Jab Tuta Hai Dil Toh Fariyaad Kyu Na Karu

Praneeta · 10:01 AM

doston...yeh kuch ehsaas hai jo maine ghazal ke rup mein pesh karne ki koshish ki hai....perfect nahi hai par mere dil ke qareeb hai...pliz do comment...thnx
Praneeta

jab tuta hai dil toh fariyaad kyu na karu
unki yaadon se dil ko azaad kyu na karu

kaheta hai dil woh bhul gaye hume toh kya
ki hai mohabbat toh unhe yaad kyu na karu

cheen li unho ne meri jeene tak ki ummid
apni zindagi khud hi barbaad kyu na karu

likhi hai kismat mein jo gumon ki parchaayi
tanhaiyon se hi fir dil shaad kyu na karu

hum mar bhi gaye toh unhe milengi khushi
marne ki koshish har saas ke baad kyu na karu

Baqtiar · 3rd June 2009, 10:06 AM

Hmmm................ Ek sher yaad aya.. mera nahi

Aansoon ko aankhon ki dehleez par laya na karo
Apne dil ki haalat kisi ko bataaya na karo
Log muth-thi bhar namak liye ghooma karte hain
Apne Zakham kisi ko dikhaaya na karo

(Chill honey)

LAMHA · 3rd June 2009, 06:17 PM

bahut khoob PARI......ehsaas achche lage,par plz tum is dard ka daaman chhod do yaar....aisi achchi nahi lagti....hamesha khush raho aur muskurati raho....god bless u dear....

kwahish · 4th June 2009, 02:49 PM

AadaB praneeta Jii,

Aapki Ahsaas baqubi gazal mein dhale hai ya nahi yeh to main bhi baraber nahi janta
But itna kahunga, aapke ahsaas kafi hadh tak sirf dard se bhare hote hai... Jo kisi tir
ki tarha chubte hai.........

Quote:

Originally Posted by Praneeta

doston...yeh kuch ehsaas hai jo maine ghazal ke rup mein pesh karne ki koshish ki hai....perfect nahi hai par mere dil ke qareeb hai...pliz do comment...thnx
Praneeta

jab tuta hai dil toh fariyaad kyu na karu
unki yaadon se dil ko azaad kyu na karu

Sahi hai dil tuta to fariyaad lazmi hai, per yaadoN ko dil se aazad karne ka hunar hum nahi jante... Aapko aata hai to hume bhi sikha dena......

kaheta hai dil woh bhul gaye hume toh kya
ki hai mohabbat toh unhe yaad kyu na karu

Yah aap kya keh rahi hai meri to samjh nahi aaya, pahele kehti hai bhul jaun phir keh rahi hai yaad kyuN naa karuN

cheen li unho ne meri jeene tak ki ummid
apni zindagi khud hi barbaad kyu na karu

Yeh behad sahi kaha hai aapne, Hume achcha laga aapka mashwara....................
Shayad us bedard ko hi maut aa jaye....

likhi hai kismat mein jo gumon ki parchaayi
tanhaiyon se hi fir dil shaad kyu na karu

Kismat ka likha houn taal sakta hai,
YuN hum apne hatheliyoN per khanjar chalate rahe..
Taqdeer badalne ki khatir besabab lahu bahate rahe

hum mar bhi gaye toh unhe milengi khushi
marne ki koshish har saas ke baad kyu na karu

Hmmm Bahut gehra laga per aisa bhi koi soch sakta hai yakin nahi hota...

Ek achchi koshish per daad kabool kariye.......
Khush rahiye............

Socha tha badal denge usko apne ahsaason ki taseer se
Per badal naa paya woh abtak muqaddar se taqdeer se

Mahuaa · 5th June 2009, 09:58 PM

Praneeta Ji namaskar..kaisi hai aap..
shayad apko maine pahle bhi padha hai..lekin aaj jab apke ehsaas padhe..to dil ke kareeb si lagi apki gazal..

kaheta hai dil woh bhul gaye hume toh kya
ki hai mohabbat toh unhe yaad kyu na karu
sahi farmaya hai apne..baki me bahot hi naik khyaal..

lekin mujhe ye pasand nahi aayi..

cheen li unho ne meri jeene tak ki ummid
apni zindagi khud hi barbaad kyu na karu

kiuki mere khyaal se..apni zindagi ko kabhi bhi tabah ya barbaad nahi karna chahiye..hume zindagi mili hai to uski izzat karni chahiye..or jise humari fikrr nahi uske liye to bilkul nahi..khair..apko meri koi baat buri lage to maaf kijiyega..

apna khyal rakhiye..khush rahiye..

sakhi1909 · 5th June 2009, 11:13 PM

parneeta ji
dard ko byaan karna usko halka karne ka jariya ban jaye to acha hai..mahar daad nahi dungi is rachna par...dard jo thahara ..kisi dil ka
bas dil ko chhu gayee ye
love sis
sakhi

mann_chand · 9th June 2009, 08:39 AM

priyee pariii

kaise hai aap?

ghazal toh bahut pyaari likhi hai .. no doubt!!!

we can try to forget lekin ji bhull jaaye ....toh we might do same mistake again ...

thats wht I think

dard beyaan karna koi aapse sikhe

I wish to learn ...

take care

aapki dost

mandeep

Diya_Jale · 12th June 2009, 06:17 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Praneeta

doston...yeh kuch ehsaas hai jo maine ghazal ke rup mein pesh karne ki koshish ki hai....perfect nahi hai par mere dil ke qareeb hai...pliz do comment...thnx
Praneeta

jab tuta hai dil toh fariyaad kyu na karu
unki yaadon se dil ko azaad kyu na karu

kaheta hai dil woh bhul gaye hume toh kya
ki hai mohabbat toh unhe yaad kyu na karu

cheen li unho ne meri jeene tak ki ummid
apni zindagi khud hi barbaad kyu na karu

likhi hai kismat mein jo gumon ki parchaayi
tanhaiyon se hi fir dil shaad kyu na karu

hum mar bhi gaye toh unhe milengi khushi
marne ki koshish har saas ke baad kyu na karu

Pari sweety,
sahi kaha hai tumne jab dil tute to fariyaad karna hi chahiye
bahut achhi ghazal kahi hai tumne
tumhari har ghazal mein ek khas msg hota hai
aise hi likhte raho
har dard se dur raho

Diya doll

Praneeta · 16th June 2009, 01:18 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Baqtiar

Hmmm................ Ek sher yaad aya.. mera nahi

Aansoon ko aankhon ki dehleez par laya na karo
Apne dil ki haalat kisi ko bataaya na karo
Log muth-thi bhar namak liye ghooma karte hain
Apne Zakham kisi ko dikhaaya na karo

(Chill honey)

thanks for the advice
Regards
Praneeta

Praneeta · 16th June 2009, 01:20 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by LAMHA

bahut khoob PARI......ehsaas achche lage,par plz tum is dard ka daaman chhod do yaar....aisi achchi nahi lagti....hamesha khush raho aur muskurati raho....god bless u dear....

shukriya dost
thanks for being there on all my threads
you are much appreciated
Regards
Praneeta

Praneeta · 16th June 2009, 01:21 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by kwahish

AadaB praneeta Jii,

Aapki Ahsaas baqubi gazal mein dhale hai ya nahi yeh to main bhi baraber nahi janta
But itna kahunga, aapke ahsaas kafi hadh tak sirf dard se bhare hote hai... Jo kisi tir
ki tarha chubte hai.........

Hmmm Bahut gehra laga per aisa bhi koi soch sakta hai yakin nahi hota...

Ek achchi koshish per daad kabool kariye.......
Khush rahiye............

Socha tha badal denge usko apne ahsaason ki taseer se
Per badal naa paya woh abtak muqaddar se taqdeer se

shukriya
khush rahiyen
Regards
Praneeta

Pradhyuman · 05:01 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Praneeta

doston...yeh kuch ehsaas hai jo maine ghazal ke rup mein pesh karne ki koshish ki hai....perfect nahi hai par mere dil ke qareeb hai...pliz do comment...thnx
Praneeta

jab tuta hai dil toh fariyaad kyu na karu
unki yaadon se dil ko azaad kyu na karu

kaheta hai dil woh bhul gaye hume toh kya
ki hai mohabbat toh unhe yaad kyu na karu

cheen li unho ne meri jeene tak ki ummid
apni zindagi khud hi barbaad kyu na karu

likhi hai kismat mein jo gumon ki parchaayi
tanhaiyon se hi fir dil shaad kyu na karu

hum mar bhi gaye toh unhe milengi khushi
marne ki koshish har saas ke baad kyu na karu

Praneeta ji,

meri comments direct hoti hai to bura matt lagaiyega..yeh ghazal maiN thoughts ki clarity nahin lagi..ho sakta hai jo aap kehna chahti thi woh kaafiya sambhaalne maiN keh nahi paayi..
jaise ki...

jab tuta hai dil toh fariyaad kyu na karu
unki yaadon se dil ko azaad kyu na karu

yahan pehla misra aur doosra misra donoen hi alag baat keh rahe hai...jab aap fariyaad karte haiN to woh baatein aur yaadein dil main hoti hi hai..phir aap azaad kaise hue unn yaadoen se???

kaheta hai dil woh bhul gaye hume toh kya
ki hai mohabbat toh unhe yaad kyu na karu

aap yaadoen se azaad hona chahti thi pehle sher maiN aur ab keh rahi ho yaad kyu na karu???

cheen li unho ne meri jeene tak ki ummid
apni zindagi khud hi barbaad kyu na karu

jab koi jeene tak ki ummid chin leta hai aapse to aap kuch kar sake woh haalat nahi rehte...aap laachar ho jaate haiN..phir kaise khud hi zindagi barbaad kar rahe ho?? aapki zindagi ki ummid to aapke "beloved" ne cheen li aapse...

likhi hai kismat mein jo gumon ki parchaayi
tanhaiyon se hi fir dil shaad kyu na karu

tanha nahin hai aap..gumon ki parchaayi hai aapke saath..fir dil shaad kaise ho sakta hai bhala???

please please please understand dat dis is not to demoralize u..i m no great writer myself nd i gave u my point of view only so that u cld see d things dat r hidden frm u,,happens wid me also..koi bataata hai tab nazar padti hai apni khamiyoen pe..

aapka dost,
Pradhyuman

Praneeta · 05:11 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Pradhyuman

Praneeta ji,

meri comments direct hoti hai to bura matt lagaiyega..yeh ghazal maiN thoughts ki clarity nahin lagi..ho sakta hai jo aap kehna chahti thi woh kaafiya sambhaalne maiN keh nahi paayi..
jaise ki...

jab tuta hai dil toh fariyaad kyu na karu
unki yaadon se dil ko azaad kyu na karu

yahan pehla misra aur doosra misra donoen hi alag baat keh rahe hai...jab aap fariyaad karte haiN to woh baatein aur yaadein dil main hoti hi hai..phir aap azaad kaise hue unn yaadoen se???

kaheta hai dil woh bhul gaye hume toh kya
ki hai mohabbat toh unhe yaad kyu na karu

aap yaadoen se azaad hona chahti thi pehle sher maiN aur ab keh rahi ho yaad kyu na karu???

cheen li unho ne meri jeene tak ki ummid
apni zindagi khud hi barbaad kyu na karu

jab koi jeene tak ki ummid chin leta hai aapse to aap kuch kar sake woh haalat nahi rehte...aap laachar ho jaate haiN..phir kaise khud hi zindagi barbaad kar rahe ho?? aapki zindagi ki ummid to aapke "beloved" ne cheen li aapse...

likhi hai kismat mein jo gumon ki parchaayi
tanhaiyon se hi fir dil shaad kyu na karu

tanha nahin hai aap..gumon ki parchaayi hai aapke saath..fir dil shaad kaise ho sakta hai bhala???

please please please understand dat dis is not to demoralize u..i m no great writer myself nd i gave u my point of view only so that u see d things dat wer hidden frm u,,happens wid me also..koi bataata hai tab nazar padti hai apni khamiyoen pe..

aapka dost,
Pradhyuman

areah dost tension mat lo about ur comment
let me explain my gazal.....

jab tuta hai dil toh fariyaad kyu na karu
jab dil tuta hai toh fariyaad karna padta hai...its normal naa?
unki yaadon se dil ko azaad kyu na karu
par jab dil tod hi diya usne toh fir usse yaad kya karna....thats what i think
kaheta hai dil woh bhul gaye hume toh kya
ki hai mohabbat toh unhe yaad kyu na karu
but my heart says though he betrayed me, my feelings were true toh fir unhe yaad kyu na karu?
cheen li unho ne meri jeene tak ki ummid
apni zindagi khud hi barbaad kyu na karu
jab jeene ki ummid hi chin gayi ho toh isse badi koi barbaadi nahi ki hum jeete jaye....aap sochiyen jeene ka kya faida jab koi ummid hi na rahi ho?
likhi hai kismat mein jo gumon ki parchaayi
tanhaiyon se hi fir dil shaad kyu na karu
this is contraversal....tanhaiyon se jab dil shaad karungi toh vo kaisa happiness hoga?? i will still be lonely so m celebrating my loneliness...i might sound funny
hum mar bhi gaye toh unhe milengi khushi
marne ki koshish har saas ke baad kyu na karu
just for his happiness m prepared to give up my life n i try doing so after every breath............chill this is just a feeling m not suicidal type

i tried my level best to explain yaar...hope it makes sense now n u r able to understand the feelings
Comment without hesitation boss
Regards
Praneeta

Praneeta · 22nd June 2009, 03:46 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Mahuaa

Praneeta Ji namaskar..kaisi hai aap..
shayad apko maine pahle bhi padha hai..lekin aaj jab apke ehsaas padhe..to dil ke kareeb si lagi apki gazal..

kaheta hai dil woh bhul gaye hume toh kya
ki hai mohabbat toh unhe yaad kyu na karu
sahi farmaya hai apne..baki me bahot hi naik khyaal..

lekin mujhe ye pasand nahi aayi..

cheen li unho ne meri jeene tak ki ummid
apni zindagi khud hi barbaad kyu na karu

kiuki mere khyaal se..apni zindagi ko kabhi bhi tabah ya barbaad nahi karna chahiye..hume zindagi mili hai to uski izzat karni chahiye..or jise humari fikrr nahi uske liye to bilkul nahi..khair..apko meri koi baat buri lage to maaf kijiyega..

apna khyal rakhiye..khush rahiye..

Namaskar Mahuaa ji,

Jaan kar khushi hui ki aap ko meri gazal achchi lagi...maafi chahti hun agar koi sher aap ko pasand na aayi ho...bas yahi kahena chahti hun ki barbaad zindagi mein shabdon ka koi mayne nahi hota fir chaahe barbaad kaho ya abaad! Waise aap ne sahi farmaya ki jise humari parwah hi nahi uss ke liye zindagi kya barbaad karna?! Par kya karu dil hi hai jo maanta nahi. Aap pareshan mat ho main khud ko taklif nahi de rahi hun balki apne ehsaas likh kar dil halka kar rahi hun...shukriya aap ko meri gazal padhne ke liye.

Regards
Praneeta

Praneeta · 22nd June 2009, 03:50 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by sakhi1909

parneeta ji
dard ko byaan karna usko halka karne ka jariya ban jaye to acha hai..mahar daad nahi dungi is rachna par...dard jo thahara ..kisi dil ka
bas dil ko chhu gayee ye
love sis
sakhi

hey dear

shukriya mere dard ko samjhne ke liye...sis

Love n Regards
Praneeta

Praneeta · 22nd June 2009, 03:51 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by N@zneen

Hey Sweetie.......dard par tum wakai bht khoobsurat likhti ho, ehsaas ko asar andaaz lafzon mein bht khoobsurti se dhaala hai tumne......Keep it up

Thanks sweeti...........
Regards
Praneeta

Praneeta · 22nd June 2009, 03:54 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by mann_chand

priyee pariii

kaise hai aap?

ghazal toh bahut pyaari likhi hai .. no doubt!!!

we can try to forget lekin ji bhull jaaye ....toh we might do same mistake again ...

thats wht I think

dard beyaan karna koi aapse sikhe

I wish to learn ...

take care

aapki dost

mandeep

hi dear

main toh thik hun...asha hai aap bhi thik hogi
thanks 4 liking this gazal........m 2 learning to write better
we both learn a lot from SDC....so keep coming

Love n Regards
Praneeta

Praneeta · 22nd June 2009, 03:57 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Diya_Jale

Pari sweety,
sahi kaha hai tumne jab dil tute to fariyaad karna hi chahiye
bahut achhi ghazal kahi hai tumne
tumhari har ghazal mein ek khas msg hota hai
aise hi likhte raho
har dard se dur raho

Diya doll

dearest Diya Doll

thnx 4 reading n understanding the feelings
aage bhi saath dete rahena

Love n Regards
Praneeta