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Khushiyon ka dil meiN har pal ek intezaar rakh -
11th June 2002, 09:08 PM
adaab doston....yeh kalaam humne urdustan ke pichle mahine ke misre ("Paiwasta raah shajar se ummeed-e-bahaar rakh") par likhi thi....aur humare guruji (yaani praveen ji) ki madad se is ghazal ko sudhaarke yahan post kar rahe hai...aap sab ki rai/salaah ka intezaar rahega....
Khushiyon ka dil meiN har pal ek intezaar rakh Jab tak wajood hai tu laboN pe bahaar rakh Kismat ka kya bharosa kabhi saath de na de Ae dost zindagi par yaqeeN be-shumaar rakh Har gham ko saath lekar chalna sahi nahiN Beete dinoN ki dil meiN bus yaadgaar rakh Poori ho ya nahiN wo khwahish to dil meiN rakh Chahat ka phir bhi dil meiN tu aabshaar rakh Kismat meiN dhoondta hai kyun har ghadi khushi Paiwasta raah shajar se ummeed-e-bahaar rakh Dil hi ke raastoN meiN hai kahiN sukooN tera Ae dost 'Anamika' par kuch etbaar rakh kabhee saba ko kabhee naamaabar ko dekhte haiN woh aaye ghar meiN hamaare KHuda ki kudrat hai kabhee ham unko, kabhee apane ghar ko dekhte haiN nazar lage na kaheeN uske dast-o-baazoo ko ye log kyoN mere zaKHm-e-jigar ko dekhtaiN haiN ? |
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11th June 2002, 10:58 PM
Hi Anamika!!
How r u?Bade din baad nazar aayiN aap aur itne acche kalaam ke saath...pata hai humne bhi pehli dafa isi mushaire meiN shirkat li thi aur hamara kalaam post bhi huya...kya aapne paRha??Agar nahi to is forum meiN bhi maine post kiya hai...waqt mile to zaroor paRhna aur apni ray se aagah karna  Coming to ur ghazal...islaah ke baad to mashallah ghazal nikhar gayi hai ye ashaar pasand aaye...Khushiyon ka dil meiN har pal ek intezaar rakh Jab talak wajood hai tu laboN pe bahaar rakh Har gham ko saath lekar chalna sahi nahiN Beete dinoN ki dil meiN bus yaadgaar rakh Kismat meiN dhoondta hai kyun har ghadi khushi Paiwasta raah shajar se ummeed-e-bahaar rakh KEEP IT UP!! Hope to hear more from u!! Shumaila kahiiN zameeN to kahiiN aasmaN nahi milta!! |
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KHOOB ... BUHUT KHOOB ... -
12th June 2002, 12:28 AM
ANAMIKA ..
TASLEEMAT ..... KESE HO ? AAP KI GHAZAL PARHI ...BEHAD PASAN AAI ... ALFAZ KAFI ACHE OR AASAN HEN .... Khushiyon ka dil meiN har pal ek intezaar rakh Jab talak wajood hai tu laboN pe bahaar rakh AGAR LOG AISA KARNE LAGEN TO DUNYA KA NAQSHA BADAL JAE ...KHOOB KAHA AAPNE .... Har gham ko saath lekar chalna sahi nahiN Beete dinoN ki dil meiN bus yaadgaar rakh ACHA HE BUHUT ACHA HE .. Kismat meiN dhoondta hai kyun har ghadi khushi Paiwasta raah shajar se ummeed-e-bahaar rakh WAH ...WAH ... BUHUT KHOOB ANAMIKA JI ...AAINDA BHI INTIZAR RAHE GA ..... OK , BYE SAGAR KASHMIRI |
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shukriya shumaila ji... -
12th June 2002, 04:12 AM
hi shumaila ji....hum bilkul maze me hain.....pehle to hum aapko mubaarakh-baad dena chahenge ki aapki ghazal urdustan par post ho gayi!...humne padh li thi, lekin uspar apni rai pesh karne ka time nahi mila....kaam mein kaafi masroof ho gaye the....aur yehi vajah hai ki hum itne dino baad yahan kuch post kar paaye hain.....lekin regularly aapke naye posts padhe hain....unpar hum fursat se apne comments post karenge......
aapko yeh ghazal pasand aayi hume bahut achcha lagaa...lekin is tareef mein praveen ji bhi shaamil hain, unhi ki salaah se yeh ghazal tamaam ho paayi hain....likhne ke liye to khayaal bahut hai lekin bas beher/meter ko samajhne mein bahut mushkil ho rahi hain....hopefully jald hi aap sab ki madad se hum woh seekh payenge aur behtar likh payenge (aapki tarah!)  ..... aashaa hai ki aapse mel-jhol hota rahega....tab tak ke liye humari duaaye aapke saath hain....kabhee saba ko kabhee naamaabar ko dekhte haiN woh aaye ghar meiN hamaare KHuda ki kudrat hai kabhee ham unko, kabhee apane ghar ko dekhte haiN nazar lage na kaheeN uske dast-o-baazoo ko ye log kyoN mere zaKHm-e-jigar ko dekhtaiN haiN ? |
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12th June 2002, 04:24 AM
adaab saagar ji....sab ki duaon se hum ek-dum first class hain....aapki hausla avzai ka tahe dil se shukriya.....vaise aapke bhi kuch qualaam humne padhe hai aur bahut pasand bhi aaye hain...unpar hum apni rai post karenge kaam se fursat nikaalke....filhaal to aap bahut achchi ghazal likhne par mubarakhbaad qubool kijiye......aasha hai ki shayri.com ki galiyon mein milte rahenge....duaon ke saath...
kabhee saba ko kabhee naamaabar ko dekhte haiN woh aaye ghar meiN hamaare KHuda ki kudrat hai kabhee ham unko, kabhee apane ghar ko dekhte haiN nazar lage na kaheeN uske dast-o-baazoo ko ye log kyoN mere zaKHm-e-jigar ko dekhtaiN haiN ? |
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12th June 2002, 05:43 PM
kamaal ki ghazallikhi hai aapney anaamika ji!
aur mey aapkaa khaas taur par shukriyaa ada karnaa chahungaa! mein bahut mayus thaa jab mainey yeh ghazal padhi, aur ghazal itni achhi hai key dil khushi sey bhar gayaa,aur mayusi dil sey bhaag gayi! thank you for such an inspirational post!I am pasting it on wall of my room. |
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Hum khush Huve |
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Hum khush Huve -
12th June 2002, 06:58 PM
Anamika Sahiba
Badi khushi hui yeh dekh kar ke aapne apni ye ghazal aakhir post kar hi di. Aur us sey bhi zyada khushi hui iski tareef meiN aayi poasts ko dekh kar. Zahir hai shishya ki kaamyabi jo hai. Ab dekhna ye hai ke aap yun hi apni qalam ki ravani banayen rakheN. Aisey hi umda ashaar kehti raheiN aur tareef paati raheiN. Aur Bade dinon ke baad aap yahaan tashreef layeeN yeh bhi ek badi achchi baat hai. Umeed hai ke aapka aana aisey hi jaari rahega apni nayee se nayee kavshoN ke saath. Bahut khoob! Bahut duaaon ke saath Praveen manziloN ne sun liya toh aur woh badh jaayeNgi |
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nice -
12th June 2002, 09:57 PM
hi Anamika jee - achcha likha hai - very uplifting - yeh waale sher bahut pasand aaye -
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- Mahek - ye zamIn chAnd se behatar nazar AtI hai hamein surkh phUlon se MAHEK uThatI hain dil kI rAhen din Dhale yUN terI AvAz bulAtI hai hamein ---------------------------------------------- taeray Gham ki KhuShbu say jism-o-jaaN MAHEK uTThay saaNs ki havaa jab bhi Choo kay maeray lab guzri aek saath reh kay bhi, door hi rahay ham bhi dhoop aur Chaa'ooN ki dosti ajab guzri |
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shukriyaa Uday ji... -
13th June 2002, 01:40 AM
adaab Uday ji....arre wah!....chalo achcha hai humari ghazal aapko khush karne me kaamyaab rahi....is-se badh-kar kya tareef ho sakti hai....aapka bahut bahut shukriya....aashaa hai ki aap humesha khush rahe....duaon ke saath...
kabhee saba ko kabhee naamaabar ko dekhte haiN woh aaye ghar meiN hamaare KHuda ki kudrat hai kabhee ham unko, kabhee apane ghar ko dekhte haiN nazar lage na kaheeN uske dast-o-baazoo ko ye log kyoN mere zaKHm-e-jigar ko dekhtaiN haiN ? |
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shukriya Mahek ji.... -
13th June 2002, 01:44 AM
adaab aur hausla avzai ka bahut shukriya.....
kabhee saba ko kabhee naamaabar ko dekhte haiN woh aaye ghar meiN hamaare KHuda ki kudrat hai kabhee ham unko, kabhee apane ghar ko dekhte haiN nazar lage na kaheeN uske dast-o-baazoo ko ye log kyoN mere zaKHm-e-jigar ko dekhtaiN haiN ? |
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13th June 2002, 01:50 AM
[Badi khushi hui yeh dekh kar ke aapne apni ye ghazal aakhir post kar hi di.]
ji haan...aakhir me mauka nikaal hi liya!... [Aur us sey bhi zyada khushi hui iski tareef meiN aayi poasts ko dekh kar. Zahir hai shishya ki kaamyabi jo hai. Ab dekhna ye hai ke aap yun hi apni qalam ki ravani banayen rakheN. Aisey hi umda ashaar kehti raheiN aur tareef paati raheiN.] sab aapki mehrbaani ki vajah se....in tareefon ke haqdaar aap bhi hain.... [Aur Bade dinon ke baad aap yahaan tashreef layeeN yeh bhi ek badi achchi baat hai. Umeed hai ke aapka aana aisey hi jaari rahega apni nayee se nayee kavshoN ke saath. Bahut khoob! Bahut duaaon ke saath Praveen] ji haan bas is hafte humara ek badaa project khatam ho jayega fir uske baad hum yahan par jyada waqt de sakenge....tab tak ke liye aapko aur aapke parivaar ko humara namaskaar... kabhee saba ko kabhee naamaabar ko dekhte haiN woh aaye ghar meiN hamaare KHuda ki kudrat hai kabhee ham unko, kabhee apane ghar ko dekhte haiN nazar lage na kaheeN uske dast-o-baazoo ko ye log kyoN mere zaKHm-e-jigar ko dekhtaiN haiN ? |
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