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Originally Posted by zakhmee ashiq
bahut khoob likkha hai qafiya bhi bahut achchha hai. agar apko bura na lgae to ek baat kehna chahoon ga, the double O's ("oo") are usually used for extended sound of "u" but in your case you should use just one otherwise it gets really confusing. but very well written though keep it up
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Jinab Burra kyun lagay ga ..... Ap nay pasand kiya itna he kafi hai mere liye ...
I think i oo theek hai but Jo ghalti ap ko nazar vo main theek ker leeta hun .... Thankx for correcting me ...
Ashqq lahuu ko dabota he nahi
Ishqq kiya jis mein samjhota he nahi
Saaray jahan mein jis ki koi misaal mille
Aise shajjar ka beej mein bota he nahi
Meri he daastaaN hai chand ki zuban per
Aik shaks hai jo raat ko sota he nahi
Jaanay kya khoo gya is tanha mazaj ka
Hansta nahi hai aur kabhi rota he nahi
Kertay ho jaffa aur iss yaqeen ke saath
Haider to kisi se khaffa hota he nahi