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15th April 2010, 12:58 PM
HUm SitaaRe Ko NiSHaaN banaYe baithe hai
Dil ki hasrat ko hum JaaN banaye baithe hai
YeH DiL BeSaBRa Hai JaWaab -E- TaLab Unke
Woh khamoshi ko zubaaN banaye baithe hai
Dard -E- DiL Per DaWaaoN Ka Asar hota nahiN
Dil yeh bimar KhamakhaaN banaye baithe hai
Humne chahaa mohobbat mein khuda dekheN
LoG Hai DauLaT Pe IimaaN banaye baithe hai
DiN Ko ChaiN Nahi RaatoN Ko KhaYaal UnKe
Aur woh Izhaar ko ahsaaN banaye baithe hai
Ek ZaRRa Si BaaT Per HuYe Hia ItNe KhaFaa
Besabab hi dil bad-gumaaN banaye baithe hai
Woh shikwe shikayateN woh jafaa kii baateN
ItNe faSLe DaRmiYaaN banaye baithe hai
Kis qadar chur hai nashe mein sab jahaaN wale
Khud ko khud se anjaaN banaye baithe hai
Manzil hai samne chand kadmoN pe Kwahish
Laut jaane ka kyuN armaaN banaye baithe hai
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Tere Intzaar Mein....
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15th April 2010, 01:53 PM
Kwahish ji namskaar........
bahut hi acchi koshish hai aapki
Very Goodddddddddd
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15th April 2010, 02:04 PM
Sameer Ji...Aadaab ! Main yeh Soch raha hu.....Iss Ghazal ki taarif kaha se shuru karun....aapki yeh peshkash behtreen ghazal me ek lagi mujhe....iski rawaangi adaayegi...purkashish ashaar dil ki gehraai tak jaate dikhe....bahut gehre aur umdaa khayal kahe hai aapne....mujhe aapki tamaam ghazal bahut pasand aai....
kisi ek sheyr ko chunna mushkil tha..... phir bhi yeh ashaar zehn se utar hi nahi paya...
Humne chahaa mohobbat mein khuda dekheN
LoG Hai DauLaT Pe IimaaN banaye baithe hai
matla aur maqtaa bhi bhi meri pehli pasand rahen....
tamaam ghazal ko tahe dil se daad hazir hai....qubuul farmaayen...
yunhi likhte rahen....khush rahen...
apna khayal rakhen....
duaaon ke saath....
YuuN Besabab Aansoo Aate NahiN
Lag Zaroor Koii Baat Dil Ko Rahii Hai ...
Fareb Kaa ChaDhtaa Bazaar Dekh
Insaaf Se Bastii Khaalii Ho Rahii Hai ...
---Naresh Mehra----
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15th April 2010, 02:17 PM
HUm SitaaRe Ko NiSHaaN banaYe baithe hai
Dil ki hasrat ko hum JaaN banaye baithe hai
hmm ...
YeH DiL BeSaBRa Hai JaWaab -E- TaLab Unke
ye misra kuch uljha hai check it again
Woh khamoshi ko zubaaN banaye baithe hai
this one is nice
Dard -E- DiL Per DaWaaoN Ka Asar hota nahiN
Dil yeh bimar KhamakhaaN banaye baithe hai
KhamakhaaN ?
Humne chahaa mohobbat mein khuda dekheN
LoG Hai DauLaT Pe IimaaN banaye baithe hai
this one is really nice
dulat pe imaan banaye baithey hai... naya sa expression
DiN Ko ChaiN Nahi RaatoN Ko KhaYaal UnKe
Aur woh Izhaar ko ahsaaN banaye baithe hai
bahut achy yar
par pahle misro ko bhi unko hid edicate karte to aur jyada acha ban jata
Ek ZaRRa Si BaaT Per HuYe Hia ItNe KhaFaa
Besabab hi dil bad-gumaaN banaye baithe hai
Woh shikwe shikayateN woh jafaa kii baateN
ItNe faSLe DaRmiYaaN banaye baithe hai
jabardast
muahhhhhhhhhhhhh
reps for uuuu....
Kis qadar chur hai nashe mein sab jahaaN wale
Khud ko khud se anjaaN banaye baithe hai
acha hai
Manzil hai samne chand kadmoN pe Kwahish
Laut jaane ka kyuN armaaN banaye baithe hai
hmmm
ye bhia cha hai
aur acha hona chahiye tha par
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16th April 2010, 12:35 AM
Yaqeen maniye Sameer saheb.......ab tak jitna padha hai aapko un sab me yeh kalam sabseeeeeeeeeee behtar hai. Har sher kamaal hai, karodo daad kabool ho.....
Jhoot kehdu yeh meri fitrat me nahi shamil
Par tujhe bevafa bhi kehna achcha nahi lagta...
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17th April 2010, 01:23 PM
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Kwahish ji namskaar........
bahut hi acchi koshish hai aapki
Very Goodddddddddd
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Sharma Jee Aadaab
Koshish ko pasand karne aur sarahne ka
bahut bahut aabhari huN...
Aage bhi apna sahyog aur saath banaye rakhiye..
Keep smiling..
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17th April 2010, 02:31 PM
Sameer ji,
You have written so well.....
Keep smiling!
Mann
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17th April 2010, 05:44 PM
sameer saheb aadaab...!
kaise haiN janaab...?
kehne ko zyada hai hi nahi, kya tareef karu, kahaN se karu...sach meiN samjh nahi aa raha...aapne kamaal ka likha hai...ek ek micra dil meiN utar gaya....
bhai daad haazir hai qubuul karna...
'E Taahire Laahuti!!!
Uss Rizk Se Tau Maut Bhali
Jis Rizk Se Aatee Ho
Tere Parwaaz MeiN Kotaahi....
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18th April 2010, 04:10 PM
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Originally Posted by naresh_mehra110
Sameer Ji...Aadaab ! Main yeh Soch raha hu.....Iss Ghazal ki taarif kaha se shuru karun....aapki yeh peshkash behtreen ghazal me ek lagi mujhe....iski rawaangi adaayegi...purkashish ashaar dil ki gehraai tak jaate dikhe....bahut gehre aur umdaa khayal kahe hai aapne....mujhe aapki tamaam ghazal bahut pasand aai....
kisi ek sheyr ko chunna mushkil tha..... phir bhi yeh ashaar zehn se utar hi nahi paya...
Humne chahaa mohobbat mein khuda dekheN
LoG Hai DauLaT Pe IimaaN banaye baithe hai
matla aur maqtaa bhi bhi meri pehli pasand rahen....
tamaam ghazal ko tahe dil se daad hazir hai....qubuul farmaayen...
yunhi likhte rahen....khush rahen...
apna khayal rakhen....
duaaon ke saath....
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Naresh Jee Aadaab!
Aapki aur se mujhe humesha hi sahyog aur protsahan mila aur likhane ki Kshamata bhi
Apni pasandidgi aur tarif jatane ka bahut bahut dhanyawad.....
Aapki daad dil se kabool ki saheB....
Aage bhi apka saath milta rahe yehi chahunga..
Ap bhi khush rahiye
Apna khayal rakhiye....
DheroN duaoN ke saath ...
Khuda hafez.....
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20th April 2010, 02:56 AM
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HUm SitaaRe Ko NiSHaaN banaYe baithe hai
Dil ki hasrat ko hum JaaN banaye baithe hai
hmm ...
thanks ..
YeH DiL BeSaBRa Hai JaWaab -E- TaLab Unke
ye misra kuch uljha hai check it again
Bhai is misre mein koi twist hi nahi.....
simple sa misra hai " uska jawab sunne ke liye dil ko aur sabar nahi hota......
Woh khamoshi ko zubaaN banaye baithe hai
this one is nice
Dard -E- DiL Per DaWaaoN Ka Asar hota nahiN
Dil yeh bimar KhamakhaaN banaye baithe hai
KhamakhaaN ?......... kya yeh khamakhaaN hi likha aapne
Humne chahaa mohobbat mein khuda dekheN
LoG Hai DauLaT Pe IimaaN banaye baithe hai
this one is really nice
dulat pe imaan banaye baithey hai... naya sa expression
Jee bahut bahut shukriyaa.......
DiN Ko ChaiN Nahi RaatoN Ko KhaYaal UnKe
Aur woh Izhaar ko ahsaaN banaye baithe hai
bahut achy yar
par pahle misro ko bhi unko hid edicate karte to aur jyada acha ban jata
Shayad per mera taal mel bigad jata....
Ek ZaRRa Si BaaT Per HuYe Hia ItNe KhaFaa
Besabab hi dil bad-gumaaN banaye baithe hai
Woh shikwe shikayateN woh jafaa kii baateN
ItNe faSLe DaRmiYaaN banaye baithe hai
jabardast
muahhhhhhhhhhhhh
reps for uuuu....
Yaah yeh mera bhi sabse pasandidaa raha.....
Par Rep aaj bhi nahi mile....
Kis qadar chur hai nashe mein sab jahaaN wale
Khud ko khud se anjaaN banaye baithe hai
acha hai
Manzil hai samne chand kadmoN pe Kwahish
Laut jaane ka kyuN armaaN banaye baithe hai
hmmm
ye bhia cha hai
aur acha hona chahiye tha par
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Hounsla afzai aur margdarshan ka bahut bahut shukriya Bhai....
Aage bhi apna saath banaye rakhana....
Khush raho..
Apna khayal rakho..
Khuda Hafez....
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20th April 2010, 04:57 PM
Sameer bhaa'ii:
Aadaab!
kyaa Khoob Ghazal kahi hay aapne.. dil Shaad-Shaad ho gayaa.. aur maQ'taa mujhe bahot hi pasaNd aaya.. dil se daad..!
KhuSh raheN... apnaa Khayaal raKheN
duaaoN ke saath ijaazat
aapka
~ Dhaval
*~*Dhaval*~*....Ek Ehsaas...
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23rd April 2010, 02:08 PM
Woh shikwe shikayateN woh jafaa kii baateN
ItNe faSLe DaRmiYaaN banaye baithe hai
Ji maktaa behad pasand aaya aur matla bhi khoobsurat laga ...very nice..
Radhika
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Jo Humpe Guzari Guzarey Chale Gaye
Woh Aayega Ek Din Milne Humse
Naam Uska Hi Pukarey Chale Gaye
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23rd April 2010, 02:49 PM
Aisse hi likhiyegaa, Sameer Ji...!
Aap ki shaayri se khaas lagaav hai hamein...! You have done good progress...!
With blessings
Jeene ke liye mujhe ek sapna dedo
Haqeekat meri jaaN liye jaa rahi hai
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9th May 2010, 04:56 PM
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Yaqeen maniye Sameer saheb.......ab tak jitna padha hai aapko un sab me yeh kalam sabseeeeeeeeeee behtar hai. Har sher kamaal hai, karodo daad kabool ho.....
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Sajeed Bhai AadaaB!
Sabse pahele to aapki narazi ke liye muafi chahunga... aur deri se reply karne ke liye... Ummid hai aapne meri kisi baat ka bura nahi mana hoga...
Yeh to Aapki zara nawazi hai sahab jo aapne adna si kalaam ko daad ke kabil samjha....
Aage bhi apna saath nbanaye rakhiye,
Khush rahiye,
Khuda Hafez.......
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11th May 2010, 02:07 PM
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HUm SitaaRe Ko NiSHaaN banaYe baithe hai
Dil ki hasrat ko hum JaaN banaye baithe hai
YeH DiL BeSaBRa Hai JaWaab -E- TaLab Unke
Woh khamoshi ko zubaaN banaye baithe hai
Dard -E- DiL Per DaWaaoN Ka Asar hota nahiN
Dil yeh bimar KhamakhaaN banaye baithe hai
Humne chahaa mohobbat mein khuda dekheN
LoG Hai DauLaT Pe IimaaN banaye baithe hai
DiN Ko ChaiN Nahi RaatoN Ko KhaYaal UnKe
Aur woh Izhaar ko ahsaaN banaye baithe hai
Ek ZaRRa Si BaaT Per HuYe Hia ItNe KhaFaa
Besabab hi dil bad-gumaaN banaye baithe hai
Woh shikwe shikayateN woh jafaa kii baateN
ItNe faSLe DaRmiYaaN banaye baithe hai
Kis qadar chur hai nashe mein sab jahaaN wale
Khud ko khud se anjaaN banaye baithe hai
Manzil hai samne chand kadmoN pe Kwahish
Laut jaane ka kyuN armaaN banaye baithe hai
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ji saare hi aashar bhaut khoob hai................
Radhika
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Jo Humpe Guzari Guzarey Chale Gaye
Woh Aayega Ek Din Milne Humse
Naam Uska Hi Pukarey Chale Gaye
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4th June 2010, 02:29 AM
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Sameer ji,
You have written so well.....
Keep smiling!
Mann
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Mann Jee thank you Very much for encourage me..... And thanks for your precious reply.....
Keep visiting.....
Keep reading.....
Keep smiling.....
May God Bless You......
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4th June 2010, 11:18 AM
Sameer bhai aadaab,
Kaise haiN aap? bade dinoeN baad aapke darshan hue hai..umeed hai khairiyat se honge
pehle to yeh kahunga ki yeh aapki sabse achi rachna hai..bahot khoob..god bless..yunhi likhte rahiye..
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Originally Posted by kwahish
HUm SitaaRe Ko NiSHaaN banaYe baithe hai
Dil ki hasrat ko hum JaaN banaye baithe hai
sahab donoeN baatein sahi hai...judi hui nahi hai..matla aur behtar ho sakta tha kyunki aapka radeef zabardast hai
YeH DiL BeSaBRa Hai JaWaab -E- TaLab Unke
Woh khamoshi ko zubaaN banaye baithe hai
besabra (impatient) aur talab (desire, wish)..this heart is impatient for the desire of an answer from her..thoda aur aasaan yeh hota ki heart is impatient for an answer from her..or the heart desires an answer from her..not both the things together..
doosra misra zabardast hai
Dard -E- DiL Per DaWaaoN Ka Asar hota nahiN
Dil yeh bimar KhamakhaaN banaye baithe hai
bahot khoob..daad.
Humne chahaa mohobbat mein khuda dekheN
LoG Hai DauLaT Pe IimaaN banaye baithe hai
wahhh..behad umda...daad
DiN Ko ChaiN Nahi RaatoN Ko KhaYaal UnKe
Aur woh Izhaar ko ahsaaN banaye baithe hai
daad...
Ek ZaRRa Si BaaT Per HuYe Hia ItNe KhaFaa
Besabab hi dil bad-gumaaN banaye baithe hai
daad...
Woh shikwe shikayateN woh jafaa kii baateN
ItNe faSLe DaRmiYaaN banaye baithe hai
yeh sher mera fav raha..aur haasil-e-ghazal bhi..daad
Kis qadar chur hai nashe mein sab jahaaN wale
Khud ko khud se anjaaN banaye baithe hai
hmm..acha hai
Manzil hai samne chand kadmoN pe Kwahish
Laut jaane ka kyuN armaaN banaye baithe hai
bahot badhiya
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tamaam ghazal hi purjosh...jasbaatoen se labrez rahi...jo baatein maine rakhi hai uska aap bura nahi lagaaenge yeh jaanta hun maY to maufi nahi maang raha..
aapka dost,
Pradhyuman
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gore ghareeban hai ye 'bismil', kyun tu naashaad nazar aata hai?
musht-e-khaak hai basi yahan, bata kahan fuwaad nazar aata hai?
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4th June 2010, 09:40 PM
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Originally Posted by vikramjethi
sameer saheb aadaab...!
kaise haiN janaab...?
kehne ko zyada hai hi nahi, kya tareef karu, kahaN se karu...sach meiN samjh nahi aa raha...aapne kamaal ka likha hai...ek ek micra dil meiN utar gaya....
bhai daad haazir hai qubuul karna...
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Vikram sahab Aadaab!
Hum khairiyat se hia janab ..... Ummid hai aap bhi achche honge....
Wah sahab ........ tarif kare to koi aap jaisi kare... aapki daad dil se kabool kii sahab.....
Aate rahiye,
Apna khyaal rakhiye....
Khush rahiye ....
Khuda Hafez...
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15th June 2010, 02:54 AM
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Originally Posted by Dhaval
Sameer bhaa'ii:
Aadaab!
kyaa Khoob Ghazal kahi hay aapne.. dil Shaad-Shaad ho gayaa.. aur maQ'taa mujhe bahot hi pasaNd aaya.. dil se daad..!
KhuSh raheN... apnaa Khayaal raKheN
duaaoN ke saath ijaazat
aapka
~ Dhaval
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Dhaval Bhai aadaaB!
Aapki hunsla afzai aur pasandidgii ka tahe dil se mashkoor o mamnoon huN,
Aage bhi apna saathbanaye rakhiye....
Khush rahiye.......
Apna kHayaal rakhiye......
Khuda hafez.....
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15th June 2010, 09:00 AM
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Originally Posted by kwahish
HUm SitaaRe Ko NiSHaaN banaYe baithe hai
Dil ki hasrat ko hum JaaN banaye baithe hai
YeH DiL BeSaBRa Hai JaWaab -E- TaLab Unke
Woh khamoshi ko zubaaN banaye baithe hai
Dard -E- DiL Per DaWaaoN Ka Asar hota nahiN
Dil yeh bimar KhamakhaaN banaye baithe hai
Humne chahaa mohobbat mein khuda dekheN
LoG Hai DauLaT Pe IimaaN banaye baithe hai
DiN Ko ChaiN Nahi RaatoN Ko KhaYaal UnKe
Aur woh Izhaar ko ahsaaN banaye baithe hai
Ek ZaRRa Si BaaT Per HuYe Hia ItNe KhaFaa
Besabab hi dil bad-gumaaN banaye baithe hai
Woh shikwe shikayateN woh jafaa kii baateN
ItNe faSLe DaRmiYaaN banaye baithe hai
Kis qadar chur hai nashe mein sab jahaaN wale
Khud ko khud se anjaaN banaye baithe hai
Manzil hai samne chand kadmoN pe Kwahish
Laut jaane ka kyuN armaaN banaye baithe hai
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sameer bhai
radhe radhe
bahut hi umda kalaam dil se daad yun hi likhte rahen
duaon ke saath
Aapka Apna Ishk
'इश्क' के बदले इश्क चाहना तिजारत है
इज़हार किससे करें महबूब तो दिल में है
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13th July 2010, 12:01 AM
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Originally Posted by Radhika_2
Woh shikwe shikayateN woh jafaa kii baateN
ItNe faSLe DaRmiYaaN banaye baithe hai
Ji maktaa behad pasand aaya aur matla bhi khoobsurat laga ...very nice..
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Radhika jee thanks for apreciation..... and aage bhi apna saath banaye rakhiye..........
Khush rahiye
Khuda Hafez....
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17th July 2010, 11:32 PM
probably your best khwahish, keep going...............
Quote:
Originally Posted by kwahish
HUm SitaaRe Ko NiSHaaN banaYe baithe hai
Dil ki hasrat ko hum JaaN banaye baithe hai
YeH DiL BeSaBRa Hai JaWaab -E- TaLab Unke
Woh khamoshi ko zubaaN banaye baithe hai
Dard -E- DiL Per DaWaaoN Ka Asar hota nahiN
Dil yeh bimar KhamakhaaN banaye baithe hai
Humne chahaa mohobbat mein khuda dekheN
LoG Hai DauLaT Pe IimaaN banaye baithe hai
DiN Ko ChaiN Nahi RaatoN Ko KhaYaal UnKe
Aur woh Izhaar ko ahsaaN banaye baithe hai
Ek ZaRRa Si BaaT Per HuYe Hia ItNe KhaFaa
Besabab hi dil bad-gumaaN banaye baithe hai
Woh shikwe shikayateN woh jafaa kii baateN
ItNe faSLe DaRmiYaaN banaye baithe hai
Kis qadar chur hai nashe mein sab jahaaN wale
Khud ko khud se anjaaN banaye baithe hai
Manzil hai samne chand kadmoN pe Kwahish
Laut jaane ka kyuN armaaN banaye baithe hai
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18th July 2010, 11:33 AM
Kis qadar chur hai nashe mein sab jahaaN wale
Khud ko khud se anjaaN banaye baithe hai
Manzil hai samne chand kadmoN pe Kwahish
Laut jaane ka kyuN armaaN banaye baithe hai
this one is just mind blowing sameer ji....
keep writin....
take care..
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19th July 2010, 12:01 PM
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Originally Posted by kwahish
HUm SitaaRe Ko NiSHaaN banaYe baithe hai
Dil ki hasrat ko hum JaaN banaye baithe hai
YeH DiL BeSaBRa Hai JaWaab -E- TaLab Unke
Woh khamoshi ko zubaaN banaye baithe hai
Dard -E- DiL Per DaWaaoN Ka Asar hota nahiN
Dil yeh bimar KhamakhaaN banaye baithe hai
Humne chahaa mohobbat mein khuda dekheN
LoG Hai DauLaT Pe IimaaN banaye baithe hai
DiN Ko ChaiN Nahi RaatoN Ko KhaYaal UnKe
Aur woh Izhaar ko ahsaaN banaye baithe hai
Ek ZaRRa Si BaaT Per HuYe Hia ItNe KhaFaa
Besabab hi dil bad-gumaaN banaye baithe hai
Woh shikwe shikayateN woh jafaa kii baateN
ItNe faSLe DaRmiYaaN banaye baithe hai
Kis qadar chur hai nashe mein sab jahaaN wale
Khud ko khud se anjaaN banaye baithe hai
Manzil hai samne chand kadmoN pe Kwahish
Laut jaane ka kyuN armaaN banaye baithe hai
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bahot khoob likha hai khwahish jee... aapka likha hau mujhe bahot pasand aaya hai.. likhti rahen.. aise khoobsurat ehsaas pahne ko milte rahenge ummeed hai..
shaad...
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19th July 2010, 12:28 PM
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HUm SitaaRe Ko NiSHaaN banaYe baithe hai
Dil ki hasrat ko hum JaaN banaye baithe hai
YeH DiL BeSaBRa Hai JaWaab -E- TaLab Unke
Woh khamoshi ko zubaaN banaye baithe hai
Dard -E- DiL Per DaWaaoN Ka Asar hota nahiN
Dil yeh bimar KhamakhaaN banaye baithe hai
Humne chahaa mohobbat mein khuda dekheN
LoG Hai DauLaT Pe IimaaN banaye baithe hai
DiN Ko ChaiN Nahi RaatoN Ko KhaYaal UnKe
Aur woh Izhaar ko ahsaaN banaye baithe hai
Ek ZaRRa Si BaaT Per HuYe Hia ItNe KhaFaa
Besabab hi dil bad-gumaaN banaye baithe hai
Woh shikwe shikayateN woh jafaa kii baateN
ItNe faSLe DaRmiYaaN banaye baithe hai
Kis qadar chur hai nashe mein sab jahaaN wale
Khud ko khud se anjaaN banaye baithe hai
Manzil hai samne chand kadmoN pe Kwahish
Laut jaane ka kyuN armaaN banaye baithe hai
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wow, sameer bhai......................superb.
ek ek lafz dil mein utar gaya.........
reps +++ added
duaoN ke saath
diii
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.....Sunita Thakur.....
यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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23rd July 2010, 01:45 AM
Bismil sahab AadaaB!
Janab hum to khairiyat se hai ... aap bhi achche hoge yehi ummid....
Sameer bhai aadaab,
Kaise haiN aap? bade dinoeN baad aapke darshan hue hai..umeed hai khairiyat se honge
pehle to yeh kahunga ki yeh aapki sabse achi rachna hai..bahot khoob..god bless..yunhi likhte rahiye..
Janab aapka bahut bahut shukriyaa ke is kalaam ko itni tareef ke kabil samjha aapne........
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Originally Posted by kwahish
HUm SitaaRe Ko NiSHaaN banaYe baithe hai
Dil ki hasrat ko hum JaaN banaye baithe hai
sahab donoeN baatein sahi hai...judi hui nahi hai..matla aur behtar ho sakta tha kyunki aapka radeef zabardast hai
Hmmm Bismil sahab aapki baat sahiN hai per maiN apna clearification bhi de duN..... YahaaN sitara meaN aasmaa ka sitara nahi hai.... woh sitara hai jo duniyaa ki bulandiyoN per chamak raha hai.... aur hum uski hasrat kar baithe jise hum paa hi nahi sakte ..... Ab sidhe se kahuN to
YeH DiL BeSaBRa Hai JaWaab -E- TaLab Unke
Woh khamoshi ko zubaaN banaye baithe hai
besabra (impatient) aur talab (desire, wish)..this heart is impatient for the desire of an answer from her..thoda aur aasaan yeh hota ki heart is impatient for an answer from her..or the heart desires an answer from her..not both the things together..
doosra misra zabardast hai
Hmmm yahaaN kuch maiN bhi confuse hua huN shayad meri kamzor Urdu ka asar hai.....
tamaam ghazal hi purjosh...jasbaatoen se labrez rahi...jo baatein maine rakhi hai uska aap bura nahi lagaaenge yeh jaanta hun maY to maufi nahi maang raha..
aapka dost,
Pradhyuman
Bismil sahab aap mere SDC ke un dostoN meiN se hai jo yahaaN ke mere sabse kareebi dost hai.......... Aapki baaton ka agar bura maan jauNga to phir dosti aur humari samjhdari kis kamki........
Jee aapne muafi mang kar mujhe sharminda nahi kiya iske liye maiN aapka shukra guzaar huN......
Apna khayaal rakhiye
Khuda Hafez.....
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25th July 2010, 01:10 AM
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sameer bhai
radhe radhe
bahut hi umda kalaam dil se daad yun hi likhte rahen
duaon ke saath
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Ishk sahab AadaaB!
Daad aur hunsla afzai ka bahut bahut shukriya.......
Aage bhi apna saath banaye rakhiye.......
Khush rahiye.......
Khuda Hafez.......
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26th July 2010, 01:57 AM
Khaawish sahab aadab ,,
apki dil kash taqleeq pe dad hazir hai qubool karen ..mashallah achi sunch ke malim ho sahab .. qoob sunch lete ho .. allah apko aur bhi taraqi de ....
dua go
qadeertoopchi
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26th July 2010, 05:56 AM
Bahut umda,
mere khayal se ab tak jitna v padha hai aapko, usme ye aapki sabse behtareen peshkash hai sameer sahab... bas maza aa gaya soch v ahcha rahi hai, haan bas do cheezen gaur farmaaiyega....
YeH DiL BeSaBRa Hai JaWaab -E- TaLab Unke
Woh khamoshi ko zubaaN banaye baithe hai
ek to is sher ko aap nikaal hi dijiye, bahut ulat pulat hai isme, aur ek bahut hi ahchi ghazal ka maza kirkira sa kar raha hai...!!
Humne chahaa mohobbat mein khuda dekheN
LoG Hai DauLaT Pe IimaaN banaye baithe hai
yahaaN ek choti si cheez dikhi mujhe, mere khayaal se daulat pe imaan banaaye baithe me, "Daulat ko imaaN" hoga, kyuNki daulat pe imaan banaye baithe haiN me aisa lagta hai maano kisi ne daulat ka dher laga diya aur uske upar baith gaya ho. bahut atpata sa lagta hai, waise ho sakta hai ki maiN galat huN, gar kuch jyada keh gaya huNga to maafi ka talabgaar rahunga umeed karta huN aage v aapki kalam se aur behtareen khayaat aur alfaaz padhne ko milenge....!!
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26th July 2010, 01:42 PM
Sameer ji,
bahut hi umdaa khayal..........
daad dilse kabul kijiye
khus rahiye
Diya
Mohabbat ke baad mohabbat mumkin hai faraz.
Magar toot ke chahna sirf ek baar hota hai
Goodbye SDC
Diya
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26th July 2010, 04:37 PM
Wah Wah Wah Wah Wah waH
HUm SitaaRe Ko NiSHaaN banaYe baithe hai
Dil ki hasrat ko hum JaaN banaye baithe hai
YeH DiL BeSaBRa Hai JaWaab -E- TaLab Unke
Woh khamoshi ko zubaaN banaye baithe hai
Dard -E- DiL Per DaWaaoN Ka Asar hota nahiN
Dil yeh bimar KhamakhaaN banaye baithe hai
Bohat Khoob... subhan Allaah
Manzil hai samne chand kadmoN pe Kwahish
Laut jaane ka kyuN armaaN banaye baithe hai
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26th July 2010, 04:57 PM
Humne chahaa mohobbat mein khuda dekheN
LoG Hai DauLaT Pe IimaaN banaye baithe hai
DiN Ko ChaiN Nahi RaatoN Ko KhaYaal UnKe
Aur woh Izhaar ko ahsaaN banaye baithe hai
Sameer ji bahut gahrai se likhte hai'n aap ,padhne wale ko bhi dubo dete hai'n
Jo nahi padh pate aapke kalam , yakeenan vo seep ke moti kho dete hain. Ameen
Duao'n ke sath Shayar-E-Na Cheez :Parveen Komal
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31st July 2010, 02:18 PM
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HUm SitaaRe Ko NiSHaaN banaYe baithe hai
Dil ki hasrat ko hum JaaN banaye baithe hai
YeH DiL BeSaBRa Hai JaWaab -E- TaLab Unke
Woh khamoshi ko zubaaN banaye baithe hai
Dard -E- DiL Per DaWaaoN Ka Asar hota nahiN
Dil yeh bimar KhamakhaaN banaye baithe hai
Humne chahaa mohobbat mein khuda dekheN
LoG Hai DauLaT Pe IimaaN banaye baithe hai
DiN Ko ChaiN Nahi RaatoN Ko KhaYaal UnKe
Aur woh Izhaar ko ahsaaN banaye baithe hai
Ek ZaRRa Si BaaT Per HuYe Hia ItNe KhaFaa
Besabab hi dil bad-gumaaN banaye baithe hai
Woh shikwe shikayateN woh jafaa kii baateN
ItNe faSLe DaRmiYaaN banaye baithe hai
Kis qadar chur hai nashe mein sab jahaaN wale
Khud ko khud se anjaaN banaye baithe hai
Manzil hai samne chand kadmoN pe Kwahish
Laut jaane ka kyuN armaaN banaye baithe hai
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smeer ji bahut hi aacha likha hai aapne .good job.
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9th August 2010, 01:35 AM
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probably your best khwahish, keep going...............
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Thanks Mayoos .........
Apna saath banaye rakhiye Khush rahiye.....
Khuda Hafez.......
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3rd September 2010, 10:18 PM
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Originally Posted by shipra
Kis qadar chur hai nashe mein sab jahaaN wale
Khud ko khud se anjaaN banaye baithe hai
Manzil hai samne chand kadmoN pe Kwahish
Laut jaane ka kyuN armaaN banaye baithe hai
this one is just mind blowing sameer ji....
keep writin....
take care..
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Shipraa Jee Aadaab!
Kalaam ko pasand karne ka bahut bahut shukriyaa.......
Aage bhi apna saath banaye rakhiye.......
Khush rahiye....
Khuda hafez......
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3rd September 2010, 11:00 PM
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hum sitaare ko nishaan banaye baithe hai
dil ki hasrat ko hum jaan banaye baithe hai
yeh dil besabra hai jawaab -e- talab unke
woh khamoshi ko zubaan banaye baithe hai
dard -e- dil per dawaaon ka asar hota nahin
dil yeh bimar khamakhaan banaye baithe hai
humne chahaa mohobbat mein khuda dekhen
log hai daulat pe iimaan banaye baithe hai
din ko chain nahi raaton ko khayaal unke
aur woh izhaar ko ahsaan banaye baithe hai
ek zarra si baat per huye hia itne khafaa
besabab hi dil bad-gumaan banaye baithe hai
woh shikwe shikayaten woh jafaa kii baaten
itne fasle darmiyaan banaye baithe hai
kis qadar chur hai nashe mein sab jahaan wale
khud ko khud se anjaan banaye baithe hai
manzil hai samne chand kadmon pe kwahish
laut jaane ka kyun armaan banaye baithe hai
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भई समीर साहब क्या खूब ग़ज़ल लिखी है. वाह क्या बात है मज़ा आ गया पढ़ कर, आपके अगले ग़ज़ल का इंतज़ार रहेगा !
खूब लिखिए अच्छा लिखिए यही हमारी कामना है....
Aapka Santosh..........
Bahut tanhaiya.N hai.N mere hisse mei.N churalo tum
Tumhara saath meri tanhaiyo.N se kuch to behtar hai...
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4th September 2010, 04:21 PM
bahoot hi oomda.......ShabdoN la jaise kaal parh gaya ho..bai waah
Harash
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