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16th July 2006, 05:52 PM
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Ik qatre ki suurat kaayenaat kar li Ik lamhe mein humne basar hayaat kar li --paras 2nd sher "Milley na kushi to gammo se dosti kar li, esi tarah se basar humne bhi hayaat kar li" - sunita virender 3rd sher Raat aayi to chand se mulakat kar li roshni se khushiyan ghar mein tainat kar li -masti 4th sher "Baadlo ne merey chand ki chori kar ki, akele rah mai maine uski yaddey saath kar li" -sunita virender 5th sher lamhon se yunhi raahon mein mulaaqaat kar li khwaabon mein hi unke kaaenaat kar li -mast 6th sher khushi ki chaah mai mile gham itne, dukhon se hamne ab iltifaat kar li. -akelijaan |
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1st Sher
Ik qatre ki suurat kaayenaat kar li Ik lamhe mein humne basar hayaat kar li --paras 2nd sher "Milley na kushi to gammo se dosti kar li, esi tarah se basar humne bhi hayaat kar li" - sunita virender 3rd sher Raat aayi to chand se mulakat kar li roshni se khushiyan ghar mein tainat kar li -masti 4th sher "Baadlo ne merey chand ki chori kar ki, akele rah mai maine uski yaddey saath kar li" -sunita virender 5th sher lamhon se yunhi raahon mein mulaaqaat kar li khwaabon mein hi unke kaaenaat kar li -mast 6th sher khushi ki chaah mai mile gham itne, dukhon se hamne ab iltifaat kar li. -akelijaan "Pyar ki chah mai miley hai har baar gum, pyar ke naam se ab humney to tauba kar li"  .....Sunita Thakur..... यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया ....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए... 
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28th July 2006, 02:38 PM
Dosto Paras Ji ne yeh Kuccha-e-kalaam shuru kiya tha. par ab bahut dino se jaha koi reply nahi hua. kal maine dilip ji aur nisha ji ki tuk-bandhi dekhi to mujhe lagga, ki en sab ko jaha appney sher post karney chahiye. agar app logo ko thik lagey to app sab es ko continue kar saktey ho.
1st Sher Ik qatre ki suurat kaayenaat kar li Ik lamhe mein humne basar hayaat kar li --paras 2nd sher "Milley na kushi to gammo se dosti kar li, esi tarah se basar humne bhi hayaat kar li" - sunita virender 3rd sher Raat aayi to chand se mulakat kar li roshni se khushiyan ghar mein tainat kar li -masti 4th sher "Baadlo ne merey chand ki chori kar ki, akele rah mai maine uski yaddey saath kar li" -sunita virender 5th sher lamhon se yunhi raahon mein mulaaqaat kar li khwaabon mein hi unke kaaenaat kar li -mast 6th sher khushi ki chaah mai mile gham itne, dukhon se hamne ab iltifaat kar li. -akelijaan 7th sher "Pyar ki chah mai miley hai har baar gum, pyar ke naam se ab humney to tauba kar li" -sunita virender .....Sunita Thakur..... यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया ....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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28th July 2006, 02:39 PM
Dosto Paras Ji ne yeh Kuccha-e-kalaam shuru kiya tha. par ab bahut dino se jaha koi reply nahi hua. kal maine dilip ji aur nisha ji ki tuk-bandhi dekhi to mujhe lagga, ki en sab ko jaha appney sher post karney chahiye. agar app logo ko thik lagey to app sab es ko continue kar saktey ho.
1st Sher Ik qatre ki suurat kaayenaat kar li Ik lamhe mein humne basar hayaat kar li --paras 2nd sher "Milley na kushi to gammo se dosti kar li, esi tarah se basar humne bhi hayaat kar li" - sunita virender 3rd sher Raat aayi to chand se mulakat kar li roshni se khushiyan ghar mein tainat kar li -masti 4th sher "Baadlo ne merey chand ki chori kar ki, akele rah mai maine uski yaddey saath kar li" -sunita virender 5th sher lamhon se yunhi raahon mein mulaaqaat kar li khwaabon mein hi unke kaaenaat kar li -mast 6th sher khushi ki chaah mai mile gham itne, dukhon se hamne ab iltifaat kar li. -akelijaan 7th sher "Pyar ki chah mai miley hai har baar gum, pyar ke naam se ab humney to tauba kar li" -sunita virender .....Sunita Thakur..... यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया ....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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28th July 2006, 03:01 PM
[QUOTE]Originally posted by sunita virender
[B]Dosto Paras Ji ne yeh Kuccha-e-kalaam shuru kiya tha. par ab bahut dino se jaha koi reply nahi hua. kal maine dilip ji aur nisha ji ki tuk-bandhi dekhi to mujhe lagga, ki en sab ko jaha appney sher post karney chahiye. agar app logo ko thik lagey to app sab es ko continue kar saktey ho. 1st Sher Ik qatre ki suurat kaayenaat kar li Ik lamhe mein humne basar hayaat kar li --paras 2nd sher "Milley na kushi to gammo se dosti kar li, esi tarah se basar humne bhi hayaat kar li" - sunita virender 3rd sher Raat aayi to chand se mulakat kar li roshni se khushiyan ghar mein tainat kar li -masti 4th sher "Baadlo ne merey chand ki chori kar ki, akele rah mai maine uski yaddey saath kar li" -sunita virender 5th sher lamhon se yunhi raahon mein mulaaqaat kar li khwaabon mein hi unke kaaenaat kar li -mast 6th sher khushi ki chaah mai mile gham itne, dukhon se hamne ab iltifaat kar li. -akelijaan 7th sher "Pyar ki chah mai miley hai har baar gum, pyar ke naam se ab humney to tauba kar li" Sorry dosto. umda shayro.n ki is mahfil main main adna sa fakeer jo abhi likhna nahi janta, arj karne ki himakat kar raha hoon. parantu main sunita ji ka kaha nahi taal sakta is liye post kar raha hoon. dilip 8th sher " jee nahi sakte the tere bin hum humto so teri yaad me gujar humne jindgi kar li |
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28th July 2006, 03:07 PM
1st Sher
Ik qatre ki suurat kaayenaat kar li Ik lamhe mein humne basar hayaat kar li --paras 2nd sher "Milley na kushi to gammo se dosti kar li, esi tarah se basar humne bhi hayaat kar li" - sunita virender 3rd sher Raat aayi to chand se mulakat kar li roshni se khushiyan ghar mein tainat kar li -masti 4th sher "Baadlo ne merey chand ki chori kar ki, akele rah mai maine uski yaddey saath kar li" -sunita virender 5th sher lamhon se yunhi raahon mein mulaaqaat kar li khwaabon mein hi unke kaaenaat kar li -mast 6th sher khushi ki chaah mai mile gham itne, dukhon se hamne ab iltifaat kar li. -akelijaan 7th sher "Pyar ki chah mai miley hai har baar gum, pyar ke naam se ab humney to tauba kar li" -sunita virender 8th sher " jee nahi sakte a tere bin hum humto isliye teri yaad me gujar humne jindgi kar li" -dilip 9th sher "pyar karney ko to ek umr bhi kum hai, woh kaun hai jisney pyar se tauba kar li" -sunita virender .....Sunita Thakur..... यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया ....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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28th July 2006, 03:11 PM
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28th July 2006, 03:17 PM
10 the sher
" mila na pyar ke badle yahna pyar iseeliye hune payr se touba kar li -dilip "milli na jab waffa ke badley waffa to humney, unki be-waffeao se hi 'eh dost' mohabat kar li" -sunita virender .....Sunita Thakur..... यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया ....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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28th July 2006, 03:52 PM
10 the sher
" mila na pyar ke badle yahna pyar iseeliye hune payr se touba kar li -dilip "milli na jab waffa ke badley waffa to humney, unki be-waffeao se hi 'eh dost' mohabat kar li" -sunita virender " humne ki wafa unse,par shayad hum wafa ke kaabil na the.. isilie lagta hai unhone wafa se bewafai kar li.. -nisha par itnaa to huaa, kuchh log pahchaane gaye... |
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28th July 2006, 03:57 PM
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.....Sunita Thakur..... यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया ....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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28th July 2006, 04:05 PM
hmmmm...
jaisi aapki marzi.. thoda udaas aalam hai to maaf kijieya agar galat shuruat ho.. " jab bhi kisi par kar yakeen,apna haal-e-dil sunaya hai.. gam ghatane ke bajae, dard kuch aur hi badaya hai.. -nisha par itnaa to huaa, kuchh log pahchaane gaye... |
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28th July 2006, 04:08 PM
Dosto,
rules ke anusar ek gazal me 8 misre hona chahiye parantu ab isme jyaa misre ho gaye hain, is liye naya sher kahna padega or main is sher ko kahne ki gustakhqi kar raha hoon. aap sabhi senior sahewan mujhe muaafi denge. sunita ji ke ek sher se gazal ka aagaj karta hoon. " dil par chad chukey thy teri mohabat ke rang, jahan mai hum tere naam se mashoor ho gaye dilip. |
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28th July 2006, 04:10 PM
1st sher
jab bhi kisi par kar yakeen,apna haal-e-dil sunaya hai.. gam ghatane ke bajae, dard kuch aur hi badaya hai.. -Nisha 2nd sher "uski yaddo ke sagar mai, jab bhi gotta lagaya hai, kushi to haath nahi ayye, ek naya gum hissey aaya hai" -Sunita Virender .....Sunita Thakur..... यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया ....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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28th July 2006, 04:11 PM
janab dilip saahab..
ab do do gazlein saath saath chalani padengi.. maaf kijiega mujhe pata nahi tha aap iski shuruat kar rahe hain.. maine bhi galti se shuru kar diya.. par koi baat nahi.. " dil par chad chukey thy teri mohabat ke rang, jahan mai hum tere naam se mashoor ho gaye dilip. " roka bahut hamein bedadr zamane ne.. par chahne ko tujhe hum majboor ho gae.. nisha par itnaa to huaa, kuchh log pahchaane gaye... |
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28th July 2006, 04:18 PM
1st sher
jab bhi kisi par kar yakeen,apna haal-e-dil sunaya hai.. gam ghatane ke bajae, dard kuch aur hi badaya hai.. -Nisha 2nd sher "uski yaddo ke sagar mai, jab bhi gotta lagaya hai, kushi to haath nahi ayye, ek naya gum hissey aaya hai" -Sunita Virender 3rd sher " apne chahat ke phoolo ko, jab bhi uske kadmo pe bichaya hai.. khusbu se muskaan ki bajae,kaanto se ashq hi paaya hai.. -nisha par itnaa to huaa, kuchh log pahchaane gaye... |
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28th July 2006, 04:30 PM
1st sher
jab bhi kisi par kar yakeen,apna haal-e-dil sunaya hai.. gam ghatane ke bajae, dard kuch aur hi badaya hai.. -Nisha 2nd sher "uski yaddo ke sagar mai, jab bhi gotta lagaya hai, kushi to haath nahi ayye, ek naya gum hissey aaya hai" -Sunita Virender 3rd sher " apne chahat ke phoolo ko, jab bhi uske kadmo pe bichaya hai.. khusbu se muskaan ki bajae,kaanto se ashq hi paaya hai.. -nisha 4th sher humne jab bhee unhe apne haale-dil bataya hai har bar ki tarah unhone chup rahke hame sataya hai |
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28th July 2006, 04:35 PM
jab bhi kisi par kar yakeen,apna haal-e-dil sunaya hai..
gam ghatane ke bajae, dard kuch aur hi badaya hai.. uski yaddo ke sagar mai, jab bhi gotta lagaya hai, kushi to haath nahi ayye, ek naya gum hissey aaya hai apne chahat ke phoolo ko, jab bhi uske kadmo pe bichaya hai.. khusbu se muskaan ki bajae,kaanto se ashq hi paaya hai.. humne jab bhee unhe apne haale-dil bataya hai har bar ki tarah unhone chup rahke hame sataya hai " humne jo bas ik baar unhe sataya,wo humse rooth gae.. mat poocho yaaro fir kitne jatno se unhe manaya hai.. par itnaa to huaa, kuchh log pahchaane gaye... |
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28th July 2006, 04:39 PM
jab bhi kisi par kar yakeen,apna haal-e-dil sunaya hai..
gam ghatane ke bajae, dard kuch aur hi badaya hai.. uski yaddo ke sagar mai, jab bhi gotta lagaya hai, kushi to haath nahi ayye, ek naya gum hissey aaya hai apne chahat ke phoolo ko, jab bhi uske kadmo pe bichaya hai.. khusbu se muskaan ki bajae,kaanto se ashq hi paaya hai.. humne jab bhee unhe apne haale-dil bataya hai har bar ki tarah unhone chup rahke hame sataya hai " humne jo bas ik baar unhe sataya,wo humse rooth gae.. mat poocho yaaro fir kitne jatno se unhe manaya hai.. hum jante hai. ki roothne or manana hi pyar ki gahrai hai isliye jab bhee unhone chot dee pyar se dil ko sahlaya hai. dilip |
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28th July 2006, 04:44 PM
jab bhi kisi par kar yakeen,apna haal-e-dil sunaya hai..
gam ghatane ke bajae, dard kuch aur hi badaya hai.. uski yaddo ke sagar mai, jab bhi gotta lagaya hai, kushi to haath nahi ayye, ek naya gum hissey aaya hai apne chahat ke phoolo ko, jab bhi uske kadmo pe bichaya hai.. khusbu se muskaan ki bajae,kaanto se ashq hi paaya hai.. humne jab bhee unhe apne haale-dil bataya hai har bar ki tarah unhone chup rahke hame sataya hai " humne jo bas ik baar unhe sataya,wo humse rooth gae.. mat poocho yaaro fir kitne jatno se unhe manaya hai.. hum jante hai. ki roothne or manana hi pyar ki gahrai hai isliye jab bhee unhone chot dee pyar se dil ko sahlaya hai. dilip " aaj wo ban jaenge kisi aur ke.. wo khush rahein isilie unko bhulaya hai.. -nisha yaad rahe ab ye wala aakhri hona chahie.. to sunita ji aur dilip ji.. its a challenge.. ise khatm kar ke dikhaiye kyunki dekhne se lagta hai ki ye already khatm ho chuki hai.. par hui nahi hai.. par itnaa to huaa, kuchh log pahchaane gaye... |
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28th July 2006, 04:44 PM
dosto ajj pehli dafa is bazam main hazir hoon......
apne chahat ke phoolo ko, jab bhi uske kadmo pe bichaya hai.. khusbu se muskaan ki bajae,kaanto se ashq hi paaya hai.. 3rd share sari umar wo mere saath chalta raha kisi ajnabi ki tarha, ghira jab gham ka andhera maloom hua wo mera saya hai ... kush talakh haqkatain i jab kabhi dar pesh zindagi main, us waqt dushmano ko he nahi dosto ko bhee ajmaiya hai...... 4th and 5th share ab mujhe bewafa kahiye ya bawafa kahiye...(Raj) |
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28th July 2006, 04:50 PM
sari umar wo mere saath chalta raha kisi ajnabi ki tarha,
ghira jab gham ka andhera maloom hua wo mera saya hai ... kush talakh haqkatain i jab kabhi dar pesh zindagi main, us waqt dushmano ko he nahi dosto ko bhee ajmaiya hai...... 4th and 5th share rajveer ji.. aapne offline mein seedha sixer maara hai.. aapne jo sher likhe hain wo teesre aur chauthe nahi balki aathve aur nauvein hain.. aur rules ke hisaab se aap ek baar mein ek hi sher post kar sakte hain aur dusra tab tak nahi jab tak ki koi jawaab na de.. par sach bahut umda likha hai aapne.. 10th sher dusman to the hi gair..apne bhi paraye nikle.. wo ban gae kisi aur ke..aur bewafai ka ilzaam hamare sir aaya hai.. par itnaa to huaa, kuchh log pahchaane gaye... |
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28th July 2006, 04:51 PM
ligiye nisha ji
rajveer sahav ne jawab dekar aapki shuru kee gazal ko poora kar diya hai ab dekhna hai ise aap saleeke se kaise sajati hain. dilip |
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28th July 2006, 04:52 PM
ab is waale ko khatm kar hamein us gazl ko khatm karna chahie jo dilip ji ne shuru kiya tha.. main nahi likh sakti kyunki maine hi aakhri waala likha hai.. so plz continue..
" dil par chad chukey thy teri mohabat ke rang, jahan mai hum tere naam se mashoor ho gaye dilip. " roka bahut hamein bedadr zamane ne.. par chahne ko tujhe hum majboor ho gae.. nisha par itnaa to huaa, kuchh log pahchaane gaye... |
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28th July 2006, 04:56 PM
lijie dilip saahab..
ise tareeke se bhi saja diya.. maaf kijiega sabke naam nahi likhe.. jab bhi kisi par kar yakeen,apna haal-e-dil sunaya hai.. gam ghatane ke bajae, dard kuch aur hi badaya hai.. uski yaddo ke sagar mai, jab bhi gotta lagaya hai, kushi to haath nahi ayye, ek naya gum hissey aaya hai apne chahat ke phoolo ko, jab bhi uske kadmo pe bichaya hai.. khusbu se muskaan ki bajae,kaanto se ashq hi paaya hai.. humne jab bhee unhe apne haale-dil bataya hai har bar ki tarah unhone chup rahke hame sataya hai humne jo bas ik baar unhe sataya,wo humse rooth gae.. mat poocho yaaro fir kitne jatno se unhe manaya hai.. hum jante hai. ki roothne or manana hi pyar ki gahrai hai isliye jab bhee unhone chot dee pyar se dil ko sahlaya hai. sari umar wo mere saath chalta raha kisi ajnabi ki tarha, ghira jab gham ka andhera maloom hua wo mera saya hai ... aaj wo ban jaenge kisi aur ke.. wo khush rahein isilie unko bhulaya hai.. kush talakh haqkatain i jab kabhi dar pesh zindagi main, us waqt dushmano ko he nahi dosto ko bhee ajmaiya hai...... dusman to the hi gair..apne bhi paraye nikle.. wo ban gae kisi aur ke..aur bewafai ka ilzaam hamare sir aaya hai.. par itnaa to huaa, kuchh log pahchaane gaye... |
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28th July 2006, 04:57 PM
dil par chad chukey thy teri mohabat ke rang,
jahan mai hum tere naam se mashoor ho gaye dilip. " roka bahut hamein bedadr zamane ne.. par chahne ko tujhe hum majboor ho gae.. nisha " tumne chalaya teero-nazar dil pe is tarah hum apne aap pe hee magroor ho gaye |
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28th July 2006, 05:01 PM
1st sher
dil par chad chukey thy teri mohabat ke rang, jahan mai hum tere naam se mashoor ho gaye dilip. 2nd sher roka bahut hamein bedadr zamane ne.. par chahne ko tujhe hum majboor ho gae.. nisha 3rd sher "dosto meri mohabat bhi dekho laye kaise rang, mujhe akela chod ke woh kisi aur ke ho gaye" -sunita virender .....Sunita Thakur..... यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया ....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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28th July 2006, 05:06 PM
1st sher
dil par chad chukey thy teri mohabat ke rang, jahan mai hum tere naam se mashoor ho gaye -dilip. 2nd sher roka bahut hamein bedadr zamane ne.. par chahne ko tujhe hum majboor ho gae.. -nisha 3rd sher " tumne chalaya teero-nazar dil pe is tarah hum apne aap pe hee magroor ho gaye -dilip 4th sher "dosto meri mohabat bhi dekho laye kaise rang, mujhe akela chod ke woh kisi aur ke ho gaye" -sunita virender 5th sher ab tanhai hai meri saathi, gam sahara hai.. zindagi aur maut dono humse khafa ho gae.. -nisha par itnaa to huaa, kuchh log pahchaane gaye... |
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hi -
28th July 2006, 05:06 PM
meri mohabat ibadat nahi to or kaya hai,
appse ki mohabat app khuda ka noor ho gaye........ veer........... ab mujhe bewafa kahiye ya bawafa kahiye...(Raj) |
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28th July 2006, 05:09 PM
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ab tanhai hai meri saathi, gam sahara hai.. zindagi aur maut dono humse khafa ho gae.. -nisha 6th sher "Mousmy bahar aane to abhi bakki hai dost, Zindgi se tum kyu aise be-rukh se ho gaye" -sunita virender .....Sunita Thakur..... यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया ....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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28th July 2006, 05:14 PM
7th sher
meri mohabat ibadat nahi to or kaya hai, appse ki mohabat app khuda ka noor ho gaye........ veer........... 8th sher "hum bhi poojtey hai appko kudha ki tarah, phir bhi na janey kyu app humse khaffa ho gaye" -sunita virender .....Sunita Thakur..... यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया ....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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28th July 2006, 05:17 PM
1st sher
dil par chad chukey thy teri mohabat ke rang, jahan mai hum tere naam se mashoor ho gaye -dilip. 2nd sher roka bahut hamein bedadr zamane ne.. par chahne ko tujhe hum majboor ho gae.. -nisha 3rd sher " tumne chalaya teero-nazar dil pe is tarah hum apne aap pe hee magroor ho gaye -dilip 4th sher "dosto meri mohabat bhi dekho laye kaise rang, mujhe akela chod ke woh kisi aur ke ho gaye" -sunita virender 5th sher ab tanhai hai meri saathi, gam sahara hai.. zindagi aur maut dono humse khafa ho gae.. -nisha 6th sher Mousmy bahar aane to abhi bakki hai dost, Zindgi se tum kyu aise be-rukh se ho gaye -sunita virender 7th sher meri mohabat ibadat nahi to or kaya hai, appse ki mohabat app khuda ka noor ho gaye........ -veer 8th sher hum bhi poojtey hai appko kudha ki tarah, phir bhi na janey kyu app humse khaffa ho gaye -sunita virender 9th sher maut bhi aa gai wafa nibhane ke liye.. par mazaar pe wo na aae.. itne kyu masroof ho gae??? -nisha sorry nahi likhna tha par control nahin hua... par itnaa to huaa, kuchh log pahchaane gaye... |
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28th July 2006, 05:26 PM
main ek nai gazal shuru karta hoon......
bheer main wo ajnabi mera humsafar nikla, jisko lutne gaya thaa wo mera he ghar nikla..... veer......... ab mujhe bewafa kahiye ya bawafa kahiye...(Raj) |
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29th July 2006, 06:21 PM
veer ji..
kya khoob likha hai aapne..ek pal ke liye to bolti band kar di thi aapne.. kal to kuch sookh hi nahi raha tha..aaj kuch dimaag mein aaya hai.. so likh rahi hu.. 1st sher bheer main wo ajnabi mera humsafar nikla, jisko lutne gaya thaa wo mera he ghar nikla..... -veer 2nd sher has rahe the jiski barbaadi par thahake laga kar.. wo meri hi tabahee ka manzar nikla.. -nisha par itnaa to huaa, kuchh log pahchaane gaye... |
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30th July 2006, 10:40 AM
1st sher
bheer main wo ajnabi mera humsafar nikla, jisko lutne gaya thaa wo mera he ghar nikla..... -veer 2nd sher has rahe the jiski barbaadi par thahake laga kar.. wo meri hi tabahee ka manzar nikla.. -nisha [/B][/QUOTE] 3rd sher ek din jo socha doond loon is pate per unko jo main doodne gaya to wo mera pata nikla.......... Dilip |
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30th July 2006, 12:53 PM
1st sher
bheer main wo ajnabi mera humsafar nikla, jisko lutne gaya thaa wo mera he ghar nikla..... -veer 2nd sher has rahe the jiski barbaadi par thahake laga kar.. wo meri hi tabahee ka manzar nikla.. -nisha 3rd sher ek din jo socha doond loon is pate per unko jo main doodne gaya to wo mera pata nikla.......... -Dilip 4th sher jise humne pooja apna naseeb samajhkar.. aankh khuli to wo mere hi peeth pe ghupa khanjar nikla.. -nisha par itnaa to huaa, kuchh log pahchaane gaye... |
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31st July 2006, 12:21 PM
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bheer main wo ajnabi mera humsafar nikla, jisko lutne gaya thaa wo mera he ghar nikla..... -veer 2nd sher has rahe the jiski barbaadi par thahake laga kar.. wo meri hi tabahee ka manzar nikla.. -nisha 3rd sher "Zindgi ki raah mai woh mera saathi nikla, imtihaanwy-waffa mai woh be-waffa nikla" -Sunita Virender .....Sunita Thakur..... यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया ....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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31st July 2006, 01:11 PM
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bheer main wo ajnabi mera humsafar nikla, jisko lutne gaya thaa wo mera he ghar nikla..... -veer 2nd sher has rahe the jiski barbaadi par thahake laga kar.. wo meri hi tabahee ka manzar nikla.. -nisha 3rd sher "Zindgi ki raah mai woh mera saathi nikla, imtihaanwy-waffa mai woh be-waffa nikla" -Sunita Virender [/QUOTE] next sher doond ke laya jo dile karar kahi se baad me wahi darde-dil ka karan nikla dilip |
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31st July 2006, 03:24 PM
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doond ke laya jo dile karar kahi se baad me wahi darde-dil ka karan nikla -dilip 5th Sher "jis qatil ko dondny main shahar - shahar mai nikla, woh bholi se surat mai mera hi mahboob nikla" -Sunita Virender .....Sunita Thakur..... यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया ....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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31st July 2006, 06:18 PM
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Kuchh din pahle mujh se paras jee ne kaha thaa ke kuchha-e-kalam par aa kar sab kee madad karuuN.. par masruufiyat ke chalte maiN kar nahee saka.. aaj kuch waqt mila hai to socha kee aaj kuchh e qalam meN aap sab ko paRhooN aur jo madad ho sake karuuN... Aap sab ke sher paRhe..agar aap bina soche essi tarah sher ke oopar sher likhTe raheNe to aap kuchh seekheNge nahee..... Pichhle kalaam par bhee bohat see ghaltiYaaN huii hai.. Khaer! MaiN pichhle kalaam ke baare meN kuch nahee kah raha huuN.. essi ke baare meN kahta huuN.... Quote:
bheer main wo ajnabi mera humsafar nikla, lootne jisko gaya tha voh mera ghar nikla. -Veer Quote:
thahakeN lagaaye jis ke barbaadi par ham, Vo toe apne hee tabahee ka manzar nikla.. -Nisha Quote:
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Yeh sher bhee kuch jam nahee raha hai.. duusra misra kuchh ess tarh keejiYe.. jise humne pooja thaa khudaa samajh kar, Ussi ke haathoN meN jafaa ka khanjar nikla.. -Nisha jee Quote:
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Ab ghazal ess tarah hai... bheer main wo ajnabi mera humsafar nikla, lootne jisko gaya tha voh mera ghar nikla. -Veer thahakeN lagaaye jis ke barbaadi par ham, Vo toe apne hee tabahee ka manzar nikla.. -Nisha jise humne pooja thaa khudaa samajh kar, Ussi ke haathoN meN jafaa ka khanjar nikla.. -Nisha |
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