AAp ki Dost
Purvi
~*~Kaash Dil ki aawaz mein aisa asar ho jaaye
Jise Hum Yaad karte hai use Khabar ho jaaye ~*~
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27th May 2009, 04:33 PM
Lucky jii Aadab,
Jii janab aapki nazam bhi ghayal kar dene wali hai aapke takhallus ki tarha...
Janab wakai aapka ghayal andaz pasand aata hai mujhe, jabki main jyada
dard per likhane ka aur padhne ka shauk nahi rakhata, per phir bhi aapke
kalam padhne ko jii chahata hai yeh baat mere khud samajh nahi aati.....
Bahut hi umda khayal hai behad dil ko chirne wale lafz lage, yunhi likhate rahiye..
Khush rahiye duaOn ke sath... Daad kabool kijiye..
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27th May 2009, 05:37 PM
ghayal dost
Hope and wish you are fine and doing well.
aap ki nazm bohat zabardast hai, bharpoor daad qubool karein.
Aaj yahan aa ker bohat khushi hui, aap aur maikash donon saathiyon ke khoobsurat kalam parhne ko mile.
is tarah ki takhliqaat yahan likhi jaati raheen to yaqeenan hem jaise bekaar magar shayr o adab se raghbat rakhne wale loag phir yahan se mustafeez hona shru karein ge.
God bless you.
musharrafhusain
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28th May 2009, 01:36 AM
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Ghayal Sahab,
lajawaab likha hai aapne...gehre ehsaas the...dil se daad kubool kijeye..
upar quote kiya gaya ash'ar to mujhe bahot pasand aaya...lekin aapko nahin lagta ki uski yeh soorat honi chahiye:
Jiski khusboo ke peeche deewana tha main,
Wo phool hi ab fakat ek rang reh gaya.
yunhin likhte rahiye khush rahiye..
aapka dost,
Pradhyuman - Bismil
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janaab ye humari khushnaseebi ki aapko humare jazbaat pasand aaye umeed karta huN ki aap aage v yuNhi humara saath nibhaate raheNge......!!
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28th May 2009, 03:11 PM
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Ghaayal bhaa'ii:
namaste!
arse baad fir se aapko paRhne kaa mauQaa milaa.. KhuShii hu'ii.. aik achchhi peShkaSh !
YuuNhi liKhate raheN aage bhee ! daad!
KhuSh raheN... apnaa Khayaal raKheN
duaaoN ke saath ijaazat
aapka
~ Dhaval
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Shukriya dhaval bhai. kaise haN aap? umeed karta huN aage v yuNhi mulaakaat ho jaayegi...!!
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29th May 2009, 11:23 AM
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Luckyjee,
Jab bhi aap bazm mei.N aate hai... chha jate hai.......Yeh lines mujhe behad pasand aayi hai...
Ashq palkoN ko sajaayeN to kya kareN,
SaaNseN jism ko sataayeN to kya kareN,
AansuoN me baha bhula dete ghum unka,
Gir ke tasveer unki banaayeN to kya kareN….
Yunhi likhte rahiye aur.. Bazm roushan karte rahiye
Khush rahiye
AAp ki Dost
Purvi
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Purvi ji, ye to bas aap logoN ki duaa hai jo hum bhoole bhatke der saber aa hi jaate haiN, bas yahi guzarish rahegi k aap aage v yuNhi is paagal ke jazbaat padhti rahiye...!!
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29th May 2009, 11:52 AM
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Bazm ko ek baar fir is nacheez ka salaam, muddatoN baad nazm sa kuch likhne ki kosish ki hai umeed karta hooN jyada niraash nahiN kiya hoga, khaamiyoN ke liye maafi ka talabgaar hooN...!!
Waqt ki saakh se chand lamheN churaa loon, fir itminaan se khud ko sambhaalooN,, koi to bataaye mujhe is jahaaN men, marz-e-mohabbat ki kaun si davaa loon,, koi nahi milta hai isme sivaa tere, ab tu hi bata dil-e-khangushta ko aur kitna khangalooN,, mohabbat jab hui thi, tab to roka na tune, ab kaise ise duniyaa se chipaa loon,, waqt ki saakh se chand lamheN churaa loon………….
Mohabbat ki maiyyat pe ro raha tha,
Ashqon se tere likhe khat bhigo raha tha….
Haalat-e-ishq dekh ke dang reh gaya,
Mehboob ka daaman jo tang reh gaya.
Jis khusboo ke peeche deewana tha main,
Wo phool hi ab fakat ek rang reh gaya.
Us khusboo ki yaad me kho raha tha,
Ashqon se tere likhe khat bhigo raha tha….
Ashq palkoN ko sajaayeN to kya kareN,
SaaNseN jism ko sataayeN to kya kareN,
AansuoN me baha bhula dete ghum unka,
Gir ke tasveer unki banaayeN to kya kareN….
Un tasveeroN ko kaaNdhe pe dho raha tha,
Ashqon se tere likhe khat bhigo raha tha….
Zakhm, ashq, zillat aur hum,
Rahe saath jaise humdum..
Socha tha thoda aur jee looN,
Par tumne de di apni kasam.
Un kasmoN aur vaadoN pe ro raha tha,
Ashqon se tere likhe khat bhigo raha tha….
Mohabbat ki maiyyat pe ro raha tha,
Ashqon se tere likhe khat bhigo raha tha….
HaaN sach apni maiyyat pe ro raha tha..........
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Lucky ji adab
aapki nazm padhi...mera mann shabnam ki boondon se sarabor ho gaya...aapki Ghazal ke ehsaas jazbaat dil ko chhoo gaye....nazm ke sabhi sher umdaa lage ....vaise bhi aapki kalam ka koi jawab nahi...taarif ke liye mere paas shabd hi kaha reh jaate hai....aap se roshan rahe ye bazm sada.....aisi duaa hum humesha karte hai....
YuuN Besabab Aansoo Aate NahiN
Lag Zaroor Koii Baat Dil Ko Rahii Hai ...
Fareb Kaa ChaDhtaa Bazaar Dekh
Insaaf Se Bastii Khaalii Ho Rahii Hai ...
---Naresh Mehra----
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30th May 2009, 11:46 AM
Dard se lipte tumhare ehsaas dil ko choo gaye..
Take Care.. Humesha khush raho!!!
~Priya
"Dikha kar khawaab in aankhon ko, De gaye aansoon in mein Tum..
Kaise chalka doo yeh aansoon, In mein bhi To rehTe ho Tum.."
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30th May 2009, 10:40 PM
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Lucky jii Aadab,
Jii janab aapki nazam bhi ghayal kar dene wali hai aapke takhallus ki tarha...
Janab wakai aapka ghayal andaz pasand aata hai mujhe, jabki main jyada
dard per likhane ka aur padhne ka shauk nahi rakhata, per phir bhi aapke
kalam padhne ko jii chahata hai yeh baat mere khud samajh nahi aati.....
Bahut hi umda khayal hai behad dil ko chirne wale lafz lage, yunhi likhate rahiye..
Khush rahiye duaOn ke sath... Daad kabool kijiye..
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Aadaab janaab, kaise haiN aap...?? umeed karta huN tandrust hi hoNga, ye humari khusnaseebi hai ki aap hume padhne ki jehmiyt har baar uthaa lete haiN, bas umeed karta huN ki aap yuNhi duaayeN dete rahiye aur hum jaise nadaanon ko pahte rahiye...!!
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31st May 2009, 11:20 AM
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ghayal dost
Hope and wish you are fine and doing well.
aap ki nazm bohat zabardast hai, bharpoor daad qubool karein.
Aaj yahan aa ker bohat khushi hui, aap aur maikash donon saathiyon ke khoobsurat kalam parhne ko mile.
is tarah ki takhliqaat yahan likhi jaati raheen to yaqeenan hem jaise bekaar magar shayr o adab se raghbat rakhne wale loag phir yahan se mustafeez hona shru karein ge.
God bless you.
musharrafhusain
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are wah aaj to kismat hi khul gayi, janaab kabhi kabhar bhole bhatke mehfil me v aa jaaya karo. maiN durust huN aap apni tabiyat bataayeN...!! aur kahaaN rahe itne dino, aapko jazbaat pasand aaye bas dil ko tasalli mili, bas yuNhi aage v likhte aur padhte rahiye...!!
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1st June 2009, 01:12 PM
Zakhm, ashq, zillat aur hum,
Rahe saath jaise humdum..
Socha tha thoda aur jee looN,
Par tumne de di apni kasam.
Un kasmoN aur vaadoN pe ro raha tha,
Ashqon se tere likhe khat bhigo raha tha….
Mohabbat ki maiyyat pe ro raha tha,
Ashqon se tere likhe khat bhigo raha tha….
ghayal ji,
hmm.....wakhay ghayal lag rahe ho aap kisi ke pyaar me...,....bohat dard chupa hai aapki is nazm me, mehfil me sabko ghayal kar rahi hai aapki yeh nazm........ehsaas aur alfaaz behad acche lage mujhe,....ab ye bhi nahi keh sakti yuhi likhte rahiye...yeh kahungi likhiye zarur per dard se hatkar......
der se reply karne ke liye maafi ki talabgaar huuN,
DUAON KE SAATH
Zainy
PalkoN ki baand ko tod ke daaman pe aa gira
Ek aaNsu mere zabt ki tauheen kar gaya...
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1st June 2009, 09:20 PM
superb........................awesome............. .......
"LAMHA"
mujhko acchaa nahiiN lagtaa ko’ii hamnaam teraa ,
ko’ii tujhsaa ho to phir naam bhii tujhsaa rakhe....
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2nd June 2009, 10:06 AM
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Lucky ji adab
aapki nazm padhi...mera mann shabnam ki boondon se sarabor ho gaya...aapki Ghazal ke ehsaas jazbaat dil ko chhoo gaye....nazm ke sabhi sher umdaa lage ....vaise bhi aapki kalam ka koi jawab nahi...taarif ke liye mere paas shabd hi kaha reh jaate hai....aap se roshan rahe ye bazm sada.....aisi duaa hum humesha karte hai....
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aapki duaa aur taareef humari sar aankhoN par, ye to aapka baddapan hai jo is nacheez ko itni izzat baksh di, dekhne vaale ka nazariya hi hota hai jo kisi cheez ko khubsurat banata hai, bas isiliye aapko humara likha pasand aa gaya. bas yuNhi is nacheez ko padhne ki takleef uthaate rahiye...!!
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2nd June 2009, 05:26 PM
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Dard se lipte tumhare ehsaas dil ko choo gaye..
Take Care.. Humesha khush raho!!!
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Priya d pasand karne shukriya, umeed karta huN ki aap aage bhi yuNhi mujh pagle ko padhne ki jehmiyat uthaati raheNg...!!
Aapka Ghayal
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4th June 2009, 11:47 PM
hi..kaise ho..
Haalat-e-ishq dekh ke dang reh gaya,
Mehboob ka daaman jo tang reh gaya.
Jis khusboo ke peeche deewana tha main,
Wo phool hi ab fakat ek rang reh gaya.
Us khusboo ki yaad me kho raha tha,
Ashqon se tere likhe khat bhigo raha tha….
ek behtreen peshkash..
..♥♥..Mera Tumhara..kya Rishta hai..kuch bhi Nahi..
Agar kabhi..Gujarta dekho..kya Tum Mujhe..bulaoge..
Shayad Nahi..
Agar jo phir Hum..kabhi na Mile to..
Kya Tum yaad aaogoge..Nahi..
Kiuki..Tum Mere..koi Nahi..
Main janti hun..Magar..
Ho jab Mere koi Nahi..kiu lagte ho Mujhko Paraye nahi....♥♥..
..nm..
...mahuaa...
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6th June 2009, 10:44 AM
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Originally Posted by zainy
Zakhm, ashq, zillat aur hum,
Rahe saath jaise humdum..
Socha tha thoda aur jee looN,
Par tumne de di apni kasam.
Un kasmoN aur vaadoN pe ro raha tha,
Ashqon se tere likhe khat bhigo raha tha….
Mohabbat ki maiyyat pe ro raha tha,
Ashqon se tere likhe khat bhigo raha tha….
ghayal ji,
hmm.....wakhay ghayal lag rahe ho aap kisi ke pyaar me...,....bohat dard chupa hai aapki is nazm me, mehfil me sabko ghayal kar rahi hai aapki yeh nazm........ehsaas aur alfaaz behad acche lage mujhe,....ab ye bhi nahi keh sakti yuhi likhte rahiye...yeh kahungi likhiye zarur per dard se hatkar......
der se reply karne ke liye maafi ki talabgaar huuN,
DUAON KE SAATH
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Zainy ji ab ghayal naam hai to dard pe kaise na likhuN ye hi samjha dijiye...!! waise jaan kar khushi hui ki aapko ehsash pasand aaye...!!
Aapka Ghayal
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7th June 2009, 12:52 PM
Thank u for the complments, hope u will keep reading the same way...!!
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9th June 2009, 12:02 PM
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Originally Posted by Mahuaa
hi..kaise ho..
Haalat-e-ishq dekh ke dang reh gaya,
Mehboob ka daaman jo tang reh gaya.
Jis khusboo ke peeche deewana tha main,
Wo phool hi ab fakat ek rang reh gaya.
Us khusboo ki yaad me kho raha tha,
Ashqon se tere likhe khat bhigo raha tha….
ek behtreen peshkash..
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a....!!
Shukriya ji ise pasan karne ka, umeed karta huNN ki aap aage v humara yuNhi saath nibhaate rahiyeg
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